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sshg316Who is the betrayer and who is the betrayed? An angst-ridden romantic drabble series. Runner Up for Best Drabble Series at the Moste Potente Passions SS/HG Awards.
Reviewed“Is this what you wanted, Miss Granger?” he spat, his arms spread wide as he indicated the squalor of his cell. “I trusted you; I believed your words of kindness, your declarations of love and acceptance.” He spoke the words as if even the very phonemes which comprised them were repugnant.
“Lies!” Severus bellowed, his rage reverberating off the stone walls. “All of it! Not a single word of truth. You prostituted yourself for Potter. Do you dare deny it?”
Hermione stood motionless, her gaze fixed at some point just over his left shoulder.
“Look at me when I speak!”
***
Hermione trembled as she stood outside his cell. His rage was nothing she did not deserve; she had betrayed him and she would accept, even welcome his wrath. And so she remained silent as he accused and berated her, quietly enduring his painful censure, but unable to meet his hate-filled gaze. Her heart pounded within her chest and she choked back the words of denial that she desperately wished she could utter truthfully – but she could not. She had lied to him, she had misled him, and when he had fallen in love with her, she had done the unthinkable.
***
His eyes travelled down her rigid, shaking figure, his lip curling disdainfully. “You cannot even look at me,” he mocked. “Unable to tolerate the sight of your lover any longer, dearling? How disappointing.” He paced the small space, back and forth, his glowering gaze never leaving her ashen face. “Go, Miss Granger. Leave and do not return. I never wish to see your lying, deceitful face again.” When she did not move, he suddenly flew to the front of the cell, pressing himself against the bars. “LEAVE ME!” he roared before allowing himself to slide to the floor. She fled.
***
Hermione raced from the prison, tears streaming down her face, blinding her. Finally, she stopped, unable to continue as she sobbed in despair. She had known from the beginning what she would have to do, but she had been naïve enough to believe that she would escape unscathed. How could she have allowed herself to fall in love with him? She hadn’t realised the depth of her emotions until it was too late – her betrayal had been complete. Severus would never forgive her – her actions had been unforgivable. He hated her and she could not blame him; she hated herself.
To be continued …
A/N: Originally posted at the grangersnape100 community on LJ, this story is complete in six chapters and will be updated as quickly as it can get through the queue. My thanks to Subversa and minuet99 for looking these over.
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Latest 25 Reviews for The Betrayal
26 Reviews | 5.35/10 Average
lovely story
So lovely! You're a fabulous writer!
You said angst, you meant angst. This was just lovely. I see what you were saying about loving the "he thinks she doesn't love him and he's terribly in love with her" stories ... ~adores you and this series~
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Yes, that angst just kills me. Glad you enjoyed it, my dear. <3 <3 <3
Wonderful story, thank you so very much.
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you! :)
WOW! I missed so many of the drabbles and drabble series that I decided to save them for reading last before voting on the SSHG Awards. I am truly stunned by this series. You had me on an emotional roller coaster ride from the beginning. I feel almost as spent and relieved as Hermione at the end. Congratulations on a well-deserved nomination. The only other thing I can say is"Morethansirius...and I love you."
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Awww! *GLOMPS* Thank you so much for the lovely comments! I have to admit, this is one of my favorites of the things I've written. It was my first attempt at something with angst. I was really happy with the way it turned out -- for such a short piece, it packs a lot of emotional punch. I had to have the happy ending, though. LOL ;) I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and I'm thrilled to know that you experienced the ups and downs along with Hermione. Thanks, again!
Very Emotional...wheewww. Very good thanks
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
awwww, meanie! This is just a cruel place to stop and make us wait......
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
It is cruel, I know. Muahahaha! :) If it helps, the next set is already in the queue!
Thanks!
Very interesting!
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you! I hope you're enjoying it!
OK, I'm hooked I'm assuming that Hermione cheated on Severus (I know I shouldn't ass-u-me). Cant wait for more!
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
I'm glad you're hooked! The next set is in the queue, so not too long of a wait. Thank you for reviewing! :)
Interesting.
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you!
Response from sinbad (Reviewer)
Once I have a bit of background I'll be able to make a better responce. lol
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
LOL I completely understand! No worries - I appreciate you taking the time to review!
The second and third sets are in the queue right now, and I promise you'll have a much better idea of what is going on by then. :)
What a terrible (and at the same time, wonderful) stopping point! You've hinted at so much backstory and have created a powerful dynamic between them in just 600 words. Looking forward to your next posting!
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you so much for reviewing! :)
All the angst, none of the annoying side characters! Awesome.
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Your review has me grinning. You're right; what could possibly be better? Thank you so much! :)
wow great story,im in "hate harry" mode now lol.im glad theres a happy ending,hehe im a sucker for those
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Hary was a real prat in this one, wasn't he? :) I'm glad you enjoyed it - I'm a sucker for happy endings, too!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
A beautiful ending. Very well done!!!!
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)
A beautiful ending to a lovely series. I love the device of the charmed 'truth only' diary. Great job!
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you so much - and double thanks for coming and reviewing this again over here. :) You're the best! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Have I said how much I like this series of drabbles? No? Well, I do.... very much. Good work -- More to come?
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Aw ... thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed this little story. :) No more on this on this series, at least for now. I may revisit this universe later to see how the reconciliation is going. I wrote this series to get over a bit of writer's block. Luckily it worked, so should writer's block come my way again, I may add more. :)
Thank you, again!
awwwww, how sweet. I'm glad cannon's unbreakable vow was mentioned, it made the story that much more real.
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you very much! I'm so glad you enjoyed my little tale, and thank you for all the lovely reviews throughout. :)
Response from sinbad (Reviewer)
You are more than welcome.
I think it was rather cowardly of Harry to run off. He should face what he did to his friend not 'Get a few things straight in his head'. I wonder if men ever really grow up?
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
I doubt it. LOL Harry should have stayed to face the consequences of his actions, but I think he knows Hermione enough to know that if she were to see him when she awakens, she'd hex first and ask questions later. *snickers*
Argg! Could you at least warn people of cliffhangers?
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Muahahaha! :) I must admit, I love to write cliffhangers. They are just too much fun!
I hope you're enjoying this little series. Thanks for reviewing!
Ahhh. This set explains Hermione's difficulties very clearly. And I really like how you've used her sub-conscious 'dreams' to fill in missing information.
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you! I really wanted to keep the alternating points of view and decided this was the best way to do that, as well as to show what Hermione went through. It was also nice to get a glimpse at their relationship. I'm so glad you're still enjoying this - the final chapter is in the queue!
You very skillfully used the concept of the Vow in this set and the way HG called Harry out in this one is wonderful. Another evil cliffie, though--you must stop that! *snickers*
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
*cackling evilly* I must admit, I love writing cliffies. They are so much fun!
Thanks, again! I'm thrilled you are enjoying this!
Arrrgggh! An Unbreakable Vow! Damn that HP! Your second drabble in this set leaves much more of an impression and communicates much more import, than one can reasonably expect from 100 words!
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
You say the sweetest things! :) I know! The Unbreakable Vow caught me by surprise, too! LOL
Thank you so much!
Fabulous last line--After betraying the man she loved, betraying her best friend would be easy.You write suspense very well. And I have to admit that I was happy that HG was so distraught from guilt!
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you very much - what a lovely compliment! Hermione is feeling very guilty. *nods* I'm so glad you're enjoying it!
very nice. I love where this is going.
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you so much!
Reading this again reminded me how much I loved this series when I first read it. All this heartache and angst and guilt - I'm so very glad it had a happy ending, or I'd be sobbing now.
Response from sshg316 (Author of The Betrayal)
Thank you so much! This was my first foray into angst ... but of course I had to have a happy ending. :) I'm so glad you enjoyed it again!