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hexgirl147 Reviews | 6.71/10 (147 Ratings, 0 Likes, 2 Favorites )
Miss Granger,
I have something which belongs to you. If you wish to claim it, my home address is 49 Spinner’s End, Swinton. 8.30p.m on Tuesday would suit me best.
Severus Snape
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A 'lady or the tiger' scenario there at the end. *grin* I liked how Hermione complimented him on his smell. The one positive among all the negatives, I would think. ^_^
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Exactly! Good way of putting it. I think Severus has plenty of positives but she didn't want to seem TOO forward. She could have mentioned the intense eyes, the deep velvety voice, the resemblance to Alan Rickman.... but that kind of forewardness is for a whole other type of fic ;)Thanks for sticking with it so far and for your feedback.
I love how you teased us with "will they? Won't they?" and how, in the end, Snape still did the honorable thing, and just Obliviated her. I love how he put her at ease by pretending to accept her solution, allowing her to feel hopeful and even bask in the glow of a real compliment before he did what he truly intended all along. I love it. Thank you for not having them do sexy time, it just wouldn't have felt authentic to your stoic Snape, especially not in that particular situation. I can't wait for the next chapter!!
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thank you, you really seem to have got to the heart of the chapter and understood exactly what went on there from Snape's point of view I'm never sure if I managed to get my intentions over, so I think you answered my uncertainties. Yes, my Snape is of the more stoic variety rather than the rampant variety so I think he would be much more considerate of his actions.
So---they did make love? Or they didn't?Maybe the spell itself works in such a way that, once "consummated", it immediately removes all "memory" of the events required, even of the lovemaking itself, and leaves only the feeling?I can't wait for the next--so many questions!
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Well THAT is the question! Maybe they did, and maybe they didn't. I love how it seems to divide people, some are absolutely certain that they didn't and some are unsure. Unsure is good!More answers to come is all I will say. Thanks so much for sticking with it so far.
Response from countrymouse (Reviewer)
Pretty pretty please with sugar on top hurry with the next?It seems all my favorite stories are stalled, and waiting for a new chapter is like waiting for the next drop of water to fall from the stalactite.Pretty please? (puts on sweet pleading puppy face)
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
*Can't resist pleading puppy face and runs off to finish off next chapter* Thanks for your lovely plea. And great metaphor too ;)
Response from countrymouse (Reviewer)
I'll have to credit Mark Twain for that one. I read "Tom Sawyer" at an young age, and the description he gave of the one slow drop of water that had been falling "when the pyramids were new...one drop every three minutes, a dessertspoonful once in twenty-four hours," and of the horror of the wretched criminal locked in the cave who set up a cup of stone to catch that slow drop----made an indelible impression upon my memory.
That's it?!? I'm ready to kick him in the pants now!
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
My Snape is a traditional dresser so maybe you could kick him in the robes? Thanks for your feedback.
This chapter had my heart pounding. The fact that her immense distress at the mere thought of losing her trust in him again was enough to compell him to do what he did speaks volumns about how much her confidence means to him. He wanted to at least put her at ease before taking her memories. Perhaps he knows something - perhaps a relaxed, willing participant is more likely to keep the flavor of the event when Obliviated, whereas someone who fights it will not. Just speculating here.I love this story. Can hardly wait for more.
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Oh! VERY insightful indeed. You are definitely along the right lines. Thanks for your lovely feedback and shrewd speculation. More to come very soon.
This one causes the tears to erupt each and every time... You strike so many deep, painful nerves with the beautiful revelations of Severus' cross (or crosses) he bears; the remorse and denial, the pain and weight of the heaviness of his burdens and, perhaps the most profound impact, the resolute solitaire existence he has chosen just resonates again and again; depicting Hermione kneeling at the end always just sends an arrow through my heart - it's so painfully selfless, sweet and at the same time compassionate in it's sympathetic submissiveness-- her letting him know she knows what he's going to do, and understands him, as no one has ever before... *blubbering* - where's our emotion(s)? and
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thank you for getting so much out of this. I often think I'm just writing for myself in a very self-indulgent way. And often tell myself that I have to stop. But it feels so wonderful to hear your enthusiasm and that you are getting from it what I wanted to evoke. 'Compassionate in it's sympathetic submissiveness'! OH! I love that phrase. It's lovely to hear from you.
Response from nagandsev (Reviewer)
I get so much more out of your writing than I'm writing about in these reviews--every wonderful nuance and look and movement or restrainment of Severus'; I can just see and experience every second - thank you!-- as well as the second-to-second awareness, observations and heartbeats of Hermione... yum! If I were to write about everything, I might get it finished by summer break... or not...!:-) xxx
This one causes the tears to erupt each and every time... You strike so many deep, painful nerves with the beautiful revelations of Severus' cross (or crosses) he bears; the remorse and denial, the pain and weight of the heaviness of his burdens and, perhaps the most profound impact, the resolute solitaire existence he has chosen just resonates again and again; depicting Hermione kneeling at the end always just sends an arrow through my heart - it's so painfully selfless, sweet and at the same time compassionate in it's sympathetic submissiveness-- her letting him know she knows what he's going to do, and understands him, as no one has ever before... *blubbering* - where's our emotion(s)? and
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Ohh! two for the price of one. I'm not complaining :) Thanks again for your wonderful reviews.
Hexgirl, I just relish this chapter so much -- the dynamics and chemistry between Severus and Hermione- I love her fire and passion, the reference to her cathartic purging whilst he lets her, mmmn... what a reeeeal man - (hehe!), and his rigid control... the poignant rollercoaster ride of emotions the reader feels is just *wonderful*; your skill as a writer to evoke an unspeakable intensity and angst *my chest tightens in pain* regarding Severus is so powerful! Here's our favourite emoticon again: Even if one isn't a smoker, they crave a cigarette after reading your chapter(s)!xxx
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
NAG!! Hi. Thank you for such a wondeful review. I love that phrase: 'her cathartic purging' - very good way of putting it and definitely what I wanted to get across so I'm so glad you picked up on it. There is a lot of intensity and angst isn't there :) - I'm writing a comedy next, I've decided HAHA! And as for the emoticom: as an on/off smoker currently on an off.... I WANT ONE!!!!
great chapter looking forward to reading more of this soon I hope.
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thank you. Absolutely, chapter 6 is currently in the queue and awaiting validation.
Intense, good chapter
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Yes, you are quite right. Thanks for reading.
looking forward to the next one.
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Glad you are sticking with it, thank you.
The look in his own eyes caused her to stop; they did not show the contempt she expected. Regret and resignation replaced derision. She realised that Snape did not intend for her to share this information with anyone, least of all with someone with a connection to Lord Voldemort. Her eyes mirrored his as the reality of his intention became clear.‘You mean to Obliviate me,’ she said.*****In Chapter 2 when Snape "returned" Hermione's memories, he pointed his wand at her and said, ‘'Finite Obliviate!” I wondered at the time what it meant in the big picture, and now I think I know. He hadn't completely removed her memories - more like he had Spelled them into a part of her mind that she would not be able to freely access without him ending the Spell. Brilliant! I wonder if she had asked him not to completely Obliviate her, just make it so that she could be allowed to remember them one day in the future if he survived and could end the Spell. That's seems like something he would agree to since he really didn't have any hope of surviving the war, and why not humor the Foolish Girl! since he had already shared his memories with her... And it also gives me greater understanding of the following passage from the second chapter: Hermione glared back at him. ‘You are not any of those things,’ she said in an attempt to defend his statement.‘But you were not to know that!’ he retorted.She sat rigid in her chair and folded her hands. ‘I didn’t believe you were loyal to Voldemort even then.’Snape snorted. ‘How convenient is the benefit of hindsight.’‘That’s not it. You don’t have to believe me, but it’s true. I knew you hadn’t betrayed us as sure as I knew the Phoenix Tears could be trusted.’ She looked at him imploringly. ‘I’d felt certain of it for some time – something else I kept to myself. I knew that Ron and Harry wouldn’t be quite as willing to believe it. So, you see, sir – that’s why you don’t owe me a life-debt. There isn’t a great deal of written information on life-debt lore, but I did find out one thing: it is only evoked if the person you saved is an enemy.’He sat down again, and this time his expression seemed confused, almost troubled. He seemed unwilling or unable to answer, ignoring Crookshanks as he sidled past Snape’s legs and curled up in front of the fire.I love this story!!!Beth
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Well, you are certainly thinking along the right lines. It makes me realise that I'm asking the reader to concentrate quite heavily and to work hard and pay attention. You are certainly doing that. I worry a bit that the long gap inbetween chapters makes it too much like hard work and that perhaps it will be easier to read as a finished piece. But anyway, I'm so glad that I have readers like you that are totally getting it. I think I may surprise you yet though.Thank you so much for reading and for your wonderful feedback.
Ah! I just found your story and it is excellent. :) Can't wait for the next chapter!
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thanks very much. The next chapter is awaiting validation and should be posted soon.
excellent. I love reading about Snape's facial expressions and what Hermione sees in his eyes.
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. More to follow soon.
This story is so, so good It's physically painful when I get to the end of the chapter and realize there is, for the time being, no more. You are such a gifted writer, and I'm on the edge of my seat, eagerly and impatiently waiting for more!
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thank you for such a lovely review. The next chapter is in the queue and I can tell you that it is veeeeeeery loooong, so I hope your attention span is up to the challenge.
Another great chapter! I really appreciate your characterizations of both Snape and Hermione throughout this story. Specifically, I find it completely plausible that Snape's single-minded devotion to protecting Lily's son would cause him to lead a very strict lifestyle. It's heartbreaking to think he has to bear all of this pressure alone, so I am definitely looking forward to finding out if he does indeed Obliviate Hermione.I also thought you illustrated the emotions in this chapter beautifully. The dialogue, especially Snape's monologue, was both realistic and powerful. Once again, great job!
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thank you. And I'm glad you enjoyed my characterisations and my version of Snape as a strict self disciplinarian.It's nice to write an alternative version to canon events, one in which a little friendship eased the pain.Thank you for your lovely feedback.
thats alot of stress for him, i wouldnt have minded the last book if he had just one friend.........but he had none.
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
It is a lot of stress. And I agree that it was a terrible predicament to be in without a single friend. But would we have ached for his plight and become such devoted fangirls if it had been a little easier for him? I suppose that's why we turn to fanfiction - to redress the balance and to give him what his creator could not.
An indulgence for him is commonplace for most everyone else. I would guess this is what the title is in reference to. ^_^
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Yes, exactly right. A very good way of putting it. And you are right about the reference to the title (though there are some other reasons for that too).
It makes me feel so badly, that he felt he had to keep so much bottled up inside of him; And think it an indulgence to share everything with her through legillimency. That's awful! But of course, she would think he needs to obliviate her because no one should know his course. That would be knowing too much that could give him away. What a life! However, I have a question for you, dear author. Why such a puritanical/amoralistic/asexual life? How does that balance with the overly dramatic, emotional Severus that Lily knew?
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thanks for your feedback. I agree that it's awful to think of how difficult it must have been for him at that time. As for your question about the puritanical path I have him on: well first of all it is only my interpretation (obviously). But I see his behaviour post Lily, very differently from his behaviour pre her death. I think that once he learned of her death, that life, for him, was pretty much worthless and over. Dumbledore gave him a reason to live when he told him that his path was clear and that he must protect the boy. That is how I think Snape viewed his life from then on: as a quest to be fulfilled with almost religious fervour. I could quite easily imagine him making the decision to pursue that path with single-minded vigour. I could see him shunning anything that brings a bit of joy to life or that would steer him away from his mission, including a vow of chastity. It is all for Lily, in honour of her memory, and by way of atonement. I will also add that there are very compelling and plausibe arguments to the contrary, but this is how I see him.
Sniiffle. Poor Sev. Now my popcorn is damp.
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Oh no! Soggy popcorn! Sorry about that :)
WOW. Absolutely brilliant. I loved how you described their emotions. Very powerful.
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thank you very much. I was definitely feeling it when I wrote it. Glad it came over, thanks for your lovely feedback.
what a strange situation. :) can't wait for the next part. Whatever will Snape do?
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
It will get stranger! The next chapter will answer your question. Thanks for reading.
ooh, this should be good! Excellent so far.
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thank you. I hope you like the rest :)
I'm intrigued by this story. I can't wait to learn the contents of the rest of Hermione's forgotten memories.
Response from hexgirl (Author of Forgotten)
Thank you for reading and leaving a review. I hope you like the way it turns out for them. Next chapter not too far away.