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19 Reviews | 6.16/10 Average
Oh my gods! NO! no no no no... 
I'm glad you gave Sev's POV. It really explains his actions from the first one. Of course, it's not condoned, but it's at least explained. You've written a very sensitive subject with grace.
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
Thanku :)Crookshanks has one as well if you're wanting to read.I'm not sure how i got this on 'paper' and to be as well-written as it is, seeing as I wrote it during/after an abusive relationship and I was pretty messed up in the head. It was barely polished, as well. Only a couple of spelling and grammar mistakes.This was my way of coping through that period of my life, and even though I do not under any circumstances condone what has happened in this fic, it felt and still does feel good to be able to express it and acknowledge what happened to me. Thankyou so much for reading and reviewing, considering the content.
Unfortunately, I think that Severus would have dealt better by talking to his wife. Well, he will never know, now.
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
They both had their problems. Severus with his inability to communicate and Hermione with her dramatic flair and unexpressed self-loathing and low self-esteem.Just wait til I write about how Snape treated his daughter...
Still ooc, backstory not convincing. Imo if you wish to make this kind of thing work, one needs to write a long story, NOT two brief pages. There are some fics out there who deal with this very "beautifully" , shame i forgot the name....
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
First of all, if you would care to read the note I left at the end of "the price of desperation", you would know that this is a series in the writing.Here, I'll copy it here for you.AAN: Yes, I know that canon!Hermione and even fanon!Hermione would stand up to him and not take his crap, but there is a BACK STORY that I intend on writing soon. There is a reason why she's like this, and it's too long to write on each and every review i get that minorly flames me for writing her like this. So, please, if you review, don't mention anything about how OOC you think he and she are. I know they're OOC, and I intend on explaining why. Now that I've finished my rant, I hope you did enjoy this fic.I really does annoy me when people don't pay attention to what's written in the author's notes, as they are PUT THERE FOR A REASON!
that wa absolutely terrible, why couldn't he catch her?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!that is just evil, he didn't seem that evil, ever!
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
xxxps. great writing though xxx
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
He killed Dumbledore. He's evil.'Nuff said.
how horrible i should have payed more attention to the warning and skpped it but since i didnt i'd like to say that i wish he would have spoke out against his father. i read that in another story too where his fathers voice influenced him but anyway poor hermione i wish she would have been stronger and just left him instead of killing herself
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
it's hard to leave someone when you've been brainwashed for years to believe something, like not being worthy. I used to be in a very violent relationship a few years ago and this is what i wished would happen. I was only in it for two years, Hermione was in it for about 10 (that will be explained in the next one that i'm working on.)thanks for the review!!
you have done it again!!! just completely blown my mind. this is absolutely BRILLIANT!!
it really gives great incite to the inner workings of Severus, and what makes him tick.
i cant wait to read the next companion piece. do you think it may end up being a longer fic? such as a short story or short novel? i would venture to guess that you could probably have quite a bit to work with as far as a more in depth plot may go.
or do you think you will be able to wrap everything up in just one more (or possibly a few more) companion piece(s)? i'm just curious because i really enjoy your writing and on one hand cant wait to see how you will finish this but on the other hand i dont want to see it end too soon.
(thats me...........
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Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
Awww......!!!! Thanks for the review!!! I've got an idea for another companion piece, it's from someone elses POV. (Not saying who, it'll ruin the surprise!) THEN I'm going to write the after, with their daughter. I've intentionally not mentioned her name so it'll be a surprise when I write it. Damn, I'm getting excited about writing this... Thanks for the support, you can't imagine how much it means to me.
<-- That's me!-Liz
<--- No, THAT'S me!!! lol
Definitely would like to know what happens to the child? Then again if he remains a bastard for the next 11 years maybe not.
thanks for a interesting read. p
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
Thanks for the review!!!There'll be another companion piece up by the end of the month, from somone else's POV.
Response from pickles (Reviewer)
Thanks
Wow, that was very powerful. I'm still reeling.My personal opinion is that this is not what Snape is like, really, and like say it is an opinion - not a criticism of your writing. I tend to write him darker as well and have portrayed him as a mentally unstable abuser.Having had personal experience of violence and people with violent pasts as well I'm not ignorant of it. I think one thing to be careful of (and this is not directed to you, more a thought of mine, I suppose) is that not all people with violence in their lives react the same way; that is, they don't all become physical abusers. There are other factors at play, which is why I am on Sev's side here (and that's going by canon).Also, I would't see Hermione marry an abusive man as she doesn't have the pathology for it (from what I've read of her thus far).Having said all that! I do like your story. It's well written and the gaps in each are made up in the other. The end was painful, but not sad. It's very thought provoking.I am very sorry this was something you have experienced so I hope in some small way it helped.
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
I don't know why, but I like Dark!Severus. He's a lot more challenging to write.Thanks for the review! Just the awesome response i've been getting from these fics keeps me wanting to write more of them!!-Liz
I think this one... definitely more of a companion piece than a sequel... was more powerful than the other. I actually felt a little nauseious at the end when she fell.
Of course, as I was reading this, I was saying to myself, "Haven't I read this before?" Hahaha. Yup, in a way. I prefer to think of it more as a 'parallel piece'. For some reason, I always prefer things from Severus' POV. Good job.
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
Thanks, nss!!That means a lot coming from an author of your standard...-goes all warm and happy from the praise-:D-Liz
OMG you have to get a time tunner you cant let her die, or make it a really bad dream thats about to happen a proamation of sorts..
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
Nup. But if I write another, it'll be with their daughter going to Hogwarts and meeting Ghost!Hermione. -snigger- Thanks for the review!!
Wow. This is a really gritty look at how someone can wrestle with their psychic demons and lose. I imagine it could be this way with someone so tortured, being married to someone so young and unsure of themselves.
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
Thankyou for the review :) Shares in Honeydukes to you!
Wow. Again!!!! So, I take back what I said about him not deserving her... But, again, I knew there was a reason.So, does he have two personalites? Because you said at the end "come back to us" Now, in this one all you can do is have pity for Snape, feel so bad for him. This one nearly made me cry.It's great!
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
Us, as in Sev and their daughter.Thankyou for the review :) Shares in Honeydukes to you!
I've been there but pulled back. He is still gone.
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
That's good to hear hun. Thankyou for the review :) Shares in Honeydukes to you!
I was going to review the first one... good I promise, but decided that I should read this one to understand the back story better. I enjoyed both very much. I have trouble seeing Hermione do this, but I can see Severus snaping and being very much like this. You did a great job showing how a person and think and feel one way, while sayinmg and doing something very different.Kudos to you!!
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
Thankyou!There are two more in the series, one from Crook's POV and another from their daughter's POV. (sneak peek, their daughter [to be named] encounters Hermione's ghost when she returns to Hogwarts)But, I've got to get off my butt and sit on my butt and write them. lolThanks for the review!
Write the sequal. I hope Severus gets his life back on track.
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
the sequel is half done. i've just got to finish it and fine tune it.Thanks for the review!
even more wrenching. thanks
Response from Twilexis (Author of .)
Thankyou for the review :) Shares in Honeydukes to you!
Severus' POV is just as sad, he should have gone for help sooner, and Poppy should have done her job and not just made him feel even worse.