Elicitations
Chapter 6 of 11
nagandsevPartial truths and feelings are drawn out; both Hermione and Sirius connect more of what has happened to them in the past and present, sharing a common memory, as well as discovering their undeniable current connection.
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I remember!
"Don't touch me!" She pushed against the man holding her and cried out, "You can't make me...you won't force me, control me! You can't! I won't let you!"
Where am I?
"I'm not him...You've had a nightmare, Hermione...stay with me...you're awake; it was a dream. You've had a fright from a dream, love."
She knew that voice. She knew him.
"Sirius?" She blinked, feeling dazed, alarmed, her heart pounding, but it dawned on her where she currently was, who he was. I was dreaming, a nightmare...Sirius, he's real!
His face was so pale, but his eyes burned in concern.
She realized she was panting hard, her heart thumping harder. "It is you, Sirius?"
"Yes, Hermione. It's me. You're safe. He can't harm you anymore."
"Who?"
Sirius spoke quietly, calmly, "You tell me. His name. I must have the name: Who do you remember? What do you remember?"
She clenched her eyes, straining to express it. "Say it again. Say it again, Sirius!"
"What?"
"That word 'remember'...say it!"
"Remember."
And there it was. Hermione sobbed. She clutched Sirius. Something had cracked inside her mind, opened in her will...a chink of clarity cast light on the greyness, on the muddled thoughts held captive within her. A throb of lucid strength went through her.
Something solid. Safe. She was being held in Sirius' arms, in a protective hold. She felt his muscles flex under her fingertips and buried her forehead on his shoulder covered by fluffy bathrobe material.
"Coercere amnestos!" she whispered.
"What...?" Sirius' body rippled as if in a spasm.
"Sirius?" She raised her head so that she could look at him only to find he had his eyes shut tight.
"That curse!" He opened his eyes slowly, looking at her, pained. "How do you know it?"
"I don't...just now. I remember, and there are others, but I can't remember them, can't verbalise them. I think..." She was caught between tears and exhilaration, crying, "Conduits! He hexed me, used me as a... conduit, a vessel, my body..."
Her thoughts jumped as she remembered the obvious. Sirius suffered the same by someone! Someone did this to him as well!
She touched him delicately on the chest, as if to make sure again he was real. "Your body...we were conduits for a magical current of energy and force, a corporeal current through time and space."
Sirius' face darkened with intensity. "Who? Hermione, who did this to you? I need you to say his name. That's all." He was squeezing her upper arms so tight her eyes smarted with tears.
Suddenly, Hermione pushed away from Sirius and pressed her back against the headboard, straining to remember. With eyes clenched tight, she shook her head, and the tears began to roll down her cheeks. "I can't... I can't!" A wave of nausea rolled over her. "I know it was him...but I can't say his name, identify him...what is wrong with me?"
"It's all right," he assured her calmly, and she could see he struggled to stay controlled, as his following words signified his true emotion. "That fucking bastard Confunded...Obliviated...erased selectively, took a part or parts of your memory. What else did the fucking scum do to you?" whispered Sirius vehemently to himself.
Hermione couldn't answer, and she saw Sirius raise a fisted hand to his mouth and a flash of fury in his eyes and then his struggle and resolve not to lose control, asking in a hoarse voice, "Then, the place...where were you? Can you give me any context to go by? If you're unable to tell me who...can you describe anything else?"
"Darkness. Floating... I was floating... stars, constellations... Then I was speeding through...flowing through space," she shook her head, struggling to recall the sensation, "like through a dark tunnel, on a long, long flowing slide, but he... he was so heavy, on me, in me...as if we were one... one form, one energy moving through time and space." The last words were spoken in a hushed whisper.
Sirius' dark grey eyes were stormy and shining with moistness as he stared at her in compassion. Hermione felt his inability to speak and found herself reaching out and their fingers gently touching, intertwining, silently comforting each other, holding hands.
They sat like that, just being with each other as time ticked on until Hermione opened her eyes wide and groped for her wand, suddenly highly agitated. She Accioed the book Constellations of the Magical Heavens along with the objects she had brought from the Ministry but hadn't yet shown Sirius.
Within seconds the items landed on the rumpled bed in front of them.
Sirius stared at them, then Hermione, his expression weighed down with care.
"The other Hermione had already collected a number of objects related to this universe's phantom intruder...she's left clues for us," explained Hermione slowly. "She must have been near to solving a working hypothesis, in the process of verifying it when we switched."
Sirius didn't say anything but carefully picked up the charred object. He held it up towards the sconced lighting, studying it.
"Do you recognize it?
Sirius blinked in consternation, finally answering, "It seems familiar... as if I've seen it before...but that's impossible, isn't it? It's almost like a pendant, an amulet for wearing..."
For wearing? thought Hermione. Her brow furrowed in concentration. I've seen one recently... not a burnt one, but... The image of tall, slender figure appeared, a curvaceous witch, wearing a skin-tight bodysuit, a revealing décolleté with a pendent laying strategically above an accented cleavage. "Pansy."
Sirius scowled. "Parkinson?"
Hermione made as if to shake the image from her. "She was wearing one... an unusual pendant. But that's not an uncommon thing for a witch to wear, is it?"
Sirius suddenly rubbed his face as if to clear his thoughts, and Hermione felt something was... off.
"Sirius, you reacted a bit strongly about her when you first heard that she was assigned to us, and today at the Ministry, the hostility was, well, barely controllable, mutually volatile."
Sirius huffed, but gave no reply.
Hermione felt compelled to find out. "What...what happened between you two in your universe?"
"Nothing. Nothing, in mine." A stubborn look overtook him. "Well, there was a time when she seemed to be, er, infatuated with me. She'd just begun at the Ministry and was fawning over anyone and everyone in high positions when she could, even over that bloody Flint...not that it took much flattery to latch on to him, but... He didn't seem to return her interest for very long. I don't know... She disappeared, I think." He shrugged. "I heard different rumours that she had left the continent for a Foreign Office position or had taken unconditional vows, Unbreakable Vows, sequestered as an Unspeakable of sorts, deep in the belly of the beast, in the Department of Mysteries...in the Time Room? Or was it the Love Room? I've never thought much about her since."
Hermione remembered how Marcus had looked at Pansy today and how Pansy could have murdered Sirius with her eyes. She softly quoted, "'Heaven has no rage like love to hatred turned, nor hell a fury like a woman scorned.'" Sirius gave her a puzzled look, which caused her to spell out, "A witch rejected in love can be very angry and very dangerous."
Sirius' jaws clenched. "Alright, then. In my world she threw herself at me, continuously, and in the most, erm, provocative way... Witches like her, they make me...let's just say I have an adverse reaction to them, like to my cousin Bellatrix. And you know how fond we were of each other... She loved me to death," he dryly commented, his eyes flashing dangerously with the renewed memory of Bellatrix having succeeded in her ultimate goal of finally murdering him in one universe.
"I'm sorry. I didn't mean to bring that up."
"You have nothing to be sorry about...ever," he whispered vehemently. Taking a moment, he admitted through gritted teeth, "However, the Sirius here seems to have been, um, more unscrupulous than me. There seems to have been some reconnaissance work of sorts, in the interim shortly following the war, involving the Pansy here and him." He let out a deep sigh.
"All I have is a jotted note 'found in Space Chamber'. Could it be related to her?" speculated Hermione in a small voice and showed him the small parchment from the box. "I'm assuming it refers to this charred amulet, as it was the only object in the box." Sirius still remained silent. "What is it, Sirius?"
"It's familiar... but I can't place it. It's burnt beyond recognition."
"Yes, I know. I wish Marcus had left them alone...at least until I had time to catch up on everything..."
"Flint?" Sirius' eyes flashed with a dangerous look.
"He was...he was destroying this and other amulet-like objects in our office. He said it was for safety measures. He needed to destroy Dark objects with powerful enchantments." Hermione shivered. "It reminded me of when we tried to destroy Horcruxes..."
Sirius leapt off the bed and began pacing, only to stop abruptly. "Horcruxes?" He spat out, "Fucking Horcruxes? Voldemort's legacy to his continued admirers."
"And this book..." She held up Constellations of the Magical Heavens. "At first, I wondered why it wasn't on Shacklebolt's list, or rather, why it was considered a Dark book..."
Ruffled, he snatched it and gave it a quick, recognized glance. "Of course, it's full of Dark magic tips and tales. I'd know it anyplace. Regulus and I were bred and raised on these books."
"But it seemed so harmless when you showed me it before..."
"When I what?" The look Sirius gave her was one of incredibility.
"When you..." Hermione stopped herself. That was the other Sirius, my Sirius...of course he doesn't know what I'm talking about. She shook her head, "It's not important. It's..."
"You almost fell. That old rickety chair, cursed to be irreparable," said Sirius softly. He gazed at her bittersweetly.
"You...we...have a shared memory? It also happened in your universe?"
Calmer, Sirius slowly sat down on the edge of the bed, holding Constellations of the Magical Heavens, gazing almost reverently at it in his hands. He raised an eyebrow as he shared, "You were kind, very kind to me, keeping me company in my insomniac state...my recollections of Divination classes were something of particular amusement to you, having survived Sybill's classes... Your laughter that evening was music to my ears. I was deeply glad to make you smile; it had been a long time since anyone enjoyed my company."
He gave her a soft look, and then something occurred to him, and he slowly opened the book. "But this book wouldn't have been in my family if it wasn't Dark... Yessss," he hissed softly as he thumbed his way to the back. "Herpo the Great, his teachings were lauded and spoon-fed to me as early as I can remember." Sirius' face muscles clenched. "Dark Astrology, Dark Arithmancy, Dark Divination..." He clucked disapproval as his pointer finger skimmed quickly, suddenly stopping and tapping at a reference. "For example, Herpo the Great..."
He said it again! Hermione couldn't help herself and corrected him. "You mean Herpo the Foul."
Not understanding her dismay, he slowly sidled closer to her, resting against the grand pillowed headboard beside her, showing the page. "Nah, any Dark wizard worth his salt knows him as Herpo the Great. He was..."
"I know who he was." She suddenly shuddered. "You're not a Dark wizard, Sirius, no matter..." Her eyes had become moist with emotion.
"Hermione?"
"Marcus also referred to him as Herpo the Great. Insisted on it."
Sirius' mood darkened immediately. "Flint? What else did he say?"
Flustered, Hermione started to hem and haw. "Flint just...well he... Well, he started to call me a Mudblood, but stopped himself in time..."
"WHAT?"
"He's extremely skilled at wandless magic..."
Fuming, Sirius frowned. "As am I. What of it?"
"No, it's...I mean powerfully so." Before Sirius could comment, she added, "He can place counter-curses on Dark objects...the book that I Summoned in the Restricted Section, he didn't let me touch it until he had removed any Dark charm or harmful agent from it." Her face scrunched as she recalled Flint's actions. "It was as if he was suctioning the Dark power."
"To where?"
"What?"
"Transference of Dark energy from a Dark object goes from one matter into another."
Suddenly dreamlike, Hermione whispered, "Magicke Moste Evile. Flint's eyes flashed and with a wave of his hand and an inaudible spell, the curse within the book...the energy of it whiffed out... It had been removed. He knew how, nonverbally. I've never experienced anything like it."
"The Dark energy was channelled somewhere," insisted Sirius as he rolled the charred object in his hand. "Was Flint wearing a pendant too? Like Parkinson?"
Hermione's eyes widened at the possible parallel. "I...I don't know." She tried to remember how Marcus was dressed. "Flint was wearing a high turtleneck. Dressed neutrally. Unlike Pansy."
"Parkinson and Flint..." Visibly miffed, Sirius huffed. "I used nonverbal magic before I could walk or talk...removing spells from Dark books is child's play. There's more to it than Flint flexing his ability... What else did the bloody git say about Herpo?"
"He was very adamant about the ancient wizard, reveres him as the father of all magic."
"Well," started Sirius, only to stop, contemplating the conundrum. After a few seconds of consideration, he reminded her, "There isn't Light and Dark magic; it is how we choose to use it that makes it Dark or Light."
"I think Flint has other beliefs about that, what constitutes magic and who has the right to use it. You didn't see him...didn't hear how he spoke about it." She shuddered.
"So he reveres Herpo only...or the bastard worships him?" demanded Sirius darkly.
"Sirius?"
"I don't know exactly how yet, but I know it was him that cursed you...that bastard...I'll end his miserable life if it's the last thing I do before I allow him to further harm you!"
Sirius spoke so vehemently that a flashback of Sirius yelling at Pettigrew in the Shrieking Shack came to Hermione. 'I would have died! I would have died rather than betray my friends!' flew through her mind. He would have murdered Pettigrew if Harry hadn't stopped him.
"But the proof! The proof, Sirius...we have to have concrete evidence... before accusing or confronting anyone... And... and Flint could have killed me many times..."
"He doesn't want you dead; he needs you alive."
She was speechless by his remark, and seeing her shock, Sirius thumped the page. "This coerced amnesia and conduit curses... The selective memories that you've been able to recall from your traumatic experience...the victim...the conduit must be alive. Otherwise, you're useless to him... the object must be living to be used and useful."
"And what about you? If, hypothetically, it was Flint," she swallowed hard, her breathing was becoming shallow and she started to feel lightheaded, "who used me, who attacked you? Was it Flint or... Parkinson in your universe?"
Sirius' facial muscles clenched in thought, his eyes darkening as he forced himself to admit, "I can't remember." With a bitter twist to his lips, Sirius handed her the opened page. "But this is why the Hermione here had this book, Constellations of the Magical Heavens; she'd discovered one of the phantom intruder's dirty little secrets."
Hermione slowly read aloud, "'As referenced in Elementum Deorc Coercere ande Coarcere: Blod ande Fortia, through revered and vile sacrifice Herpo the Great invented such methods and processes for sojourning the constellations. In order to do so, the vital component must be a conduit by which a wizard must use living creatures as their current to help transport themselves in time and space. Naturally, a wizard or witch would be the most desired and most powerful conduit one could use being Magical creatures, but needless to say, they would also be the most elusive to procure. Regardless, the final incantation after several sources have been attained is Portus Constellatio."
"Yes, that's it!" Hermione scooted closer to Sirius, and he gave her a curious glance as she inadvertently brushed against him, showing him the paragraph.
Hermione repeated, "'Through... vile sacrifice Herpo the Foul invented such methods and processes for sojourning the constellations.'"
She pressed her head back against the pillowed headboard, lethargical, and the book fell from her hands into her lap. She closed her eyes, pensive, whispering, "And the counter-spells? There must be a way...anything done by Dark magic can be undone... reversed...we must find that book!"
"Which book?" asked Sirius quietly.
"Elementum Deorc Coercere ande Coarcere: Blod ande Fortia," replied Hermione, opening her eyes again. "All references that we have so far, all clues lead to Herpo the Foul's work. Or rather I need to be able to cross-reference and understand his 'inventions'...the conduit wizard or witch," she took in a deep breath, "is the vital component, but that extract mentions 'after several sources have been attained'. I must get a hold of that book!"
Hermione felt an overwhelming wave of exhaustion roll over her and clenched her eyes again as a single tear rolled down her cheek, thinking of the futility of their predicament. She felt Sirius moving and opened her eyes enough to see him stand up and carry something back over from a low chest of drawers. It was a small tray with food and tea.
"Eat something, then rest; we'll continue this," he nodded at the items of discovery scattered on the bed as he placed the breakfast tray at the foot of it, "afterwards. I'd awoken way earlier this morning before your nightmarish recall; Kreacher was en garde beside the bed, insistent that I take more Blood Replenishing Potion and some nourishment." Sirius gave a small smile. "He was also insistent to keep me in your lovely soft bathrobe...that I not be allowed to dress myself. Blocked every attempt for me to either transfigure clothing or Summon anything. He said it was on the Mistress' orders." His eyes twinkled in amusement.
Seeing the food, an automatic rumble in her tummy was heard; she realized how depleted she was of energy, and she could feel her cheeks turning red from his gentle teasing. In defence she pointed out, "You were delirious last night. Stubborn and delirious, determined to leave...you would have Flooed yourself in harm's way or splinched yourself or worse. I had to keep you here... safe. Protect you from yourself, Sirius Black."
"And you? Kreacher told me all about it."
Hermione gave him a puzzled look.
"You don't seem much better than I was." Sirius' gaze suddenly became fixated on her body. "That's my dried blood on you?"
She followed his gaze and saw her clothing, stained. "Yes. You...you took the hex meant for me. A Sectumsempra. You could have died."
Sirius sat on the bed again and quietly confessed, "Of course, I took it for you. I would die for my friends...for those I love...for you."
Hermione felt her body flush warm as Sirius leaned closer to her, his voice husky with emotion, saying, "I'd die a thousand times over for you and more."
Then their lips met.
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A/N: Hermione quotes phrases from the English playwright and poet William Congreve: "Heaven has no rage like love to hatred turned, Nor hell a fury like a woman scorned," spoken by Zara in Act III, Scene VIII, The Mourning Bride (1697). My deepest gratitude to the one and only Proulxes for her alpha/beta work on this story and continued guidance and specific feedback on each and every chapter...thank you! Also, the greatest thanks to the very patient and brilliant writer and admin Clairvoyant for helping to fine-tune the story's punctuation and content: *mwah*!
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37 Reviews | 8.08/10 Average
I loved the ideas in this story, nag. The idea of different universes - so dangerous that the knowledge of them has to be hidden deeply within the Ministry. I also loved the way you explored the natures of love and duty, and the conflict between them.... I'm not apologising for the happy ending either! I think that they both could do with a different ending than the one they were giften by JKR!!! Can't wait for your next story, sweetie! Pxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you for all of your support and feedback--yes, perhaps that kind of knowledge would lead to a kind of madness, knowing that your 'other' is living a life with different choices, different consequences... dangerous indeed. Couldn't/Wouldn't have done the happy ending without your Knuts worth;-) Thank you again for all of generosity--truly, deeply, madly appreciate it!
Some people do not take rejection well.
Unrequited love in canon reverberates through time; unrequited love in this story reverberates through time and space. Good depiction of Flint’s self-delusion that first-Pansy needs his help to realize that he is the one for her. It seems second-Pansy has delusions about Sirius, which makes Flint’s obsession with her a delusion.
Flint’s interrogation explains why Pansy made the choice she made in the previous chapter.
An idea held by the Ministry is that some things (this Dark Magic) should be destroyed. There is no way to use them for good (ie., LOTR). There is also the idea (or belief) that, once destroyed, they cannot be recreated again. Contrary to this are the propositions that nothing is all good or all evil (expressed by Hermione) and that anything one person can create, another can (not expressed in the text) and that one should study this item to develop defenses (which doesn’t appear explicitly in the text).
If this were a scifi story, the two homecoming scenes at the end would depict outcomes in different universes, but in this story, they may not. I can’t recall any previous chapters depicting dual universes.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much,
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
, for all of your thoughtful reviews throughout this tale--I truly, deeply appreciate all of your detailed observations and feedback! Yes, was trying to depict different states of rejection, unrequited love, self-delusion/delusions and perceptions, and tie them all together--also had this notion of exploring the dubious, seemingly hypocritical nature of the Ministry of Magic, flawed but nevertheless persistent to keep face and keep the status quo consistent and protected.Yes, with this particular tale, I'll leave it up to the reader's interpretation of the ending scenes, how they wish to fill in anything not explicitly given/decided--suggestive and inferred ideas regarding the dual universes--again, thank you for your specific, detailed feedback, as it has helped enriched me and given me so much food for thought--thanks again!
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much,
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
, for all of your thoughtful reviews throughout this tale--I truly, deeply appreciate all of your detailed observations and feedback! Yes, was trying to depict different states of rejection, unrequited love, self-delusion/delusions and perceptions, and tie them all together--also had this notion of exploring the dubious, seemingly hypocritical nature of the Ministry of Magic, flawed but nevertheless persistent to keep face and keep the status quo consistent and protected.Yes, with this particular tale, I'll leave it up to the reader's interpretation of the ending scenes, how they wish to fill in anything not explicitly given/decided--suggestive and inferred ideas regarding the dual universes--again, thank you for your specific, detailed feedback, as it has helped enriched me and given me so much food for thought--thanks again!
Good chapter. Great tension and suspense. Enough happened and is revealed that it is difficult to comment on all of it. (One would almost have to take notes for a full review.)Did a previous chapter mention that Hermione had a scar on her neck?The conduit process resembles sex closely enough (penetration, possession, small death) that it makes Hermione ucomfortable with Flint. It may have contributed to her loss of control. Pansy and Marcus appear to be under compulsion from their amulets - Pansy less voluntarily than Marcus. A humane Pansy almost broke through. One might wonder if her fond memories are about Sirius or Harry. Marcus is careless enough that one can conjecture he is not the one in control. On the other hand, he may be certain enough of his power to not be discreet.Of course, a question is how much is Malfoy involved.
Response from MHaydn (Reviewer)
I forgot to mention the reversal with Hermione and Harry where she first cautions him about prematurely provoking people before one has solid evidence and then Hermione pulling that stunt in Malfoy's office.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you for continuing to read,
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
, and the very thoughtful feedback--truly appreciate your insight! Oh yes, it was mentioned in a previous chapter about Hermione's scar on her neck when Sirius traces it with his finger and asks her about it--should have included a reference to it or have had Hermione touch her scar while reflecting on Marcus, Bellatrix memories--thanks again for the keen insight on (missing) details! ) Food for thought!:-) I'm trying to convey that although Hermione is controlled, a professionally disciplined Auror diligently falling back on doing things by the book, when in a new situation her subjectivity and confusion about those and things done by them in the past doesn't fit in the box and even she can be hypocritical or lose control at times. Yes, I feel with this Hermione, the more the sexual elements of the conduit curse sinks in and the realization hits her, the more uncomfortable with Flint she would be; once she has time to solely focus on it, I'm not sure how she will fully react, but for now, it definitely has layered on and contributed to things overwhelming her in the meeting. Who and what Flint has done to her, her fluctuating memories and experience with him, the Lucius of her universe, etc.--takes its toll and is the last straw. Trying to convey it's all happening too quickly, her (worst) conjectures are true, etc. Yes, Pansy, Marcus and their amulets are all intertwined, who exactly her memories are about will be revealed, the narrative spaced out in the final two chapters, and it's a bit of both, regarding Marcus' behaviour--as always, you're spot on! Malfoy's degree of involvement will also be touched upon. Thank you again!
I admit to being as confused as Hermione. Which Flint started this mess, and whom did he (try to?) resurrect? How would he chose the other universe(s)?Do all three Flints gain from the deal?I kinda see why he'd pick Hermione: she's too smart when not thoroughly confused and thus too dangerous.Hoping you'll soon shed more light to this puzzle!Great narration anyhow. Will they now confide in Harry?
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much for continuing to read,
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
, and for your feedback! All will be explained in more detail in the next two, final chapters... well, maybe a brief epilogue, although I will try to cram it all in within the next two chapters. The next chapter's content is fully completed--just waiting for my beta to return from holiday and then I'll queue it. It will explain a lot regarding Flint's detailed motivations, intentions and a partial listing of why he chose Hermione. And then in the final/next to final chapter other details will, hopefully, round out the whole picture. As Hermione realises and confirms in this chapter, 'this' Flint is definitely her Flint--they are both from her universe (don't think I'm letting the cat out of the bag too much with re-confirming that :-) Her Flint definitely started it all, and all we'll know for sure in this story is how this Flint fares, although there will be some speculation about the other two by the end. I appreciate your copmments, and am sorry it's been, perhaps a little too intentional, confusing, so I appreciate your feedback about this.:-)Regarding Harry... next two chapters will reveal the extent of confiding in him;-) Thank you again!
Emotions erupt as the possibility of choosing between worlds arises. Sirius is committed to his true love while Hermione thinks in terms of familiar surroundings and old friends. Hermione might be thinkiing that Sirius will come to resent her because of the separation from his friends. If they are in complete control, they may be able to choose the best mix of different worlds.
Sirius plans a mission that does not include Hermione. I assume he is reacting to what he feels is a rejection.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much for reading and the feedback--truly appreciate it! Yes, as the possibilty of returning draws nearer, both must deal with what each has found and what will be lost, and the acceptance of that. Or not. Control is an issue. Sirius plans, reasons, and decisions will become apparent, his perception of being rejected colouring them. Thank you again!
Oh, my, here goes Sirius the opportunist vs Hermione the stickler for the rules! You've comstructed a particularly fitting set of universes for Sirius' logic.I'm beginning to doubt that the current blend was Flint's intention! Or should I write the Flints' intention?
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much for reading and for the feedback--truly appreciate it! So glad that some dubiousness is coming across on some level; we'll see whether Flint, or the Flints , or how Sirius further contributes to Hermione's situation and decisions, etc. Thank you again!
"Get back here, you impetuous man," called Hermione from the bedroom.
"I'm of the moment," cried Sirius, "and I'm checking family mementos.""When I catch you, all Heaven will descend upon you, and fiery Hades will consume your scorning arse," declared Hermione.
And so it did.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Hahahaha! Brilliant,
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
! I've been chuckling and grinning like the Cheshire Cat all day by your gift of a review/drabble! Yup, that sums up the whole kit and caboodle of it--he can run but not hide from a woman on *fire*--lol!Thank you for continuing to read and the generous feedback!
Good action sequence. Good portrayal of Sirius and Hermione.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you for continuing to read and the feedback! So glad the action sequence comes across effective enough as well as the depictions of Sirius and Hermione--thanks again, truly appreciate it!
Marcus and Pansy are such obvious co-conspirators that one wonders why Shacklebolt is not suspicious of them. Why didn’t Sirius detect Marcus suppressing Hermione’s memory?
On the other hand, another Hermione and another Sirius are running around in some other universe. The alternate Hermione was about to marry Ron-of-the-Biker-Chicks and may be a different person. Marcus and Pansy are disrespectful, and this may be pureblood prejudice, but it is also the way police treat suspects.
So, it depends on how twisty you want the tale to be.
Why doesn’t Hermione plan to reach out to Harry and Ginny? At the moment, she is trusting her romantic impulses.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
, thank you so much for continuing to read and the feedback... truly appreciate it! Whether Shacklebolt is aware of Marcus and Pansy remains to be seen... Maybe a deus ex machina, maybe not... oops! hehe!Sirius not detecting Marcus' supressing Hermione's memory is due to something that's been done to him similarly by our other culprit which comes out a few chapters later, his senses dulled on some levels, and also a mandatory request by my beta to try to write this story through Hermione's eyes only, or as much as possible, as I have a tendency to (and enjoy it) write multiple characters pov's... so it's been and is very much a challenge for me to keep to seeing/experiencing things through her eyes, and/or force/limit the reader to this... I'm not comfortable with it, so I truly appreciate hearing from you what works and doesn't for you, and all the gaps left! Yes, I see that Marcus and Pansy could have multiple twists incorporated in their characterization and function in the plot... The ending is already written for this tale, but maybe in future tales, I can learn and try to layer on more sophisticated plots--this one intentionally being an obvious one, with the obligatory fangirl romance current winning out I was trying to convey that Hermione was still in a state of not knowing who to trust with their 'secret' except Sirius, being freshly thrown into the situation/parallel universe, but maybe she will reach out to others--she might definitely need to. Thanks again for giving me lots to think about!:-)
Response from MHaydn (Reviewer)
Okay, Sirius missing the memory suppression because he has been subjected to it is a subtle point carried to its logical conclusion. Very good.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Dearest
Both wish to reeturn to their original worlds. Since they are not tempted by new possibilities, their previous lives must have been acceptable to them. Why doesn't the wild Sirius want to explore a brand new world? What does he miss in his home world? Is it the other Hermione?
From the last scene, Flint is more than a physical thug.
The term "Unspeakable Pansy" is almost funny, but what is her relationship to Flint, and her previous relationship to Sirius?
There appears to be a lack of material on alternate universes in the wizard world in contrast to our world which has extensive information, including maps of the near domains. Out of the blue, is the Hogwarts Express a portal between worlds?
(Some of this review is a bit flippant.)
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much for continuing to read and for all of your feedback and observations! You're spot on regarding why Sirius, initially, misses his home world. ;-)Yes, there is much more to Flint; I'm loosely, very loosely, trying to explore writing an inverted detective story/'howcatchem', where we (both the writer & reader) are shown the criminal act and apparent, obvious perpetrator(s) but other aspects of the characters and the possible resolution of them may still be up in the air... or something like that--lol! It's fanfiction and the wizarding world so anything is possible--hehe! 'Unspeakable Pansy'--HA! *rolling eyes* The phrase is funny, given the different meaning(s) in a different context--lol! More of her relationship to Flint as well as her past relationship to Sirius will be revealed in the next chapter or two--definitely past history there. Hogwarts Express a portal between two worlds--now there is an idea! Maybe true alternate universes in the wizard world could be a sub-genre--so many possibilities! Thanks again for reading, truly appreciate it!
What a thrilling tale. I am enjoying it very much.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much for reading! So happy that you are enjoying it--thanks for the feedback, truly appreciate it!
Ooh, that evil Flint. What a bastard. Still, there was nekkid Sirius... ;)
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
, yes, there is a nekkid Sirius *waggling eyebrows* Surely she can not let that go unnoticed or to waste (the bathrobe is not fooling anyone, eh? lol!) Hehe... Thank you so much for reading!xxx
You big tease! What did she find out? :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
I have no idea--oh! hehe! More of Hermione's deductive findings in the next chapter--thank you so much for the read, sunny!<3
Ooooh... the plot thickens! Love the way your characterisation of Sirius is developing. I like his vulnerability... and when Marcus Flint asked Hermione to "Remember?"... shivers...! Keep writing! More! More! Pxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Dearest proulxes, thank you so much for rereading this and for all of your support! Yes, it's quite an experience writing this side of Sirius, digging deeper into what might be there if... Lot's of ifs--lol! Thank you for all of the nudging *squishy hug* Marcus... Well, he is Mr Innocent, isn't he? Feeling very *smug & smoothe* Thanks again for everything!<3<3<3
Flint looks like a shady bugger in any universe! :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Sunny! Thank you so much for reading--truly appreciate it! And I agree, absolutely, Flint can't fool anyone regardless of where he pops up--'a shady bugger in any universe'-heeeeee! Thanks again!xxx
Love how you have depicted Hermione's confusion and trauma -- and I'm also impressed by Sirius' kindness and care. Perhaps there's something else gogn on here... ;) Pxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Aaawww, *squish* thank you for reading, yet again:-) & for your generous feedback before, during and after--I had the help of a dearest friend with the confusion & trauma depiction, couldn't have done it without the one and only proulxes! Yes, I agree, it's, um, *interesting* to see this possible side of Sirius... but maybe only Hermione brings it out of him;-) We'll see what develops between these two in this particular scenario, shall we? lol! Thank you again, for everything!xxx
another great chapter. Looking forward to understand what is going on. I like riddles but unlike Hermione can never understand them. Looking forward to more
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
! I truly appreciate your feedback--more will be revealed about what is going on, and if anyone can solve this, Hermione can:-) We'll see what she does about it! Thank you so much again!
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much for continuing to read,
Quite a concoction. Events and emotions from three different universes. Well handled.
I have the feeling that this universe is going to create its own mix of emotions and regrets.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
, thank you for the read and very thoughtful feedback--truly appreciate it! I'm cracking my knuckles, trying to devise a bit of a mystery plot here (the ending is finished/resolved, however, the characters' developments and narrative in between are fighting back...), wanted to barrel along with the plot... but it became quite clear immediately that the emotions and regrets of each character and the three universes could not be pushed to the side easily... Thank you again for reading!
Response from Fairfield (Reviewer)
Glad to hear about the effort you are putting into the plot. The two characters are initially in shock, but their rational selves will soon assert themselves, and my feelings are that a strong plot is needed to hold this complex scenario together.
Strong enough story to stand on its own. It doesn't really need Hogwarts as a background. It could be any strong and intelligent woman in a society recovering from recent conflict.
Lots of suggestive questions. The narrative presents Sirius as more of an enigma with more potential than Flint (independently of what canon says about them).
Very good.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
, thank you so much for giving this a read and the very thoughtful feedback--I truly appreciate your keen insight and opinions. With your wonderful eagle-eyed gift, I love how you've described the essence of the personified Hermione in this tale-- she's/it's new unchartered territory for me, so I appreciate, again, that she and the story's set up are coming across as intended.Yes, Sirius... he is presented to Hermione as very much an ambiguous presence in this first chapter, and Flint the seemingly obvious one--trying to explore character dichotomies in a more focused way in this story than in some of my other ramblings;-) We'll see how it goes... Again, thank you for your thoughts!
Hmm, interested to see where this goes and what's going on.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much for the read and the feedback--truly appreciate it! Story is completed, just have to re-write/fill out some of the middle chapters a bit more, but next is in queue. More of how they both got to this time & space and what is going on more specifically in the next chapter--thank you again for reading a rare pair!
Woo hoo! It's here! Love the characters in this story - can't wait to see it played out! Pxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Yes, our baby has finally arrived--lol! Seriously, thank you so much for your nerves and talent you've given/shared with me and this story and characters (no, I didn't mean your blood, sweat & tears... did I? hehe!) These characters couldn't have fleshed out as they have without your nudging & nurturing-thank you again, from the bottom of my heart!naggy pooh
Intriguing, I like a good riddle. I Wonder if Flint is the villain here, and it is nice to meet Sirius agin, it looks like they are together in this time. Looking forward to read more
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much for reading and the feedback--truly appreciate it! There will be more of Flint and others;-) and more of how they came to be together in this time in the next chapter (story is completed, just must re-write some in-between chapters with more filling out of the riddling parts in more detail)- Thanks again for reading!xxx
A deduction and action chapter that settles the current criminal case, but leaves many things unexplained.
It appears to have brought our pair closer together.
Accusations and questions are flying. About events in different worlds. And who knows what a slightly different Sirius or Pansy might or might not have done. Or the crazed Marcus.
The chapter suggests that obsession with love - either as a profession in the case of the Department of Mystery personal or as an emotion in the case of Marcus - can be dangerous.
Sirius is revealed as more competent than Hermione had assumed.
At this point, I'm not certain whether or not Sirius and Hermione have counterparts who are now in the wrong universe.
We may discover that some things are irreversible and some things must remain unexplained.
(Canis Major at its zenith. )
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so very much for continuing to read and the detailed feedback--truly appreciate it!Reference to Sirius' and Hermione's counterparts in the other universes will be touched upon in the next/final chapter. Hoping to tie up many of the numerous loose ends of the multiple half-explained or completely unexplained things--perhaps a few will be left for the reader to fill in as they wish, but other things will be specifically, finitely expressed for this version of this tale. Again, thank you for taking the time to give this a read--and I love the Canis Major at its zenith!
An interlude of remembrance, discovery, and bonding.But. Being impetuous is seen as a fault in Sirius, but perhaps it is a matter of his being totally connected to the moment, and its other manifestation is being totally connected to the ones he loves to the point of being willing to die for them.
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Dear
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
, thank you for reading and the thoughtful feedback--yes, Sirius is impetuous and the observations about him being connected to the moment as well as being totally connected to the ones he loves will perhaps lead him to make decisions that will clash with how Hermione sees decisions needing to be made, due to his nature... Thank you again, truly appreciate it !
Excellent, really satisfying description of Knockturn Alley which sets the scene for an exciting fight which leaves Sirius seriously wounded -- eek! Can't wait for the next one to post, nag. This is a really enjoyable mystery. Pxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of Parallel Dilemma)
Thank you so much for all of the feedback--as you well know, I've been very loosely trying to follow an inverted detective story *thingy* here, a 'howcatchthem' of sorts... I'm so happy you like the Knockturn Alley vision (I know I took extra liberties with it, but yes, I also find it hard to believe that all of Magical London is confined to two narrow alleys, etc., so thank you for entertaining this notion)--thank you again for everything!