One Stone
Chapter 8 of 8
AnijadeResponse to the Astronomy Tower Challenge on GrangerSnape100 Parts 29-32
Reviewed29.
She turned her back to him and looked over the edge. Once again Hermione's path seemed so clear. Once over, things would be simpler, easier. I'm coming Harry, Ron; we'll be together soon.
Snape on the other hand, just gaped at the girl as he was summarily dismissed and realized that she had every intention of going through with her plan. You can't do anything right can you? Might as well push her over personally for all the good you have done. Knowing that he had to fix this, stop her, Severus realized he had to let his final defense go: pride.
30.
"Miss Granger, Hermione, please forgive my callousness."
"Don't worry, Snape; it's nothing I am not used to. I should thank you really. Reminded me why I was really up here."
"No, you shouldn't take the words of a bitter old man to heart. I shouldn't have this kind of power over you. You haven't been my student in years."
"Guess that's the irony, isn't it then? The one teacher who hated me the most always had the most power over me. You were the only one I couldn't please you know; made me want to work harder."
"You humble me."
31.
His admission startled her, and Hermione looked over her shoulder to gauge Severus' sincerity. To her surprise, she was able to see a rare openness in his dark eyes. It was unnerving to see a man who seemed so untouchable for many years finally seem human..
"I am just like you, you know. A wounded soul who needs to move on, but I don't want to do it alone, alone hurts more."
There was a pleading in her voice that he understood. The war had kept him from most human contact. It was time to come in from the cold.
32.
His smile was hesitant, mostly due to lack of use. Hers was weak, for having nothing to smile about. Staring back at each other there was a flicker of something that passed between them, perhaps just a shared agony that would never fully heal and required a certain kind of TLC.
No longer fearful, Severus made his way to the ledge and sat with her. The night had been long, longer than for anyone in the castle, but now it was over, life was moving on. Together they could make it. They watched the sun rise again over the horizon.
~Fin~
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Latest 25 Reviews for One Stone
38 Reviews | 6.66/10 Average
"I am just like you, you know. A wounded soul who needs to move on, but I don't want to do it alone, alone hurts more."Such a simple statement of such an enormous reality!They watched the sun rise again over the horizon.The very best way to start a new day, or a new life.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
I am glad you liked it, sometimes just not being alone helps more than anything else
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
I am glad you liked it, sometimes just not being alone helps more than anything else
A stone lost.The power of a few hasty words. A thoughtless, unintended loss. Severus was shocked at the power his words still had on her.They still do have power. Power to persuade as well as to hurt.
“We didn’t commit a crime for surviving, you know.”Easier to say than to believe. Survivor's guilt can be insidious. Snape may have forgiven himself for Dumbledore's death, but there is so much more guilt ready to crush him under its weight. It seems they have inadvertantly switched places. Who is saving whom now?
“I came close, but Professor McGonagall beat me to it. She’s really scary sometimes.”Ah, then he had at least two strong witches ready to plead his case and defend what was left of his honor. Did he know that already? It seems that it would make quite the difference to Snape to have someone rush to his defense.
“Please, Ms. Granger, may I have a stone? Just a stone.”Who could deny that request from a man who had given so much? Is it curiousity or hope? Does it matter which it is?“Have you forgiven yourself?”Undoubtedly the most difficult question she could have asled.
Quite understandable that his approval would throw her for a loop. They are all so used to their simplistic black & white image of him. He could never approve of anyone; could he? It is appropriate that he should be the one to recognize how much had been asked of them as so much had been asked of him.
“Fine then, a compromise. Just come back one stone. That is all I ask.”I can't think of a better man to talk someone in from a ledge. Such a simple request. Just one stone.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Thanks for reviewing, even one step back is progress
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Thanks for reviewing, even one step back is progress
Hermione has lost all those she leaned on for suppport? And even succeeding at her profession only gains her ridicule? No wonder she is out on a ledge.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Yep, it would drive anyone to the end of their rope
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Yep, it would drive anyone to the end of their rope
I liked your story! I usually don't read anything with suicide warnings, but wanted to see what the title meant and got hooked. [Well, I cheated and looked at the end before getting TOO hooked, if you know what I mean.] I thought you captured the feelings of despair and loneliness very well, that feeling that somewhere else -- anywhere else -- is better, when it hurts too much to keep trying. Hope you'll keep writing -- and please make the endings happy for the happy ending junkies like me! Thanks for your work!
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Glad you liked it. I am a happy ending junkie too. I think the worst I can write is a hopeful ending.
I have no fascination for suicide, and find most fiction based on it trite, stupid, or both. But yours is the first to do some justice to the thought. I must say, the last chapter is very lame and weak, considering how strong the first ones were. Put this away, think about it, and then try to write the true ending.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
There might be more to come. As someone who has dealt with suicide first hand sometimes the only way to prevent it is to stop and do nothing. Thank you for your comments
Whew. I was afraid that they'd both decide to jump together. LOL. Thank you.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
I wondered what they would do with them both sitting there but thankfully they just told me to go away and they were going to watch the sunrise.
I'm so glad for the happy ending, I was worried at one point they were going to go over together Nicely done
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
I must confess that at one point I thought they would jump too
yeh no one died!
was a sweet ending, v. good
Karlamarie
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
thanks you
Good story, but where is the romance?
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Not all romance is fireworks. Sometimes it's more subtle
um...this isn't done is it?
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Yep it really is the last chapter was submitted today and should be up whenever our lovely Admins can go through it. Hope you like the ending
I'm really enjoying this story. I like the theme carried throughout of the stones, too. And I also like how you manage to keep the suspense going. Just don't let it go on too long! Great job! :)
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Last chapter is in queue glad you have likes this
One step foward, two steps back... and it's not as if Hermione has much room to step back.Don't do it! Have Snape grab her or something, don't kill her.Talk about a cliffhanger.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Sorry about the cliff hanger the end is nigh
No dont jump Hermione!
Severus think fast!
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Ahhhh can't tell you what's going to happen but the end is in queue
I do hope she comes down.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
I know right now she isn't sure what's going to happen More to come already in queue
Fascinating story! I look forward to read more of it.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Thanks more in the queue
I really like this story. It's pain calling to pain I gues. And these two have it in spades. I can't wait for the next update! GG
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
aww thanks I have the final two installments done more to come
Very moving story. Their despair is almost tangible.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
I honestly think it's a case of pain recognizing pain and then deciding what to do about it
Oh yay! What a lovely ending. I like that you left it so that they understood each other.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
yeah I think that is the only place good things can begin
'May I have a stone?'. There was so much more asked and implied by it; I think you are doing a wonderful job of this, and although I suspect there won't be much more to come, I will still be looking forward to the next update.
Response from Anijade (Author of One Stone)
Thanks so much. I have no idea how much more is comning as I have allowed the characters to take control and this is their story. So far there are 30 parts written
Response from DawnEB (Reviewer)
Ooo, more than I expected,and possibly more to come! *bounce*