A New Assignment
Chapter 5 of 5
MayavanavihariniHariniLong forgotten memories resurface when two individuals, poles apart yet strikingly similar to each other, happen to meet.
Reviewed“Whoa! So Aai is a Dark Witch?” Parvati gaped in wonder, her eyes gleaming in the crackling flames of the fireplace of the twins’ bedroom. “So that explains why she was quick to dash to the kitchen the moment you stepped in! She didn’t want you to discover any of the Dark Arts stuff, isn’t it?”
“Not so fast, Bahin. I had initially thought along those lines too. But no, we are wrong,” said Padma, sounding almost like a detective.
“And what makes you so sure?” Parvati challenged.
“Her top priority in life is to make sure her daughters don’t get thin like reeds,” smiled Padma.
“Ah, we need to thank her for our sexy curves,” winked Parvati slyly, earning a stern glare and a dramatically hurled pillow from her older-by-a-minute twin. “On a more serious note, coming home is like coming to a food festival!”
“We’re deviating from the topic, sis dearest, though I do agree with your last…”
“Hush,” interrupted Parvati, suddenly hurling her blanket aside.
“What’s up?” whispered Padma, sitting up in a flash.
Parvati quietly pointed towards her parents’ bedroom. Snippets of a mysterious conversation started drifting in.
“It’s all right, Narayani. It isn’t your fault, so stop blaming yourself.”
“But it is, Vitthal! I shouldn’t have given her the herbs in the first place. At least she wouldn’t have died then!”
“Come on. Alumni of Mayavati don’t use magic unless they have to. I know that. My parents were there too. And your intention was to save, not to kill. Why, just think of the herbs you gave her… Okay, let’s first take Mruta Sanjeevani… She restores life to the dying. She’s basically equivalent to phoenix tears. Vishal-”
“Vitthal, please try to…”
“Vishalyakarani is next,” continued Vitthal animatedly. “She removes all weapons from an injured body. Then comes Suvarnakarani. She restores the normal hue of the skin to any affected body part… apparently removes even the Dark Mark as Padma discovered. And last but not least is Sandhani. She heals bony injuries like the Skele-Gro Potion.”
“But...”
“There’s no ‘but’ here. You can’t blame yourself for giving her those life-saving herbs. Just as I can’t blame Snape, Heer herself or the unknowingly made Unbreakable Vow.”
“I should have been more careful. At least I should have known something about the vow.” Narayani sounded as if she were in tears.
“Take it easy, Narayani. At least we know tonight that Heer didn’t die due to Dark Magic.”
Pause. Silence. More tears.
Finally Narayani spoke. It was her usual voice—calm and composed.
“She consciously sacrificed her love, and ended up sacrificing her life. All for the sake of a man who doesn’t even know all this yet,” she sighed.
“There is still a chance” Vitthal suddenly sounded hopeful. “While we can’t bring back Nauheed Cama, the least we can do is to make sure her sacrifice doesn’t go in vain.”
“What are we going to do? Tell Snape?” Narayani asked sarcastically. “Who is going to bell the cat?”
“Parvati.”
A/N: Mrita Sanjeevani might look familiar, but Mruta Sanjeevani? If you are wondering that, by any chance, allow me to clarify... I had to get the perfect Marathi pronunciation!
And yes, Vitthal LOVES the herbs. So a herb is a 'she', not an 'it' for him!
Thanks to nagandsev, the wonderful admin here, for her Midas touch!
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Who is Heer? Is she the samer age as the twins' parents? Then how did she become a little girl? And did Narayani deliberately give her the herbs to save Snape? How did she get hold of the herbs given her dislike of using magic? As you can see, I have many questions! I hope you will continue to write so they will be answered :)
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
Hi again! Thanks for reading and reviewing. I do have a plot on my mind that answers all your questions but alas, I can't spill the beans. It's reassuring to read your review. 😊 RL is killing me there (as my self-imposed exile from FB proves....lol) but I will be back.
I am curious to see how Indian magic ties together with Western, and what this dark force is. Will Parvati be able to heal the stubborn Snape's mind? Was the act of Dark Magic a form of rebirth, that kept Snape alive after Nagini's attack by trading a life for a life? Was it a willing sacrifice or murder? And will Parvati eventually embrace her magic once again? I suppose I need to read on... Well done on posting your first fanfic. You're officially a writer now :)
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
Ah,
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
, I'm overwhelmed! Thank you so much :)Yes, you are definitely on the right track though I can't divulge the spoilers yet! :P Am so glad you found it readable:)
Enjoyed how we're introduced to Severus and his state of mind, as snarky as ever--and also the interesting revelation about Padma and Parvati's mother! ' (...) Quite an interesting Dark Witch she was.”'--wondering how easy it will be for them to find out Aai's secrets...--looking forward to more!
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
To quote a Malayalam movie, Drishyam, "Scenes are deceptive." *wicked grin* nag, nag, where would I be without you? 'Thank you' sounds too superficial.. You know that already!
Severus lives! always good news, dark mark gone, and now Parvati on the job to bring him back from the brink. Looking forward to more.
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
Of course he doesn't die. He. Just. Can't. Thanks so much dear for continuing to read this.. Your lovely review and shiny stars made my day!
Response from mick42 (Reviewer)
You are a woman after my own heart, there is no way Severus can die, my heart will not allow it.
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
I promise to make sure he lives. And lives life to the fullest.
Stay tuned. Next chapter is up!:)
look to be and interesting story!!
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
Thanks so much for the feedback. Glad you are enjoying it!
An intriguing start, looking forward to more.
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
Dear
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
, thank you so much for your encouragement! It means a lot, especially for a newcomer like me..:)
Thoroughly intrigued and looking forward to more of Parvati and Padma, but especially to Parvati and her interaction with her newest client... Wondering about what will happen during their first session.Enjoying Parvati's perspective and inner thoughts, Padma care and concern for her sister, as well as this being a rare pairing and unique story from the Patil sisters point of view--again, looking forward to more!
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
Thank you so much, nag! You just made my day! It was such a great honour to work with you, and it was even more exciting to get such an encouraging response for my debut fanfic. :)
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For some reason, hope it doesn't offend anyone, the elements of the opening chapters: the mother-father relation, the sisters' interaction, the whole family involved in courtship, remind me of the first chapter in 'Pride and Prejudice.'
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
Dear
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
,
Thanks so much for reading and commenting. Well, I haven't read that masterpiece and I certainly intend to do so. Whatever interactions I wrote about were based on the conservative and rather strict, yet loving families I have observed around myself.
Nevertheless, I am flattered, to say the least..thanks for wasting your valuable time in reading this newcomer's writing!
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
, I just went through the chapter you mentioned (Internet has made it so much easier to search specific chapters of specific books). And no, my dear, Narayani Patil has only one thing in common with Mrs Bennet. Her fiery temper. I don't really understand how Mrs Patil reminded you of her. And you mentioned something about the involvement of the whole family in courtship. Well, honestly I don't know what you meant. I think I made it pretty clear that the only person who knows of Parvati's little crush is her twin. And the Patil parents don't even know about it, and rest assured, won't approve of it at all, as the upcoming chapters will prove.
Response from Fairfield (Reviewer)
I see now that I should have given in to the impulse to reply to your first response by saying you expressed it better than I did: it seems that whatever happens the whole family will be involved, and I should have said I know there are numerous differences between the stories. I suppose you are concerned that I have misled people about what you are writing. Nevertheless, that is what popped into my head, and the intuitive leap may have been far wrong or it may be that there are more similarities than I consciously realize.
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
Well, tbh, many Indian families are actively involved in the selection process of prospective brides & grooms for their children and there's nothing wrong about that. So well, family involvement is something that HAS to be highlighted.. It may not be everyone's cup of tea, I understand.
ps Your chapter did not come across as melodramatic to me, but rather engaging and informative--I personally like to know a lot of the character's background, and love the exploration of Parvati's point of view and life experience shared, contrasting her twin sister's and parents, etc. You've set her up as a very strong, unique individual, and I'm looking forward to learning more about her--and of course her interaction with one particular tall, dark wizard!
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
Thanks a ton for your reassurance and kindness! The entire Patil family has a vital role in the plot.
And yes, I am looking forward to the first session with, ahem, him, as eagerly as you..*blushing*
Thoroughly enjoyed this chapter, sharing more, with its in-depth background about Parvati and her family--enjoying understanding the different influences in her life and life choices, along with the Marathi & Sanskrit terms, and also how long she has held a deep crush on a particular someoneLooking forward to learning more about her visions, her talk to Aai, and her inital session with Snape!
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Author of A Dream Deferred)
I'm flattered! In a humble attempt to provide an authentic Marathi flavour, I had to do a bit of research on Marathi as it is not my mothertongue (mine is Bangla). I am thrilled to learn that you liked the Marathi and Sanskrit terms!
My everlasting thanks to you!