The Twists of Fate
nagandsev47 Reviews | 7.62/10 (47 Ratings, 0 Likes, 3 Favorites )
What is the greatest sacrifice one can give? The final pairings of Remus and Nagini, and Severus against Sirius, in the Dark Arts competition for the Young Wizards Merit Award during their sixth year, gets out of hand. Unexpectedly, from this one event, their lives become intertwined, changed forever. Nagini, the main female character, is actually a precursor to Voldemort's serpent, Nagini.
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Reviews for The Twists of Fate
Good description of a confrontation with the personalities displayed.
Great intrigue that even captures Sirius’s imagination.
Nagini’s pain has turned into inner rage against herself and she wishes her life to end.
The force-the-Dark-Lord-knows-not comes into play.
Remus decides to go for information, presumably to help both Nagini and his side.
Response from Fairfield (Reviewer)
On the darker side, Tom is telling Nagini that he wants her to be special to him and he has the power to make that happen whereas Remus does not have the power to make that happen. Countering that is Remus's love for Nagini that makes her special both to him and herself, but Nagini has a premonition that that will not be. Is this to be a story of a long-held, flickering hope finally extinguished by pain and despair?
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you for your detailed and thought-provoking feedback, truly appreciate it! As odd as it has been and is, the story will segue into being 'canon compliant'; so yes, hope will be explored a bit more and some of the continued effects of it on both Nagini and Remus, affecting their choices and decisions--a bit more exploration of what and when the twists of fate will leave them to their canon destinies, one's lot in life, as it were, but perhaps some uplifting hope can linger on as a legacy to one affected--we'll see how mushy or how stark the Muse will be... The thing is, yes, what is special to Tom is not necessarily to Nagini and Remus; moreover, Riddle and his powerfully petty streak can be very persistent and persuasive; he doesn't take kindly to not getting what he wants, how he wants it, nor having anyone interfere with his plans, etc.Thank you again for reading this!
Insight that reuniting with a loved one renders the past irrelevant.
Prophesying another witch indicates the end is near for this couple.
As before, hope for togetherness is dashed by the appearance of one of the warring parties. Nagini was born in the wrong time and at the wrong place. Her life is ruined by being caught in the conflict.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you for reading and the feedback--truly appreciate your thoughtfulness, and so glad that the undercurrents coming to the surface are being conveyed, coming across. Yes, some are born in the wrong time and place, and where there is such potential, many a life ruined by factors beyond their control, caught in the midst of other forces at work--thank you so much for all of your thoughtful observations!
Through the chapter runs the pangs of a love that has not died.Good confrontation scene.Remus, perhaps with the support of Moody, is resisting the Ministry stripping him of all humanity. He wonders why Nagini has treated him the way she has although the readers may wonder why she has done what she has done since she appears to be under restraint and compulsion.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you so much for reading and the review, such thoughtful, insightful feedback--truly appreciate it!So happy that the chapter comes across as intended, Remus' situation as well as Nagini's--thank you again!
A stark chapter of torture and false accusations. Prophecy appears to occur involuntarily.Is Dumbledore this dense, or is he playing a game to coerce Remus into something? I have forgotten what Moody wanted from Remus.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, the gift of prophecy is erratic here, perhaps due to the state of the Seer. There is a duplicity in Dumbledore's character which allows him to be quite double-dealing; he thrives on games, quite the master of them. Moody, as Head of the Auror department, has an ongoing need for infiltrators to counter Voldemort's growing number of followers, beasties included
Thank you so much for reading and the feedback, truly appreciate it!
"I'm a beast.""Yes.""A hairy beast.""Yes. Yes.""I'm serious. I'm an animal.""Yes! Yes!! Yes!!!"
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
LOL! Yes!!! Thank you so much for the lovely drabble-of-a-review--so honoured!Truly, deeply appreciate it!
The ring brings pleasant visions which Nagini clings to while ignoring possible danger since her previous life has been unpleasant. Remus proposes pleasant activities while ignoring possible danger because his previous life has been unpleasant.
Wishing to savor the pleasant moments, the two have not confronted the major problems facing them.
Peter was not the expert they had hoped he was. And he made a poor choice. He should have used a hair from a lady of the night.
Severus is more commanding in this story than in canon since in this story he confronts his peers while in canon he bullies students.
Reflecting on his being a magical lover, did the professionals prepare him for that? Not certain since his objective with them may have been different from his objective with Nagini.
A well-written chapter filled with dramatic scenes.
While reading this story, I keep thinking ‘Romeo and Juliette.’
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, both seem to be wishing for something pleasant to experience which neither has quite experienced before; alluding to Peter's early experimentations with potion spells, yes, a lady of the night would've been a better choice!;-)Ah, poor Severus, and all that pent up aggression... Remus may have found a bit of nirvana derived from his acquired magical lover plateau-- professionals most probably have had a lot to do with helping with achieving that state, but yes, something else more seems to be consuming him regarding Nagini. Thank you so much for continuing to read this bizarre love story, nothing too much new under the sun--lol! Yes, the Houses of Slytherins and Gryffindors, the wizarding version of the Houses of Capulets and Montagues! Truly appreciate your feedback!
Every witches dream - a wizard addicted to chocolate.Subtle wordplay of kissing the frog - could have mentioned her prince.Hints of depths in Peter and the ring.Surprised at Remus finding fulfillment with professionals since he seems the type to find schoolgirls' immature flirtations charming, but perhaps, that's all he allows himself.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
'Every witches dream - a wizard addicted to chocolate.'--lol! Indeed. Ha! Ah, yes, where would the world be without maidens in need of their princes... Yes, more with Pettigrew and the ring. Remus probably, definitely, finds satisfaction in both professionals and in schoolgirls and their potential promises charming, however... he's never quite mustered up the will to act upon and reciprocate with a classmate he'd have to see every day (as opposed to being a random client, less obligation), not as cavalier as Sirius, let's say imho--until now when too much opportunity is making him an offer he doesn't any longer wish to refuse.;-)Thank you again for reading and the feedback, truly appreciate it!
Time compression as Remus goes from lonely boy to magical lover within a few days. They have not told each other about their major problems - the physicality of being wanted and touched has overwhelmed them. Both are denying what they've heard about the other. Remus is overdoing it as he wants to have Nagini in a perfect place, but this perfect place involves transgression and danger. Neither can accept the other's friends. The story is well constructed enough that, at this stage, clumsy snogging and groping would be as heart wrenching.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Ah, yes, regarding Remus, only in fanfiction--lol! Struggling to zero in on them and, if left alone, to just be alone with each other, who they would be without the millstones, without their peers, for once, Remus desiring to experience something uniquely for him, for them, feeling both an impulsiveness and freedom unlike before. Thank you so much for the read and feedback, truly appreciate it!
A key element of this chapter is Pomfrey who reacts to any threat from students but who is oblivious to Lucius who does deeper and more lasting harm. Perhaps Pomfrey can do something about the damage students do toeach other but is powerless against Lucius, and hence, she chooses to ignore what he does. Along these lines, Nagini does not complain to anyone about what Lucius has done, possibly because she believes no one can protect her.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, from the indifferent to the insidious--things that are done in a semi-public setting and got away with partially due to position and the allowances given to those that hold power, such as a govenor of the school, affluent member of the society, for whatever reasons, etc. Lucius and Rodolphus are too close-knit for her to think objectively at this point; they've pressed the other's buttons too much.Thank you so much for continuing to read, truly appreciate it!
Merrythought may not be aware of its depth, but she is aware of house rivalry. It is not Sirius versu Remus in the duels.Thoughts and emotions conveyed by action and dialogue. It is 'us versus them' with with the conflict hard to stop and each side ignoring its own atrocities. Peter, the sneak, is goading others.If this has been going on a while, then the duellers would be treated as a separate class. Society would accept their injuries much as society accepts the injuries of professional athletes. Each dueller should have followers (groupies) - even Severus. There would also be bonding between the members of this separate class, but house rivalry runs deep except possibly for Nagini and Remus.Good portrait of Dumbledore and his occasionally cavalier attitude toward others.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
A blasé chord about house rivalry by the staff has always struck me as outrageous on one hand and utterly plausible on another--wanted to touch on that a bit. Yes, the Marauder era goings-on seemed very clearly divided and extreme as the predecessors of Harry Potter's generation at Hogwarts. Pettigrew's insidious inclinations also must have been notable, here an there, until he blossomed into fruition. Yes, the duellers would be looked upon in a special way, expected to hold their chins up at all times, the injuries as occupational hazards; yes, Dumbledore and his nonchalant ways--lol!Thank you so much for reading and the review, truly appreciate it!
It follows the literary tradition of beginning in media res.Professor Galatea Merrythoughtless.Rowling-style humor. anything from a sofa chair to a rodent. Which in hindsight had led to more than a few students being sent to Madam Pomfrey. That is, after they managed to catch the little rodent.Why are those four proficient in the Dark Arts? The first conjecture is alienation: Sirius from his family, Remus from society, and Severus from his fellow man. Nagini is still an unknown.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you so much for reading this and the feedback, truly appreciate it! This is also one of my first stories, the offshoot from my other Nagini tale--I had originally wanted one story featuring the escapades of the trio Nagini, Severus, and Remus but... the Muse wouldn't cooperate and demanded two separate tales. So finding myself in a pickle with these characters, who refused to go away, I've slowly plotted it out. Merrythoughtless--HA! Mayhem running wildly in the classroom--catch the little rodents--lol! One can just imagine.;-)Yes, it seemed to me, for them to have become what they were very skilled at, as adults, Dark Arts professors and outlaws feared by Ministry and Death Eaters alike, the desire, skill, necessity and need to be very proficient in the Dark Arts had somehow been an innate part of them and their circumstances at an earlier stage, wanted to explore that by dropping in on them at an earlier time on the timeline of things.Thank you so much for your insightful thoughts!
It's all coming into place in line with canon - clever, Nag! Lupin spending time with Aurors will put him in the way of Tonks. And if this ends badly for Lupin and Nagini, it will explain why he never seemed able to fully commit to Tonks. And there was me thinking he was gay!! ;) This is the first time I felt chilled at the appearance of The Order.This can't end well.Or can it??
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you! Yes, believe it or not, in this oddity, I would like to keep with canon as much as possible - lol! - just exploring the possibilities in the back scenes: Being my twin, you know how my mind works-- yep, yep, and yep, with how he'll meet up with Tonks (small circle they move in - ha!)-- I finally indulged and purged myself in my first (and last) Remus slash one-shot (an anonymous prompt from an LJ thingy) which reads like a textbook, literally, of slashy content (didn't understand the importance of the prostrate being hit in flagrante delicto--googled it --and now, I understand - hahaha!). *whew* back to my hetero (or at least, bi - lol!) RemusOh, I'm so glad The Order came across like that to you because that is how precisely they will be--I have this perception they were as equally dark as those they were fighting (allowed to use the Unforgiveables, etc.)--the First Wizarding War has a level of brutality & intensity in the evolution of Voldy's rise to power and those who tried to counter it... Thank you again for all of your generous observations--truly, deeply appreciate it!xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you! Yes, believe it or not, in this oddity, I would like to keep with canon as much as possible - lol! - just exploring the possibilities in the back scenes: Being my twin, you know how my mind works-- yep, yep, and yep, with how he'll meet up with Tonks (small circle they move in - ha!)-- I finally indulged and purged myself in my first (and last) Remus slash one-shot (an anonymous prompt from an LJ thingy) which reads like a textbook, literally, of slashy content (didn't understand the importance of the prostrate being hit in flagrante delicto--googled it --and now, I understand - hahaha!). *whew* back to my hetero (or at least, bi - lol!) RemusOh, I'm so glad The Order came across like that to you because that is how precisely they will be--I have this perception they were as equally dark as those they were fighting (allowed to use the Unforgiveables, etc.)--the First Wizarding War has a level of brutality & intensity in the evolution of Voldy's rise to power and those who tried to counter it... Thank you again for all of your generous observations--truly, deeply appreciate it!xx
I'm breathless! Nagini's stiff-necked collar and strange green hue.... OH! What's happening to her? And poor Lupin! I love the idea of classification: XXXXX. It sounds like a department that should have a whole fanfiction to itself. Right now, I can't see this ending well for our erstwhile lovers, but whatever future you have in store for them, you have woven a fascinating and compelling tale - if very dark at times.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for the read and lovely, detailed feedback! I agree about the classification department - lol! Thank you so much for your generous supportive commentary and observations in spite of the content and pairing--truly, deeply appreciate it!xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for the read and lovely, detailed feedback! I agree about the classification department - lol! Thank you so much for your generous supportive commentary and observations in spite of the content and pairing--truly, deeply appreciate it!xx
Oh! Listen to him, Dumbledore. Why are you being so obtuse? Dear Nag, please get them out of this situation. What is going to happen to Nagini now? Off to find out.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for continuing to read this and for the feedback! Dumbles is being Dumbles--he always has the excuse of being preoccupied with greater good things--thank you again, really appreciate it!xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for continuing to read this and for the feedback! Dumbles is being Dumbles--he always has the excuse of being preoccupied with greater good things--thank you again, really appreciate it!xx
Alright, nag.... I'm getting ready for the heartbreak. Why can't they just get away? It seems so sad that she is trapped in the layers of her horrible family and their expectations. He's a lovely guy (werewolf transformations notwithstanding!) and it's so obvious he likes her - but every time they get closer, she seems to remember her obligations and pulls away. Come on Remus! Pxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh, Pxx, thank you so much--you needn't have, you know why--but thank you for the specific feedback, truly appreciate it! I was hoping that enough of his sincerity, his feelings for her are coming across, and hers for him--I agree: come on, Remus!--even Remus needs a little loving attention now and then - lol! Seriously, thank you for ALL of your support with my wandering muses... xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh, Pxx, thank you so much--you needn't have, you know why--but thank you for the specific feedback, truly appreciate it! I was hoping that enough of his sincerity, his feelings for her are coming across, and hers for him--I agree: come on, Remus!--even Remus needs a little loving attention now and then - lol! Seriously, thank you for ALL of your support with my wandering muses... xx
So Tonks is still in his future? Doesn't bode well for Nagini! :0
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, Tonks has been seen by the Inner Eye:-( Thank you so much for continuing to read & the feedback--truly appreciate it!xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, Tonks has been seen by the Inner Eye:-( Thank you so much for continuing to read & the feedback--truly appreciate it!xx
Explanations are needed, but I'm sure she has a good one. :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for reading, and yes, explanations will be given with time--I think Remus will agree with you--she has a few good ones:-) Thanks again!xxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for reading, and yes, explanations will be given with time--I think Remus will agree with you--she has a few good ones:-) Thanks again!xxx
Well I can see why they felt the need to indulge in each other in the aftermath of the confrontation and revelation of Lupin's 'furry little problem' in the previous chapter.I'm really glad that Nagini took it so well, but perhaps she is already in too deep to be deterred by his animl side. Or perhaps it adds to his charms ;)Very juicy and well-written lemons too, Nag. I wish I could write them :). I have to say that I think your Lupin is much sexier than JKRs. I'm intrigued by the title: it sounds very Gaelic, is it Irish?But after all that, what a cliffhanger! Update very soon!!!!
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for all of the generous feedback - what a lovely gift:-) yes, they both couldn't resist, regardless of the furry little problem - LOL! Thank you for the feedback on the lemony content, and you're such a sweetheart about Lupin, thank you for your comments, hope he is a bit more than what JKR only allowed us to peek at - hehe! - I can't help wanting to give him a bit more *attention*; the title's Scottish, and is literally translated as 'second sight', more bits & pieces of Scottish to come later, just for flavouring:-) Thank you again for all of your support!
I really enjoyed this chapter, Nag! I know it is said a lot in reviews but I have to say that your characterisation of Severus is eerily acurate. He wasn't like some romantic, Rickmanised version of Snape, this was JKR's Snape through and through, yet without the Harry filter we are so used to. His reactions and dialogue were perfect. The argument between Lupin and Snape reminded me, to some extent, of the one some years later between Severus and Sirius at Grimmauld Place.I love the idea of Nagini part turning into Lily, and of Snape's reaction to that. I could really imagine him seething away as he discovers that his love is being used in such a cavalier way by his enemy.I know, I know, I'm focusing on the Sev bits, what am I like? It was a very well written and exciting chapter, but oh dear, trust Severus to spill the beans about Lupin's furry little secret (although, to be fair, there HAD been other clues). How will Nagini respond? I suppose I will just have to wait.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Hahaha, oh
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, focus on Sev's bits all you want, my dear, I know I have & will - beyond my control! Thank you for your feedback on Sev's characterisation; I'm *blushing* at your compliment that he is recognisably JKR's Snape - as much as I am utterly made gaga whenever the Rickman appears, I did want the Sev in these stories to be more of JKR's harsh canon depiction of him, so, thank you for the feedback! It means a lot to me! I just felt he had to be a bit, justifiably (sorry Remus - hehe!) nasty to Lupin... (can't help being, um, loyal to Sev when he'll appear on the scene - more of Sev later!) Boys will be boys type of thingy going on... Sev would truly have been irked if anyone used anything-even-remotely-related-to-Lily, wouldn't e *sighing* 'Oh, Severus...' OK, I'l stop fousing on Sev - Thank you so much for the read & review - your precious free time!
Things went a bit downhil between them in this chapter. I hope you're planning to make it up to them later, missy! :P
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you for reading & the review! I agree & I'll make a promise right now to make it up to them later! ;-) Thank you so much for all of your feedback!
Hehe, wonder who the Polyjuice will be. Hope it's not Sirius. :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Sirius - brilliant! ROFL! Hahaha - omg, I feel a crack/slash-fic, pwp, coming on me, you naughty
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, or maybe a threesome and Remus has to experience & decide which one's the real Sirius & which one's the real Nagini - HA!:) I'm grinning wildly & giggling about that idea - Thank you so much for the read & observation! LOL!
Oops. They got a little carried away. What is she, a jellyfish? :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Hahaha! I love jellyfish, but Nag still has some vertabrae:) Neither of their spells could fully succeed as intended, due to each one's particular (biochemically speaking) precursive/'secret' conditions (more on that later) so a variant of it/each transfigured - thank you so much for the read & review!
Merrythought obviously gave NO thought to the pairings! :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
- you've made my day - Merlin bless you- thanks for reading & the review! It always amazed me how seemingly 'oblivious' the professors were to house rivalry... Again, thank you so much for the read - really appreciate it (know its 'way out there' - just wanted to give Remus a little attention...)!:)
About time Remus got himself a little lovin'! :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Here, here - absolutely! LOL! Thank you so much for the affirmation!:)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Here, here - absolutely! LOL! Thank you so much for the affirmation!:)
Sounds like two people who need a sympathetic ear. :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Aww - thank you for reading & the review! Yeah, they both definitely could use & need a little objective sympathy without all the judgement and expectations of either's peers & acquaintances - thank you again, really appreciate it!:)