The Enemy Within
Chapter 11 of 14
Grace has VictoryAnother moral: Without doubt it is a great advantage to have intelligence, courage, good breeding, and common sense. ... However, even these may fail to bring you success, without the blessing of a godfather or a godmother. (Perrault)
ReviewedCHAPTER ELEVEN
The Enemy Within
At first I didn't notice that Terry wasn't at our usual study spot in the library. He wasn't watching the Quidditch practice on Saturday either, but I assumed he must be in the library. After lunch, when I walked right past the Ravenclaw table, he was so busy with Anthony Goldstein that he didn't even see me. When I finished my piano practice, I heard laughter from Music Room Three. Terry was sitting there although he didn't play anything with Colin Creevey and Katie Bell. I waved, assuming they would ask me to join them.
But they didn't. Terry smiled just enough to indicate that he had seen me, then turned back to ask Katie a question. I stopped stock-still for a moment before I had the sense to hurl myself down the corridor towards the stairs.
Terry was avoiding me!
What was this about? Terry had told me only this term that he couldn't tell Katie Bell from Alicia Spinnet and had asked me which class Colin Creevey was in, so I knew they weren't close friends. What were they talking about that I couldn't share? I told myself that I would ask Terry about it, but it's easy to miss people in a place the size of Hogwarts, especially people who have suddenly decided to avoid their usual haunts.
On Monday morning, Terry marched into History of Magic with his Ravenclaw friends, waved at me casually and sat down next to Michael Corner. Despite the friendly wave, something suddenly seemed very wrong.
As soon as the bell rang for break, I swept up my parchments and raced to Terry's desk. But Terry already had his back to me. He moved towards the door, still chatting to Michael and Anthony.
I stared at their retreating backs, not hearing whatever Megan was saying to me. Terry had walked out. That was what people did after History of Magic, of course and as quickly as they could. But Terry's way of walking out was now horribly different. Not like an enemy, or even like a stranger, but simply as if we had never been friends.
Were we breaking up? Could we break up when we had never exactly been going out together anyway? But we had certainly been friends. And the dark certainty steadily grew in my mind that we were no longer friends.
* * * * * * *"He can't mean it," said Megan. "Terry did really like you, Sally-Anne. You didn't quarrel, isn't it?"
"No-o."
"And he hasn't found someone else, isn't it?"
"We probably wouldn't know if 'e 'ad," Sophie pointed out.
"It doesn't feel like a finding-someone-else," I said. "It feels like a quarrel. Except that... we didn't quarrel."
"Not about anything?" asked Megan.
I felt myself blushing. "The only thing... It seems so odd... He did want me to join some kind of homework club, and I said I didn't have time. But that can't be the reason... can it...?"
"Yer disagreed about an 'omework club? No, definitely not, that inn't it," said Sophie.
"He ought to have had better sense," said Megan. "Everyone knows that Sally-Anne wouldn't go joining any club once Umbridge had passed her idiotic decree against it."
* * * * * * *I tried to pull my eyes away from Terry setting up Michael Corner's cauldron while Anthony Goldstein poured newts' eyes into Terry's scales. I had known before the Potions lesson began that Terry would not choose to work with me today. It was nearly a week since we had talked about that stupid homework club, and we hadn't talked since. I almost wanted to apologise, but what on earth had I done wrong?
"Hello, Sally-Anne!" said Stephen. "Are you not speaking to friends either?"
"What?" I scanned the dungeon, hoping Stephen didn't know about Terry and me. Hannah was working with Ernie and Justin, which was quite usual, and Wayne had moved into the space between Megan and Sophie. Susan was chattering away with Padma Patil, which was not at all usual. Since when had Susan been friends with Padma or chattery with anyone? And why wasn't Padma with Morag MacDougal?
Morag was behind me, testing Stephen's scalpel. "Come and work with us," she said to me. "We'd best try to look as if nothing's wrong."
"Morag, what's going on around here?"
She passed me a pile of fungi and a knife. "We're brewing Doxycide."
"That's not what Sally-Anne meant!" burst out Stephen. "She's wanting to know why some folks are behaving so oddly." He took no notice of Morag's reproving frown although he must have seen it. "There's stuff going on, Sally-Anne. My Mum and Dad have told me to have nowt to do with Harry Potter or Ernie Macmillan or Neville Longbottom or a whole heap of folks. And my uncle that's Morag's Dad has told her to keep away from Padma Patil. But they did not say your name, so you must be all right."
Morag flushed pink under her freckles. "They're liking us to keep out of trouble," she said. "Stephen, you're needing to sift the arsenic. Sally-Anne, we're hoping that this fuss will not last long and that everybody will stay friends. But meantime it's seeming wiser not to discuss... politics."
Politics? Terry had said something about politics. But how did Stephen and Morag expect to "stay friends" when they were the ones refusing to speak to half the class?
Just what was this "homework club" that Terry had urged me to join? If it was really about politics and not homework, then why hadn't Terry told me the truth? If it was important, why hadn't he invited me to the next meeting? And why in any case did he think some political situation was more important than his friends?
* * * * * * *"Has Susan gone wandering off again?" asked Megan.
"And 'Annah," said Sophie.
The three of us looked at each other across the common room table. It had been just the three of us for several weeks now. Hannah and Susan still sat with us in lessons, but we hardly ever saw them at other times. Even in the dormitory, they seemed to speak mainly to each other.
"What's going on?" I asked. "Hannah's become really quiet." Hannah always used to blurt out exactly what she was thinking; but while there still seemed to be plenty of thoughts flitting through her head, she had lately stopped confiding them.
"There's certainly summut she inn't telling anyone," Sophie agreed. "She ignored us in the courtyard today because she were talking to Cho Chang."
"Susan's changed too," I said. "She seems to be best friends with Padma Patil."
"With Lee Jordan, too," said Megan. "I asked her if they were going out together, but she said no, they were just friends."
"I expect everyone makes new friends now and then," said Sophie sensibly. "Including yer, Sally-Anne!"
I thought yet again about Terry and agreed that the friendship situation had certainly changed.
"So understated!" teased Megan. "Tell us all about it, Sally-Anne. What do you two talk about? You know with your new best friend, Morag MacDougal!"
"Oh." I had never really had a "best friend". Hannah, Susan, Megan, Sophie and I had always been a group, all of us equally close to each of the others. But now Hannah and Susan had mysteriously withdrawn from Megan, Sophie and me. "I hadn't really thought of Morag as a friend. She's been... really nice to me in Potions lessons. But that's what we talk about potions. She never tells me anything personal."
"And yer've been busy with new interests too," said Sophie. "Are yer going 'ome again this weekend?"
"I have to," I said. "It's the Muggle half-term, so I can guarantee my stepbrother will be difficult. Mum needs me. We have to put family first, don't we?"
"Before Queen and country?" asked Megan, catching at a Post Office owl that was swooping past us. "Before Cymbru am byth? No, no, just kidding! When I do my Welsh-nationalist things, my family does them with me. Look, the owl's for Sally-Anne."
It was from our family solicitor.
* * * * * * *
Dear Miss Perks,We refer to your enquiry of 15 October 1995.
According to our files, your only legal guardians are Mr Flavian Ophiuchus Perks (your father) and Mrs Julia Melea Slater (your mother).
Hence the said Mrs Cressida Clematis Perks (your stepmother) has no jurisdiction over you and no legal right to alter the terms of your access arrangements.
If Mrs Perks has an objection to the Wizengamot access ruling, we suggest that she make every effort to settle the matter amicably with her husband (your father) before resorting to legal intervention.
Yours sincerely,
Dempster Wiggleswade,
Solicitor.
Mum's bookshop was very busy in the days before Christmas. I told Ella-Jane and Molly-Rose that they would have to help too. Molly-Rose was delighted, although she spent more time sitting with her nose in one of the books than actually serving customers. It didn't matter too much; she was a good advertisement, so we just found her a cushion and seated her in the bay window.
Ella-Jane hated it. "We have enough books at school! Aren't we allowed to have fun in the holidays?"
Jeremy backed me up. "No. Not if we want to stay together as a family. As long as the ex-spouses keep sending in the bills, we need to keep working in this shop."
Christopher backed Ella-Jane. "Let's sneak off," he told her. "We could go to Brendan's house he has a Star Wars video."
Molly-Rose turned a page of her picture book: a prince was riding a black stallion through the hawthorn-hedged countryside in search of his lost princess. In real life, however, I knew that Terry had completely given up on me. He was certainly not going to keep last year's half-promise and take me to another dance!
"Is it true," asked Christopher, "that Sally-Anne doesn't have to go to your Dad's this year?"
Ella-Jane kicked a bookcase. "Whether she goes or stays away, Cressida will be certain to decide that we guessed wrong. She'll complain to the Wizengamot either way."
"And that will cost money!" interrupted Jeremy sharply. "So how about you two unpack that new crate of books without complaining and hope some customer comes in to buy them all?"
After Christmas, my sisters went to Liverpool as usual, but I only knelt by Mum's hearth and called for Dad.
"Sally-Anne! Aren't you coming to stay with us this year?"
"Dad, I don't know what to do. Cressida told me not to come back to your house."
"What? Oh, surely not. I can't imagine she would mean a thing like that! Sally-Anne, if you've had a run-in with Cressida, perhaps you'd be better off keeping away from her until you've both cooled off a little. You know I won't make trouble about it."
"Dad, I know you won't fuss. But what if ?" This was really awkward. "Dad, what if Cressida changes her mind or forgets what she said and complains that I broke access?"
"Oh, I'm sure she wouldn't do that," said Dad, glancing down towards the coals. "I know she has a fiery temper, but you must have noticed by now that she has a heart of gold."
I didn't trust myself to say what I really thought about Cressida and gold, so I just said, "Hope to see you soon, Dad. To be honest, Mum still needs me in her bookshop. Happy New Year!"
* * * * * * *The bookshop was what I did every day for the rest of the Christmas holidays and then every second or third weekend of the spring term. At times it seemed painfully little, but Mum assured me she was grateful, and I assured her that I was still finishing all my homework. The truth was that I sometimes felt there was too little homework. There were great stretches of time at Hogwarts especially when I stayed there for the weekend when I was tempted to brood: about Terry, about Dad, about Mum, about Christopher, about money...
If I caught myself brooding, I would do piano practice. But music was an area where students had to be careful. While solo piano practice was allowed, Professor Umbridge absolutely forbade group jam sessions. In fact, Professor Umbridge was reducing Hogwarts to a very unhappy school. The teachers were unhappy because she inspected their lessons, and there were rumours that some of them were going to be sacked.
"Quidditch is no fun when she controls it," complained Zacharias.
"It's difficult to ask a question in class," said Ernie, "when teachers have to be so careful about not discussing anything that might not be related to lessons."
She even discouraged discussing the newspaper. She gave Stephen detention for reading a Daily Prophet article about Cornelius Fudge, even though poor, naïve Stephen was only remarking that he did not understand what he was reading. He returned from Umbridge's detention with a swollen right hand, and Morag MacDougal burst into tears when she saw it.
Late in February, Umbridge made up yet another new school rule that no one was allowed to read The Quibbler.
"What is this quibble thing?" asked Sophie.
"A sensational, pulpy tabloid newspaper," Megan explained to her. "The last edition I saw, some wizard had claimed to fly his broomstick to the moon. No person interested in knowing the real news would want to read it. But it's great fun now and then!"
"If Umbridge 'as suddenly taken a dislike to it," said Sophie, "could the latest issue be saying something worthwhile?"
"Only one way to find out, isn't it?" said Megan. "Wayne! Can you hand over your copy of The Quibbler?"
"Fat chance that I'd rread that sad rrubbish!" said Wayne facetiously as he handed over a roll of blank paper. "Wait, it's charrmed Licentio Margarritae! Keep it; I've seen all I do need to read."
Megan's dark eyes grew as round as cauldrons as she scanned down the blank page.
"Does it say owt?" asked Sophie.
"What? Oh, it's charmed to look blank to unauthorised people. What was that spell again? Licentio Sofiae et Sarae! Can you see it now?"
Black and red letters sprang into our line of vision; I didn't understand how we hadn't spotted them earlier. Across a grinning portrait of Harry Potter, a red headline screeched:
HARRY POTTER SPEAKS OUT AT LAST:THE TRUTH ABOUT HE WHO MUST NOT BE NAMED
AND THE NIGHT I SAW HIM RETURN.
We soaked in the words. According to The Quibbler, He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named had returned last June eight months ago. He had plundered a grave, ordered a minion to mutilate himself and assaulted Harry Potter as part of the Dark spell that had resuscitated him. He had murdered Cedric Diggory and tried to murder Harry Potter. He had summoned a gang of Death Eaters, and Harry Potter claimed to know their names: Lucius Malfoy, Valerian Crabbe, Gordius Goyle, Titus Nott, Walden Macnair, Augustus Rookwood, Cynbal Avery...
"Do you think Harry Potter's telling the truth?" asked Megan.
"'E inn't lying," said Sophie.
"But..." I said slowly. "Harry couldn't be mistaken about anything as detailed and specific as this. You can make a mistake about a dream or something you only half-saw or something that someone else told you. But not about something you saw for yourself in that much detail."
Megan made a grab for the newssheet. "So do you think this is the truth?"
"I suppose it could all be a total fiction," said Sophie. "It's possible that this Madam Skeeter is the one 'oo's lying that she never interviewed 'Arry at all."
But none of us believed that; Harry was making no attempt to deny the interview.
"Do you want You-Know-Who to be back?" demanded Megan.
"What does wanting 'ave to do with it?" asked Sophie. "We should think about whether our families are safe."
I shivered. "It looks as if they aren't safe. But I don't see what we can do about it. We're still at school. There isn't anything we could do to fight off a powerful Dark wizard."
* * * * * * *Things at school were bad enough because Professor Umbridge was continuing her campaign to make the whole world miserable. She sacked poor, silly Professor Trelawney and she was rude and critical to kindly, blundering Hagrid. Detentions increased, and Filch cackled about his hopes of reintroducing "real" punishments. Then in the final week of term, Umbridge manipulated things so that she replaced Dumbledore as head teacher!
"How did the munting old hag manage et?" asked Wayne. "She couldn't have convinced them that Dumbledorre was incompetent or corrrupt, isn't it?"
"Don't assume she needed a just cause," said Megan.
"Or even a believable one," said Sophie.
"Where is Dumbledore?" wondered Stephen. "Professor Trelawney still lives up in her tower, but Dumbledore has simply... gone!"
Professor Umbridge selected a coterie of her favourite students (mainly Slytherins) to be her spies. She didn't call them spies, of course: she called them the "Inquisitorial Squad". But Justin told us that the Inquisition had been the name of a gang of Spanish bullies who had spied on ordinary people, hoping to find excuses to torture them to death. We all thought it was a very good name for Umbridge's pets. Malfoy reported Justin for a uniform infraction on the first day, and Justin spent all evening in one of those unspeakable detentions. The next day, Millicent Bulstrode reported Hannah for patrolling the corridors after hours. Since Hannah was on legitimate prefect duty, she was "only" given a dungeon-detention with Snape, but a misconduct was still recorded on her annual report.
Then Ursula reported Ella-Jane for drawing a caricature of "Umbitch" on the toilet walls. Ella-Jane burst out of Umbridge's office at dinner time with both hands swollen. Scratched in dried blood on the back of each hand was the slogan: "I must respect my elders."
"Ella-Jane, what did she do to you? How do those detentions work?"
"Never mind!" Ella-Jane made a brave imitation of suppressing a sob. "She'll never do it again. I'll make sure of it. Once all the parents know about this, her career will be finished."
Ella-Jane pelted off down the corridor and hammered on Professor McGonagall's office door. McGonagall seemed quite sympathetic to Ella-Jane's story, but all she said was: "I can only advise you, Miss Perks, to keep your mind on your studies. It's most unwise to insult people deliberately."
I couldn't meet Professor McGonagall's eye; I might have guessed that she, Sprout and Flitwick were all powerless before the might of the Ministry's High Inquisitor.
Ella-Jane was not deterred. "Then let me use your fireplace, Professor. I'm going to tell my parents."
"Miss Perks, I'm sure you know that the fireplaces are being watched."
"I'm going to Floo my parents anyway." Ella-Jane marched right into the office and grabbed a handful of Floo powder. Professor McGonagall shrugged and allowed her to get on with it.
Dad sounded sympathetic. "Oh, come, the Hogwarts staff must know that this kind of brutality isn't on! Today's the last day of term, isn't it? When you come home tomorrow, we'll report it to the Aurors."
"Aurors are no good. They obey the Wizengamot, and the Wizengamot lets Umbitch do anything."
"Well, we'll give it a try. Now, about the holidays... Is your Mum still busy in her shop? It might be a good idea if Sally-Anne went to help her. Cressida says we're rather busy this Easter and can't afford the luxury of too many bodies in the house."
A lump swelled in my throat as Dad winked at me and then vanished from the fireplace. I hardly saw as Ella-Jane threw a second handful of McGonagall's Floo powder into the fire and called for Mum.
Mum was a little less sympathetic, but more helpful. "Ella-Jane, what possessed you to be so defiant towards that horrible woman? No, of course she shouldn't have hexed you like that, but drawing rude pictures was asking for trouble. Next time you face an injustice, how about you try the kind of negotiation that actually has a reasonable chance of improving the situation instead of just making the spiteful person angrier? Yes, yes, I'll come up to Hogwarts and demand her side of the story. No, you don't have to go back to school if we can't sort it out..."
So once again, I spent the whole holiday with Mum. She did go up to Hogwarts to reason with Professor Umbridge, but the "reasonable negotiation" was not a success.
"She was utterly intractable!" Mum complained. "She said that students who dislike punishments ought to be careful to behave well. When I questioned the legality of her methods, she waved around some Wizengamot dispensation that apparently gives her the right to do whatever she likes, and her ears were completely closed to anything I could say about proportion. Sally-Anne, I was really frightened for the three of you."
My heart leapt with hope as I turned over the cod fillets. "Mum, would it be better if we didn't go back to Hogwarts?"
"I told Professor Umbridge I was removing you, but she laughed at me and claimed that wizarding law requires children under sixteen to be at school. When I pointed out that 'school' need not mean 'Hogwarts', she gave that stupid simper and told me, 'Once at Hogwarts, always at Hogwarts. If any Sorted child leaves my tender care at Hogwarts before her O.W.L. exams, you may be sure I'll send the Snatchers around.' Heaven knows who or what these Snatchers might be; I didn't wait to find out!"
I stirred the cheese sauce and poured it into the serving jug. "Mum... Do you think the Snatchers could be Death Eater-type people?"
"Whatever makes you say that, Sally-Anne?"
"There are rumours at school that He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named is back. Umbitch punishes people who talk about it, but the rumours don't go away."
Mum looked even wearier. "Yes, I've heard the rumours. I lie awake at night, worrying about what would happen to Raymond, the boys and my mother if it turned out to be true. But no one ever offers any proof."
"Well, these Snatchers..."
Mum sighed and pulled the plates out of the cupboard. "Sally-Anne, it makes no difference whether they are Death Eaters or just Ministry busybodies. The point is that you girls have to return to Hogwarts and make the best of the bad situation. But if the worst is true... if You-Know-Who is back... there's nothing we can do about it. The best way we can protect the Muggles in our family is to keep a low profile and stay out of trouble. Just concentrate on your studies... and try to take care of your sisters."
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13 Reviews | 5.15/10 Average
This has been a really cute story. Thank you for the enjoyment.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
You're welcome! Thank you for writing in. GhV
A different twist than I expected. I thought you might bring her and Terry back together, but apparently not. That rather spoils the ball and prince metaphor, but oh well. How did a fresh Hogwarts graduate manage to buy and set up her own shop? A little implausible. An enjoyable read in general, good work.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear HJS,I did warn you about that twist! I decided that Terry and Sally-Anne were fundamentally incompatible, so the "triumph of love" with which a Cinderella story must end was moral and not romantic.Sally-Anne didn't get her own shop until she was 21. Sorry if I didn't write that clearly. But she spent the two years after she left Hogwarts mixing potions part-time at home and networking with Muggle retailers. It took her the whole of that time to accumulate enough capital to set up her own shop, and then it was a very small one - she didn't employ an assistant until she had her first baby. But she always ran at a modest profit, and she did indeed "make people more comfortable at home".Thanks for reading and for writing in,GhV
Response from HermioneJeanSnape (Reviewer)
I didn't mean Sally-Anne's shop, I meant Megan's. Terry did seem a bit too stiff and self-righteous for her. He was quite obnoxious.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Ah, Megan... Well, there wasn't room to tell her story here. She receives a little financial back-up from her brother Emrys, who is both a big earner and a big spender. She later marries a wizard a few years older than herself (a Welshman, of course) and he has savings. Her business in fact grows larger than Sally-Anne's because Megan's personality is better suited to tough business decisions.Yes, Terry is somewhat "stiff", because he has secrets to keep, i.e. the D.A., and Sally-Anne has no way of knowing that. An older man might manage to be more tactful about the whole business, but Terry isn't. (If he had been, there wouldn't have been any story!)In fact, I meant Sally-Anne to be the more self-righteous of the two, but of course the reader hears her point of view, while Terry's isn't stated. Before chapter 13, Sally-Anne has no concept of grace so she doesn't at all understand Terry's confidence, which isn't based in himself. Once she stops trying to justify her own actions (loses the self-righteous attitude), Terry is out of the story, so we still don't hear his point of view. That was a deliberate authorial decision, because I didn't want to use a work of light fiction as a vehicle of proselytisation.Some readers would have liked to see Terry and Sally-Anne reconciled romantically, but given their extreme youth, I thought they would both do better to find new partners. For the record, Terry marries a Muggle doctor.
What is Blaise up to? Is this his new bet? Or does he like Sally Anne? Neat story.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Two interesting guesses - but, no, Blaise's sole motivation is to annoy Cecilia. He knew all along who owned the shoe, but he was hoarding it in case it came in useful to him. In terms of Cinderella parallels, Blaise is a kind of Anti-Prince.
This is an interesting perspective on the reaction of the wizarding public to the possible return of Voldemort.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you. I'm sure I wouldn't want to believe it...
A friend who is a divorce attorney always says you can't count on people to be reaonable when it comes to kids or money. I've enjoyed this.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you. You can't count on Cressida to be reasonable, full stop.
Cloaca Harington! you really have a gift for the names!
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Congratulations on understanding the joke.
wow, WHAT a cinderella story...beetles mixed with spiders...
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Perhaps easier than ashes mixed with cinders? But still a very spiteful move from the Wicked Stepmother.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
I never heard the ashes mixed with cinders bit! the version I know has lentils mixed with millet. cinders would HURT!
Syrinx Greengrass...what a name! clever :)god, I feel so bad for Sally-Anne. I can only hope that at some point she can stand up for herself!
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Sally-Anne is very much like her mother, who hasn't exactly excelled in assertiveness. You know how the plot of this story has to go: Cinderella waits around to be rescued. But I might just change the ending!I credited Daphne Greengrass with three sisters, all of them named after nymphs from Greek mythology. Of course, JKR knows best, and the third sister is actually "Astoria". But there isn't much to my "Syrinx" OC - she's just an older and bossier Daphne.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
I just like the name Syrinx. It reminds me of the flute piece by that name. I don't mind if Sally-Anne waits around to be rescued. But in the original Cinderella (or what I think of as the original) the stepfamily ends up a little bit maimed, and cinderella still invites them to the wedding but they refuse to go. I would kind of want Sally-Anne to draw the line somewhere. I mean, she kind of is being abused. can't she do something about that once she reaches her majority? and what about her father? I feel like there ought to be some sort of resolution with him, because Sally-Anne IS so loyal (what a hufflepuff!) but her dad doesn't respond in kind.
Hufflepuffs make lovely fairy godmothers.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you! There is no fairy godmother in the Grimms' version of the story, only birds who magically produce clothes. But the Hufflepuff girls are indeed behaving rather like Perrault's Fairy.
This is an interesting idea. Here they are in the same class as Harry Potter and all these things are happening but stuff is happening in their lives as well. Everyone has their own problems. There is a world outside of Gryffindor tower.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thanks for writing in,
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
. Interesting readers in the word outside Gryffindor Tower can be a challenge - so thank you for taking the time to read.
wow. I love your story--I often wonder about the characters like Sally-Anne who aren't really seen much in canon. and private family life isn't really discussed either. you navigate all the questions I have with such panache--like, how exactly do you do the laundry in a magical household, and stuff. the only thing is--I don't entirely understand why no one can afford to annoy Cressida. what am I missing? I recognized the name Runcorn, but what hold does Cressida have over the Perks family?
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thanks for writing in, mock turtle (I love your user-name!). JKR does give us a few brilliant glimpses of Mrs Weasley cookiing & etc., but she leaevs us to imagine most of it. I just put in the laundry details as padding; I'm flattered that you found them interesting. Cressida is one of these people who always gets her own way by sheer force of personality. After Flavian had an affair with her, he thought (because he's lazy) it would be less trouble to marry her than to dump her. Cressida is somewhat insecure (you know what her first husband was like, and she received little real support from her parents) so she asserts herself by being spiteful to weaker people. Muggles like Raymond are helpless; Julia cannot appeal to the law because she has no money; and children have few real rights anywhere when their abusers are their own parents. So Cressida is supreme for now, but the tables could be turned as the children grow up.
I really liked your story; it was interesting and new in a lot of ways. I feel kind of let down by the last chapter, though. I know it's a "happily ever after" part, but chapter 13 has so much life, so much emotion! It's really hard to go from reading that to chapter 14, where you tell us just what happened, tie everything up neatly. There's no action, no dialogue, no scene really. I was actually kind of confused at the end of the last chapter as to why sally-anne was going to spend what would have been her 6th year at home with her mother. was it just to save money? why did 6th year become the breaking point? I feel like everything that happens in this final chapter ought to have been played out over the course of several chapters! It's just, the tone of this final chapter is very different than all the ones that came before it, and I don't understand why you chose to do it that way.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear mock turtle,Thank you for your loyal reviewing throughout this story. Perhaps I should have labelled that final chapter as "epilogue"? I felt that all the real action finished at the end of chapter 13, when Sally-Anne faced reality. All the basic conflicts (family dysfunctions, political duty, moral and spiritual issues, romance) were played out in the Hogwarts chapel. And I'm so pleased that you appreciated the "life" of that chapter!Sally-Anne stayed at home in 1996-7 because it seemed the best way to fight Voldemort. (Remember, there's no D.A. in HPB - the only really important event is the relationship between Harry and Dumbledore.) You also need to understand British education laws - you CAN'T leave school before the end of fifth year, but sixth and seventh year are entirely optional, and around 70% of Muggles make the choice to leave at that point (with the O.W.L.s safely in hand). Wizards seem to be under more pressure to stay on for the full seven years, but leaving once they have their O.W.L.s in hand must still be an appealing option in some cases. In Sally-Anne's case, yes, her mother's financial situation was one reason, but not the most important one.I'm very flattered that you wanted more chapters, but Sally-Anne aged 16-22 would have made a rather dull story because the dramatic conflict for those years just wasn't in my head.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
Dear GhV,Thanks for your explanation of British education laws...you're right, I know next to nothing about them. I'm from California :) I guess I don't know how much wizarding school would parallel the muggle school code, but for the purpose of your story it's great. (I get really hung up on the details, like, how DO wizards learn math? especially ones who don't go to muggle school? so many wizards are so clueless about muggles that not many of them seem to go to muggle school. also, you put music lessons into your story, which made me happy). Really? 70% of people leave school when they're 15? I guess I don't know what the percentage is in America but the consensus here is that you will not amount to much if you don't go on to University so the statistics don't really get talked about much...if you drop out of high school it's kind of considered a failure. At least in my community. (I mean, I think a lot of people still do leave high school before they get their diploma, it's just that your options are very limited. Oftentimes you can't even really support yourself.)I think the particular things I wanted you to write more about after the end of ch 14 were Sally-Anne's final year at Hogwarts when she was forced to go back (had she finished coming to terms with terry ignoring her? what was it like to be a hufflepuff in the school during that year? it seemed like a lot of drama!) and Christopher and Jeremy, the stepbrothers, b/c Jeremy married a girl from hogwarts (I suppose that's a separate story but I want to know how their romance went. It's different, I think, than Seamus's parents' story b/c he knows she's a witch when he marries her).I think it's really interesting that there is a whole religious side to your story. I have often wondered (since there was such an outcry against harry potter from the religious fundamentalists in america) what it would be like to discover that you are a muggle-born witch or wizard in a highly religious family. what kind of personal struggle would that be? and were witches and wizards ever particularly christian, considering the historical witch burnings? your version in Hearthlinks is a fascinating one.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear MT,I hope the Petulant Poetess will overlook it if we use her forum board to continue this rather complex discussion. You do ask such good questions!Regarding the parallels between Hogwarts and the British Muggle system: They are so strong that they must be deliberate. JKR was openly and obviously describing and parodying the 1970s system under which she was educated. I was also born in 1965, so I recognised it instantly.Most people are 16 by the end of fifth year. (Harry, having a July birthday, is still 15, but 5/6 of his classmates are already 16 when they take their O.W.L.s.) Sixteen is the minimum school leaving age in Britain - anyone who tries to drop out before then is inviting the police and the social workers around to their home. The O.W.L.s (which Muggles called the Ordinary Levels back in the 1970s, but which are now called the G.C.S.E.s) are effectively the school leaving certificate. Students who leave school with the G.C.S.E. are able to take an apprenticeship, secretarial course, etc.Universities in Britain were traditionally only for the "academic" types. In the 1970s, the government paid your fees; as long as your Advanced Levels (N.E.W.T.s) were good enough, you could enter a university at age 18 and emerge with your Honours degree three years later. But now there is the push to give more and more students the tertiary opportunity - fully 30% - the government only loans the fees. There is talk that standards have lowered in order to accommodate students of lower ability, but I don't know whether that is true or whether students and lecturers have simply been forced to work harder.Regarding wizards learning maths, I think the short answer is - they don't. Obviously they have had seven years of primary education before they started Hogwarts, and I imagine wizards are supposed to bring their children to the same standard as the Muggle state schools. But I think most wizards can only do maths at the same level as a Muggle 11-year-old. Even Arithmancy doesn't seem to require a much higher standard than that - and the majority of wizards struggle with this subject.I think the 1997-8 year at Hogwarts would be a great story, and many fanfic writers have attempted it, but the whole theme just seemed too grandiose for me to begin. Sally-Anne had accepted by then that Terry was not the man for her, and her commitment was to defeating Voldemort without being sidetracked by boyfriends. (What Americans call "dating" doesn't really happen in Britain.)Jeremy's future wife, Mary Fenwick, features in my series The Moon-Cursers, especially the final volume, The Banebrewer. She probably would make a very interesting subject for a romance, but I'm afraid I haven't thought ahead to the details. I just think that a lot of Wizard/Muggle marriages involve the Muggle sibling of a Muggle-born, because meeting your sibling's friends is a natural way to find your spouse.One of these days, I will finish writing the story of Seamus's parents, but I encountered a creative block just when I reached the honeymoon - we were about 24 hours from the Great Reveal, and I completely blanked out!Regarding the "religious side"... Well, you couldn't find a more blatant, in-your-face-obvious Christ-figure than Harry Potter himself. As a matter of literary style, JKR couldn't write convincingly about her symbolic Christ-hero in a book where some of her characters also talked about Christianity as a separate force - either of historic interest or as a spiritual factor. So she just didn't tell us about the specific religious beliefs of individual characters. It's fairly clear, of course, that Harry himself, whose mind we read, has none. However, I infer from what little she has said that wizards have exactly the same religions and non-religions as Muggles.It's interesting that you raise the dilemma of the Muggle-born religious in this column, because that's exactly the situation of Terry Boot. Although his parents are ordinary English Agnostics, he was a childhood convert to Christianity. I have always assumed that the problem of magic would be bigger for angry, book-burning Fundamentalists (of whom we have hardly any in Britain) than it would be for the young wizard himself. Terry knows intuitively that his mysterious powers have nothing to do with nature-worship. They are more like an alternative technology - much as electricity would have looked like witchcraft in the Middle Ages. It's clear that the Hogwarts version of magic has nothing to do with religion, especially not with Pantheism; real neo-Pagans claim to have cringed at the way the Hogwarts staff so crudely break the Pagan ethical codes and ignore spirituality.There were no witch-burnings in Britain - we only hanged the filthy Quislings who appeared to have sold out to Satan! And only in periods of social chaos when a scapegoat was needed. The Catholic Church published a formal report to the effect that witches did not exist as early as the twelfth century. Despite this, until the year 1700, almost every society in the world periodically persecuted witches, including Animistic societies. While this doesn't excuse the Christians, it does highlight that the conflict was not a specifically Christian one. In JKR's world, no real witches were ever caught, so I think they would have stood on the sidelines, weeping (or laughing) at Muggle stupidity. Wizards knew that, while safe, they were the real targets, and they also knew that evil wizards really might have been responsible for some of the social disasters, so I think they would have understood the Muggle fear of the supernatural. I don't know whether they would have blamed their society's religious beliefs for the persecution, given that the wizards themselves probably shared whatever was the dominant belief. A great deal depends on the amount of diversity permitted by a given culture and on the level of education of the individual wizard.I've probably confused more than I've clarified, but that was the kind of thinking that underpinned Hearthlinks. Thanks for your support,GhV
This was enjoyable and interesting, and a bit of a twist on the Cinderella story, adding witchcraft. You make stepmothers sound awful!!The story is good at exploring the interlinking between magical and muggle, and also at giving a wider view of the Hogwarts population than Harry does in the books.I think Sally-Anne was a bit harsh on herself (as was Terry) for feeling that she was selfish for putting her family first and not feeling up to fighting Voldemort. She is only 15,and she puts in an amazing amount of hard work to try and keep them together. Yes, she does it because she loves them and wants a happy family. But the reasons she gives as selfish motivations are basically the same as Harry has for fighting Voldemort. I liked your Christian twist, because though it doesn't fit into the books and isn't relevant to Harry, I personally know that my beliefs got me through my teenage years and its nice to see how it can be dealt with alongside magic (despite claims that HP is evil!) I didn't think Terry's attitude was very Christian however; he just began to ignore her and that was it, without even letting her understand why, but again, I suppose that can be attributed to age.I also enjoy that this follows the UK school system. I usually find myself getting irritated at an over-americanisation of Hogwarts, when in the books JKR is clearly basing the magical on the UK muggle!One query though, you mention S Capper as if we've met him already in the story but I can't find him - have I missed something?
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
,I'm so flattered that anyone is still reading this story! There isn't much to be said for Cressida as stepmother, is there? I hope I showed Julia as a more reasonable one, and of course you shouldn't take Cecilia's perception of the second Mrs Runcorn as objective.I think Sally-Anne was by far a better person than her father or stepmother for trying so valiantly to hold her family together. But it really wasn't her job to fix her parents' mistakes, and her "family first" attitude had very quickly become "family only". The truth was, her family didn't need her time while the D.A. did. Everyone has some faults, and Sally-Anne needed to face up to hers before she could move on.What the reader knows - but Sally-Anne doesn't - is that Terry is bound by a magical contract never to mention the D.A. So he can't explain the reason he is breaking up with her, i.e. that it wasn't possible for him to be close to someone who had opted out of this dangerous secret. He botched it, of course; he ought to have given her some kind of better explanation for what he was doing, and maybe even offered her a second chance later. But he was only 15, and boys of that age aren't always tactful.Since Terry is a Muggle-born, there is more about him, his faith and his family in a forthcoming episode of Magic in my Tree.S. Capper appears only once in canon. He (or she?) is one of a number of Hogwarts students who checked out Quidditch through the Ages: you can read this name in the back of the book. I don't mention him any earlier in Hearthlinks because Sally-Anne didn't notice him during her Hogwarts years!I must confess to being irritated by fanfic Americanisations of Hogwarts as I've been a teacher as well as a student in the British system; but we mustn't be xenophobic. It's very difficult for American readers to grasp just how the British system is different because Americans haven't the first idea which questions to ask. Seven years at high school? Three terms a year? Summer holidays starting in July? No weekly percentage gradings? No graduation? Only three years to the Muggle undergraduate degree? Who would have guessed??
Response from Tilly (Reviewer)
I hadn't read any of your stories before MIMT, but I expect I'll make my way through most of them now!Yes, I agree that everyone has faults and must face up to them, however I still feel Sally was harsh on herself given her age and circumstance. Of course, as the author you have so much more backstory and this gives you a bit of a leg up on the perspective side! As a reader we can only see Sally-Anne and its easier to sympathise with her because of this. I also found her a sympathetic character because she is so quick to forgive and slow to judge. I found Terry to be quite judgemental in this story, based on his actions to Sally-Anne, so I look forward to seeing him from another perspective in MIMT. I am still inclined towards feeling that these students are children, and the level to which they are expected and encouraged to participate in war is inappropriate (at least in real life, in fiction it makes for an excellent story). I expect this also colours my judgement of Terry and Sally-Anne.As for the Americanisms, I hope its not xenophobic to be irritated! I have read many amazing fics by Americans and other nationalities which have had a good grasp of the UK education system, and fics by Brit authors which have a woeful one, so I think what really irritates me most is lack of accuracy. The American angle just jumps out however because we watch so much of their TV!Ps-thanks for the S Capper info too :)