Sleeping with the Ashes
Chapter 7 of 14
Grace has VictoryAt last the stepmother said, “I have strewed a dish-full of lentils in the ashes, and if you can pick them all up again in two hours you may go with us.” Then … there came to the kitchen-window two white doves … chirping and fluttering, and they alighted among the ashes; and the doves nodded with their heads, and began to pick, peck, pick, peck … and put all the good grains into the dish. Before an hour was over all was done, and they flew away. (Grimm)
This godmother of hers, who was a fairy, said to her, “You wish that you could go to the ball; is it not so? … Well,” said her godmother, “be but a good girl, and I will contrive that you shall go.” (Perrault)
ReviewedCHAPTER SEVEN
Sleeping with the Ashes
Dad had managed to expand the family dining table to seat nineteen. Xavier was nearly crushed on a two-seater bench between Cecilia and their cousin Luke, but there was room for everyone except me. I wouldn't have had time to sit down anyway, because someone had to serve the food, and serving nineteen people took time!
Lunch had been fine. The tomato soup was hot, with the right amount of basil; the green salad was crisp under the French dressing; the lobster terrine was standing up straight; and the royal icing was shining and solid on the Christmas cake. There was even time for me to eat in the kitchen between brewing the coffee and washing up. Mum would be proud of me, and perhaps Dad would even remember to give me some photographs to show Terry.
The afternoon was much more hectic. I had planned to spend it peeling potatoes and shelling peas, but Ursula and Cecilia kept running into the kitchen with other demands.
"Aunt Messalina would like more mince pies. No, I don't remember where you hid them you fetch them out!"
"Xavier's just spilt Uncle Polonius's sherry can you bring up some Mrs Skower's to mop it?"
"Flavian's father was divvy enough to over-eat and now he's asking for alka-seltzer. I suppose that's some Muggle remedy. He's your grandfather you go and find him some medicine."
"Great-Grandmamma needs a glass of water, chilled but not frozen."
"Cecilia," I said wearily as I topped another sprout, "can't you organise a simple thing like a glass of water?"
Cecilia burst into tears. "Are you calling me lazy?" she sobbed. "I'm bursting for the bog this was my one chance to scarper before they trapped me for another hour! I'd hoped you wouldn't mind giving up a few minutes of your cooking hobby to help a poor old lady."
"Then can you ask Dad to lay a charm on this knife so that the vegetables will be chopped automatically?"
"Flavian's busy," she protested. "He's entertaining our guests and showing an interest in their lives something that you never make time to do. Come on, bring Great-Grandmamma that water!"
Terry bothers with people, I told myself as I turned off the tap. This is just one day of my life, and tomorrow I'll be free to be selfish.
But finally the dinner was on the table. Dad had done a good job with laying out crackers and holly wreaths and he also carved for me, and Cressida's mother had wafted cologne around the walls. The prawn salad was piquant. The turkey was succulent; the sausages and potatoes were cooked through, and the carrots and sprouts were not over-cooked; the gravy was free from lumps and the bread sauce was not too bland. When I set a dish of cauliflower next to the cranberry sauce, Aunt Messalina was telling fabulous tales of their life in Brazil, and her father was topping up Aunt Odette's wine glass. By the time I brought the plum pudding to the table, ablaze with blue fire, Grandpa Perks was telling a joke about a wizard, a Muggle and a Squib, and it had become a very merry party.
I was finishing the first round of washing up when Cecilia's voice behind me whined: "No one in Aunt Carduela's family eats parsnips. Didn't you listen to that information before you planned the menu?"
Ursula carried a pile of sticky dishes into the kitchen so that she could ask me, "Why pork sausages? Grandad will have a heart attack if you keep stuffing him at this rate. By the way, Great-Grandmamma was not at all amused by your grandfather's joke how insensitive to tell a Squib-bashing joke in front of a Squib's widow!"
The blood rushed to my cheeks as I recalled that Terry never told that kind of joke. I couldn't imagine that his parents even knew any anti-Squib jokes.
Cressida loomed up in the doorway. "You really might have left a hint about where the lucky charms were hidden in the pudding. Xavier is in tears because his slice wasn't lucky."
I tried to shut out the sound of their voices. I thought about Mum and Raymond, who would have finished with the parish food parcel distributions by now, so they must be on their way to the late-night carol service. The church choir would put a spiritual dimension as well as music into their celebrations. Tomorrow the family including Grandma and Grandpa Flourish would all share the work of cooking Christmas dinner, with Mum and Grandpa using magic to speed up the boring bits. Then on Boxing Day they would take a long walk through the woods and fields to burn off the Christmas calories... A wave of loneliness overwhelmed me and I tried to remember: The week is nearly over. After I've cleaned the kitchen, I can go to bed. Then tomorrow I'm going back to Hogwarts. I'm going to the Yule Ball with Terry.
Terry. Terry could laugh at anything. And Terry really wanted to go to the ball with me.
The visitors had left the house by now, but they would be back in time for breakfast. I checked the froster-box: the pancake batter was mixed. I checked the sink and the stove: both were sparkling clean. I didn't have the energy to climb the stairs to bed. Before I knew what I had done, I dropped to the ground and curled up on the kitchen floor. I fell asleep with my feet virtually in the fireplace.
* * * * * * *Christmas at Dad's house was finally over. The guests had eaten breakfast, exchanged presents, eaten lunch and said goodbye. I had scrubbed the kitchen clean again. Dusk was falling, and Ursula and Cecilia were whispering and giggling about the Yule Ball.
"Should we change into dress-robes now?"
"No, let's do it at Hogwarts. You don't want to lose your pearls on the way."
"Besides, Flavian might work out what the robes really cost."
"No, he won't; he's clueless about prices. But it's boring here, so let's leave soon."
"Yes, let's go while Sally-Anne's still busy, so that we don't have to take her with us."
"We won't be taking her with us. Mummy promised..."
I carried the last bag of kitchen rubbish to the dustbin as the clock was striking four. When I re-entered the tiny house, it suddenly seemed very silent. Was that just in contrast to the noise of yesterday? Or had Ursula and Cecilia been serious about leaving for Hogwarts without me? Not that it mattered. I could take a Portkey by myself. I would go and fetch my trunk, which I had kept packed through the week.
Cressida stopped me on the landing. "Young lady, where are you going?"
"Upstairs. Why is it so quiet?"
"Because Xavier has finally admitted defeat and lain down for a much-needed nap. And your father has gone to his parents' house some tosh about a burst pipe that needs magic to be fixed. Ursula and Cecilia have returned to Hogwarts, but before you stir from this house, you can clean up the kitchen properly."
"It's clean, Cressida."
She snorted furiously. "Let me judge that. You are not leaving this house until it's in a state that can be left." She half-pushed me down the stairs and followed me through the kitchen door.
She saw at once that the kitchen was clean. She ran her hands over the table for dust, peered into the sink for grease, pulled at the oven door for burnt crumbs, slid open drawers of saucepans... but she was disappointed. Even her exacting eye could not find a fault. Her kitchen was far cleaner than she had ever managed to scrub it herself, even though she could use magic to do it.
"You are not returning to Hogwarts until I say. You have done enough mischief to Cecilia, and you are not following her there to disrupt her big night."
I blinked.
"Stop looking so innocent! You did your best to steal her escort. Blaise Zabini, wasn't that his name? You see, everyone knows about it. It would be unspeakable if you arrived at the ball on the arm of the young man who originally invited her."
I was so enraged that I forgot to be afraid of Cressida. "I am not going to the ball with Blaise Zabini. I've found someone better!"
"So you say. But why should we trust you? I am keeping you at home this evening so that Cecilia can enjoy the ball. You need not look for the Portkey; it's where you won't be able to find it."
"But I promised..." That was a stupid thing to say, since Cressida did not care about promise-keeping. "Cressida, I promised my friend that I would be there!"
The triumphant curl of her lips told me that she had never intended me to go to the Yule Ball. She was so convinced that I would spoil the evening for Cecilia that she had planned in advance to keep me at home. Perhaps even the family Christmas dinner had been an elaborate ruse to lure me away from Hogwarts. Just how desperate was Cressida to see her daughters dance with eligible wizards? Did it already matter, even though Cecilia and I were only fourteen?
"Children have no right to promise anything without their parents' permission. Meanwhile, you can start putting your family first. Accio!" Something swirled, and a huge bowl of something black landed in Cressida's hands. "See? Someone has interfered with Xavier's creature collections most likely Ella-Jane and the beetles are mixed up with the spiders. Xavier is heartbroken. You are to sit here and separate them out again." She glared at me, as if the point were not quite obvious. "Without using magic. You have one hour."
I shuddered; Cressida knew that I hated touching creepy-crawlies. But there was no chance of being released from her house unless I obliged her, so I lifted a couple of spiders into an empty bowl. A spider-leg crumbled off in my fingers: I knew at once that I wouldn't be able to complete the task safely within an hour.
Perhaps I should just run away? If I couldn't go to the ball, at least I didn't have to stay in this house. I threw a handful of Floo powder onto the kitchen fire and called for Mum's house.
Molly-Rose's head appeared in the fireplace. "Sally-Anne, why aren't you back at Hogwarts?"
I explained the situation. "Molly-Rose, I want to come home. I can't go to the ball, but I can't stay here..."
"And you can't come home!" Molly-Rose interrupted. "Imagine how much trouble Mum would be in if the Wizengamot found out that you'd broken access! Besides, you promised Terry, and we don't have a way of getting you to Hogwarts from home. Wait a minute Ella-Jane do you have a wand?"
"'Course," said Ella-Jane's voice, "but I can't use it in the school holidays, can I?"
"Never mind that. Sally-Anne, stand by with those bugs. I'm coming through the Floo!"
It didn't seem very safe, but there was a swirl of green and Molly-Rose stepped out into Cressida's kitchen. She grabbed the bowl of creatures and stepped back into the fire before it had time to change colour. Presumably she landed at home, because I soon heard her talking to Ella-Jane.
"If you do a spell, will you be in trouble?"
"No, we'll say that Mum did it. No one will ever know."
"I read that Diffindo might separate things."
"Rip them up, more likely. There is a Summoning Charm, but I haven't learned it yet."
"Mum, how do you separate spiders from beetles?"
"Girls, whatever possessed you to attempt magic outside of school? Here, let me... Accio, Arachnai!"
Two minutes later, my sisters were both hurling through the Floo, Ella-Jane bearing a bowl of dead spiders and Molly-Rose one of beetles.
"That'll show Cressida! You didn't use magic!"
"And it wasn't me that mixed the beetles with the spiders. Xavier did it himself when he was having a tantrum."
"We'd better leave she'll murder you if she catches us here!"
Ella-Jane grabbed a much larger handful of Floo powder than was strictly necessary, and they jumped back into the hearth together. The flames were still green when Cressida walked in to check up on me.
"You had help," she hissed. "Who've you been letting into my house?"
"No one." She loomed up over me, wand aloft, and for a moment I thought she would hex me. "I didn't invite anyone in," I repeated. "But the task is finished."
"You spoke to someone," she raged. "No matter Intercludo! There, I've blocked the Floo. You can prove to me that you didn't use magic by handing over your wand and repeating the task. Accio!"
A stream of shimmering dust sailed out of nowhere and landed on the kitchen table, enough to fill two of those large bowls. I looked more closely. It wasn't dust: it was metallic glitter from my stepsisters' childhood craft kits, the type that sticks to the fingers a hundred grains at a time.
"Your wand, Sally-Anne, or I will hex you with rabbit-ears. You can have it back after you've separated the silver glitter from the gold. If you can do it in half an hour without magic or any other help, I'll even give you back your Portkey."
She flounced out triumphantly, twirling my wand because she was so certain that I could not succeed.
I was certain too. I stared dumbly at the huge pile of gold and silver glitter, trying not to cry and praying for help to come. I had no idea what I expected to happen surely not even God could solve this kind of problem! It was so senseless. Ursula and Cecilia hadn't cared about their glitter for years, yet Cressida had mixed it deliberately just to set me a task. The Floo was blocked, I had no wand, and Dad wouldn't be home until the ball was over. Meanwhile, Terry would be waiting for me at Hogwarts, and I didn't even have a way of owling him my apologies.
* * * * * * *"Is your Floo connection broken?"
I startled at the voice behind my ear and whirled around.
"Aunt Odette! What are you doing here? No, the Floo isn't broken; Cressida's just blocked it for the evening."
"I won't ask why." Dad's sister moved to stand in front of me, still holding her wand, but she didn't sit down. "I'm sorry to Apparate into your house like that, Sally-Anne, but I had to ask if you were all right. I didn't like the flavour of last night's party... the way they kept you waiting at table without offering you so much as a potato for your dinner."
I didn't know how to begin telling Odette that I was not all right, but my silence must have spoken for me.
"Can I get rid of all this glittery stuff?" she asked.
"No! That is... it needs to be separated... the gold and the silver in these two bowls."
She waved her wand without verbalising any incantation, and the glitter all swirled up into the air. It landed neatly in the two bowls, the gold and silver completely and perfectly separated.
"So what is Cressida playing at? Weren't you supposed to be at this Yule Ball by now?"
Haltingly, I explained the situation. "Don't blame Dad," I finished. "He doesn't seem to know what Cressida does behind his back."
"Then he doesn't want to know," said Odette. "He always was lazy. Anyway, let's bring back this wand of yours." She waved hers again, and mine sailed right into my hand. "And the Portkey." This time nothing happened, even when Odette repeated the Summoning Charm out loud. "Bother, she must have put a Staying Charm on it. All right, no Portkey. Well, how about your trunk?"
We both stood back as my neatly-packed trunk crashed onto the kitchen floor.
"If I put a Weightless Charm on it, you can lift it one-handed. Good. Now hold me round the waist and don't let go. I'm taking you there Side-Along."
Odette's arm was flung tightly around my shoulders; the kitchen went black; my insides squeezed themselves out; and before I knew what had happened, we were outdoors in the dark, open countryside. I shivered before I could help myself.
"Where are we?"
"Somewhere between Hogsmeade and Hogwarts, of course!" She pointed her wand, the tip now lit, and I saw the snowy path, with the gates of Hogwarts a hundred yards ahead. "It's cold here, but before you go... I'm sorry I didn't have a chance to give you your Christmas present this morning."
She held out a purple box bristling with rosettes. With trembling fingers, I pulled at the silver ribbon and tore the paper, which Aunt Odette Vanished with a wave of her wand. I lifted the lid and saw, by the beam of wand-light, a flash of sparkling glass.
"Shoes? Of glass? But how did you know my size?"
"Gallus Cobbler is an old friend of mine. He put three charms on these shoes. First, they are a perfect fit for their true owner, even if she grows and they won't fit anyone else at all, even if her feet are the same size as yours. Second, the crystal is Unbreakable. Third, they are dancing shoes, charmed with the pattern of every dance. Just whisper the name of the dance whenever the music starts, and the shoes will tread it out flawlessly. I thought they were a good idea for a ball."
"Especially as I missed all the dancing lessons," I said. "Oh, thank you, Aunt Odette! Thank you so much for rescuing me for doing that stupid chore for bringing me here for the shoes for everything!"
"Think nothing of it. After all, I am your godmother! Make sure your young man treats you well tonight. Goodbye!"
Aunt Odette Disapparated before I had time to hug her, and I skimmed down the footpath into Hogwarts. A few boys were still throwing snowballs at each other; they hardly noticed when I slid through the front door and across the Entrance Hall, through the Hufflepuff entry and down to the warm cellar.
Down in our dormitory, Hannah was asking, "So you're quite sure this will be all right?"
"Yes, it's exactly right!" said Susan. "Your pattern was definitely a Twilfitt number, and that's a very flattering neckline for you... Sally-Anne! You're here!"
"I'm here." I dropped my trunk onto my bed. "You all look very..." But my voice died away. It was only at that moment, safe at Hogwarts with nothing to do but dress for the ball, that I remembered that I didn't own any dress-robes.
I stared and stared at my friends' good taste. Susan's robes were very obviously new, buttercup-yellow with black badgers bordering her wrap-over neckline and hem. Megan said that hers, which were two shades of red with a subtle interwoven pattern of dragons, were a hand-me-down from her sister, but they looked as good as new. Hannah's were home-made, white lace floating over sky-blue silk, but Susan was right about the pattern: it was a tried-and-true classic. Even Sophie, who had entered a second-hand robe shop with no knowledge of wizarding fashions and next to no money, had sensibly opted for an ultra-simple line in blush-pink that would look right on anyone anywhere.
But I hadn't had a minute to think about robes all through the holidays, and now it was too late. I still had nothing to wear except Ursula's discarded pumpkin-gold Muggle cocktail dress. Before I could hide my embarrassment, I found my well-dressed friends all swirling around me and asking what was wrong.
"I don't know what to wear." My voice sounded very small. "I only have... this."
Megan couldn't suppress a gasp of horror as they all inspected the hideous strip of cloth with dismay.
Then Sophie said, "So what's magic for, then? There must be spells to fix that robe! Put it on, Sally-Anne."
Haltingly, I stripped off my Muggle jeans and pullover and drew the cocktail dress over my shoulders, while Susan leafed through Intermediate Transfiguration.
"Here we are how to increase the amount of fabric. Cresco!"
The hem of the dress obligingly shot downwards. With a neat flick, Susan turned her wand away, and the hem rested stably on the carpet.
"Let's try again with the sleeves."
This was harder, since the Muggle dress was sleeveless, but after several experiments with lengthening, shortening, tightening and loosening, the sleeves and the neckline were finally decent.
"You shouldn't wear that colour," said Megan. "Caesius Coloro!"
Immediately the unflattering pumpkin colour shimmered into pale grey-blue. I couldn't believe it. It had actually become a pretty dress-robe. It looked right with the crystal shoes. Sophie helped me put my hair up, and Hannah scattered some of her silver stars over it.
A glance in the mirror was astonishing. It was impossible to tell whose robes were new, old or downright faked. We all looked good!
"Time to go upstairs," said Susan.
I was floating. I hardly heard when Hannah whispered to Sophie, "I hope those charms will hold."
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13 Reviews | 5.15/10 Average
This has been a really cute story. Thank you for the enjoyment.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
You're welcome! Thank you for writing in. GhV
A different twist than I expected. I thought you might bring her and Terry back together, but apparently not. That rather spoils the ball and prince metaphor, but oh well. How did a fresh Hogwarts graduate manage to buy and set up her own shop? A little implausible. An enjoyable read in general, good work.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear HJS,I did warn you about that twist! I decided that Terry and Sally-Anne were fundamentally incompatible, so the "triumph of love" with which a Cinderella story must end was moral and not romantic.Sally-Anne didn't get her own shop until she was 21. Sorry if I didn't write that clearly. But she spent the two years after she left Hogwarts mixing potions part-time at home and networking with Muggle retailers. It took her the whole of that time to accumulate enough capital to set up her own shop, and then it was a very small one - she didn't employ an assistant until she had her first baby. But she always ran at a modest profit, and she did indeed "make people more comfortable at home".Thanks for reading and for writing in,GhV
Response from HermioneJeanSnape (Reviewer)
I didn't mean Sally-Anne's shop, I meant Megan's. Terry did seem a bit too stiff and self-righteous for her. He was quite obnoxious.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Ah, Megan... Well, there wasn't room to tell her story here. She receives a little financial back-up from her brother Emrys, who is both a big earner and a big spender. She later marries a wizard a few years older than herself (a Welshman, of course) and he has savings. Her business in fact grows larger than Sally-Anne's because Megan's personality is better suited to tough business decisions.Yes, Terry is somewhat "stiff", because he has secrets to keep, i.e. the D.A., and Sally-Anne has no way of knowing that. An older man might manage to be more tactful about the whole business, but Terry isn't. (If he had been, there wouldn't have been any story!)In fact, I meant Sally-Anne to be the more self-righteous of the two, but of course the reader hears her point of view, while Terry's isn't stated. Before chapter 13, Sally-Anne has no concept of grace so she doesn't at all understand Terry's confidence, which isn't based in himself. Once she stops trying to justify her own actions (loses the self-righteous attitude), Terry is out of the story, so we still don't hear his point of view. That was a deliberate authorial decision, because I didn't want to use a work of light fiction as a vehicle of proselytisation.Some readers would have liked to see Terry and Sally-Anne reconciled romantically, but given their extreme youth, I thought they would both do better to find new partners. For the record, Terry marries a Muggle doctor.
What is Blaise up to? Is this his new bet? Or does he like Sally Anne? Neat story.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Two interesting guesses - but, no, Blaise's sole motivation is to annoy Cecilia. He knew all along who owned the shoe, but he was hoarding it in case it came in useful to him. In terms of Cinderella parallels, Blaise is a kind of Anti-Prince.
This is an interesting perspective on the reaction of the wizarding public to the possible return of Voldemort.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you. I'm sure I wouldn't want to believe it...
A friend who is a divorce attorney always says you can't count on people to be reaonable when it comes to kids or money. I've enjoyed this.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you. You can't count on Cressida to be reasonable, full stop.
Cloaca Harington! you really have a gift for the names!
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Congratulations on understanding the joke.
wow, WHAT a cinderella story...beetles mixed with spiders...
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Perhaps easier than ashes mixed with cinders? But still a very spiteful move from the Wicked Stepmother.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
I never heard the ashes mixed with cinders bit! the version I know has lentils mixed with millet. cinders would HURT!
Syrinx Greengrass...what a name! clever :)god, I feel so bad for Sally-Anne. I can only hope that at some point she can stand up for herself!
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Sally-Anne is very much like her mother, who hasn't exactly excelled in assertiveness. You know how the plot of this story has to go: Cinderella waits around to be rescued. But I might just change the ending!I credited Daphne Greengrass with three sisters, all of them named after nymphs from Greek mythology. Of course, JKR knows best, and the third sister is actually "Astoria". But there isn't much to my "Syrinx" OC - she's just an older and bossier Daphne.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
I just like the name Syrinx. It reminds me of the flute piece by that name. I don't mind if Sally-Anne waits around to be rescued. But in the original Cinderella (or what I think of as the original) the stepfamily ends up a little bit maimed, and cinderella still invites them to the wedding but they refuse to go. I would kind of want Sally-Anne to draw the line somewhere. I mean, she kind of is being abused. can't she do something about that once she reaches her majority? and what about her father? I feel like there ought to be some sort of resolution with him, because Sally-Anne IS so loyal (what a hufflepuff!) but her dad doesn't respond in kind.
Hufflepuffs make lovely fairy godmothers.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you! There is no fairy godmother in the Grimms' version of the story, only birds who magically produce clothes. But the Hufflepuff girls are indeed behaving rather like Perrault's Fairy.
This is an interesting idea. Here they are in the same class as Harry Potter and all these things are happening but stuff is happening in their lives as well. Everyone has their own problems. There is a world outside of Gryffindor tower.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thanks for writing in,
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
. Interesting readers in the word outside Gryffindor Tower can be a challenge - so thank you for taking the time to read.
wow. I love your story--I often wonder about the characters like Sally-Anne who aren't really seen much in canon. and private family life isn't really discussed either. you navigate all the questions I have with such panache--like, how exactly do you do the laundry in a magical household, and stuff. the only thing is--I don't entirely understand why no one can afford to annoy Cressida. what am I missing? I recognized the name Runcorn, but what hold does Cressida have over the Perks family?
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thanks for writing in, mock turtle (I love your user-name!). JKR does give us a few brilliant glimpses of Mrs Weasley cookiing & etc., but she leaevs us to imagine most of it. I just put in the laundry details as padding; I'm flattered that you found them interesting. Cressida is one of these people who always gets her own way by sheer force of personality. After Flavian had an affair with her, he thought (because he's lazy) it would be less trouble to marry her than to dump her. Cressida is somewhat insecure (you know what her first husband was like, and she received little real support from her parents) so she asserts herself by being spiteful to weaker people. Muggles like Raymond are helpless; Julia cannot appeal to the law because she has no money; and children have few real rights anywhere when their abusers are their own parents. So Cressida is supreme for now, but the tables could be turned as the children grow up.
I really liked your story; it was interesting and new in a lot of ways. I feel kind of let down by the last chapter, though. I know it's a "happily ever after" part, but chapter 13 has so much life, so much emotion! It's really hard to go from reading that to chapter 14, where you tell us just what happened, tie everything up neatly. There's no action, no dialogue, no scene really. I was actually kind of confused at the end of the last chapter as to why sally-anne was going to spend what would have been her 6th year at home with her mother. was it just to save money? why did 6th year become the breaking point? I feel like everything that happens in this final chapter ought to have been played out over the course of several chapters! It's just, the tone of this final chapter is very different than all the ones that came before it, and I don't understand why you chose to do it that way.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear mock turtle,Thank you for your loyal reviewing throughout this story. Perhaps I should have labelled that final chapter as "epilogue"? I felt that all the real action finished at the end of chapter 13, when Sally-Anne faced reality. All the basic conflicts (family dysfunctions, political duty, moral and spiritual issues, romance) were played out in the Hogwarts chapel. And I'm so pleased that you appreciated the "life" of that chapter!Sally-Anne stayed at home in 1996-7 because it seemed the best way to fight Voldemort. (Remember, there's no D.A. in HPB - the only really important event is the relationship between Harry and Dumbledore.) You also need to understand British education laws - you CAN'T leave school before the end of fifth year, but sixth and seventh year are entirely optional, and around 70% of Muggles make the choice to leave at that point (with the O.W.L.s safely in hand). Wizards seem to be under more pressure to stay on for the full seven years, but leaving once they have their O.W.L.s in hand must still be an appealing option in some cases. In Sally-Anne's case, yes, her mother's financial situation was one reason, but not the most important one.I'm very flattered that you wanted more chapters, but Sally-Anne aged 16-22 would have made a rather dull story because the dramatic conflict for those years just wasn't in my head.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
Dear GhV,Thanks for your explanation of British education laws...you're right, I know next to nothing about them. I'm from California :) I guess I don't know how much wizarding school would parallel the muggle school code, but for the purpose of your story it's great. (I get really hung up on the details, like, how DO wizards learn math? especially ones who don't go to muggle school? so many wizards are so clueless about muggles that not many of them seem to go to muggle school. also, you put music lessons into your story, which made me happy). Really? 70% of people leave school when they're 15? I guess I don't know what the percentage is in America but the consensus here is that you will not amount to much if you don't go on to University so the statistics don't really get talked about much...if you drop out of high school it's kind of considered a failure. At least in my community. (I mean, I think a lot of people still do leave high school before they get their diploma, it's just that your options are very limited. Oftentimes you can't even really support yourself.)I think the particular things I wanted you to write more about after the end of ch 14 were Sally-Anne's final year at Hogwarts when she was forced to go back (had she finished coming to terms with terry ignoring her? what was it like to be a hufflepuff in the school during that year? it seemed like a lot of drama!) and Christopher and Jeremy, the stepbrothers, b/c Jeremy married a girl from hogwarts (I suppose that's a separate story but I want to know how their romance went. It's different, I think, than Seamus's parents' story b/c he knows she's a witch when he marries her).I think it's really interesting that there is a whole religious side to your story. I have often wondered (since there was such an outcry against harry potter from the religious fundamentalists in america) what it would be like to discover that you are a muggle-born witch or wizard in a highly religious family. what kind of personal struggle would that be? and were witches and wizards ever particularly christian, considering the historical witch burnings? your version in Hearthlinks is a fascinating one.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear MT,I hope the Petulant Poetess will overlook it if we use her forum board to continue this rather complex discussion. You do ask such good questions!Regarding the parallels between Hogwarts and the British Muggle system: They are so strong that they must be deliberate. JKR was openly and obviously describing and parodying the 1970s system under which she was educated. I was also born in 1965, so I recognised it instantly.Most people are 16 by the end of fifth year. (Harry, having a July birthday, is still 15, but 5/6 of his classmates are already 16 when they take their O.W.L.s.) Sixteen is the minimum school leaving age in Britain - anyone who tries to drop out before then is inviting the police and the social workers around to their home. The O.W.L.s (which Muggles called the Ordinary Levels back in the 1970s, but which are now called the G.C.S.E.s) are effectively the school leaving certificate. Students who leave school with the G.C.S.E. are able to take an apprenticeship, secretarial course, etc.Universities in Britain were traditionally only for the "academic" types. In the 1970s, the government paid your fees; as long as your Advanced Levels (N.E.W.T.s) were good enough, you could enter a university at age 18 and emerge with your Honours degree three years later. But now there is the push to give more and more students the tertiary opportunity - fully 30% - the government only loans the fees. There is talk that standards have lowered in order to accommodate students of lower ability, but I don't know whether that is true or whether students and lecturers have simply been forced to work harder.Regarding wizards learning maths, I think the short answer is - they don't. Obviously they have had seven years of primary education before they started Hogwarts, and I imagine wizards are supposed to bring their children to the same standard as the Muggle state schools. But I think most wizards can only do maths at the same level as a Muggle 11-year-old. Even Arithmancy doesn't seem to require a much higher standard than that - and the majority of wizards struggle with this subject.I think the 1997-8 year at Hogwarts would be a great story, and many fanfic writers have attempted it, but the whole theme just seemed too grandiose for me to begin. Sally-Anne had accepted by then that Terry was not the man for her, and her commitment was to defeating Voldemort without being sidetracked by boyfriends. (What Americans call "dating" doesn't really happen in Britain.)Jeremy's future wife, Mary Fenwick, features in my series The Moon-Cursers, especially the final volume, The Banebrewer. She probably would make a very interesting subject for a romance, but I'm afraid I haven't thought ahead to the details. I just think that a lot of Wizard/Muggle marriages involve the Muggle sibling of a Muggle-born, because meeting your sibling's friends is a natural way to find your spouse.One of these days, I will finish writing the story of Seamus's parents, but I encountered a creative block just when I reached the honeymoon - we were about 24 hours from the Great Reveal, and I completely blanked out!Regarding the "religious side"... Well, you couldn't find a more blatant, in-your-face-obvious Christ-figure than Harry Potter himself. As a matter of literary style, JKR couldn't write convincingly about her symbolic Christ-hero in a book where some of her characters also talked about Christianity as a separate force - either of historic interest or as a spiritual factor. So she just didn't tell us about the specific religious beliefs of individual characters. It's fairly clear, of course, that Harry himself, whose mind we read, has none. However, I infer from what little she has said that wizards have exactly the same religions and non-religions as Muggles.It's interesting that you raise the dilemma of the Muggle-born religious in this column, because that's exactly the situation of Terry Boot. Although his parents are ordinary English Agnostics, he was a childhood convert to Christianity. I have always assumed that the problem of magic would be bigger for angry, book-burning Fundamentalists (of whom we have hardly any in Britain) than it would be for the young wizard himself. Terry knows intuitively that his mysterious powers have nothing to do with nature-worship. They are more like an alternative technology - much as electricity would have looked like witchcraft in the Middle Ages. It's clear that the Hogwarts version of magic has nothing to do with religion, especially not with Pantheism; real neo-Pagans claim to have cringed at the way the Hogwarts staff so crudely break the Pagan ethical codes and ignore spirituality.There were no witch-burnings in Britain - we only hanged the filthy Quislings who appeared to have sold out to Satan! And only in periods of social chaos when a scapegoat was needed. The Catholic Church published a formal report to the effect that witches did not exist as early as the twelfth century. Despite this, until the year 1700, almost every society in the world periodically persecuted witches, including Animistic societies. While this doesn't excuse the Christians, it does highlight that the conflict was not a specifically Christian one. In JKR's world, no real witches were ever caught, so I think they would have stood on the sidelines, weeping (or laughing) at Muggle stupidity. Wizards knew that, while safe, they were the real targets, and they also knew that evil wizards really might have been responsible for some of the social disasters, so I think they would have understood the Muggle fear of the supernatural. I don't know whether they would have blamed their society's religious beliefs for the persecution, given that the wizards themselves probably shared whatever was the dominant belief. A great deal depends on the amount of diversity permitted by a given culture and on the level of education of the individual wizard.I've probably confused more than I've clarified, but that was the kind of thinking that underpinned Hearthlinks. Thanks for your support,GhV
This was enjoyable and interesting, and a bit of a twist on the Cinderella story, adding witchcraft. You make stepmothers sound awful!!The story is good at exploring the interlinking between magical and muggle, and also at giving a wider view of the Hogwarts population than Harry does in the books.I think Sally-Anne was a bit harsh on herself (as was Terry) for feeling that she was selfish for putting her family first and not feeling up to fighting Voldemort. She is only 15,and she puts in an amazing amount of hard work to try and keep them together. Yes, she does it because she loves them and wants a happy family. But the reasons she gives as selfish motivations are basically the same as Harry has for fighting Voldemort. I liked your Christian twist, because though it doesn't fit into the books and isn't relevant to Harry, I personally know that my beliefs got me through my teenage years and its nice to see how it can be dealt with alongside magic (despite claims that HP is evil!) I didn't think Terry's attitude was very Christian however; he just began to ignore her and that was it, without even letting her understand why, but again, I suppose that can be attributed to age.I also enjoy that this follows the UK school system. I usually find myself getting irritated at an over-americanisation of Hogwarts, when in the books JKR is clearly basing the magical on the UK muggle!One query though, you mention S Capper as if we've met him already in the story but I can't find him - have I missed something?
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
,I'm so flattered that anyone is still reading this story! There isn't much to be said for Cressida as stepmother, is there? I hope I showed Julia as a more reasonable one, and of course you shouldn't take Cecilia's perception of the second Mrs Runcorn as objective.I think Sally-Anne was by far a better person than her father or stepmother for trying so valiantly to hold her family together. But it really wasn't her job to fix her parents' mistakes, and her "family first" attitude had very quickly become "family only". The truth was, her family didn't need her time while the D.A. did. Everyone has some faults, and Sally-Anne needed to face up to hers before she could move on.What the reader knows - but Sally-Anne doesn't - is that Terry is bound by a magical contract never to mention the D.A. So he can't explain the reason he is breaking up with her, i.e. that it wasn't possible for him to be close to someone who had opted out of this dangerous secret. He botched it, of course; he ought to have given her some kind of better explanation for what he was doing, and maybe even offered her a second chance later. But he was only 15, and boys of that age aren't always tactful.Since Terry is a Muggle-born, there is more about him, his faith and his family in a forthcoming episode of Magic in my Tree.S. Capper appears only once in canon. He (or she?) is one of a number of Hogwarts students who checked out Quidditch through the Ages: you can read this name in the back of the book. I don't mention him any earlier in Hearthlinks because Sally-Anne didn't notice him during her Hogwarts years!I must confess to being irritated by fanfic Americanisations of Hogwarts as I've been a teacher as well as a student in the British system; but we mustn't be xenophobic. It's very difficult for American readers to grasp just how the British system is different because Americans haven't the first idea which questions to ask. Seven years at high school? Three terms a year? Summer holidays starting in July? No weekly percentage gradings? No graduation? Only three years to the Muggle undergraduate degree? Who would have guessed??
Response from Tilly (Reviewer)
I hadn't read any of your stories before MIMT, but I expect I'll make my way through most of them now!Yes, I agree that everyone has faults and must face up to them, however I still feel Sally was harsh on herself given her age and circumstance. Of course, as the author you have so much more backstory and this gives you a bit of a leg up on the perspective side! As a reader we can only see Sally-Anne and its easier to sympathise with her because of this. I also found her a sympathetic character because she is so quick to forgive and slow to judge. I found Terry to be quite judgemental in this story, based on his actions to Sally-Anne, so I look forward to seeing him from another perspective in MIMT. I am still inclined towards feeling that these students are children, and the level to which they are expected and encouraged to participate in war is inappropriate (at least in real life, in fiction it makes for an excellent story). I expect this also colours my judgement of Terry and Sally-Anne.As for the Americanisms, I hope its not xenophobic to be irritated! I have read many amazing fics by Americans and other nationalities which have had a good grasp of the UK education system, and fics by Brit authors which have a woeful one, so I think what really irritates me most is lack of accuracy. The American angle just jumps out however because we watch so much of their TV!Ps-thanks for the S Capper info too :)