A little flat. I suppose I expected a bit more emotion, some rage on Colleen's part, tears from his son, mabe his son to plead with him or I dunno... I thought Marlene was too calm, not questioning anything. In fact everyone was just too accepting. I was a bit surprised.

Boy, things sure are moving fast!

Seems to me that Minerva was a little too quick to forgive -- and to welcome him back into her bed. I hope she doesn't regret her hasty actions.

And now Dumbledore will find out what really happened, and who is behind Alastor's actions. His mum better run for cover!

At last, Dumbledore knows something is amiss!

What a bitch! And Alastor Moody is working against Albus Dumbledore? Yowza! What a turn of events.

I'm not sure I'm understanding why Minerva is choosing to remain in hiding. Is the wizarding world so misguided that they would ostracise her because she has a child out of wedlock? What will happen when Lily is old enough to attend Hogwarts?

Sheesh ... Dumbledore comes off as a real sleaze-bag in this chapter, doesn't he?

I feel a little sorry for his wife, wasn't her fault (I don't think), and I definitely feel sorry for his son. Hopefully, they'll still be on good terms. Happy for Minerva and her daughter though.

Is Colleen a part of the grand plan Kendra had cooked up? If so I think Albus could get custody, that just seemed to easy. I think Colleen is going to disappear.Update soon!

Kendra sounds like a very nasty piece of work.

I have to admit I am disappointed that Colleen and Albus did't discuss anything.  And young Albert needs to know the truth of the situation, as much as he can at his age.  I do hope Albus can talk to him soon. I can't believe Albus wouldn't insist on discussing it with Colleen after finding out he'd been imperiused for years!  But perhaps he is still stunned by it all and will act later.Thank you for the update.  I hope you don't take my opinions as meanness.

Did that seem too easy or what?  I don't think this went as well as they think.  At least they are finally together and together they can face anything.

That seems too easy, when will the other shoe drop? Was his wife in on his mother's plan?

Enjoying this very much.  Go, Fawkes!  Looking forward to the next chapter.  I think Minerva will have a few choice words for Albus! <understatement!>

Looking forward to more.  How Moody's actions can ever be explained is till a mystery!  Very interesting.  I am a little concerned about violence in later chapters, per your warnings, but have determined to read all the entries!Good old Fawkes!  It took Albus a long time to shake off that spell, didn't it? 

Ohh what a creepy Moody!  and Good old Fawkes!  Love that bird!  Thanks for answering some questions.  Wha nasty parents,Albus has!    this is very interesting and original!

Good for her!  Albus needs to be a man, now, and talk to Colleen.  ANd Minerva is right not to accept scraps from another woman's table.  Like the song says, "Ya better go home, son, and make up your mind!"Boyo!  Doesn't this put Moody in a weird light?  *Hurries off to read next chapter!*

I wonder if the dream was prophetic in any way, or just a nightmare.  I think I still believe Albus is a prick in this story.

She can't stay in hiding forever.  I wonder what Albus is thinking?

Oh how heart wrenching. rejected and choosing to live alone in a secluded village just to avoid everyone she knew. Then to have that album of clippings just to torture herself furthur. I really feel for Minerva. Why did Fawkes come to see the girl? Does he know it's Albus' daughter? Oh I hope so. Maybe he'll fly to her after Albus' funeral?  

I feel so sorry for Minerva. :( I hope to see Albus feel remorse or explain his actions.

So that explains why albus abandonded her. Typical.

heartwrenching. Poor Minerva. ANd WTF is up with Moody??

Why, those two...! I could just...! ARGH! *shakes fist*I hope all is not as it seems. I smell a beetle. Is Rita Skeeter old enough that this could have been her work? It certainly sounds like her. On the other hand she would have had to learn from someone.