Darna Shealladh - Part One
Chapter 7 of 13
nagandsevWhat is the greatest sacrifice one can give? The final pairings of Remus and Nagini, and Severus against Sirius, in the Dark Arts competition for the Young Wizards Merit Award during their sixth year, gets out of hand. Unexpectedly, from this one event, their lives become intertwined, changed forever. Nagini, the main female character, is actually a precursor to Voldemort's serpent, Nagini.
Nagini stared at Remus, stunned.
She blinked hard. Her eyes smarted, batting back the tears, remembering Remus standing bravely before four Death Eaters downstairs in the Hog's Head pub while she fled to safety. Not knowing what would happen next, she became overwhelmed and frustrated. "You're not a coward...I'm the coward! And you're not..."
He cut her off sharply. "I am a beast, to be feared, despised...you'll be thanking Uncle Rodolphus quite soon for 'enlightening' you; that is, if Snape hasn't already!"
Her frustration vented itself. Nagini felt warm tears running down her cheeks. Why is he saying this? It's as if... A soft sob welled up and escaped from her lips. He wants me to reject him now! Push me away!
"You're cruel, Remus."
Remus looked hard at her. Her pain struck him deeply, a blistering force splashing against his already taxed nerves. But, he had to put an end to this to them. The past hour's events had spelt that out loud and clear.
"Yes, when pushed to be, I can be quite cruel." Before Nagini could comment, he continued in a pedantic tone, "I'm a coward because I've never told you before that I'm a... beast."
"Remus... Don't..." Nagini felt as if she had become Petrified, except for the nauseous wave welling up inside her.
"Nagini, you do believe I would never ever hurt you, don't you?"
She nodded in agreement, pressing her tear-stained lips tightly together.
Lupin looked up at the octangular window with the moonbeams streaming in, softening the dim lit room with its glow. "The moon is waxing wan, and you're safe. I won't hurt you. I can't hurt you." His brows furrowed, edged with torment. He repeated, "I would never hurt you, intentionally, that is."
Staring at her, Remus felt his pain and shame, aching and longing for her, all clash and battle through his veins.
"I'm a werewolf, Nagini."
Remus barely breathed as he watched her, intently, waiting for the panic to set in. The hysteria. The fear.
Nothing!
Nagini remained still. Her face was calm, no emotion. She only stared back at him.
Feeling compelled, the shaggy-haired Gryffindor Prefect quietly proceeded to point out, "All the rumours, all the snide Slytherin remarks, implications... they are all true."
Still no reaction... But then, a change occurred. Remus' chest tightened as the golden orbs peering at him shifted from being unreadable to filling with an emotion he loathed: pity.
True, he wanted her to stay calm. She's already been through enough tonight... but, he wouldn't allow this: fear, yes; pity, no! He expected her to respond differently, anything but this; he was used to rejection, that he had mastered well... But sympathy, sorrow for the outcast I am? Never! "During my transformation period, I'm a hideous, uncontrollable beast." He looked her straight in the eye. "I'd just as soon rip your throat out as look at you."
This final statement struck a nerve in Nagini. She involuntarily bolted up and inched away from him until her back touched the wall.
Caught between frustration and shame, a surge of anger flared within Remus. He lashed out, "You're not saying anything, and you should!"
A cold, cloudy numbness had invaded Nagini's limbs and thoughts. "I don't know what I'm supposed to say." Watching Remus as he rose slowly, she shivered. "You just told me that you are a werewolf," she reflected aloud as best she could, her lips quivering, "but all I see when I look at you is..." She gazed at him with a sad longing. "You: Remus."
Suddenly, the vision of herself and Remus walking side by side through pristine, glowing snowfall hand in hand flashed in her mind again. But then, an even stronger sensation of déjà vu enveloped her: Here! This room... together, before...
She covered her face with her hands and cried out softly as a warm burst of energy issued from her heirloom ring, coursing up her left arm and pulsing through her body. As if in pain, she hugged herself in an attempt to control her shivering.
Remus mistook her cry as a sole reaction towards him. At seeing tears, once again, stream down her face, his heart broke. The sight of her in such a dire way was so miserable; his breathing became irregular and strained. He leaned against the wall, roughly running one hand through his hair in exasperated tension; he restrained himself from helping her in fear that any physical contact would cause her to snap into hysteria or worse. Now that she knows what I truly am... How did I expect her to react to me? What was I thinking? I wasn't thinking. Remus, you selfish idiot!
Nagini's teeth began to chatter from an invisible cold now creeping throughout her, absorbing any inner warmth.
Remus saw that she was trembling so hard, she could barely stand. Instinctively, he rushed over and caught her just in time as she began to slide down the wall and, in one swift swoop, lifted and carried her over to the bed.
"Darna Shealladh... Darna Shealladh," she rasped out in his arms, her head arched back and eyes clenched closed.
Believing she was having a seizure of sorts, Remus placed her down and proceeded to lie down beside her; he promptly clasped her in his arms, pinning her against him in a tight embrace. Her trembles ceased, although she continued to murmur, 'Darna Shealladh,' over and over again, until, slowly, she quietened. Relieved that the sudden onset had subsided, he relaxed his grip, and she lay cradled, her head resting on his chest, her body half draped over his.
Time passed with them lying in each other's arms.
Time passed with him relishing the sensation of her molded to him.
In the stillness of the night, only her soft breathing was heard.
In the coolness of the dim lit room, her body heat was all the young wizard was cognitive of.
All else was forgotten.
Except for the warmth of his hardening cock. She feels so incredible lying in my arms... He allowed himself a moment longer to enjoy the pure simple pleasure of it. For he'd never just lain with a witch like this, and the reality of it being Nagini ignited him from the core. I've got to get her off of me before... His Adam's apple bobbed, and he sat up a bit, trying to delicately roll her off of his torso. Nagini stirred and shifted her body weight; Remus tried to counter-shift away from her resting thigh pressing on his hardened member.
"Nagini," he whispered, his voice husky with emotion, lowering his arms from her, "We should leave now for Hogwarts..."
"Why did you finally tell me the truth?"
"Isn't it obvious?" He gulped, pausing. "I care for you, a great deal." Remus met Nagini's inquisitive gaze with the old forlorn look of longing for that which he should not. Against his better judgment, the sandy-haired wizard admitted with candour, "I want you, desire you greatly, almost uncontrollably. Almost. What remains of my control has allowed me to disclose this to you. So, now you know. And now, we can put an end to this before it truly ever begins."
Nagini lowered her head, resting it once again on his chest. She closed her eyes tight and hugged him even tighter. Lovingly.
"Don't," whispered Remus.
Ignoring this, she clutched him more firmly and said softly, "Darna Shealladh."
Trying to keep coherent over his throbbing hard-on, Remus' brow knitted as he enquired, "Darna Shealladh: 'second sight' what of it?"
"I... I have it. I've seen us here. Before. Just like this."
Remus registered her confession, at first, stoically. The incongruity and absurdity of it all! If you had any true clairvoyance, you would have seen how disastrous this entire evening was to be! But then, her naivety in believing this...Her Inner Eye?... the ridiculousness of it all, caused him to give her a gentle hug, not intending to encourage her. Or himself.
Involuntarily, he kissed her hair, only to jerk his head towards the window and stare once again at the mocking moonbeams. His thoughts turned pensive. But she believes it... just to get her back to Hogwarts, then we can discuss the absurdness of her Inner Eye later...
"Your heart," murmured Nagini. "Your heart is thumping so hard."
Remus swallowed and then sighed heavily, his chest heaving.
"Yes. It's the effect," responded Remus slowly. "The effect you have on me." Nagini's bent leg, her thigh, was ever-so-slightly exerting pressure on his pronounced erection. He was running his fingers absentmindedly through her hair. Like Selene, she has an involuntary effect on me. God, I've got to get her back to Hogwarts, and quickly... His thoughts were in a whirlwind, but more distracting was her body pressing against his, slamming his libido into overdrive. Nagini's fingers were slowly feeling his sinewy, muscular chest, tracing softly downwards to his well-defined, sculpted thighs. As her fingertips gently grazed upward again, meeting his defined ribs, and then, lowering her touch further, feeling lightly over his taut, well-defined lower abdomen muscles, now tightening, her hand rested on his hip, pausing. He was unable to move. At her mercy. Waiting.
Nagini shifted her weight, sitting up languidly. Her mercurial, long hair flowed down, framing her face; her golden eyes were invitingly looking into his.
There it was. As their eyes met and held each other's gaze, both knew there was no going back.
Remus felt her lips, the most gentle kiss he'd ever experienced. And again. Then, she brushed sweetly over his eyelids, his nose tip, his cheekbones... He felt her move away and slowly opened his eyes to see that she was sitting back. Her focus had lowered to his chest.
Nagini decisively started to unbutton his shirt.
Remus felt his bare skin being exposed, being touched by her so very feminine fingertips. The tickling softness of her hair brushed his bare skin as she tilted her head downward, intent on what she was doing, causing his head to arch back in pleasure. In between her haptic actions, he heard himself making excuses, "I'm scarred; my whole body scarred."
Nagini paused and gave him a thoughtful look, but continued to unbutton, determinedly pulling his shirttail out of his trousers in order to undo the last one. Succeeding, she brushed aside the cloth and sat back, admiring his lean, tightly-muscled torso. Her eyes fell upon the multiple marks of various lengths and depth. She lowered her head, and Remus felt her full lips kiss and her wet tongue flick softly across the ultra-sensitive marked skin. As she caressed his flesh with her lips and licked across a particularly long, scarred gash underneath his right ribcage, his chest rose and fell; his breathing became short and stringent.
She was slowly moving her head down. The warm air from her mouth made him all the more conscious of his now painful erection. His skin was tingling, and his hardened arousal throbbed expectantly as her lips lowered on the soft tufts of his joy trail, increasing the pressure, teasingly nipping and sucking his flesh. Her fingers had now found his old leather belt hook; the unwavering Slytherin tugged and unfastened the metal buckle and continued to open one by one the crotch buttons. Oblivious to everything, except watching her, feeling her touch, he arched his hips in anticipation, helping to assist, lowering and pulling his underpants and trouser off.
Nagini gazed at his nakedness, curious and admiring. Her burning cheeks and resolute touch inflamed him.
"Come to me," he uttered.
She slowly half-crawled between his legs; her clothed breasts brushed his erect cock's tip as she stretched upwards, meeting Remus' mouth. Their mutual kisses were now searching and demanding. Nagini felt Remus' fingertips exploring her breasts, searching for the opening to her blouse, and finding none, impatiently he leaned forward, grabbing her buttocks, nudging her hips to come forward.
"Sit on me," he throatily whispered.
She made to do so, but could not resist and swooped down to lick the tip of his luscious cock. Remus groaned and his fingers grasped her tightly, encouraging, spurring her to take in the first few inches. She felt his tension, his anticipation, and she started to lick and suck him, bobbing around and around, up and down on his cock.
Remus had pushed up and back against the headboard. His jaw slackened only to tighten in euphoric grimacing from her exquisite oral ministrations. In between his wincing in spouts of ecstasy, he stroked Nagini's head, gathering her hair away from her face. Through his half-closed lids, he watched her suck him: she was gorgeous. He could've gazed at her infinitely, but his hand suddenly clutched the bedspread as he contracted upward; he felt his balls tightening up. Not wanting to come so soon, he firmly grabbed Nagini, pulling her up by her waist and arm; he kissed her passionately and guided her to straddle him. His hands found their way to her skirt's waist hook, undoing it, quickly tugging and pulling the loose material up and over her head.
The narrow waist got entangled in her arms, propelling a frantic, animalistic urgency which took over both of them. Nagini ripped her skirt in the final tug over her head, then snapped her blouse up and off. With the freeing of her breasts from its clad constraint, Remus' mouth was kneading and sucking them hungrily. He teasingly nipped and suckled her nipples while his hands explored the flesh of her buttocks, tight and flexed as her legs straddled him; his cock burned against her thinly covered flesh.
Nagini arched back; Remus braced and balanced her weight as he continued to lick, suck and swirl her breasts and nipples; he had wanted to go slower, but felt a ravenous, carnal hunger unlike any he had ever known before. One hand found its way down, pulling aside her thin crotch covering, determined to gauge her arousal; he felt between her wet folds.
Explored her.
As Nagini mewled sharply, Remus knew he had found the rosebud he sought and pressed skillfully against the delicate nub, her mewling and wetness increasing tenfold. He panted, "Sit on me. Rise up." She did so, and he tried to guide her, taking his cock in hand, to lower herself on him. She placed her hand on his and slowly helped place his tip in her vaginal entrance and began lowering her wet cunt down. As she began to sheath herself on him, he thrusted upwards, and she yelped in pain.
Remus stopped, panting hard. "Oh, fuck!" he gasped aloud, snapping up and embracing her to him. Panting, strained in carnal agony, he flipped her quickly on her back. Trying to regulate his breath, he stroked her breasts as he kissed her naval and soft flesh leading to her Venus mound. He hastily gathered and jerked her knickers off; he then stroked her pubic hair, strummed her vaginal lips, slowly inserting one finger, then another; he was trying to go slowly, but his painful erection needed relief soon, and she was... A virgin! Fuck! He crawled over to place his head between her legs, and just like that very morning at the Astronomy Tower, he enjoyed her succulent wetness, her moaning and whimpering, her clawing his back, her nails digging into his skin as her toes curled in orgasm, piercing into his shoulders.
While she was still undulating in post-orgasm, he slowly positioned himself on her, his erection at her entrance. Kissing her as gently as he could muster, he could only whisper, "Nagini, Nagini...do you want this?" Please, please... the gods have mercy on me!
Nagini whispered, "Yes..." He felt her hands pressing his buttocks, encouraging him to enter her. His body was only too ready. He pushed into her. As soon as he had thrusted through her hymenal membrane, both crying out, he probed her to the hilt, at first roughly, but then in regulated rhythm, allowing her to adjust to his width and length, his force and speed.
Her soft groans and clinging intensified as she began to greet his movements with equal, measured carnal rhythm, undulating, moving and fucking in sync; Nagini met his hard pounding with equal force, her vaginal muscles squeezing him tight in intensifying contractions, both of them fucking deliriously. In his pre-orgasmic bliss, Remus forgot all else and pounded her pussy in lost oblivion until Nagini shook beneath him, clawing and clinging to him for life. Her cry of orgasm triggered him over the edge; Nagini felt his hot seed released inside her.
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The night would be filled with sporadic lovemaking: short bouts of resting, longer bouts of pleasuring one another fully. Deeply. Now that they had crossed the threshold of fleshly union, they touched and fucked at leisure, leaving no inch of either's body unexplored. Exhausted from their ravenous, salacious exertions, they drifted into a satiated repose, wrapped in each other's arms.
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"We're home free," commented Remus, breaking the serene silence he and Nagini were enjoying as they reached the edge of the glistening woods. They had awoken in a drowsy, post-coital bliss, only to immediately become aware that the air had changed; dawn was nearing. Hastily they dressed and hurried out of the eternally dim lit room; casting undetectable spells around them, they cautiously snuck out of the silent and seemingly vacant Hog's Head as stealthily as possible. Knowing that dawn was fast drawing near, they proceeded and succeeded in quickly leaving Hogsmeade incognito.
Only one more low-sloped hill and they would head downward directly toward the Shrieking Shack where Remus would guide Nagini through the connecting tunnel and safely pass the Whomping Willow back to the castle.
As they followed the snowy path from Hogsmeade hand in hand, Nagini felt the freshness, the newness of her world. I am changed... She impulsively confessed, "I want to spend every moment with you!"
Remus smiled, but there was a sweet sadness lingering around it. They had barely spoken throughout their torrid lovemaking; no words had been necessary. Only their needs. Their hungers. But now, so much... so many things I want to say to her. I need to ask her...Where to start?
At his solemn demeanor, Nagini nudged him gently. "How often can we watch the sun come up together like this?" She wished to savour every second of being with him and felt the lightness of being all around them, exhilarating her, as if they were in a winter wonderland. From her yearned for sexual experience with Remus to the present wintry truant wandering, Nagini had never experienced such liberties. Moreover, she wanted more. Her newfound freedom had unleashed a desire for all things sensual: experiencing nature to its fullest, experiencing all pleasures in their fullness, to make up for lost time.
Incomprehensibly, Remus had become tongue-tied; regardless, he knew he would not refuse her anything. He was relishing being in the wintry forest with her as much as she, even though the nagging thought of if they didn't hurry as fast as possible, it wouldn't be just the groundskeeper, Hagrid, that they might have to dodge. Just to get back inside the castle walls. And then, to talk about everything about us!
The glowing snow-covered path narrowed as they drew closer to the hill's peak; they pulled each other along, playfully. Lovingly. Once on top, with the Shrieking Shack in view below them, they held each other close and gazed at the pristine, frosty nature surrounding them.
The soft gleam of dawn was breaking bright.
They slowly trudged down; both had become sullen. The reality of returning to Hogwarts, to their separate Houses, their separate lives, hit them hard. They abruptly stopped and clasped each other tightly.
"You have the makings of a real Marauder, Nagini," joked Remus, attempting to cover up their dampened spirits.
Nagini peered up into his creamy brown eyes. "Do I? Would your mates agree?"
"There, now, don't be sad." Moving a tress of her hair from her face, he kissed her cheek. "It's all going to be all right. We'll take one day at a time. We'll find a way. A place to meet. Secretly. I know several." Forcing himself, he waggled his eyebrows.
She peered at him, worry written on her brow.
Determined to lighten their moods, he gave a cheeky grin. "For starters, there's the Prefect's bathroom on the fifth floor I'd like to sneak you into, er, show it to you; I have my own allotted times there... maybe this evening?" Impulsively, he kissed her. "There's the Astronomy Tower." A more ardent kiss was planted. "I know one of your favourite places is..." He couldn't help smirking. "The Divination classroom the easiest classroom to break into."
"Break into? Shame on you, Prefect Lupin," she teased, having become distracted from her brooding by his hands beginning to caress her in just the right way.
"Then, let's just say, it'll be in need of patrolling on my nightly rounds. Hope to find my one and only favourite Slytherin there, out of her House after hours, so I can personally," she moaned as his tongue encircled hers, "deal with matters at hand, escort you..."
Remus drew back to look at her face, just enough to take in her longing eyes. Her look of need, want of him, so turned him on. He forgot all else. Crushing her against him in a tighter embrace, he kissed her deeply again.
The light snowfall began to increase. The soft flurries glittered in the golden, awakening sunbeams of dawn.
From his kissing, Nagini moaned in pleasure, swaying slightly, clutching him, entwining her arms up and around his torso, pressing into him. Into his hardness.
Suddenly, there was a loud snap.
Nagini and Remus had just a second to look out into the trees through the glowing snowfall, hazed with soft flakes swirling lightly. In the fleeting, fading shadows of the woods, they caught sight of dark figures. Before they could even pull out their wands, the last thing they heard was multiple yells, "Stupefy!"
Both blacked out in drowning darkness.
The vision had been fulfilled.
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A/N: My greatest appreciation and gratitude to quaffswinegaily, her keen Scottish tweaking and generous support with everything, to star_girl for her generous support and expertise, and to emdramaqueen for her wonderful beta support and encouragement!
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Latest 25 Reviews for The Twists of Fate
47 Reviews | 7.62/10 Average
Good description of a confrontation with the personalities displayed.
Great intrigue that even captures Sirius’s imagination.
Nagini’s pain has turned into inner rage against herself and she wishes her life to end.
The force-the-Dark-Lord-knows-not comes into play.
Remus decides to go for information, presumably to help both Nagini and his side.
Response from Fairfield (Reviewer)
On the darker side, Tom is telling Nagini that he wants her to be special to him and he has the power to make that happen whereas Remus does not have the power to make that happen. Countering that is Remus's love for Nagini that makes her special both to him and herself, but Nagini has a premonition that that will not be. Is this to be a story of a long-held, flickering hope finally extinguished by pain and despair?
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you for your detailed and thought-provoking feedback, truly appreciate it! As odd as it has been and is, the story will segue into being 'canon compliant'; so yes, hope will be explored a bit more and some of the continued effects of it on both Nagini and Remus, affecting their choices and decisions--a bit more exploration of what and when the twists of fate will leave them to their canon destinies, one's lot in life, as it were, but perhaps some uplifting hope can linger on as a legacy to one affected--we'll see how mushy or how stark the Muse will be... The thing is, yes, what is special to Tom is not necessarily to Nagini and Remus; moreover, Riddle and his powerfully petty streak can be very persistent and persuasive; he doesn't take kindly to not getting what he wants, how he wants it, nor having anyone interfere with his plans, etc.Thank you again for reading this!
Insight that reuniting with a loved one renders the past irrelevant.
Prophesying another witch indicates the end is near for this couple.
As before, hope for togetherness is dashed by the appearance of one of the warring parties. Nagini was born in the wrong time and at the wrong place. Her life is ruined by being caught in the conflict.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you for reading and the feedback--truly appreciate your thoughtfulness, and so glad that the undercurrents coming to the surface are being conveyed, coming across. Yes, some are born in the wrong time and place, and where there is such potential, many a life ruined by factors beyond their control, caught in the midst of other forces at work--thank you so much for all of your thoughtful observations!
Through the chapter runs the pangs of a love that has not died.Good confrontation scene.Remus, perhaps with the support of Moody, is resisting the Ministry stripping him of all humanity. He wonders why Nagini has treated him the way she has although the readers may wonder why she has done what she has done since she appears to be under restraint and compulsion.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you so much for reading and the review, such thoughtful, insightful feedback--truly appreciate it!So happy that the chapter comes across as intended, Remus' situation as well as Nagini's--thank you again!
A stark chapter of torture and false accusations. Prophecy appears to occur involuntarily.Is Dumbledore this dense, or is he playing a game to coerce Remus into something? I have forgotten what Moody wanted from Remus.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, the gift of prophecy is erratic here, perhaps due to the state of the Seer. There is a duplicity in Dumbledore's character which allows him to be quite double-dealing; he thrives on games, quite the master of them. Moody, as Head of the Auror department, has an ongoing need for infiltrators to counter Voldemort's growing number of followers, beasties includedThank you so much for reading and the feedback, truly appreciate it!
"I'm a beast.""Yes.""A hairy beast.""Yes. Yes.""I'm serious. I'm an animal.""Yes! Yes!! Yes!!!"
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
LOL! Yes!!! Thank you so much for the lovely drabble-of-a-review--so honoured!Truly, deeply appreciate it!
The ring brings pleasant visions which Nagini clings to while ignoring possible danger since her previous life has been unpleasant. Remus proposes pleasant activities while ignoring possible danger because his previous life has been unpleasant.
Wishing to savor the pleasant moments, the two have not confronted the major problems facing them.
Peter was not the expert they had hoped he was. And he made a poor choice. He should have used a hair from a lady of the night.
Severus is more commanding in this story than in canon since in this story he confronts his peers while in canon he bullies students.
Reflecting on his being a magical lover, did the professionals prepare him for that? Not certain since his objective with them may have been different from his objective with Nagini.
A well-written chapter filled with dramatic scenes.
While reading this story, I keep thinking ‘Romeo and Juliette.’
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, both seem to be wishing for something pleasant to experience which neither has quite experienced before; alluding to Peter's early experimentations with potion spells, yes, a lady of the night would've been a better choice!;-)Ah, poor Severus, and all that pent up aggression... Remus may have found a bit of nirvana derived from his acquired magical lover plateau-- professionals most probably have had a lot to do with helping with achieving that state, but yes, something else more seems to be consuming him regarding Nagini. Thank you so much for continuing to read this bizarre love story, nothing too much new under the sun--lol! Yes, the Houses of Slytherins and Gryffindors, the wizarding version of the Houses of Capulets and Montagues! Truly appreciate your feedback!
Every witches dream - a wizard addicted to chocolate.Subtle wordplay of kissing the frog - could have mentioned her prince.Hints of depths in Peter and the ring.Surprised at Remus finding fulfillment with professionals since he seems the type to find schoolgirls' immature flirtations charming, but perhaps, that's all he allows himself.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
'Every witches dream - a wizard addicted to chocolate.'--lol! Indeed. Ha! Ah, yes, where would the world be without maidens in need of their princes... Yes, more with Pettigrew and the ring. Remus probably, definitely, finds satisfaction in both professionals and in schoolgirls and their potential promises charming, however... he's never quite mustered up the will to act upon and reciprocate with a classmate he'd have to see every day (as opposed to being a random client, less obligation), not as cavalier as Sirius, let's say imho--until now when too much opportunity is making him an offer he doesn't any longer wish to refuse.;-)Thank you again for reading and the feedback, truly appreciate it!
Time compression as Remus goes from lonely boy to magical lover within a few days. They have not told each other about their major problems - the physicality of being wanted and touched has overwhelmed them. Both are denying what they've heard about the other. Remus is overdoing it as he wants to have Nagini in a perfect place, but this perfect place involves transgression and danger. Neither can accept the other's friends. The story is well constructed enough that, at this stage, clumsy snogging and groping would be as heart wrenching.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Ah, yes, regarding Remus, only in fanfiction--lol! Struggling to zero in on them and, if left alone, to just be alone with each other, who they would be without the millstones, without their peers, for once, Remus desiring to experience something uniquely for him, for them, feeling both an impulsiveness and freedom unlike before. Thank you so much for the read and feedback, truly appreciate it!
A key element of this chapter is Pomfrey who reacts to any threat from students but who is oblivious to Lucius who does deeper and more lasting harm. Perhaps Pomfrey can do something about the damage students do toeach other but is powerless against Lucius, and hence, she chooses to ignore what he does. Along these lines, Nagini does not complain to anyone about what Lucius has done, possibly because she believes no one can protect her.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, from the indifferent to the insidious--things that are done in a semi-public setting and got away with partially due to position and the allowances given to those that hold power, such as a govenor of the school, affluent member of the society, for whatever reasons, etc. Lucius and Rodolphus are too close-knit for her to think objectively at this point; they've pressed the other's buttons too much.Thank you so much for continuing to read, truly appreciate it!
Merrythought may not be aware of its depth, but she is aware of house rivalry. It is not Sirius versu Remus in the duels.Thoughts and emotions conveyed by action and dialogue. It is 'us versus them' with with the conflict hard to stop and each side ignoring its own atrocities. Peter, the sneak, is goading others.If this has been going on a while, then the duellers would be treated as a separate class. Society would accept their injuries much as society accepts the injuries of professional athletes. Each dueller should have followers (groupies) - even Severus. There would also be bonding between the members of this separate class, but house rivalry runs deep except possibly for Nagini and Remus.Good portrait of Dumbledore and his occasionally cavalier attitude toward others.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
A blasé chord about house rivalry by the staff has always struck me as outrageous on one hand and utterly plausible on another--wanted to touch on that a bit. Yes, the Marauder era goings-on seemed very clearly divided and extreme as the predecessors of Harry Potter's generation at Hogwarts. Pettigrew's insidious inclinations also must have been notable, here an there, until he blossomed into fruition. Yes, the duellers would be looked upon in a special way, expected to hold their chins up at all times, the injuries as occupational hazards; yes, Dumbledore and his nonchalant ways--lol!Thank you so much for reading and the review, truly appreciate it!
It follows the literary tradition of beginning in media res.Professor Galatea Merrythoughtless.Rowling-style humor. anything from a sofa chair to a rodent. Which in hindsight had led to more than a few students being sent to Madam Pomfrey. That is, after they managed to catch the little rodent.Why are those four proficient in the Dark Arts? The first conjecture is alienation: Sirius from his family, Remus from society, and Severus from his fellow man. Nagini is still an unknown.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you so much for reading this and the feedback, truly appreciate it! This is also one of my first stories, the offshoot from my other Nagini tale--I had originally wanted one story featuring the escapades of the trio Nagini, Severus, and Remus but... the Muse wouldn't cooperate and demanded two separate tales. So finding myself in a pickle with these characters, who refused to go away, I've slowly plotted it out. Merrythoughtless--HA! Mayhem running wildly in the classroom--catch the little rodents--lol! One can just imagine.;-)Yes, it seemed to me, for them to have become what they were very skilled at, as adults, Dark Arts professors and outlaws feared by Ministry and Death Eaters alike, the desire, skill, necessity and need to be very proficient in the Dark Arts had somehow been an innate part of them and their circumstances at an earlier stage, wanted to explore that by dropping in on them at an earlier time on the timeline of things.Thank you so much for your insightful thoughts!
It's all coming into place in line with canon - clever, Nag! Lupin spending time with Aurors will put him in the way of Tonks. And if this ends badly for Lupin and Nagini, it will explain why he never seemed able to fully commit to Tonks. And there was me thinking he was gay!! ;) This is the first time I felt chilled at the appearance of The Order.This can't end well.Or can it??
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Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you! Yes, believe it or not, in this oddity, I would like to keep with canon as much as possible - lol! - just exploring the possibilities in the back scenes: Being my twin, you know how my mind works-- yep, yep, and yep, with how he'll meet up with Tonks (small circle they move in - ha!)-- I finally indulged and purged myself in my first (and last) Remus slash one-shot (an anonymous prompt from an LJ thingy) which reads like a textbook, literally, of slashy content (didn't understand the importance of the prostrate being hit in flagrante delicto--googled it --and now, I understand - hahaha!). *whew* back to my hetero (or at least, bi - lol!) RemusOh, I'm so glad The Order came across like that to you because that is how precisely they will be--I have this perception they were as equally dark as those they were fighting (allowed to use the Unforgiveables, etc.)--the First Wizarding War has a level of brutality & intensity in the evolution of Voldy's rise to power and those who tried to counter it... Thank you again for all of your generous observations--truly, deeply appreciate it!xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you! Yes, believe it or not, in this oddity, I would like to keep with canon as much as possible - lol! - just exploring the possibilities in the back scenes: Being my twin, you know how my mind works-- yep, yep, and yep, with how he'll meet up with Tonks (small circle they move in - ha!)-- I finally indulged and purged myself in my first (and last) Remus slash one-shot (an anonymous prompt from an LJ thingy) which reads like a textbook, literally, of slashy content (didn't understand the importance of the prostrate being hit in flagrante delicto--googled it --and now, I understand - hahaha!). *whew* back to my hetero (or at least, bi - lol!) RemusOh, I'm so glad The Order came across like that to you because that is how precisely they will be--I have this perception they were as equally dark as those they were fighting (allowed to use the Unforgiveables, etc.)--the First Wizarding War has a level of brutality & intensity in the evolution of Voldy's rise to power and those who tried to counter it... Thank you again for all of your generous observations--truly, deeply appreciate it!xx
I'm breathless! Nagini's stiff-necked collar and strange green hue.... OH! What's happening to her? And poor Lupin! I love the idea of classification: XXXXX. It sounds like a department that should have a whole fanfiction to itself. Right now, I can't see this ending well for our erstwhile lovers, but whatever future you have in store for them, you have woven a fascinating and compelling tale - if very dark at times.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for the read and lovely, detailed feedback! I agree about the classification department - lol! Thank you so much for your generous supportive commentary and observations in spite of the content and pairing--truly, deeply appreciate it!xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for the read and lovely, detailed feedback! I agree about the classification department - lol! Thank you so much for your generous supportive commentary and observations in spite of the content and pairing--truly, deeply appreciate it!xx
Oh! Listen to him, Dumbledore. Why are you being so obtuse? Dear Nag, please get them out of this situation. What is going to happen to Nagini now? Off to find out.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for continuing to read this and for the feedback! Dumbles is being Dumbles--he always has the excuse of being preoccupied with greater good things--thank you again, really appreciate it!xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for continuing to read this and for the feedback! Dumbles is being Dumbles--he always has the excuse of being preoccupied with greater good things--thank you again, really appreciate it!xx
Alright, nag.... I'm getting ready for the heartbreak. Why can't they just get away? It seems so sad that she is trapped in the layers of her horrible family and their expectations. He's a lovely guy (werewolf transformations notwithstanding!) and it's so obvious he likes her - but every time they get closer, she seems to remember her obligations and pulls away. Come on Remus! Pxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh, Pxx, thank you so much--you needn't have, you know why--but thank you for the specific feedback, truly appreciate it! I was hoping that enough of his sincerity, his feelings for her are coming across, and hers for him--I agree: come on, Remus!--even Remus needs a little loving attention now and then - lol! Seriously, thank you for ALL of your support with my wandering muses... xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh, Pxx, thank you so much--you needn't have, you know why--but thank you for the specific feedback, truly appreciate it! I was hoping that enough of his sincerity, his feelings for her are coming across, and hers for him--I agree: come on, Remus!--even Remus needs a little loving attention now and then - lol! Seriously, thank you for ALL of your support with my wandering muses... xx
So Tonks is still in his future? Doesn't bode well for Nagini! :0
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, Tonks has been seen by the Inner Eye:-( Thank you so much for continuing to read & the feedback--truly appreciate it!xx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Yes, Tonks has been seen by the Inner Eye:-( Thank you so much for continuing to read & the feedback--truly appreciate it!xx
Explanations are needed, but I'm sure she has a good one. :)
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Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for reading, and yes, explanations will be given with time--I think Remus will agree with you--she has a few good ones:-) Thanks again!xxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for reading, and yes, explanations will be given with time--I think Remus will agree with you--she has a few good ones:-) Thanks again!xxx
Well I can see why they felt the need to indulge in each other in the aftermath of the confrontation and revelation of Lupin's 'furry little problem' in the previous chapter.I'm really glad that Nagini took it so well, but perhaps she is already in too deep to be deterred by his animl side. Or perhaps it adds to his charms ;)Very juicy and well-written lemons too, Nag. I wish I could write them :). I have to say that I think your Lupin is much sexier than JKRs. I'm intrigued by the title: it sounds very Gaelic, is it Irish?But after all that, what a cliffhanger! Update very soon!!!!
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, thank you for all of the generous feedback - what a lovely gift:-) yes, they both couldn't resist, regardless of the furry little problem - LOL! Thank you for the feedback on the lemony content, and you're such a sweetheart about Lupin, thank you for your comments, hope he is a bit more than what JKR only allowed us to peek at - hehe! - I can't help wanting to give him a bit more *attention*; the title's Scottish, and is literally translated as 'second sight', more bits & pieces of Scottish to come later, just for flavouring:-) Thank you again for all of your support!
I really enjoyed this chapter, Nag! I know it is said a lot in reviews but I have to say that your characterisation of Severus is eerily acurate. He wasn't like some romantic, Rickmanised version of Snape, this was JKR's Snape through and through, yet without the Harry filter we are so used to. His reactions and dialogue were perfect. The argument between Lupin and Snape reminded me, to some extent, of the one some years later between Severus and Sirius at Grimmauld Place.I love the idea of Nagini part turning into Lily, and of Snape's reaction to that. I could really imagine him seething away as he discovers that his love is being used in such a cavalier way by his enemy.I know, I know, I'm focusing on the Sev bits, what am I like? It was a very well written and exciting chapter, but oh dear, trust Severus to spill the beans about Lupin's furry little secret (although, to be fair, there HAD been other clues). How will Nagini respond? I suppose I will just have to wait.
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Hahaha, oh
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, focus on Sev's bits all you want, my dear, I know I have & will - beyond my control! Thank you for your feedback on Sev's characterisation; I'm *blushing* at your compliment that he is recognisably JKR's Snape - as much as I am utterly made gaga whenever the Rickman appears, I did want the Sev in these stories to be more of JKR's harsh canon depiction of him, so, thank you for the feedback! It means a lot to me! I just felt he had to be a bit, justifiably (sorry Remus - hehe!) nasty to Lupin... (can't help being, um, loyal to Sev when he'll appear on the scene - more of Sev later!) Boys will be boys type of thingy going on... Sev would truly have been irked if anyone used anything-even-remotely-related-to-Lily, wouldn't e *sighing* 'Oh, Severus...' OK, I'l stop fousing on Sev - Thank you so much for the read & review - your precious free time!
Things went a bit downhil between them in this chapter. I hope you're planning to make it up to them later, missy! :P
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Thank you for reading & the review! I agree & I'll make a promise right now to make it up to them later! ;-) Thank you so much for all of your feedback!
Hehe, wonder who the Polyjuice will be. Hope it's not Sirius. :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Sirius - brilliant! ROFL! Hahaha - omg, I feel a crack/slash-fic, pwp, coming on me, you naughty
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
, or maybe a threesome and Remus has to experience & decide which one's the real Sirius & which one's the real Nagini - HA!:) I'm grinning wildly & giggling about that idea - Thank you so much for the read & observation! LOL!
Oops. They got a little carried away. What is she, a jellyfish? :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Hahaha! I love jellyfish, but Nag still has some vertabrae:) Neither of their spells could fully succeed as intended, due to each one's particular (biochemically speaking) precursive/'secret' conditions (more on that later) so a variant of it/each transfigured - thank you so much for the read & review!
Merrythought obviously gave NO thought to the pairings! :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
- you've made my day - Merlin bless you- thanks for reading & the review! It always amazed me how seemingly 'oblivious' the professors were to house rivalry... Again, thank you so much for the read - really appreciate it (know its 'way out there' - just wanted to give Remus a little attention...)!:)
About time Remus got himself a little lovin'! :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Here, here - absolutely! LOL! Thank you so much for the affirmation!:)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Here, here - absolutely! LOL! Thank you so much for the affirmation!:)
Sounds like two people who need a sympathetic ear. :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of The Twists of Fate)
Aww - thank you for reading & the review! Yeah, they both definitely could use & need a little objective sympathy without all the judgement and expectations of either's peers & acquaintances - thank you again, really appreciate it!:)