Breaking the Spell
Chapter 10 of 14
Grace has VictoryMoral: Beauty in a woman is a rare treasure that will always be admired. Graciousness, however, is priceless and of even greater value. Young women, in the winning of a heart, graciousness is more important than a beautiful hairdo. (Perrault)
ReviewedCHAPTER TEN
Breaking the Spell
You are not to enter our home again. I have tried for nearly ten years to treat you like a daughter, but you have never returned the least gratitude or affection. After the outrageous way you behaved at Christmas, I cannot allow you to embarrass your stepsisters any further. From now on, you can be your mother's problem, for we no longer consider you a member of our family.
My hands shook; I nearly tore the paper in the effort not to let Cressida's letter upset me. Since I hadn't ever been happy in her house, I ought to be overjoyed that I could never go back.
"It was still a cruel way to write it," said Hannah. "She could have just written that the access arrangements had changed."
"But hurting Sally-Anne's feelings was the whole point of writing it at all, isn't it?" said Megan. "This letter doesn't guarantee that Sally-Anne really won't go back to Liverpool because Mrs Perks could change her mind at any time."
"Yes, I bet she'll miss all yer 'ousework," said Sophie. "Yer stepsisters don't seem the 'ouse-elf types."
"But Mrs Perks must know that she can't keep Sally-Anne prisoner in her kitchen more than once," Susan pointed out. "She'd be in real trouble if Mrs Slater complained to the Wizengamot about what happened over Easter."
"I know I should be glad," I said. "But... it's my Dad. What if I never see him again?"
"Surely 'e'll find a way to see yer!" said Sophie.
"He might if he does even notice that Sally-Anne is missing," said Megan. "His wife does have him properly under her thumb, remember. He'll believe whatever excuse she does feed him, isn't it?"
"Be careful," said Susan suddenly. "You need to file a copy of that letter with your family solicitor just in case it's a trap to accuse your Mum of withholding access."
"Oh, my goodness, Susan!" exclaimed Hannah. "However do you manage to think of these things so clearly?"
Terry had the profoundest comment of all. "You have a real, live enemy to forgive."
"I've never before thought about forgiving Cressida," I admitted, "because I've never dared to think of her as an enemy. Terry, do you have any enemies?"
"I've never forgotten the bullies at my primary school and the chief bully was the headmaster. But I've never had a real enemy of the kind Harry Potter has, or even like your stepmother. Talking of which... We need to keep our eyes and ears open. The Triwizard Tournament isn't over yet, and Michael reckons that someone still has it in for Harry Potter."
Of course I promised to bear it in mind, but there wasn't really anything suspicious to see or hear. The summer term was a blur to me because I was so concerned about family problems. Dad wrote more often than usual and he wrote nearly the same thing in every letter, almost as if he had forgotten that he had already written.
Let's hope my royalties come through quickly, because money is tighter than usual! I know I'll soon have to bring you girls out in society to meet the right wizards and I'd like to do it in style. Cressida is thinking of opening a shop. Of course we'd rather she didn't have to work for a few years yet, especially as Xavier has been sick lately (nothing serious! don't be a worry-wart!), but it might be a matter of need. Luckily, her own parents are happy to help out with business advice and a little capital, so she might have her shop before summer ends.
If Cressida wanted part-time work, and her own parents were willing to help, why didn't she just work in their shop?
Mum didn't write for weeks. She and Raymond were worrying about more than money.
Raymond has been ill. Don't worry: he's fine now. I had to take him into St Mungo's (you know how much paperwork they demand to bring in a Muggle relative) and the Healers say his illness was "only" stress. They prescribed all kinds of disgusting potions, which Bobbin's mixed for us, and they seem to be working.The Healer said we have to take it easy or we are at risk of more serious illnesses. But I don't see what we can do. First we have to sort out Christopher's custody problems, and then we have to raise the money to pay the legal costs somehow...
I asked Terry and Sophie how much it cost to go to those Muggle family courts, but they didn't know: they both came from intact families. A few weeks later Mum wrote:
The judge at the local court has ruled that Christopher can live with us. But Mrs Bufton is very upset and has decided to challenge this ruling. While I don't want to throw Christopher out, it really would be less traumatic for all of us if he would simply agree to go to his mother's house of his own accord. But the boys refuse even to go on access visits at the moment because they are so afraid of being trapped in London.On the bright side, Jeremy says his first two G.C.S.E. exams went well. He spends all his spare time revising...
I really wanted to forget about school and run home, but both Mum and Dad told me that I should concentrate on my studies. The term ended with tragedy, when Cedric Diggory mysteriously died. I hadn't known him well, but he had been in Hufflepuff, and everyone had liked him we had all assumed he would be the next Head Boy. So it was in a sober mood that I arrived home for the summer, the first summer holiday in my whole school career that was to be spent entirely at Mum's house.
* * * * * * *Mum was not exactly "at home". She spent all day in a shop in the Muggle High Street that she had just leased.
"I know it's terrible timing," she said. "But I've had to resign my job because of taking too many days off this year, so I need to start a business just to pay the bills. Then this shop became available, so I had to take it it might be months before there's another opportunity this good. But I don't know how I'll find the time to make it happen."
"Mum, it's good timing," I told her. "I can be here every day through the summer, even if you have to be in court. In September Molly-Rose will be starting at Hogwarts, so you'll have spare hours in the evenings."
Mum sighed. "I hope so, Sally-Anne. But most small businesses flop. What if we run at a loss and end up making more debts for ourselves?"
"It's a chance we have to take," I said. "Don't Grandma and Grandpa Flourish know enough about bookselling to give the right advice?"
"They've certainly given me a head start. But do they really know Muggle books and the Muggle tax laws? My mother is a Muggle, but she's already admitted that she's forgotten most of how Muggles do things."
"It's more likely to be a success if I help you tidy up," I said.
Jeremy and I spent nearly every day of our summer working in the shop, dusting bookcases, shelving crate-loads of books, reconciling accounts. Most days Jeremy managed to force Christopher into helping us.
"This is just a load of little kids' books," Christopher grumbled. "Isn't Julia going to sell anything exciting?"
"No, she's going to sell children's picture books. If you're serious about living in Dad's house, you need to support Julia's business so that we have some money to live off."
Jeremy greeted the picture books like old friends. The Muggle wholesalers had sent in crates full of Spot and Mog and Hairy Maclary and The Baby's Catalogue.
"The Railway Series was my favourite ever," said Jeremy. "I was terrified of the Fat Controller and I cried when he was angry with Thomas. Oh look, they've sent us The Butterfly Ball. I would have expected that to be out of print by now. Didn't you ever read any of these?"
"A few, but wizard children have their own stories Beadle the Bard, Nigel the Knight Bus, Seven Fat Puffskeins and so on."
Just as Mum was ready for the grand opening, she heard that she was required in the Family Court!
"We'll look after the shop," said Jeremy at once. "How hard can it be to sell picture books?"
Mum wanted to protest, but she didn't really have a choice. She never saw the first day of her own shop. Jeremy unlocked the glass doors at eight o' clock, and I spent the next eleven hours making cappuccinos for the customers.
At nine o' clock, Terry and Susan arrived to help us. Susan immediately installed herself in an enticing corner where a stuffed lion guarded a rainbow rug and began reading The Very Hungry Caterpillar out loud. When I brought out the next tray of coffee, I saw that she was surrounded by an eager crowd of Muggle children. Terry was standing behind the counter, waiting to ring up prices, and Jeremy was near the door, persuading pedestrians to walk in.
For parts of the day, the shop was packed. The local children loved Susan's reading, and we soon had a crowd of shoppers queuing for free coffee whether they wanted books or not. We did make sales. There were times when young parents were crowding around us for advice it was lucky that Terry and Jeremy knew their Muggle literature.
"Your Miss Bones is a wonderful storyteller!" enthused one grandmother as she paid for an armload of board books. "If she's going to be here every day, I'll tell all my friends."
"Certainly someone will be reading every day this summer," said Jeremy. But as the shop-bell clanged behind that family, he hissed, "Sally-Anne! Are you a good narrator? I'm not, so I don't know how we'll manage to continue this!"
I looked around in alarm, but there were no customers in sight. For frightening stretches of the day, the shop was empty.
"This is going to be a slow-paced business," I said.
"You certainly need to think about your marketing campaign," said Terry. "The customers have loved this shop once they were inside it, but people don't buy books every day. You can't rely on random patrons wandering in off the street if you hope to make a profit."
"Mum advertised in the local paper," I said. "But that won't be enough, will it? What should we do?"
* * * * * * *The Family Court decreed that Christopher could live with Mum and Raymond but he would have to spend alternate weekends with the Buftons. He would have no choice about going to London on Friday evenings, and they would have no choice about sending him back to Hereford in time for Monday morning school.
"You'd think sensible people could have sorted out that much without resorting to the expense of the law courts," I complained to Terry.
"Since when have people ever been sensible?"
Terry made several trips to Hereford through the summer, despite the fact that all we ever really did together was work in the bookshop.
"I don't want to go back to Hogwarts," I said. "Mum, don't you think it would be more useful for me to help you here?"
"Of course it would, but we can't argue with the law." Mum looked around the shop furtively, established that there were no Muggles inside, and threw a Sweeping Charm at the floor. "You have to be in some kind of education for at least one more year."
"Couldn't I go to the Muggle school?"
Jeremy laughed. "Sorry, didn't mean to mock your ignorance, Sally-Anne. But can't you see that it's too late to make the change? You'd never catch up on all the maths and science that you've missed. And you wouldn't help Julia by going to the Muggle school; it's during the day that she'd need help in the shop."
"Mum... does that mean you'll have to pay an assistant?"
"Perhaps it does, or perhaps I'll manage by myself. But don't worry about it, Sally-Anne. I need you to concentrate on your O.W.L.s and take care of your sisters. That way, at least I don't need to worry about you."
So on the first of September, I was back at Hogwarts to watch Molly-Rose being sorted into Ravenclaw. On the second of September, Ella-Jane earned a triple detention from Snape. On the third of September, Cecilia fell off a broomstick and suffered a moderately severe concussion. When I went up to the Hospital Wing, Madam Pomfrey sat me beside her bed to hold cool compresses against her forehead. I was there all evening, but none of Cecilia's Slytherin friends came to visit. After one week, I heard from Dad.
Sorry we didn't manage to see each other over summer. But life's like that sometimes, isn't it? Perhaps you could manage to come home for a few weekends during term. We'd really appreciate the help around the house now that Cressida is so busy setting up her shop. Poor Xavier has been having one illness after another and he could use some nursing...
I couldn't tell from Dad's letter whether Cressida was trying to trap me into entering her house or to trick me into staying away or even whether Dad knew that she had tried to banish me. I couldn't think about that now; I wouldn't have time to go to Liverpool during term. I wondered what Cressida sold in her shop.
After two weeks, I was back in Hereford, ready to help a very disgruntled Christopher pack his suitcase for a weekend with his mother. After Raymond had settled Christopher on the train, I gave my attention to the kitchen. On Friday I prepared a week's supply of casseroles so that Mum wouldn't have to worry about cooking when she was busy with her shop. On Saturday, always the busiest day for a shopkeeper, I worked in the shop. On Sunday Mum and I cleaned the house (using magic, because no one would know that it was my wand that had been busy) and balanced the books (in the ordinary Muggle way, because there is no magical short-cut for arithmetic). Christopher arrived home late in the evening, complaining loudly about how much his mother resented the new residence arrangement, how she had nagged him all weekend, and how surprised he was that she had even let him "escape" to catch his train.
"Let me start your laundry," I said as soon as I could put a word in edgeways.
"You'll have a job," he said darkly. "Mum's sent back all the clothes that are normally at her house, and most of them haven't been washed for about a year."
"All the more reason to start now," I said, biting back all my thoughts about how much Christopher's attitude was contributing to his conflict with the Buftons. Just do whatever will make this easier for Mum!
* * * * * * *I looked up from the deadly-dull DADA textbook that had been allocated for our fifth year. All it really seemed to say so far was that decent wizards shouldn't defend themselves against the Dark Arts. A heavy, sullen silence seemed to be hanging over the library, but my day had brightened because Terry had taken the seat next to me.
"Deadly dull, isn't it?" he said. "All Slinkhard really seems to say is that it's wrong to stand up to evil. Is Professor Umbridge growing on you yet?"
"Not at all," I told him. "We Hufflepuffs all dislike her completely. Not even you could find anything good to say about her."
"I don't have to say anything at all about her," he said. "Rather than complaining about quality of teaching at this school, some of us have decided to do something about it."
"What?" I closed Slinkhard's boring book. "Are you petitioning Dumbledore to get rid of Umbridge? Good. See if he'll get rid of Snape and Binns while you're at it."
"What we actually had in mind was an alternative way of studying Defence. Ron Weasley's trying to form a a kind of homework club that will help us pass our O.W.L. and deal with real-life Dark Magic. I don't know a lot more than that, but Ron's pretty keen to get a group of us together."
"Much needed," I agreed, although I hoped it wouldn't turn out to be the kind of club that took up hours and hours. I had nine O.W.L.s to fit around my family problems!
"So, will you come to Ron's meeting? It'll be in Hogsmeade next Saturday."
"Next Saturday? Oh, Terry, I can't! I promised Mum I'd be home this weekend she really needs me there. She's overworked, and my stepfather is making himself sick with worry about his sons."
"All right." Terry didn't look happy, but he didn't comment further.
"Terry!" I protested. "I'm sure Ron's had a great idea. Almost any homework club would teach us more than we learn from Umbridge. But surely you understand that I have to put my family first. Listen, if this club turns out to be worth joining, I can go later, can't I? Tell me all about it, and perhaps the next meeting will be at a more convenient time."
Spending a weekend at home doing household chores and selling in the shop was much harder work than doing homework at Hogwarts, but I was always glad I'd gone. By Sunday afternoon, Mum was relaxed, and Raymond was saying that he didn't feel sick after all. I was continually counting down the days: it was two hundred and ninety, two hundred and eighty, two hundred and seventy days until I could leave school and be home permanently.
I returned to Hogwarts on Monday morning via the Hogsmeade Floo, reaching the History of Magic classroom with only five minutes to spare.
"I can't believe she did this!" Megan was complaining.
"Is she really wanting no more Gobstones?" asked Stephen.
"Orr school music perrhaps the old hag does have something against that," said Wayne.
"What's going on?" I asked.
Everyone began to talk at once. "It's Umbridge," said Sophie. "She's decided to break up all student clubs. Everything from Quidditch teams to 'omework groups!"
"She has destroyed this school's musical life," said Megan. "There's no choir and no orchestra. We can't even hold informal practices in groups of three."
"No homework groups?" I asked, incredulous. "Is Umbridge opposed to students having friendships?"
"I should imagine that's exactly what she does oppose," said Justin. "Tyrants always fear alliances among their subjects."
"She did say that groups could apply for permission to re-form," said Ernie. "The point is that she'll be personally controlling every club in the school."
* * * * * * *It was Thursday before I remembered to ask Terry about his meeting. "I suppose your Defence club won't be allowed," I said. "Umbridge isn't very likely to allow a group that only exists because she isn't doing her job properly. That's a pity... Did the meeting last Saturday go well?"
Terry glanced around the courtyard. Ursula's cronies were standing only just out of earshot, and she glared at us pointedly when she saw us looking.
"Let's go somewhere else," I said. "Shall we walk around the lake?"
The path around the lake was muddy and covered with dead leaves, but it left us more or less private.
"The meeting went very well," said Terry. "In fact, we... Put it this way: have you been reading the newspapers lately? You must have heard the rumours that He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named is back."
"No. I haven't had a minute to think about current affairs. I mean, I know Harry Potter is supposed to have seen You-Know-Who alive again, but people are always saying weird things about Harry Potter."
"Harry Potter has seen You-Know-Who."
I stopped and stared at Terry's face. "Seriously? Is Harry himself really saying that?"
"Yes."
"He actually believes that the most evil wizard of all time is back among us?"
"Yes."
"Then... Why isn't everyone talking about it? Why haven't we heard about more murders?"
Terry shrugged. "I've no idea why a Dark wizard would want to hide himself away. I only know that he's back, and it's a bad thing."
"Could Harry have made a mistake?"
Terry shook his head emphatically. "We are on what Christians call 'the horns of a trilemma'. Either You-Know-Who is back or he isn't. If he isn't, then either Harry knows he isn't that is, he's deliberately lying; or he doesn't know that is, Harry has made an absurd and dramatic mistake. But if You-Know-Who is back, then we need to do something about it."
A chill wind whistled around our ears. "Isn't that a little simplistic?" I suggested. "I'm not close friends or anything with Harry Potter, but I do know that he's perfectly normal. He doesn't tell tales to show off; he isn't stupid; he isn't mad. So there must be some other explanation..."
Terry relaxed and smiled. "My point exactly! No lies, no mistake... so Harry must be right. You-Know-Who is back, and I want to be ready for him."
I stared at a leaf in the mud so that Terry wouldn't see my confusion. He couldn't, couldn't believe such a fantastic story! "Even if the worst is true," I said at last, "I don't see what we can do about it."
"Come and find out. Er..." His expression became cagey. "I can't tell you exactly right now. But if you'll trust me for a bit... You don't do homework every evening, do you?"
"Actually, I do. We have so many family problems at the moment that leaving my homework to the weekend isn't an option. I'll be going home a lot this year."
"On weekends, silly. I know your Mum needs you, but surely that wouldn't make any difference to what you might be doing... say... one school evening each week?"
"Silly? Terry, I'm putting my family first! Don't they tell you to do that in church?"
"No, they tell us to put God first. Or you might like to think of it as finding a balance among your responsibilities. Whatever. My point is you can both help your family and confront the political situation."
We stared at each other in wide-eyed annoyance. There was supposed to be a "political situation", but where was the evidence? Terry wanted me to "confront" it, but he wasn't willing to tell me exactly how. But he had hinted that it would take up quite a lot of time, just when Mum needed my time. It also sounded like the kind of thing that would infuriate Professor Umbridge; and if Dad heard that I was in trouble at school, I dreaded to think how Cressida would use the situation against me.
"Terry," I said, "I don't know how you would find a balance if you were in my situation. I only know that right now, I don't have time."
His face stiffened, and the breeze seemed even colder. After a moment, he opened his mouth. "Fine. It's up to you. I just thought you might be interested. But only you can decide."
He turned around and walked back to the castle.
It began to rain.
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Latest 25 Reviews for Hearthlinks
13 Reviews | 5.15/10 Average
This has been a really cute story. Thank you for the enjoyment.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
You're welcome! Thank you for writing in. GhV
A different twist than I expected. I thought you might bring her and Terry back together, but apparently not. That rather spoils the ball and prince metaphor, but oh well. How did a fresh Hogwarts graduate manage to buy and set up her own shop? A little implausible. An enjoyable read in general, good work.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear HJS,I did warn you about that twist! I decided that Terry and Sally-Anne were fundamentally incompatible, so the "triumph of love" with which a Cinderella story must end was moral and not romantic.Sally-Anne didn't get her own shop until she was 21. Sorry if I didn't write that clearly. But she spent the two years after she left Hogwarts mixing potions part-time at home and networking with Muggle retailers. It took her the whole of that time to accumulate enough capital to set up her own shop, and then it was a very small one - she didn't employ an assistant until she had her first baby. But she always ran at a modest profit, and she did indeed "make people more comfortable at home".Thanks for reading and for writing in,GhV
Response from HermioneJeanSnape (Reviewer)
I didn't mean Sally-Anne's shop, I meant Megan's. Terry did seem a bit too stiff and self-righteous for her. He was quite obnoxious.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Ah, Megan... Well, there wasn't room to tell her story here. She receives a little financial back-up from her brother Emrys, who is both a big earner and a big spender. She later marries a wizard a few years older than herself (a Welshman, of course) and he has savings. Her business in fact grows larger than Sally-Anne's because Megan's personality is better suited to tough business decisions.Yes, Terry is somewhat "stiff", because he has secrets to keep, i.e. the D.A., and Sally-Anne has no way of knowing that. An older man might manage to be more tactful about the whole business, but Terry isn't. (If he had been, there wouldn't have been any story!)In fact, I meant Sally-Anne to be the more self-righteous of the two, but of course the reader hears her point of view, while Terry's isn't stated. Before chapter 13, Sally-Anne has no concept of grace so she doesn't at all understand Terry's confidence, which isn't based in himself. Once she stops trying to justify her own actions (loses the self-righteous attitude), Terry is out of the story, so we still don't hear his point of view. That was a deliberate authorial decision, because I didn't want to use a work of light fiction as a vehicle of proselytisation.Some readers would have liked to see Terry and Sally-Anne reconciled romantically, but given their extreme youth, I thought they would both do better to find new partners. For the record, Terry marries a Muggle doctor.
What is Blaise up to? Is this his new bet? Or does he like Sally Anne? Neat story.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Two interesting guesses - but, no, Blaise's sole motivation is to annoy Cecilia. He knew all along who owned the shoe, but he was hoarding it in case it came in useful to him. In terms of Cinderella parallels, Blaise is a kind of Anti-Prince.
This is an interesting perspective on the reaction of the wizarding public to the possible return of Voldemort.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you. I'm sure I wouldn't want to believe it...
A friend who is a divorce attorney always says you can't count on people to be reaonable when it comes to kids or money. I've enjoyed this.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you. You can't count on Cressida to be reasonable, full stop.
Cloaca Harington! you really have a gift for the names!
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Congratulations on understanding the joke.
wow, WHAT a cinderella story...beetles mixed with spiders...
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Perhaps easier than ashes mixed with cinders? But still a very spiteful move from the Wicked Stepmother.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
I never heard the ashes mixed with cinders bit! the version I know has lentils mixed with millet. cinders would HURT!
Syrinx Greengrass...what a name! clever :)god, I feel so bad for Sally-Anne. I can only hope that at some point she can stand up for herself!
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Sally-Anne is very much like her mother, who hasn't exactly excelled in assertiveness. You know how the plot of this story has to go: Cinderella waits around to be rescued. But I might just change the ending!I credited Daphne Greengrass with three sisters, all of them named after nymphs from Greek mythology. Of course, JKR knows best, and the third sister is actually "Astoria". But there isn't much to my "Syrinx" OC - she's just an older and bossier Daphne.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
I just like the name Syrinx. It reminds me of the flute piece by that name. I don't mind if Sally-Anne waits around to be rescued. But in the original Cinderella (or what I think of as the original) the stepfamily ends up a little bit maimed, and cinderella still invites them to the wedding but they refuse to go. I would kind of want Sally-Anne to draw the line somewhere. I mean, she kind of is being abused. can't she do something about that once she reaches her majority? and what about her father? I feel like there ought to be some sort of resolution with him, because Sally-Anne IS so loyal (what a hufflepuff!) but her dad doesn't respond in kind.
Hufflepuffs make lovely fairy godmothers.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thank you! There is no fairy godmother in the Grimms' version of the story, only birds who magically produce clothes. But the Hufflepuff girls are indeed behaving rather like Perrault's Fairy.
This is an interesting idea. Here they are in the same class as Harry Potter and all these things are happening but stuff is happening in their lives as well. Everyone has their own problems. There is a world outside of Gryffindor tower.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thanks for writing in,
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
. Interesting readers in the word outside Gryffindor Tower can be a challenge - so thank you for taking the time to read.
wow. I love your story--I often wonder about the characters like Sally-Anne who aren't really seen much in canon. and private family life isn't really discussed either. you navigate all the questions I have with such panache--like, how exactly do you do the laundry in a magical household, and stuff. the only thing is--I don't entirely understand why no one can afford to annoy Cressida. what am I missing? I recognized the name Runcorn, but what hold does Cressida have over the Perks family?
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Thanks for writing in, mock turtle (I love your user-name!). JKR does give us a few brilliant glimpses of Mrs Weasley cookiing & etc., but she leaevs us to imagine most of it. I just put in the laundry details as padding; I'm flattered that you found them interesting. Cressida is one of these people who always gets her own way by sheer force of personality. After Flavian had an affair with her, he thought (because he's lazy) it would be less trouble to marry her than to dump her. Cressida is somewhat insecure (you know what her first husband was like, and she received little real support from her parents) so she asserts herself by being spiteful to weaker people. Muggles like Raymond are helpless; Julia cannot appeal to the law because she has no money; and children have few real rights anywhere when their abusers are their own parents. So Cressida is supreme for now, but the tables could be turned as the children grow up.
I really liked your story; it was interesting and new in a lot of ways. I feel kind of let down by the last chapter, though. I know it's a "happily ever after" part, but chapter 13 has so much life, so much emotion! It's really hard to go from reading that to chapter 14, where you tell us just what happened, tie everything up neatly. There's no action, no dialogue, no scene really. I was actually kind of confused at the end of the last chapter as to why sally-anne was going to spend what would have been her 6th year at home with her mother. was it just to save money? why did 6th year become the breaking point? I feel like everything that happens in this final chapter ought to have been played out over the course of several chapters! It's just, the tone of this final chapter is very different than all the ones that came before it, and I don't understand why you chose to do it that way.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear mock turtle,Thank you for your loyal reviewing throughout this story. Perhaps I should have labelled that final chapter as "epilogue"? I felt that all the real action finished at the end of chapter 13, when Sally-Anne faced reality. All the basic conflicts (family dysfunctions, political duty, moral and spiritual issues, romance) were played out in the Hogwarts chapel. And I'm so pleased that you appreciated the "life" of that chapter!Sally-Anne stayed at home in 1996-7 because it seemed the best way to fight Voldemort. (Remember, there's no D.A. in HPB - the only really important event is the relationship between Harry and Dumbledore.) You also need to understand British education laws - you CAN'T leave school before the end of fifth year, but sixth and seventh year are entirely optional, and around 70% of Muggles make the choice to leave at that point (with the O.W.L.s safely in hand). Wizards seem to be under more pressure to stay on for the full seven years, but leaving once they have their O.W.L.s in hand must still be an appealing option in some cases. In Sally-Anne's case, yes, her mother's financial situation was one reason, but not the most important one.I'm very flattered that you wanted more chapters, but Sally-Anne aged 16-22 would have made a rather dull story because the dramatic conflict for those years just wasn't in my head.
Response from mock_turtle (Reviewer)
Dear GhV,Thanks for your explanation of British education laws...you're right, I know next to nothing about them. I'm from California :) I guess I don't know how much wizarding school would parallel the muggle school code, but for the purpose of your story it's great. (I get really hung up on the details, like, how DO wizards learn math? especially ones who don't go to muggle school? so many wizards are so clueless about muggles that not many of them seem to go to muggle school. also, you put music lessons into your story, which made me happy). Really? 70% of people leave school when they're 15? I guess I don't know what the percentage is in America but the consensus here is that you will not amount to much if you don't go on to University so the statistics don't really get talked about much...if you drop out of high school it's kind of considered a failure. At least in my community. (I mean, I think a lot of people still do leave high school before they get their diploma, it's just that your options are very limited. Oftentimes you can't even really support yourself.)I think the particular things I wanted you to write more about after the end of ch 14 were Sally-Anne's final year at Hogwarts when she was forced to go back (had she finished coming to terms with terry ignoring her? what was it like to be a hufflepuff in the school during that year? it seemed like a lot of drama!) and Christopher and Jeremy, the stepbrothers, b/c Jeremy married a girl from hogwarts (I suppose that's a separate story but I want to know how their romance went. It's different, I think, than Seamus's parents' story b/c he knows she's a witch when he marries her).I think it's really interesting that there is a whole religious side to your story. I have often wondered (since there was such an outcry against harry potter from the religious fundamentalists in america) what it would be like to discover that you are a muggle-born witch or wizard in a highly religious family. what kind of personal struggle would that be? and were witches and wizards ever particularly christian, considering the historical witch burnings? your version in Hearthlinks is a fascinating one.
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear MT,I hope the Petulant Poetess will overlook it if we use her forum board to continue this rather complex discussion. You do ask such good questions!Regarding the parallels between Hogwarts and the British Muggle system: They are so strong that they must be deliberate. JKR was openly and obviously describing and parodying the 1970s system under which she was educated. I was also born in 1965, so I recognised it instantly.Most people are 16 by the end of fifth year. (Harry, having a July birthday, is still 15, but 5/6 of his classmates are already 16 when they take their O.W.L.s.) Sixteen is the minimum school leaving age in Britain - anyone who tries to drop out before then is inviting the police and the social workers around to their home. The O.W.L.s (which Muggles called the Ordinary Levels back in the 1970s, but which are now called the G.C.S.E.s) are effectively the school leaving certificate. Students who leave school with the G.C.S.E. are able to take an apprenticeship, secretarial course, etc.Universities in Britain were traditionally only for the "academic" types. In the 1970s, the government paid your fees; as long as your Advanced Levels (N.E.W.T.s) were good enough, you could enter a university at age 18 and emerge with your Honours degree three years later. But now there is the push to give more and more students the tertiary opportunity - fully 30% - the government only loans the fees. There is talk that standards have lowered in order to accommodate students of lower ability, but I don't know whether that is true or whether students and lecturers have simply been forced to work harder.Regarding wizards learning maths, I think the short answer is - they don't. Obviously they have had seven years of primary education before they started Hogwarts, and I imagine wizards are supposed to bring their children to the same standard as the Muggle state schools. But I think most wizards can only do maths at the same level as a Muggle 11-year-old. Even Arithmancy doesn't seem to require a much higher standard than that - and the majority of wizards struggle with this subject.I think the 1997-8 year at Hogwarts would be a great story, and many fanfic writers have attempted it, but the whole theme just seemed too grandiose for me to begin. Sally-Anne had accepted by then that Terry was not the man for her, and her commitment was to defeating Voldemort without being sidetracked by boyfriends. (What Americans call "dating" doesn't really happen in Britain.)Jeremy's future wife, Mary Fenwick, features in my series The Moon-Cursers, especially the final volume, The Banebrewer. She probably would make a very interesting subject for a romance, but I'm afraid I haven't thought ahead to the details. I just think that a lot of Wizard/Muggle marriages involve the Muggle sibling of a Muggle-born, because meeting your sibling's friends is a natural way to find your spouse.One of these days, I will finish writing the story of Seamus's parents, but I encountered a creative block just when I reached the honeymoon - we were about 24 hours from the Great Reveal, and I completely blanked out!Regarding the "religious side"... Well, you couldn't find a more blatant, in-your-face-obvious Christ-figure than Harry Potter himself. As a matter of literary style, JKR couldn't write convincingly about her symbolic Christ-hero in a book where some of her characters also talked about Christianity as a separate force - either of historic interest or as a spiritual factor. So she just didn't tell us about the specific religious beliefs of individual characters. It's fairly clear, of course, that Harry himself, whose mind we read, has none. However, I infer from what little she has said that wizards have exactly the same religions and non-religions as Muggles.It's interesting that you raise the dilemma of the Muggle-born religious in this column, because that's exactly the situation of Terry Boot. Although his parents are ordinary English Agnostics, he was a childhood convert to Christianity. I have always assumed that the problem of magic would be bigger for angry, book-burning Fundamentalists (of whom we have hardly any in Britain) than it would be for the young wizard himself. Terry knows intuitively that his mysterious powers have nothing to do with nature-worship. They are more like an alternative technology - much as electricity would have looked like witchcraft in the Middle Ages. It's clear that the Hogwarts version of magic has nothing to do with religion, especially not with Pantheism; real neo-Pagans claim to have cringed at the way the Hogwarts staff so crudely break the Pagan ethical codes and ignore spirituality.There were no witch-burnings in Britain - we only hanged the filthy Quislings who appeared to have sold out to Satan! And only in periods of social chaos when a scapegoat was needed. The Catholic Church published a formal report to the effect that witches did not exist as early as the twelfth century. Despite this, until the year 1700, almost every society in the world periodically persecuted witches, including Animistic societies. While this doesn't excuse the Christians, it does highlight that the conflict was not a specifically Christian one. In JKR's world, no real witches were ever caught, so I think they would have stood on the sidelines, weeping (or laughing) at Muggle stupidity. Wizards knew that, while safe, they were the real targets, and they also knew that evil wizards really might have been responsible for some of the social disasters, so I think they would have understood the Muggle fear of the supernatural. I don't know whether they would have blamed their society's religious beliefs for the persecution, given that the wizards themselves probably shared whatever was the dominant belief. A great deal depends on the amount of diversity permitted by a given culture and on the level of education of the individual wizard.I've probably confused more than I've clarified, but that was the kind of thinking that underpinned Hearthlinks. Thanks for your support,GhV
This was enjoyable and interesting, and a bit of a twist on the Cinderella story, adding witchcraft. You make stepmothers sound awful!!The story is good at exploring the interlinking between magical and muggle, and also at giving a wider view of the Hogwarts population than Harry does in the books.I think Sally-Anne was a bit harsh on herself (as was Terry) for feeling that she was selfish for putting her family first and not feeling up to fighting Voldemort. She is only 15,and she puts in an amazing amount of hard work to try and keep them together. Yes, she does it because she loves them and wants a happy family. But the reasons she gives as selfish motivations are basically the same as Harry has for fighting Voldemort. I liked your Christian twist, because though it doesn't fit into the books and isn't relevant to Harry, I personally know that my beliefs got me through my teenage years and its nice to see how it can be dealt with alongside magic (despite claims that HP is evil!) I didn't think Terry's attitude was very Christian however; he just began to ignore her and that was it, without even letting her understand why, but again, I suppose that can be attributed to age.I also enjoy that this follows the UK school system. I usually find myself getting irritated at an over-americanisation of Hogwarts, when in the books JKR is clearly basing the magical on the UK muggle!One query though, you mention S Capper as if we've met him already in the story but I can't find him - have I missed something?
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
Dear
Response from Grace has Victory (Author of Hearthlinks)
,I'm so flattered that anyone is still reading this story! There isn't much to be said for Cressida as stepmother, is there? I hope I showed Julia as a more reasonable one, and of course you shouldn't take Cecilia's perception of the second Mrs Runcorn as objective.I think Sally-Anne was by far a better person than her father or stepmother for trying so valiantly to hold her family together. But it really wasn't her job to fix her parents' mistakes, and her "family first" attitude had very quickly become "family only". The truth was, her family didn't need her time while the D.A. did. Everyone has some faults, and Sally-Anne needed to face up to hers before she could move on.What the reader knows - but Sally-Anne doesn't - is that Terry is bound by a magical contract never to mention the D.A. So he can't explain the reason he is breaking up with her, i.e. that it wasn't possible for him to be close to someone who had opted out of this dangerous secret. He botched it, of course; he ought to have given her some kind of better explanation for what he was doing, and maybe even offered her a second chance later. But he was only 15, and boys of that age aren't always tactful.Since Terry is a Muggle-born, there is more about him, his faith and his family in a forthcoming episode of Magic in my Tree.S. Capper appears only once in canon. He (or she?) is one of a number of Hogwarts students who checked out Quidditch through the Ages: you can read this name in the back of the book. I don't mention him any earlier in Hearthlinks because Sally-Anne didn't notice him during her Hogwarts years!I must confess to being irritated by fanfic Americanisations of Hogwarts as I've been a teacher as well as a student in the British system; but we mustn't be xenophobic. It's very difficult for American readers to grasp just how the British system is different because Americans haven't the first idea which questions to ask. Seven years at high school? Three terms a year? Summer holidays starting in July? No weekly percentage gradings? No graduation? Only three years to the Muggle undergraduate degree? Who would have guessed??
Response from Tilly (Reviewer)
I hadn't read any of your stories before MIMT, but I expect I'll make my way through most of them now!Yes, I agree that everyone has faults and must face up to them, however I still feel Sally was harsh on herself given her age and circumstance. Of course, as the author you have so much more backstory and this gives you a bit of a leg up on the perspective side! As a reader we can only see Sally-Anne and its easier to sympathise with her because of this. I also found her a sympathetic character because she is so quick to forgive and slow to judge. I found Terry to be quite judgemental in this story, based on his actions to Sally-Anne, so I look forward to seeing him from another perspective in MIMT. I am still inclined towards feeling that these students are children, and the level to which they are expected and encouraged to participate in war is inappropriate (at least in real life, in fiction it makes for an excellent story). I expect this also colours my judgement of Terry and Sally-Anne.As for the Americanisms, I hope its not xenophobic to be irritated! I have read many amazing fics by Americans and other nationalities which have had a good grasp of the UK education system, and fics by Brit authors which have a woeful one, so I think what really irritates me most is lack of accuracy. The American angle just jumps out however because we watch so much of their TV!Ps-thanks for the S Capper info too :)