Partner
Chapter 2 of 4
AmitaOut heroine meets her partner, and snarkiness ensues.
Chapter 2: Partner
The band of kidnappers had searched Hermione and had discovered she had not completely shed her old identity. They had found a card with instructions on how to contact the tax assessment office in case of questions or complaints.
The leader of the gang was tired of the constant digs that he and his men lacked intelligence and initiative. Taking care to hide his face and location, he used the card. The message that Hermione was being held as a hostage was received by Padma.
Padma and Hannah had been given the notification that Hermione was temporarily reassigned for an advanced course in accounting. The extra workload had irritated Padma. The thought that Hermione was the one chosen had infuriated Padma. The suggestion that someone believed the over-achiever worth kidnapping instead of her sent Padma over the edge.
“Listen up, you redneck peckerwood. We will make your life a living hell. If you don’t want to pay your fair share, that’s okay with us because you’re not going to pay your fair share or do anything else in this life. Your entire pathetic existence is about to come to a bureaucratic, scorched-earth halt. All your records are now lost, do you hear me, dickwad? They have dropped into the black hole of our filing system, and the only way you can keep out of prison or even establish that you exist is to replace them one by one. You’re going to fill out forms until your hands drop off. No, wait, you’re going to mark everything with your DNA loaded semen since you’re such an ignorant asshole you probably can’t even sign your own name. You’ll mark so many forms that your member will drop off which will be a good thing. ‘Cause you be messin’ with assessin’, and you be payin’ usin’ tax on your wife’s pussy. By the time we’re finished with your sorry ass, it’ll be buried so deep the Bureau of Land Reclamation won’t be able to find it. Your momma!”
“Who was that?” asked Hannah.
“Another crank call from some homeowners’ association,” said Padma.
“How’d it go, boss?” asked a thug.
“Tough group,” he said.
Meanwhile, Hermione was feeling her way around a black hole of despair. It appeared to be eight feet by ten feet with a high ceiling and no source of light.
There was a tap. Hermione stopped to listen.
“Miss Granger?”
It took her a while to respond. She hadn’t been called that for several years. “Yes,” she said.
“Step clear,” said the voice.
Hermione moved along the wall away from the source of the voice. A pinpoint of light appeared. The voice asked if she was a safe distance away, and she replied that she was. A larger hole appeared.
“Just give me a bloody wand, and I’ll do the rest,” she said.
But the voice asked if she was at least three feet away, and when she huffed and replied that she was, a woman-sized hole appeared in the wall. She looked out to see the last face she wanted to see and the only person she could trust.
“Take this until we find yours,” he said, handing her a wand at last. “Back me up,” he added.
He burst through the door of the hideout.
Get the bloody hell out of my line of fire, she thought.
But, onetwothree, he had stunned the thugs.
She felt cheated. Honestly!
“Don’t just stand there in plain sight gawking,” he told her. “Get in here and look for your wand. And anything else you think looks informative.”
She found her wand in a drawer with a notepad.
“Severus,” she cried, holding up a piece of paper with her husband’s name on it.
He shrugged. “It’s obvious we’ve been betrayed, and that clot is the least of our problems.”
She had to agree, but she still had to fight back the tears.
“Wipe the tears from your eyes and keep looking,” he said. “The people that hired this group aren’t going to trust them alone for long.”
“Oh,” she said. She had found her tax-assessment card on the table.
“Well, well, your husband betrays you, and then you spill the rest of the beans,” said Severus. “You’re a well-matched pair.”
Hermione glared at him, but he just said, “I wonder if they contacted the department of assessment. That must have been fun. And stop your glaring and keep searching this place. Try to repair some of the damage you’ve done.”
They searched, but found nothing else.
“What am I doing here?” asked Hermione
“I’m asking the same thing,” said Severus. “I asked for a foxy lady. I planned to dress her flash and parade her in front of the bad guys as bait. But that’s no longer an option.”
“I see,” said Hermione.
“If you’ve stopped blubbering over hubby, we can go,” said Severus. “Try to stay alert.”
“Just a minute,” he said as Hermione started out the door. “We can’t do much, but we can do something.” He waved his wand, and her hair became long, black, and straight. “Amazingly better,” he said.
She was fuming as they stepped into the glare of the noonday sun.
They strolled casually into a neighborhood of small shops, through a coffee house, down an alley, and across a field into a copse of trees. Severus stopped and looked for any sign of pursuers.
“We may as well be comfortable,” he said. “I can put a glamour on you, a contradiction if there ever was one, and we can travel unrecognized.”
“Will you lay off?” said Hermione. “You don’t want me here; I don’t want to be here. You don’t want to be around me; I don’t want to be around you. I don’t know what’s going on; you don’t have to tell me. And I’m going to be gone in about two seconds.”
“Don’t go back to your house,” said Severus. “Your husband will betray you, and they will kill you.”
“What? Why? Why would my husband want to kill me?”
“Not your husband, he doesn’t care.”
Someone else saying that her husband didn’t care cracked years of self-deception. Hermione was sitting on the ground, pulling at the grass, and sobbing. How had she made so many wrong choices? How had she made such a mess of her life?
After a while, Severus was sitting beside her. “We should go.”
“Where are we going?” she asked.
“Today, London to Cologne by train to get out of England. We’ll risk resting for a day in Cologne. Then, we use our interail passes to get lost on the continent. We keep moving, never travelling in a straight line.”
“If we should keep moving, why are we stopping in Cologne?” she asked.
“We’re not used to this, and your capture has us more disoriented than we realize,” he replied. “We feel energized now from the excitement, but when it wears off, we’ll be exhausted and confused. That’s more dangerous than stopping to rest.”
“I can hold up quite well, thank you,” she said. “And what’s our destination? I can rest once we get there.”
“Ultimately, Brasov, Romania – gateway to the Carpathian Mountains and Transylvania.”
“Vampires,” joked Hermione.
“Yes, vampires,” said Severus seriously. “A week from now, you’ll be dining on cornmeal and cabbage rolls and downing enough tuica to forget ten bad husbands. And provoking vampires.”
It was cold. Very cold. The sun was bright. Every blade of grass cast a sharp shadow. Wrapping the cloak tighter did no good since the cold inside was as sharp as the cold outside.
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Latest 25 Reviews for Tanz der Verfluchten
11 Reviews | 7.18/10 Average
Interesting. I have to say this reads like its not very fleshed out. Thank you for writing and sharing.
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
If it helps, take this as a gossamer text that balances and highlights the darkness of the tale. It is a demanding way of writing that relies on the reader to fill in the blanks, and it is a light interlude before the final chapter.
Intriguing and I'm a bit clueless, but I suspect that this is one of those fics where one is SUPPOSE to feel that way and things will gradually fall into place if I exercise a modicum of patience.
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Yep. We'll have to see if I can portray Hermione's character and have the outcome be a consequence of this.
This is a very different scenario, eagerly waiting for an update
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
I did try to write something different. Thanks.
Interesting. I look forward to the next installment.
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Thanks. I hope it continues to entertain you.
Wish I knew what was going on! Um, I think the saving grace for her marriage would be for her to kick the bum out and begin anew... with someone else.Gotta be Ron.
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
If I've written this well, both the reader and Hermione will gradually discover what is gong on, and the ending will be both unexpected and a logical consequence of personalities and decisions. It is an important clue that she refuses to admit her marriage is a failure.
Hmmm, interesting beginning. I wonder who the angry husband might be, anyone we know?
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Thanks for reviewing. Hope the story holds your interest.
Beautiful, touching story--thank you! Love the narrative, the captured depiction of him at the end numb in his world of indifference, yet within that the final stroke of him placing a flower on her grave, an act of deep caring and remembrance. Lovely, poignant, dynamic tale!
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Thanks for reading and reviewing this tale of the doomed. The love of his life pushed herself beyond any hope of survival. In a cold and uncaring world, he remembers.
Love the snippets of dialogue chronologically revealing their evolving journey and intense relationship between each other; there is a wonderful pace and dynamic set therein, building, building, building as they near their target--love the insightful commentary on human nature throughout and the elongated, foreboding and poetically descriptive ending lines--great chapter!
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
This chapter was an experiment in telling a story by means of short suggestive vignettes. It lets the reader imagine their growing attraction to each other set against the terrible things they are planning and doing. Thanks for the review.
Loved Padma's rant--hahaha! And loved the escape--will they be able to manage throwing the baddies off their trail? Even in his snark, Severus seems to be having a levelling affect on Hermione--but there seems to be something further ominous with the final lines, as if they could be the inner thoughts of a vampire... Is this the fate that is awaiting them in the infamous Balkanian land of the Undead?Great chapter!
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Thanks. The Padma rant was fun to write although it is more American than Brit. Severus and Hermione engage in a battle of snark. Nevertheless, there are still signs of Hermine's flaw of over achieving, and there is a small recognition-reversal when she realizes she can't return home.
There is a strong undercurrent of sadness and poignancy revealed, such lines as 'The situation at home had progressed to the point where she hated to tell him anything about her job. Working with Hannah and Padma had become a refuge that she didn’t want sullied with her married life.' and her praying the husband is not at home in order to avoid further abuse from him brought tears to my eyes--in stark contrast to the seemingly loving and caring and mutually joyful relationships her peers are enjoying with their partners, etc. She is struggling and clinging to a thin hope of still making things work, being fully responsible for a healthy relationship with him. In denial of what he truly is and what their existence together truly is. Loved also her inner thoughts and the reflection on the Balkans. Love the chapter ending, an unexpected violent attack--this story has a very particular Hermione's voice and tone and style that I can't quite put my finger on--must read on as soon as possible--great chapter, as always!
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
As you observed, there is something particular about Hermione: the tragic flaw of being overly dutiful. She should leave both her marriage and the administrative assignment instead of becoming involved with people who care nothing for her. She does not admit her marriage and the Balkans are a mess about which she can do nothing. Thank you very much for wanting to see how this turns out for her.