A Prince Among Youths
Chapter 9 of 14
Grace has VictoryShe left behind one of her glass slippers... She reached home, but quite out of breath, and in her nasty old clothes, having nothing left of all her finery but one of the little slippers, the mate to the one that she had dropped. (Perrault)
ReviewedCHAPTER NINE
A Prince Among Youths
"Me ears 'urt," said Sophie. "Do yer think we could make a rule that stepmothers aren't allowed to use t' common room fireplaces?"
My ears hurt too, and Hannah was shaking. Megan was muttering about casting a Lingaugeo on "Sally-Anne's dragon-hag", and perhaps a Splingio too. Only Susan was calm.
"Mrs Perks seemed angriest about the fact that we were all sitting there listening," she said. "I wonder what she wanted to say that was too private for us to hear? She didn't spare us very much. Sally-Anne, can your stepmother do anything to you?"
I tried to remember whether anything in Cressida's furious rant had actually made sense. "I expect she's saving up some kind of punishment. And she'll tell Dad that I spoilt the ball for Ursula and Cecilia. If he believes her..." It was difficult to imagine Dad actually turning against me, but he would be disappointed in me and he would support whatever punishment Cressida allocated. "Let's hope the boys didn't hear," I said as Megan opened the door to the Entrance Hall.
Several boys were waiting for us there.
"Sally-Anne, are you all right?" asked Terry. "We could hear your stepmother all the way out here."
"Of course she isn't all right!" exclaimed Megan. "None of us is! The Wizengamot ought to banish stepmothers to the moon."
"Been worrking on that one for yearrs, I have," said Wayne. "But the munting stepmams do have all the rrights."
There was an awkward moment before Eddie Carmichael said, "Anyway, let's flit. Sophie, do you think that cloak is thick enough for the pouring rain?"
I was glad to drop the subject and let my friends move most of them were going to Hogsmeade despite the weather. Hannah was going with Justin and Ernie, but had forgotten her shopping list. Megan, who had rashly promised to accompany Wayne and then regretted it, now had to explain to him that Susan would be coming with them. Michael Corner slid away from Terry's side when Weasley's sister appeared on the staircase. Soon Terry and I were alone with Anthony Goldstein. Since I had no money, I hoped they would suggest a different plan.
"Aren't you meeting anyone?" I asked Anthony.
"No, I'm going to catch up on some reading." He displayed a large Bible.
"Have you read all of it?"
"Of course although this is only the Hebrew part."
I took courage and asked, "Will you read some to us?"
We went to sit in the little antechamber. There was no table, so Anthony balanced the great book on his knees and began to read.
"When I declared not my sin,
my body wasted away
through my groaning all day long.
For day and night
Thy hand was heavy upon me;
my strength was dried up
as by the heat of summer.
I acknowledged my sin to Thee,
and I did not hide my iniquity;
I said, 'I will confess
my transgressions to the LORD.'
Then Thou didst forgive the guilt of my sin..."
Anthony read very well, even if the words were disturbing. I didn't remember hearing anything so old-fashioned at Mum's church. I looked at Terry, but he seemed enthralled.
Anthony reached the end, and Terry said, "Let Sally-Anne choose something now. What would you like to hear?"
"Something a bit more cheerful," I told them.
Anthony turned the page. "Try this," he said.
"How precious is thy steadfast love, O God!
The children of men take refuge
in the shadow of Thy wings.
They feast on the abundance of Thy house,
and Thou givest them drink
from the river of Thy delights.
For with Thee is the fountain of life;
in Thy light do we see light.
O continue Thy steadfast love to those who know Thee..."
This is more like it, I thought. Terry smiled at me, and we both smiled at Anthony. Who would have thought that, at the tail-end of the twentieth century, three young wizards would give up shopping trips and flying practice because we found it more entertaining to read the Bible?
* * * * * * *"What... Terry hasn't kissed you yet?" Megan sounded disappointed. "But you've been going out together all term!"
"I don't know whether we're going out together or not," I admitted.
Hannah looked flustered. "But... goodness... you two are always together! And the way you talk about him..."
"'Annah," said Sophie, "yer always with Justin and Ernie. Are yer going out wi' them?"
"Everyone knows I'm going out with Ernie! Justin and I only... well... you know..."
"Whereas Sally-Anne and Terry only... well... you know," said Megan.
"And 'ere is Terry," said Sophie. "Yer 'ave to admit, Sally-Anne, that 'e's allus around."
He was. Whereas Sophie had broken up with Eddie Carmichael after only a couple of weeks, and Megan had more or less shaken Wayne off by the time of the Second Task, Terry and I were still the best of friends.
"Hello, Sally-Anne," he said. "Is there something exciting on that notice board?"
"No, we're just removing a few." I ripped off yet another page; I had been taking them down all morning.
LOSTGlass (but unbreakable) dancing shoe for the right foot.
Last seen in the Great Hall at the Yule Ball.
If found, please return to Sally-Anne Perks, 4th Year Hufflepuff.
Since the left shoe had survived the Yule Ball, I knew that the other could not have magically disintegrated, but must be lost in the ordinary way. Obviously it wasn't worth stealing without its fellow; and it was too distinctive to be overlooked or thrown away by anyone who might find it; so I had hoped all term that it might come back to me. But the spring term was over, and no one had replied to my notices, so I had to accept that the glass shoe had gone. However would I tell Aunt Odette?
"Did you try Summoning it?" asked Terry.
"Yes, but that didn't work. If the shoe still exists, it must have a Staying Charm on it."
"Who would want to do that?" asked Susan. "It seems a pretty pointless prank."
"So perhaps the worst is true," said Megan. "Perhaps some idiot did use it to practise the Reducto."
"They're unbreakable, remember," said Hannah. "Or is the Reducto charm stronger than the Unbreakable one? Perhaps lost shoes automatically return to the manufacturer. You could try going to Cobbler's over the holidays."
"Or perhaps they simply return to the owner's home," said Terry hopefully. "Perhaps the magic shoe will be safely waiting in your own wardrobe. Are you packed?"
I indicated my trunk next to Susan's; we were the only ones going home for Easter this year. I had to go home because Mum needed me, and of course I couldn't go to Mum's without first going to Dad's. I would just have to face up to whatever was waiting for me there.
"I'll miss you," said Terry. He hugged me but did not kiss me. "I'll send Tychicus with all the news in a couple of days."
* * * * * * *"Why isn't Ella-Jane here?" was Cressida's first question as Molly-Rose and I stepped out of her Floo.
"She's staying at Hogwarts all Easter."
"I'm going to check that with her Head of House! Anyway, you two are here, so make yourselves useful. Molly-Rose, you can do the ironing. Sally-Anne, go and start dinner. Cecilia, love, no sneaking off. You can read to Xavier."
As soon as I reached the kitchen door, something clicked into place. I knew my own footfall had activated some kind of booby-trap. Next minute, my wand flew out of my sleeve, as if someone had Summoned it. In alarm, I pushed forwards, but my toe hit an invisible barrier.
The bruise was real. It was clear that I could not step out of the kitchen. I soon established that Cressida had locked the kitchen fireplace and the windows, so I was trapped. What was she trying to achieve? I began to peel potatoes, assuming she would have to let me out at bedtime.
I served lobscouse for dinner. We ate in the kitchen as usual; Dad praised my cooking without noticing what it was, while Cressida complained about money. After dinner I washed up. Then I cautiously felt the doorway, but the invisible barrier was still there.
"Of course you aren't getting out!" said Ursula, thrusting a flat, heavy box into my arms. "Did you really think you would get away with defying Mummy at Christmas? She's sent me to tell you to polish all this silverware. Don't go to sleep until you've finished the job."
Cressida had never owned silver before; if she was buying luxury goods on credit, it was no wonder she was short of money.
That was how the week progressed. When I wasn't cooking for the family, Cressida kept me busy with other tasks. For the first couple of days they were sensible: I had to clean the family's shoes; I had to plan a month of menus and write out the recipes "with no fancy French-chef words"; I had to disinfect Xavier's toys because they had been exposed to the Muggle neighbours' bout of measles; I had to hand-wash the woollens. When Cressida ran out of real jobs, she set me silly ones. I had to chip the ice out of the froster-box with a teaspoon (a job that Cressida could have done in an instant with a Thermo followed by a Desiccatio). I had to clean the stove-range with only vinegar because Xavier had inconveniently spilt the last bottle of dragon's blood. I had to scrub the floor with an old toothbrush.
Dad didn't seem to notice that I was sleeping in the kitchen, or even that I was there all day long; perhaps he was Confunded. He did amble in to talk to me sometimes.
"This unemployment situation is getting us all down," he admitted. "I've been singing in Muggle pubs, but it doesn't bring in enough money, and Cressida isn't happy with all the Muggle contact. She says working with Muggles was all right when you girls were younger, but now we have to think about making the right impression on the pure-blood bachelors. She wants us to look like the kind of family who only mix with magical society. So when I thought about working in the Muggle post office, Cressida wouldn't have that for the same reason. So I just hope my next album sells well."
"What kinds of songs are they?"
"The new album is dedicated to you six," he said proudly. "It has lullabies and educational chants and hopes of a better world for the next generation. But it's a bit of a gamble. Cressida thinks I should have stuck to love-songs because that's what sells. She says that if we don't break even soon, she might have to open up a shop. But we're hoping she won't need to do that before Xavier goes to Hogwarts..."
* * * * * * *Fortunately, Cressida became bored with Molly-Rose and me, and she let us go to Mum's house on Easter Saturday. We stumbled out of Mum's Floo to an angry, chaotic household.
"I won't go! Try to make me!" Christopher's bellows were punctuated with swear-words.
"You'll do as you're told!" shouted Raymond. It was unusual for my stepfather to shout.
"If it really doesn't work out, I'm sure we can find a way to change the arrangement legally," Mum pleaded.
Jeremy looked up from his book. "It's all a trap," he said bitterly. "You say we can make a change, but I don't trust the courts to act before my exams."
The situation was that my stepbrothers' stepfather had accepted a job in London. The boys had stayed with Mum and Raymond while the Buftons were sorting out their move, but now Mrs Bufton wanted them to "come home to their family".
The telephone rang before I had even unpacked my trunk. Mum's voice was strained as she murmured, "Yes, of course, Cynthia... I'll fetch them at once, Cynthia..."
"I am not going to speak to my mother!" shouted Christopher.
By the time Raymond had dragged Christopher to the telephone, Jeremy was nowhere in sight. With a shout of, "Mum, I am not going to live in London because my home is here!" Christopher slammed down the receiver.
There was no dinner started, so I went into the kitchen. Christopher was still shouting at Raymond, but soon Molly-Rose brought an empty laundry basket in from the garden, and Jeremy began loading a full one into the washing machine.
"Don't listen to all the shouting," said Jeremy. "It's about nothing. They can't make us live with our mother."
"Can't they? Then the Muggle law courts must be much less interfering than the Wizengamot."
"But I'm of age," said Jeremy. "They can't make me live with either parent if I don't want to. So if I say I'm living here, that's that. Christopher is legally old enough to have a say in what happens to him, and the courts don't like to split siblings. He's an idiot to upset everyone by making so much fuss now."
How amazing! "The Wizengamot doesn't give me any say until I'm seventeen," I said. "Jeremy, what's so dreadful about your mother's house that you don't even want to visit her for Easter?"
"Nothing much," he admitted. "I mean, she's terribly disorganised, so we're always running out of milk and clean socks... Speaking of which, can you do something magical or mechanical to make this washing machine switch on?"
"You know I can't use magic out of school." I showed him how to turn the dial.
"Always running out of things, and we never know what time dinner will be, and the house is such a mess that everything gets lost. And she'll only be worse now that she finally has a job to take up half her day. But that isn't really the point, is it? The point is that she wants everything her own way. Why should we give up our home and friends and routines just so that Cynthia Bufton can keep her family together?"
"What, don't you think it's important to keep families together?"
"I don't accept that 'keeping families together' means always giving in to the most selfish family member. Isn't Dad part of my family? But twelve years ago, Mum decided she fancied a change of husband, so she just walked out on him. Then she decided she couldn't bear to give up her children for her boyfriend, so six months later we were uprooted to live in their house. Then she decided she couldn't be bothered going out to work, so Dad's been milked for every last penny to support us. And you already know how many times she's forgotten his access, or forced him to take extra access because having Christopher and me didn't suit her plans. And now she "
Molly-Rose's book crashed to the floor. "Jeremy, you shouldn't talk that way about your mother! If the Wizengamot..."
Realising what she had said, she blushed, and we both giggled.
"If your Muggle Family Court," Molly-Rose pressed on, "knew what you were saying, they would accuse Raymond of poisoning you against Cynthia, and you might never be allowed to see him again!"
"That was only true before I was sixteen," repeated Jeremy. "But why should I have to move to a new school just two months before I sit my G.C.S.E.s? London uses a different exam board, so I wouldn't be prepared to sit those exams, and the London schools wouldn't be able to finish preparing me for the Midlands exams. But Mum didn't think of that. Her attitude was, 'Just do your best, and if you fail, you can always sit them again next year.'"
I agreed that Jeremy had a point.
"Besides, do you really think we'll be seeing much of Dad once she has us trapped in London? And what about the way we're being forced to leave all our friends behind? Mum's been getting away with too much for too long, but the law's on our side now. All we have to do is sit quietly, and everything will work out."
Whether Jeremy was right, we never knew, because Christopher refused to "sit quietly". While I cleaned the house and helped organise the Muggle legal documents, Mum and Raymond wasted their money on solicitors and social workers. Jeremy studied for his G.C.S.E.s (the Muggle version of O.W.L.s), Molly-Rose tried to look invisible, and the telephone rang all day long. Christopher was rude to Cynthia whenever he couldn't avoid speaking to her, and twice he even cut the telephone wire with scissors (Mum used a Reparo, but she wasn't pleased). His friends swarmed all over the house, except on the days when he vanished and he sometimes stayed out until midnight. He left sweet wrappers all over the place because he said there was no point in tidying up a house where he wasn't going to be allowed to live, and I found cigarettes in his anorak pockets.
"No wonder my room smells horrible!" I complained to Molly-Rose.
"It isn't your room any more," she said. "The boys have decided to move in permanently. They want you to shift your stuff in with Ella-Jane and me."
"If that's what they want, they ought to say 'please'," I grumbled. My sisters' room was always a mess because Ella-Jane left her possessions all over the place, and Molly-Rose never spoke a word of protest. "Fine, let's tidy up before we have to find spots for yet more stuff."
Molly-Rose obligingly picked up an armload of ironed clothes that had never been put away. "Ella-Jane won't like it if you hide her things."
"Well, those are her only choices. Either she tidies her things herself or she lets me tidy them for her. Come on, let's organise a new system now, while she isn't around to protest."
After a week of this, Mum was exhausted. She confided that she was starting to want Christopher off her hands. "I understand why he wants to stay in Hereford, but the more he punishes us, the more determined Cynthia becomes to fight it out in court. Oh, dear, we really can't afford another court hearing!"
"Mum! Do you need me to go through your bills again?"
She smiled wearily. "We'll be all right if we can last out until September. Once Molly-Rose is safely at Hogwarts, I'll be able to leave the steelworks and start my own business."
"Mum, that sounds terribly risky."
"There is a risk, but my parents will help. I've wanted for a long time to have my own bookshop, and I'm sure Grandpa can help me do it properly. Oh, who could that be at the door?"
It was Mr Bufton. "I've come for the boys," he said. "They have half an hour to pack."
Jeremy began by saying, "I'm not going," but after Raymond and Mr Bufton forcibly dragged Christopher downstairs and stuffed him screaming into the car, Jeremy packed a suitcase full of schoolbooks and followed docilely. I packed their clothes, and they were off in ten minutes. Jeremy was so quiet that I knew he had a plan, and Christopher was so loud that I knew he hadn't.
"I wish we hadn't had to force them," said Mum.
"So do I," said Raymond. "But we must work within the law."
* * * * * * *"Terry, thank you so much for all your letters. They saved my sanity!"
Terry hugged me. "I liked your answers too. But did you really tell me everything? It sounded as if you had quite a lot of trouble at home."
"In both homes," I admitted. "And it isn't over yet. Mum told me to keep my mind on my studies, but I've really started to wish I could leave school."
"You can borrow Tychicus any time you need to write home. And I'll "
He was interrupted by a jingling of bells, a clacking of canes and a swirl of long, coloured ribbons. A string of second-year girls had taken over the Entrance Hall, and my sister Ella-Jane was leading them in a rhythmic stamping.
With a cry of, "Slay the dragons! Slay the dragons!" they nearly knocked us sideways.
"Ella-Jane, what on earth ?"
"It's St George's Day, Sally-Anne! Don't be a square; join in!"
Three days later there was an owl from Mum.
Dear Sally-Anne, Ella-Jane and Molly-Rose,I hope you are all well and having a productive summer term. We are very busy at the moment, so please don't worry if you don't hear from us as often as usual.
The boys have run away from London. Jeremy had saved up the train fare for both of them, and they arrived on our doorstep on Monday afternoon. They have gone back to their old school, despite being officially struck from the enrolment, and are refusing to speak to their mother.
Our solicitor says there is no legal way to force Jeremy back to his mother's house but that Christopher will have to obey the court's orders. We are doing our best to negotiate with the Buftons, who are naturally frantic, with the schools and with Christopher. Unfortunately, we are not progressing very far. Raymond and I are trying to accept that going to court is now inevitable...
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13 Reviews | 5.15/10 Average
This has been a really cute story. Thank you for the enjoyment.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
You're welcome! Thank you for writing in. GhV
A different twist than I expected. I thought you might bring her and Terry back together, but apparently not. That rather spoils the ball and prince metaphor, but oh well. How did a fresh Hogwarts graduate manage to buy and set up her own shop? A little implausible. An enjoyable read in general, good work.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear HJS,I did warn you about that twist! I decided that Terry and Sally-Anne were fundamentally incompatible, so the "triumph of love" with which a Cinderella story must end was moral and not romantic.Sally-Anne didn't get her own shop until she was 21. Sorry if I didn't write that clearly. But she spent the two years after she left Hogwarts mixing potions part-time at home and networking with Muggle retailers. It took her the whole of that time to accumulate enough capital to set up her own shop, and then it was a very small one - she didn't employ an assistant until she had her first baby. But she always ran at a modest profit, and she did indeed "make people more comfortable at home".Thanks for reading and for writing in,GhV
Response from HermioneJeanSnape (Reviewer)
I didn't mean Sally-Anne's shop, I meant Megan's. Terry did seem a bit too stiff and self-righteous for her. He was quite obnoxious.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Ah, Megan... Well, there wasn't room to tell her story here. She receives a little financial back-up from her brother Emrys, who is both a big earner and a big spender. She later marries a wizard a few years older than herself (a Welshman, of course) and he has savings. Her business in fact grows larger than Sally-Anne's because Megan's personality is better suited to tough business decisions.Yes, Terry is somewhat "stiff", because he has secrets to keep, i.e. the D.A., and Sally-Anne has no way of knowing that. An older man might manage to be more tactful about the whole business, but Terry isn't. (If he had been, there wouldn't have been any story!)In fact, I meant Sally-Anne to be the more self-righteous of the two, but of course the reader hears her point of view, while Terry's isn't stated. Before chapter 13, Sally-Anne has no concept of grace so she doesn't at all understand Terry's confidence, which isn't based in himself. Once she stops trying to justify her own actions (loses the self-righteous attitude), Terry is out of the story, so we still don't hear his point of view. That was a deliberate authorial decision, because I didn't want to use a work of light fiction as a vehicle of proselytisation.Some readers would have liked to see Terry and Sally-Anne reconciled romantically, but given their extreme youth, I thought they would both do better to find new partners. For the record, Terry marries a Muggle doctor.
What is Blaise up to? Is this his new bet? Or does he like Sally Anne? Neat story.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Two interesting guesses - but, no, Blaise's sole motivation is to annoy Cecilia. He knew all along who owned the shoe, but he was hoarding it in case it came in useful to him. In terms of Cinderella parallels, Blaise is a kind of Anti-Prince.
This is an interesting perspective on the reaction of the wizarding public to the possible return of Voldemort.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you. I'm sure I wouldn't want to believe it...
A friend who is a divorce attorney always says you can't count on people to be reaonable when it comes to kids or money. I've enjoyed this.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you. You can't count on Cressida to be reasonable, full stop.
Cloaca Harington! you really have a gift for the names!
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Congratulations on understanding the joke.
wow, WHAT a cinderella story...beetles mixed with spiders...
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Perhaps easier than ashes mixed with cinders? But still a very spiteful move from the Wicked Stepmother.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
I never heard the ashes mixed with cinders bit! the version I know has lentils mixed with millet. cinders would HURT!
Syrinx Greengrass...what a name! clever :)god, I feel so bad for Sally-Anne. I can only hope that at some point she can stand up for herself!
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Sally-Anne is very much like her mother, who hasn't exactly excelled in assertiveness. You know how the plot of this story has to go: Cinderella waits around to be rescued. But I might just change the ending!I credited Daphne Greengrass with three sisters, all of them named after nymphs from Greek mythology. Of course, JKR knows best, and the third sister is actually "Astoria". But there isn't much to my "Syrinx" OC - she's just an older and bossier Daphne.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
I just like the name Syrinx. It reminds me of the flute piece by that name. I don't mind if Sally-Anne waits around to be rescued. But in the original Cinderella (or what I think of as the original) the stepfamily ends up a little bit maimed, and cinderella still invites them to the wedding but they refuse to go. I would kind of want Sally-Anne to draw the line somewhere. I mean, she kind of is being abused. can't she do something about that once she reaches her majority? and what about her father? I feel like there ought to be some sort of resolution with him, because Sally-Anne IS so loyal (what a hufflepuff!) but her dad doesn't respond in kind.
Hufflepuffs make lovely fairy godmothers.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you! There is no fairy godmother in the Grimms' version of the story, only birds who magically produce clothes. But the Hufflepuff girls are indeed behaving rather like Perrault's Fairy.
This is an interesting idea. Here they are in the same class as Harry Potter and all these things are happening but stuff is happening in their lives as well. Everyone has their own problems. There is a world outside of Gryffindor tower.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thanks for writing in,
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
. Interesting readers in the word outside Gryffindor Tower can be a challenge - so thank you for taking the time to read.
wow. I love your story--I often wonder about the characters like Sally-Anne who aren't really seen much in canon. and private family life isn't really discussed either. you navigate all the questions I have with such panache--like, how exactly do you do the laundry in a magical household, and stuff. the only thing is--I don't entirely understand why no one can afford to annoy Cressida. what am I missing? I recognized the name Runcorn, but what hold does Cressida have over the Perks family?
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thanks for writing in, mock turtle (I love your user-name!). JKR does give us a few brilliant glimpses of Mrs Weasley cookiing & etc., but she leaevs us to imagine most of it. I just put in the laundry details as padding; I'm flattered that you found them interesting. Cressida is one of these people who always gets her own way by sheer force of personality. After Flavian had an affair with her, he thought (because he's lazy) it would be less trouble to marry her than to dump her. Cressida is somewhat insecure (you know what her first husband was like, and she received little real support from her parents) so she asserts herself by being spiteful to weaker people. Muggles like Raymond are helpless; Julia cannot appeal to the law because she has no money; and children have few real rights anywhere when their abusers are their own parents. So Cressida is supreme for now, but the tables could be turned as the children grow up.
I really liked your story; it was interesting and new in a lot of ways. I feel kind of let down by the last chapter, though. I know it's a "happily ever after" part, but chapter 13 has so much life, so much emotion! It's really hard to go from reading that to chapter 14, where you tell us just what happened, tie everything up neatly. There's no action, no dialogue, no scene really. I was actually kind of confused at the end of the last chapter as to why sally-anne was going to spend what would have been her 6th year at home with her mother. was it just to save money? why did 6th year become the breaking point? I feel like everything that happens in this final chapter ought to have been played out over the course of several chapters! It's just, the tone of this final chapter is very different than all the ones that came before it, and I don't understand why you chose to do it that way.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear mock turtle,Thank you for your loyal reviewing throughout this story. Perhaps I should have labelled that final chapter as "epilogue"? I felt that all the real action finished at the end of chapter 13, when Sally-Anne faced reality. All the basic conflicts (family dysfunctions, political duty, moral and spiritual issues, romance) were played out in the Hogwarts chapel. And I'm so pleased that you appreciated the "life" of that chapter!Sally-Anne stayed at home in 1996-7 because it seemed the best way to fight Voldemort. (Remember, there's no D.A. in HPB - the only really important event is the relationship between Harry and Dumbledore.) You also need to understand British education laws - you CAN'T leave school before the end of fifth year, but sixth and seventh year are entirely optional, and around 70% of Muggles make the choice to leave at that point (with the O.W.L.s safely in hand). Wizards seem to be under more pressure to stay on for the full seven years, but leaving once they have their O.W.L.s in hand must still be an appealing option in some cases. In Sally-Anne's case, yes, her mother's financial situation was one reason, but not the most important one.I'm very flattered that you wanted more chapters, but Sally-Anne aged 16-22 would have made a rather dull story because the dramatic conflict for those years just wasn't in my head.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
Dear GhV,Thanks for your explanation of British education laws...you're right, I know next to nothing about them. I'm from California :) I guess I don't know how much wizarding school would parallel the muggle school code, but for the purpose of your story it's great. (I get really hung up on the details, like, how DO wizards learn math? especially ones who don't go to muggle school? so many wizards are so clueless about muggles that not many of them seem to go to muggle school. also, you put music lessons into your story, which made me happy). Really? 70% of people leave school when they're 15? I guess I don't know what the percentage is in America but the consensus here is that you will not amount to much if you don't go on to University so the statistics don't really get talked about much...if you drop out of high school it's kind of considered a failure. At least in my community. (I mean, I think a lot of people still do leave high school before they get their diploma, it's just that your options are very limited. Oftentimes you can't even really support yourself.)I think the particular things I wanted you to write more about after the end of ch 14 were Sally-Anne's final year at Hogwarts when she was forced to go back (had she finished coming to terms with terry ignoring her? what was it like to be a hufflepuff in the school during that year? it seemed like a lot of drama!) and Christopher and Jeremy, the stepbrothers, b/c Jeremy married a girl from hogwarts (I suppose that's a separate story but I want to know how their romance went. It's different, I think, than Seamus's parents' story b/c he knows she's a witch when he marries her).I think it's really interesting that there is a whole religious side to your story. I have often wondered (since there was such an outcry against harry potter from the religious fundamentalists in america) what it would be like to discover that you are a muggle-born witch or wizard in a highly religious family. what kind of personal struggle would that be? and were witches and wizards ever particularly christian, considering the historical witch burnings? your version in Hearthlinks is a fascinating one.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear MT,I hope the Petulant Poetess will overlook it if we use her forum board to continue this rather complex discussion. You do ask such good questions!Regarding the parallels between Hogwarts and the British Muggle system: They are so strong that they must be deliberate. JKR was openly and obviously describing and parodying the 1970s system under which she was educated. I was also born in 1965, so I recognised it instantly.Most people are 16 by the end of fifth year. (Harry, having a July birthday, is still 15, but 5/6 of his classmates are already 16 when they take their O.W.L.s.) Sixteen is the minimum school leaving age in Britain - anyone who tries to drop out before then is inviting the police and the social workers around to their home. The O.W.L.s (which Muggles called the Ordinary Levels back in the 1970s, but which are now called the G.C.S.E.s) are effectively the school leaving certificate. Students who leave school with the G.C.S.E. are able to take an apprenticeship, secretarial course, etc.Universities in Britain were traditionally only for the "academic" types. In the 1970s, the government paid your fees; as long as your Advanced Levels (N.E.W.T.s) were good enough, you could enter a university at age 18 and emerge with your Honours degree three years later. But now there is the push to give more and more students the tertiary opportunity - fully 30% - the government only loans the fees. There is talk that standards have lowered in order to accommodate students of lower ability, but I don't know whether that is true or whether students and lecturers have simply been forced to work harder.Regarding wizards learning maths, I think the short answer is - they don't. Obviously they have had seven years of primary education before they started Hogwarts, and I imagine wizards are supposed to bring their children to the same standard as the Muggle state schools. But I think most wizards can only do maths at the same level as a Muggle 11-year-old. Even Arithmancy doesn't seem to require a much higher standard than that - and the majority of wizards struggle with this subject.I think the 1997-8 year at Hogwarts would be a great story, and many fanfic writers have attempted it, but the whole theme just seemed too grandiose for me to begin. Sally-Anne had accepted by then that Terry was not the man for her, and her commitment was to defeating Voldemort without being sidetracked by boyfriends. (What Americans call "dating" doesn't really happen in Britain.)Jeremy's future wife, Mary Fenwick, features in my series The Moon-Cursers, especially the final volume, The Banebrewer. She probably would make a very interesting subject for a romance, but I'm afraid I haven't thought ahead to the details. I just think that a lot of Wizard/Muggle marriages involve the Muggle sibling of a Muggle-born, because meeting your sibling's friends is a natural way to find your spouse.One of these days, I will finish writing the story of Seamus's parents, but I encountered a creative block just when I reached the honeymoon - we were about 24 hours from the Great Reveal, and I completely blanked out!Regarding the "religious side"... Well, you couldn't find a more blatant, in-your-face-obvious Christ-figure than Harry Potter himself. As a matter of literary style, JKR couldn't write convincingly about her symbolic Christ-hero in a book where some of her characters also talked about Christianity as a separate force - either of historic interest or as a spiritual factor. So she just didn't tell us about the specific religious beliefs of individual characters. It's fairly clear, of course, that Harry himself, whose mind we read, has none. However, I infer from what little she has said that wizards have exactly the same religions and non-religions as Muggles.It's interesting that you raise the dilemma of the Muggle-born religious in this column, because that's exactly the situation of Terry Boot. Although his parents are ordinary English Agnostics, he was a childhood convert to Christianity. I have always assumed that the problem of magic would be bigger for angry, book-burning Fundamentalists (of whom we have hardly any in Britain) than it would be for the young wizard himself. Terry knows intuitively that his mysterious powers have nothing to do with nature-worship. They are more like an alternative technology - much as electricity would have looked like witchcraft in the Middle Ages. It's clear that the Hogwarts version of magic has nothing to do with religion, especially not with Pantheism; real neo-Pagans claim to have cringed at the way the Hogwarts staff so crudely break the Pagan ethical codes and ignore spirituality.There were no witch-burnings in Britain - we only hanged the filthy Quislings who appeared to have sold out to Satan! And only in periods of social chaos when a scapegoat was needed. The Catholic Church published a formal report to the effect that witches did not exist as early as the twelfth century. Despite this, until the year 1700, almost every society in the world periodically persecuted witches, including Animistic societies. While this doesn't excuse the Christians, it does highlight that the conflict was not a specifically Christian one. In JKR's world, no real witches were ever caught, so I think they would have stood on the sidelines, weeping (or laughing) at Muggle stupidity. Wizards knew that, while safe, they were the real targets, and they also knew that evil wizards really might have been responsible for some of the social disasters, so I think they would have understood the Muggle fear of the supernatural. I don't know whether they would have blamed their society's religious beliefs for the persecution, given that the wizards themselves probably shared whatever was the dominant belief. A great deal depends on the amount of diversity permitted by a given culture and on the level of education of the individual wizard.I've probably confused more than I've clarified, but that was the kind of thinking that underpinned Hearthlinks. Thanks for your support,GhV
This was enjoyable and interesting, and a bit of a twist on the Cinderella story, adding witchcraft. You make stepmothers sound awful!!The story is good at exploring the interlinking between magical and muggle, and also at giving a wider view of the Hogwarts population than Harry does in the books.I think Sally-Anne was a bit harsh on herself (as was Terry) for feeling that she was selfish for putting her family first and not feeling up to fighting Voldemort. She is only 15,and she puts in an amazing amount of hard work to try and keep them together. Yes, she does it because she loves them and wants a happy family. But the reasons she gives as selfish motivations are basically the same as Harry has for fighting Voldemort. I liked your Christian twist, because though it doesn't fit into the books and isn't relevant to Harry, I personally know that my beliefs got me through my teenage years and its nice to see how it can be dealt with alongside magic (despite claims that HP is evil!) I didn't think Terry's attitude was very Christian however; he just began to ignore her and that was it, without even letting her understand why, but again, I suppose that can be attributed to age.I also enjoy that this follows the UK school system. I usually find myself getting irritated at an over-americanisation of Hogwarts, when in the books JKR is clearly basing the magical on the UK muggle!One query though, you mention S Capper as if we've met him already in the story but I can't find him - have I missed something?
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
,I'm so flattered that anyone is still reading this story! There isn't much to be said for Cressida as stepmother, is there? I hope I showed Julia as a more reasonable one, and of course you shouldn't take Cecilia's perception of the second Mrs Runcorn as objective.I think Sally-Anne was by far a better person than her father or stepmother for trying so valiantly to hold her family together. But it really wasn't her job to fix her parents' mistakes, and her "family first" attitude had very quickly become "family only". The truth was, her family didn't need her time while the D.A. did. Everyone has some faults, and Sally-Anne needed to face up to hers before she could move on.What the reader knows - but Sally-Anne doesn't - is that Terry is bound by a magical contract never to mention the D.A. So he can't explain the reason he is breaking up with her, i.e. that it wasn't possible for him to be close to someone who had opted out of this dangerous secret. He botched it, of course; he ought to have given her some kind of better explanation for what he was doing, and maybe even offered her a second chance later. But he was only 15, and boys of that age aren't always tactful.Since Terry is a Muggle-born, there is more about him, his faith and his family in a forthcoming episode of Magic in my Tree.S. Capper appears only once in canon. He (or she?) is one of a number of Hogwarts students who checked out Quidditch through the Ages: you can read this name in the back of the book. I don't mention him any earlier in Hearthlinks because Sally-Anne didn't notice him during her Hogwarts years!I must confess to being irritated by fanfic Americanisations of Hogwarts as I've been a teacher as well as a student in the British system; but we mustn't be xenophobic. It's very difficult for American readers to grasp just how the British system is different because Americans haven't the first idea which questions to ask. Seven years at high school? Three terms a year? Summer holidays starting in July? No weekly percentage gradings? No graduation? Only three years to the Muggle undergraduate degree? Who would have guessed??
Response from Tilly (Reviewer)
I hadn't read any of your stories before MIMT, but I expect I'll make my way through most of them now!Yes, I agree that everyone has faults and must face up to them, however I still feel Sally was harsh on herself given her age and circumstance. Of course, as the author you have so much more backstory and this gives you a bit of a leg up on the perspective side! As a reader we can only see Sally-Anne and its easier to sympathise with her because of this. I also found her a sympathetic character because she is so quick to forgive and slow to judge. I found Terry to be quite judgemental in this story, based on his actions to Sally-Anne, so I look forward to seeing him from another perspective in MIMT. I am still inclined towards feeling that these students are children, and the level to which they are expected and encouraged to participate in war is inappropriate (at least in real life, in fiction it makes for an excellent story). I expect this also colours my judgement of Terry and Sally-Anne.As for the Americanisms, I hope its not xenophobic to be irritated! I have read many amazing fics by Americans and other nationalities which have had a good grasp of the UK education system, and fics by Brit authors which have a woeful one, so I think what really irritates me most is lack of accuracy. The American angle just jumps out however because we watch so much of their TV!Ps-thanks for the S Capper info too :)