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Wounded
phoenix31 Reviews | 2.84/10 (31 Ratings, 0 Likes, 27 Favorites )
The final battle is over. Unfortunately, Severus was a victim. Can he overcome his injuries? Will he allow others to help him on the road to recovery? The Character Death warning is for the victims of the War; none of the canon characters used in this story will die. The rating is for potentially tense situations and one or two instances of profanity. Nominated in Feb 2006 Multifaceted Awards for Best Genfic and Best OC
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phoenix
Member Since 2006 | 54 Stories | Favorited by 136 | 1,108 Reviews Written | 1,209 Review Responses
I picked up the Harry Potter fandom around the time the first movie came out and began writing fanfic early 2005 after discovering the adult online community. I identify most closely with the Slytherins and you will see my taste in writing lends me to writing about Slytherins more often than not. In addition to fanfiction, I also make fanvids on the Harry Potter fandom. I'm a Perfect Imagination acredited beta and am willing to help authors. My main 'ship interests are Snape/OC (never really got into the SS/HG pairing) and LM/any female (with HG as a new favorite). I have dabbled in RL/OC and RL/NT and am okay with those pairings. I generally shy away from slash, just not my thing. For updates on my writing, check out my Live Journal
Reviews for Wounded
Just so you know that I have read this the second time and enjoyed it a lot.
Severus is hard to approach, and Aurelia did a great job here.
I had to laugh about her comparing her time with Remus and Severus with having teenage boys.
The girls are of a difficult age, but as they're well educated, Severus did realise that some teeens can actually be nice to be around with. Excellent idea that one knew him but the other not.
I will belooking for the sequel tomorrow.
Very nicely done. Disappointed a little that there was no romance in this one, but the challenge dictates... I liked the little touches of jealousy, and how you brought Severus around toward the children.
Hmm. Potions or Defence. Which will it be? :)
Love the way Aurelia bosses him around! :)
Oh dear. Camping with Severus and Remus... :)
Good old Remus. Reliable and discreet. :)
I like Helen; she will be good for Severus. :)
That's cunning, a loyalty potion. :)
To poison the potions expert is an insult indeed! :)
Progress! OK, so Lucius is still bad. *Sigh* :)
Enter Lucius. But is he good or bad? :)
I read this once before. It was quite a while ago. I liked it then, I'm pretty sure. So I'm reading it again. That says something. I don't usually like to read a story a second time.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Thanks. I'm so glad to see that someone is reading one of my stories again. I know that I like to go back and read my work quite some time after I finish it so that it seems all new again. :D
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Thanks. I'm so glad to see that someone is reading one of my stories again. I know that I like to go back and read my work quite some time after I finish it so that it seems all new again. :D
Hmmm, interesting. And I like your OC - a lot of times they turn Sue-ish. Yours isn't.
You have a couple of times where you put "quite" when you meant to put "quiet".
I was wondering who brewed this potion, if Snape didn't!
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Thanks. This story was a lot of fun to write. I'll have to go back and check the quite/quiet. One of those things that amazingly about 4 people have missed. LOL This story was a lot different from the other ones I've written as it does stay platonic. OCs can be very difficult to write. I think that's one of the advantages of Hermione, she's quite Sue-ish in the first place. LOL
I hope that you enjoy the rest of the story.
Severus' annoyance with being left "alone" to heal in a hospital seemed so authentic. How sweet the girls wanted him to stay - who would have thought? London is sounding ominous...
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Thanks, kari. Yup, I think that Severus would definitely be annoyed at that point. He's so much fun to write for. I don't know that he knows what to think about about people actually like him. LOL More coming very soon.
Boiling a lethifold, gah, as gruesome as boiling lobsters :) So glad to hear a sequel is in the works. There's so much story left: his relationships with Remus and Aurelia and the girls, the rebuilding of Hogwarts etc.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
LOL Yes, kari, it is kind of gruesome, isn't it? Though given the other things they've done, mostly in Transfiguration, I figured it wasn't that bad. Yup, I'll be getting the sequel up fairly quickly, thought as it's a work in progress, updates won't be as often as they are now.
I'm enjoying all the Severus abuse. A little more wouldn't be too bad.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
You are a cruel, cruel woman. But, your wish is my command. You know I can't give him an easy road to recovery, what's the point of the story?
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
Exactly. Just keep thinking that way. And I really have a twisted sense of humor...
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Thankfully, so do I, to a point. More will be coming soon.
Great start. More soon please.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Thanks, azulkan. I'm going to be cleaning up the next chapter for submission today, so look for it in the next few days. :)
I am enjoying this story. I found myself being as suspicious as Severus in trusing Aurelia. But, now, since she's explained the situation with her family... I suppose I'll relax a bit. (I'm such a Slytherin.)
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Thanks. If I were in Severus' shoes, I would have been suspicious as well. After all, how do you know you are where she says you are? And you have no way to verify anything, at least in the beginning. And no one is telling you anything. It's definitely not a situation to 'blindy' trust someone.
Not that Severus is the trusting sort in the first place.
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
Going blind is one of my greatest fears. I majored in music, and still I would always tell everyone that I would rather lose my hearing than my sight. I am nearly at panic level at points, reading parts of this. Severus slumped on the floor when Aurelia shows up really hit home with me. It shows the fine line between remaining strong and giving up.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
I agree it would be utterly terrifying to lose one's sight. That's part of why I chose that particular handicap to bestow upon Severus. Plus I think it's the one he would least be able to deal with. And you are right about Severus' attitude when Aurelia shows up. Had she not come for him, he probably would have fallen into depression and then who knows what. This is the darkest fic that I have written, but I truly enjoyed the journey of writing it.
Great beginning. A challenge with no romance is nice. It allows the reader to relax into the characters more, I think.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Thanks. It was kind of nice because that was one less thing to work into the plot. It allowed me more time to focus on the mystery aspect of the story. And I think that Severus can really use a friend at this point in his life.
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
I wholly agree. That man needs a friend more than a good *ahem*.
Yikes, that was unexpected. I was frustrated (despite your stated intent for this story) that no romantic tension was developing - the characters seemed to be crying out for it.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
I like building a little tension. I can understand the frustration. You aren't the only one that's been frustrated by that. You will be pleased to know that I am working on a sequel, outside the confines of the challenge.
The Remus/Severus interactions are very entertaining and show some of nasty temperment we expect of Severus. He really is a different person with Aurelia.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
I don't think that Severus has really ever had any one that he can trust and that with Aurelia he really is himself. I'm glad you enjoy his interaction with Remus. Sadly, poor Remus is in line to become the whipping boy, someone for Severus to take all his frustrations out on.
How very perceptive and kind of Lupin. Severus is truly lost and its made all the more painful by the tangling of a long desired stepping stone.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Thanks, kari. I really enjoy bringing Remus into the story. Because of both the type of person he is and the past history he has with Severus. I think it makes for interesting situations. :)
Aw... Snark and Wolfie getting along? Now that should definitely be entertaining. I esp liked the comment how it was going to be a long day before he addressed Lupin. *snicker*
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
That would take a miracle wouldn't it? Nothing quite like a prideful Severus. He just makes his life so very difficult, doesn't he?
Nice suspense. Especially with the whole Lucius-thing. Too bad they can't dispose of him. (Just in this story.)
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
Yup, Lucius is an ass in this story, but just in case he's keeping something back, it wouldn't due to get rid of him right away. Now, we'll see if Severus will come to wish that he listened to Aurelia and turned the dark wizard in. You know how hard it is for me to have an unlikeable Lucius? LOL
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
Yes, I'm sure it's difficult. But you are doing an excellent job. (The character you hate to hate. *lol*)
At least I can breathe more easy now that he is regaining some of his sight. But Lucius??!! I think I've stopped breathing. Oh, the tension.
Response from phoenix (Author of Wounded)
I really should go through the reviews in order. LOL Yes, I couldn't leave poor Severus completely defenseless. But, there has to a nemesis somewhere and Lucius was the perfect choice.
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
LOL! I was just thinking that I should go through the review responses in order!!