Chapter 11
Chapter 11 of 21
MHaydnChapter 11
"This is a damnable thing that we're doing."
"Yes."
Andy had remembered and located a drain pipe that carried rain water away from the house. Would the entity respond to vibrations sent through the pipe? Adolf and Filius gave the signal, Andy tapped three times on the pipe, and the two wizards fired small fire-bolts from their wands into the ground wherever it seemed likely the entity had roots. Four days after the beginning of this exercise, the three taps produced a plethora of tendrils eager to rend the tormenters.
"We're ready for the officials. I wish we could send up flares to warn us when they're about to strike," said Filius.
"What do you suggest?" asked Adolf. "One if by teleportation; two if by broom."
"Very funny," said Cissy.
"A warning that the government is coming would be useful," said Andy. "We can place wards around the estate."
They charmed sticks to fire stinging hexes and hid them around the house. The weekend was over, and Andy and Cissy stayed to keep vigil while Adolf and Filius reluctantly returned to school. It was mid-morning Wednesday when an outer alarm alerted the two women. They hid in the place they had prepared next to the drain pipe.
"They certainly sent enough of us," said an advance agent, warily approaching the house.
"Would you rather it was just the two of us?" asked his partner.
"We could quietly scout the premises, and no one would miss a few baubles that happened to be lying around."
The two advance agents signaled that the coast was clear and no danger could be detected. The thirty other members of the unit charged the house and tripped the alarms. They stopped. Someone thought he heard three light taps.
The advance agent looked down. "My foot is sliced off," he said.
He reached down to get it, but toppled over. His partner tried to help him up, but a root penetrated his side. Four other agents ran up, spraying fire. They lost their wand hands. From cover, Andy cast an area spell, and each charmed stick fired its sting. Andy and Cissy stayed deep in their hole as screams and hexes filled the air.
Late that Friday afternoon, when Hermione dropped in on Ron and Harry, they had quite a story to tell.
"We missed the whole thing," complained Ron. "They only let senior agents participate."
"Everyone who went is getting a medal for valor," said Harry. "It began with an anonymous tip that a gang of thieves was going to raid the Black estate."
"Thieves?" asked Hermione.
"Yes," said Harry, "but even if it was the Black estate, we're pledged to protect the lives and property of our citizens, so we sent a force to guard the place."
"But the tip didn't say how many thieves there were, and our people were vastly outnumbered," said Ron.
In his excitement, Ron stood. "But our men stood their ground and fought gallantly enough that the thieves fled. By the time reinforcements arrived, only our agents were there."
"That was brave," said Hermione.
"Very," said Harry. "More than half the agents are in hospital, some of them with ghastly wounds."
Hermione commiserated with Ron and Harry that they hadn't participated and had missed a chance to show their mettle.
That night, at dinner at school, Hermione kept stealing glances at Adolf and Filius. What had they done to fend off thirty-two law-enforcement officers? They looked melancholy as if mass carnage was weighing on their minds.
The editor was thinking that the situation called for a girl more attuned to others than the self-centered Hermione. It called for the responses that the editor knew were deep within her own self waiting for the appropriate opportunity. The editor was thinking that the occasion called, not for the false assertions that the dark parts of the deed were not important which only reminded the wounded hero of his failings, but for demonstrations that his whole life was accepted. The editor halted these musings: Don't think, write.
The female heart, when focused, discerns the secret needs of the one held dear even if the possessor of that sympathetic organ is unaware that she, indeed, has deep feelings, and hence, Pansy, guided nay, driven by impulses that bewildered her conscious mind, managed to intercept Professor Galland on his way to a remote tower whereupon she approached him and greeted him by saying she hadn't seen him in quite some time, and even though this seemed lame to her and she had stumbled it out in confused embarrassment, he responded that it had been quite some time in such a friendly manner that she was emboldened to ask where he was going, and when he said that he wanted to look at the stars for a while, she replied that that sounded like a good idea, and, her heart pounding at her temerity and the possibility of his rejection, she walked with him, and when they arrived, she, terrified at what she was suggesting, remarked that it was cold on the heights, but he folded her inside his cloak where her knees almost gave way as she breathed in his clean, masculine scent, and she wanted to say something to keep him there, anything to keep him with her, but she was mindless, and in this fearful state that he would soon leave, it slowly registered that he was telling her she was a brave girl who had returned to school alone and who had questioned her family's values and how he admired her, and as these words were breaking through her defenses, he added that she was a lovely lady, and his hand had not finished the first stroke of her hair before her lips were on his and nothing else existed for her.
Biff was not happy. The editor was constantly reminding him that a bit of adventure might be okay while their readers recuperated for the next round of romantic frenzy, but too much was not acceptable. Besides, the story had too many witches and not enough wizards. What was he doing, writing some male fantasy about a kingdom of surplus females?
He was in a dilemma. He already knew most readers were women, but the wizards in canon didn't have enough moxie, and if he juiced them up, they would be out of character.
At dinner, the Headmaster had introduced Professor Alain Roeder to the school as a special instructor in Crystals. He would spend the next several weeks conducting demonstrations in the field to the seventh years. A select few might want to enter this demanding field. The students scrutinized the steely gentleman with the iron-grey hair and dark aura and thought, A select few, indeed. That evening Adolf introduced Alain to Filius and Horace.
"The famous English Port and walnuts," said Alain approvingly.
Taking a sip, he turned to Adolf and said, "I wondered where you had hidden yourself, my man."
Filius and Horace leaned forward to hear more.
"Hasn't Adolf told you about his adventures?" asked Alain. "It was a famous scandal. I thought he would be bragging."
"It was a misunderstanding," said Adolf.
"That's not the popular version," said Alain. "Tell us yours."
"A female student from Romania, a daughter of some royal family, decided she fancied me," said Adolf.
"Not the only female student to have done so," injected Alain.
"Instead of telling her I wasn't attracted to her, I tried to be kind, and I said I couldn't be involved with a student. This made her think that only my professional ethics kept me from ravishing her on the spot," said Adolf. "She expressed this opinion emphatically enough that both her family and her betrothed, from another royal family, concluded that I had villainously seduced her."
"Europe became too hot to hold him," announced Alain.
Alain addressed Filius and Horace apologetically. "This is probably a puzzle to you. You English do not have the passionate women that one finds in our part of the world. Perhaps, you are fortunate."
Like a Marathon runner discovering a landslide across the official trail, the editor broke her regular stride and abandoned the approved route
"That raid is going to set us behind a month," said Andy. "We don't dare get close to that thing until it's calmed down."
"At least, the government, after saving the estate from largest gang of thieves in wizard history, can leave us to fend for ourselves," said Cissy.
"All praise to officialdom," said Andy.
before returning to the designated path.
What small things trigger the receptacles of our mind and so it was when Draco, fulfilling an earlier promise to a girl who now despised him, found himself repairing the fence for the herd of Razorfanged-Fuzzies who, he could see out of the corner of his eye were buzzing maliciously and egging forward the largest member, who would rush him the second it thought he was not on his guard, but even aware of his danger, Draco was not prepared for his reaction when his thumb brushed a splinter on the wooden rail and a drop of his blood spattered across the snow the snow dirty with dust that did remind him of dishwater blonde hair, and the blood, blood brighter than anything about the pale countenance of the one who had misjudged him so unfairly a reaction that dredged emotions he believed burned out of his system and that now burned through him and so consumed him that the small voice saying, "Draco, the Razorfanged-Fuzzies," was not heard, and as he feasted his eyes on the dirty snow that he knew would never be golden blonde, the small voice was yelling, "Draco, the Razorfanged-Fuzzies are stirring," but he had no ear for anything as his being was captured by the droplets of blood brighter than anything a dotty girl could ever offer him, and his feelings welled up inside him to the point that, when the small voice screamed, "Draco, it's charging," he yanked out his wand and blasted the leaping Razorfanged-Fuzzy into such fiery oblivion that the rest of the horde cowered in the corner of their pen and the Beast Professor never found any evidence of what had happened to one of his beloved creatures.
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36 Reviews | 10.0/10 Average
Loved all of the resolutions--Alain to escape back to Germany, him to harbour Theo and guide him. Seems that Padma will have her affluent family to fall back on. King Friedrich Wilhelm II was the monarch while Haydn composed, right? along with Nicholas II, Prince Esterházy being a major patron... what the students don't know or care about is still good for them to be exposed to--never know when it'll come in handy--thus sayeth another geek girl--lol! Cissy and Andy are survivors; I don't feel either will have regrets about their past liasons with Alain. It appears that the editor has accepted and values Biff for who and what he is and writes... Which is beautiful in and of itself on top of everything else in the story's arch. Lovely ending to Adolf and Hermione's storyline, so happy that Crookshanks gives his approval!Thank you for an intriguing, dynamic adventure and tale! Looking forward to more!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks for all the reviews.
It would have been more appropriate for Adolf to ask about the monarch of Austria although there were several of them since Haydn had a long life. Adolf knows about Esterhazy. He remembers what’s important.
At its heart, the story is a celebration of geek girls.
At the risk of ruining the story, it can be given an open ended and more upbeat conclusion by adding a third paragraph to the scene with Andy, Cissy, and Adolf
Adolf saw the sisters exchange glances. Two fleet-footed deer were after the wolf. With a name like Alain Roeder, they would begin their search in Alsace-Lorraine, and they knew Alain’s ego would not let him decline high profile assignments with their attendant publicity. Padma might be equally tenacious. Andy and Cissy would greet Alain with a triumphant smirk. Padma might grab Theo by the lapels, shake him until his teeth rattled, and then cry on his shoulder.
The reader can choose.
Just as good the second time around.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
That's good to hear. The question was what kind of naughty girl would Pansy like to be.
What is going on with Hermione? Curious to see where she is heading and the path(s) she might be choosing... Interesting bonding between the witches, survival and strategies--how to do so are vital. Enjoyed Cissy's acceptance of Luna, Draco & Luna being *together* and her reflection about Lucius 'He better say nice things, or she would bitch-hex him back to France.'--HA! Regardless of the Malfoy's innate coldness and cruelty, it seems Luna can not but help to protect all magical creatures, Draco being a very special one to her. Love the metaphors, details and tempestuous dynamics and elements of the Andy and Alain vignette, along with Biff and the editor's banter back and forth in between things. Great chapter!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks for the insightful comments. Hermione is on a dark path, unbalanced because her efforts to join wizard society have backfired. The older witches may be the first to offer acceptable advice to Hermione. Luna may bring needed warmth to the family. As Draco said earlier, "I think mum needs a daughter." Andy, who thought no one would ever want her, explodes.
Great chapter, looking forward to more.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thank you.
The visit to the zoo was very interesting,is Cissy in for a surprise ? we will have to wait and see. Poor Biff, Draco and Luna seem to have their own ideas of where the story is going.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks for the review. Responding to the zoo scene requires some empathy with animals. Draco and Luna appear to be an amazingly resilient pair.
The writing and scenario is as powerful as the first time I read it as a one-shot and as evocative then as now within this multi-chaptered work. Powerful, effective, a very striking development between them. Wondering about Pansy and Adolf's possible, continued discoveries of one another, and looking forward to more!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Glad to hear the chapter survived repetition: the first time as PWP, the second as character and plot development.
Enjoyed the contrast of the editor's reflections and depiction in the first vignette with the second one, both very powerful in each one's content. Luna's and Padma's family's 'gifts' for protection-HA!Enjoyed as well Biff's contribution--his style, cadence, rhythm, technique and dynamics between the two characters and atmosphere, description and pace. Love the different impressions each section makes, as always!Looking forward to more!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks. For the editor, the second effort is an elaboration of the first. More hyperbole about everyone's opinion of the Malfoys. You have a point: cadence and rhythm in erotica is difficult.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks. For the editor, the second effort is an elaboration of the first. More hyperbole about everyone's opinion of the Malfoys. You have a point: cadence and rhythm in erotica is difficult.
So glad that the ladies at The Pole and the Feather helped inspire Biff's Muse Enjoyed his inspired development of Theo and Padma's relationship set against a beautiful sunset, Pansy's assertiveness and Adolph's receptance, the boys getting into samurai lore and the inclusive possibility of the girls and any contribution they may have to offer to their game. Love the contrast of the editor's contribution to the Alain and Cissy underplot with Biff's addition; I love the supernatural elements layered on within the innate wizarding world: the beast, the entity, the possible connection or universality of either/them--it allows the reader's imagination to interpret the layers in so many ways: symbolism/metaphorical, allegorical, etc.--all intertwined, jolting and all encompassing at the same time--an exceptionally satisfying reading experience. Thank you again for such a multifaceted tale!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks for the kind words. I think the review reflects your imagination and ability to make connections. There is a dark current running through the story, and the separate vignettes each create their own impression. The Bayesian samurai scene is outrageous, but it shows Ravenclaws at play.
Enjoyed Biff's exploration further of insight into Luna, in her scene with Padma. Discovering that Luna and Draco have indeed connected was, for me, a viable happening. Perhaps it is because that Biff has written Luna potentially led into a romance, a quite 'acceptable' one for those who are sensitive to canon Luna involved and portrayed in a non-pedophilic way, as Draco (he, Harry & Neville are the youngest of their year/peers by a year) is her age, so their interaction is rather novel, innocent, and yet due to both's keen maturity by necessity beyond their years due to each one's unique background, it is very intense and 'adult'. It is interesting to see her expressing herself with Draco, as we only get a thin (perhaps one-sided) slice of her in canon, and all that we are given by JKR is that she goes on to get married to Rolf Scamander and have twins, etc.Sorry to carry on so much, it's just that I'm intrigued by Luna, adore the little of her that I've been exposed to, and enjoy when an author portrays her richly and with sensitive complexity as you have done.Enjoyed the editor's exploration and development of Alain and Cissay, and Adolf and Hermione's developing interaction. Looking forward to more!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks for the review. Musing about Luna is appropriate since I did mention what a problem she was to write. I'm a poor Potter scholar, but Luna appears to be someone wise about other's dilemmas. The basis for this characterization is her comment, 'It's like being with a friend,' and her picture in her bedroom of fellow students intertwined with the word 'friends.'
The zoo sequence is more revealing than Cissy realizes.
Earlier,I had an inadequate response to your comment about Draco and Theo coming into their own with the Crystal demo. It was a public display of what Padma and Luna had observed previously with Theo's essay writing and Draco's flight of imagination. It was left to the reader to imagine what this means to two Ravenclaw witches. Similarly for Hermione and 'Dunkle Weg.' I can't conceive of Ronald or Severus concocting such a thing for her entertainment.
Response from nagandsev (Reviewer)
Probably shouldn't be commenting further at this point as dental pain is still affecting me--just wanted to reiterate that I enjoy the musings about Luna, and also, the basis for this characterisation 'It's like being with a friend' as well as the mural she had painted always struck me profoundly & poignantly (when reading the books) about her and what I perceived as her loneliness and wish for interaction & what she imagined true friendship was with others/her peers, etc. So it's wonderful to see her and Draco interacting. Also her raging against how she is labelled by others who can't seem to see her true inner core. My comment about how her adult life ended up I only thought of because, against how others perceived her (and how so many write her in the fanfic world), she was able to get on with her life and capable of having a relationship, etc. Okay, best stop here. Just I'm enjoying this tale and am looking forward to more!
Yes, I think Alain must tread very carefully with the Black sisters; they might be unchartered territory even for someone such as he. The tension between the editor and Biff is building up--something is about to explode, and not just metaphorically! 'Write what you know, she thought. She knew selfish, cold-hearted bastards.'--HA! Hmmn, Draco's belief's about Luna's perception of him are one thing, but might he be surprised to find out if he's wrong? Or not... can't wait to read more!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Okay, you discerned two mature women, wondering if anyone could care for them, warily approaching and teasing a newcomer. Draco was hurt, and he is protecting himself.
Uff! The entity has seeped through and is quite aggressive--or perhaps, protecting its own interests? Andy and Cissy's predicament will need more aid or understanding, both--not all is resolved yet. Pansy is very attuned, seemingly beyond her own awareness and control... although it can be recognised by another. Enjoying the addition of Prof Alain... What other secrets will he disclose about our Prof Adolf? Hmmn, Draco is coming into his own... but at what cost to him? How will this affect Luna's perception of him further? Great chapter!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks for the review. The entity has revealed how dangerous it is. The story tracks six witches who are outsiders reconnecting, and to date, it has slighted both Andy and Cissy. Glad you are enjoying Alain since some fans intensely dislike original characters. A future revelation by Alain about Adolf will seem mild to readers, but it will have a significant effect on his relationships. Draco has not recovered from his loss.
Draco and Luna have come to a halt... Their impasse seems irreconcilable and previously unforeseen by both.:-(Enjoyed the different interactions between Prof Galland and Hermione, and then his interaction with Pansy; each sheds light on further dimensions of each one's character--yum!Enjoyed the editor writing her dialogue, and regardless of not expanding his horizons, Biff's depiction of Hermione and Flitwick--what will it cost Hermione? Some grave loss of friendship? Identity? Reading on!!!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Enjoyed your comments on this section.It is a chapter of betrayals: professional transgression by Adolf, shattering by Draco, deep by Pansy, self-deception by the editor, lack of accommodation by the Wizard World, cynical by Filius, and life-changing by Hermione.
I disagree with Biff. The most difficult person to write into a romance is Luna since I am sympathetic to the point of view that says a relationship with canon Luna is nigh on pedophilia. This chapter sees her in full, feminine rage - betraying her old persona.
The editor's contribution on the 'complicated human interaction' is poignant, lovely... but very poignant... even more is her wish to delete it... Draco's miniscule but growing observations and concern about what Luna would think & feel about him and his actions are intriguing. As are Padma & Theo's developing relationship, with a very observant Cissy around.;-)'Biff raged.' HA! I agree with his observation about Pansy and Hermione. His frustration is causing him to convey the differing opinions of Horace and Adolf in a very enlightening way--great chapter! (Hope this is coming across coherently, recovering from dental surgery, but determined to catch up on some reading!)
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Glad you enjoy the editor's spiels. they are difficult to write since it is not my natural style.
Luna is taking over Draco's thoughts, Theo is becoming bolder, and Cissy is a lonely, middle-aged lady.
Horace's opinion is anti-romantic enough and counter-fandom enough that it's a bit of a shock.
[I wish you a complete, speedy, and pain-free recovery.]
Luna sees the world as no other, I wonder what is wrong with the bunnys.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks. The unique view that Luna has of the world is one of the things the story tries to preserve although it is muted as Luna, along with the others, is going through a transition.
Herr Professor Galland's reception and interactions are intriguing--how everyone is responding to him and what each character projects onto him--looking forward to the continued revelations of his responses to them; Draco and Luna's development does have me wondering what their research will lead them to discover either about the bunnies, themselves, both. And of course, Biff and the editor's contributions, observations and inspirations are a delight and issue for intrigue and wonderment how and where their development will lead. Looking forward to more!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
You may have discovered a central theme of the story (unknown to the author, as these things go). Herr Professor Galland is an unknown quantity in a time of disillusionment. The two who appear to be the least adrift, Padma and Theo, have the least to do with him.Luna's discovery becomes important.
Oooooh, things are moving onto a new level with all! Padma and Theo have bravely committed to *something*; Luna and Draco are drawn to each other, and the editor and Biff have arrived on the threshhold of *something*--must read on quickly!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Things are finally happening. The premise is that in this uncertain new world, everyone is acting cautiously.
Love the array of interactions going on, revelations of perceptions of one another, and the editor and biff taking risks and pushing themselves onwards and into each other's territories!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Biff and the editor are pushing themselves - and showing signs of stress.
Love the contrasts of the editor's and Biff's inspirations, along with all of the dialogues and pairings, their observations and speculations; the nuances and interactions reveal so much, so concisely--reading on!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks. Andy and Cissy are plotting. Luna and Padma are revealing themselves as Ravenclaw witches.
Don't worry Biff, chicken soup can cure anything.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
We hope so. He's in need of serious rejuvenation.
Everyone seems to be dancing around eachother, including The Editor and Biff.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
The six women in the story are going through a transition period, and they are attracted to men who may or may not be treacherous. The editor wants to write a psychodrama, and Biff wants to write the sequel to 'My Wand Is Quick.'
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
The six women in the story are going through a transition period, and they are attracted to men who may or may not be treacherous. The editor wants to write a psychodrama, and Biff wants to write the sequel to 'My Wand Is Quick.'
Mmmm, both The Editor and Biff seem to be letting quite a bit of plot creep in.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Readers are being treated to an epic fail, which they may or may not find amusing.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Readers are being treated to an epic fail, which they may or may not find amusing.
Mmmm... can't wait for the next chapter, as the revelations of Biff's Muse coinciding along with the editor's is evolving in its captivating way: will Herr Professor Galland be safe from anyone's whims--Filius', Horace's, Draco's--Biffs?:-)Looking forward to more of the Lovegood's, Draco's and Adolf's collaborations!
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks. We'll have to see if just Biff and the editor can provide enough variety and entertainment. Herr Professor does appear to be dragged into things. Their collaboration is the central plot.
Mmmm... can't wait for the next chapter, as the revelations of Biff's Muse coinciding along with the editor's is evolving in its captivating way: will Herr Professor Galland be safe from anyone's whims--Filius', Horace's, Draco's--Biffs?:-)
Looking forward to more of the Lovegood's, Draco's and Adolf's collaborations!
I hope we will see more of Luna and Draco , and I don't blame Hermione taking exception to Pansy's knee placement
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
There will be more Luna and Draco as the two adapt to the new world. Is Hermione jealous because Pansy is a better flirt?
Yea!!! Biff is back , can the rest of the staff be far behind ? eagerly awaiting more.
Response from MHaydn (Author of Root Cause)
Thanks. I didn't know Biff was popular. This is a milder meta-story than usual with only Biff and the editor struggling to produce something for the fan girls.