Tanz der Verfluchten
Amita11 Reviews | 7.18/10 (11 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )
Darkfic: the story gradually unfolds as a tragedy of the fatal-flaw variety. Title (Dance of the Cursed) is the one preferred by the beta reader, ladyinthecloak.
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Interesting. I have to say this reads like its not very fleshed out. Thank you for writing and sharing.
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
If it helps, take this as a gossamer text that balances and highlights the darkness of the tale. It is a demanding way of writing that relies on the reader to fill in the blanks, and it is a light interlude before the final chapter.
Intriguing and I'm a bit clueless, but I suspect that this is one of those fics where one is SUPPOSE to feel that way and things will gradually fall into place if I exercise a modicum of patience.
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Yep. We'll have to see if I can portray Hermione's character and have the outcome be a consequence of this.
This is a very different scenario, eagerly waiting for an update
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
I did try to write something different. Thanks.
Interesting. I look forward to the next installment.
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Thanks. I hope it continues to entertain you.
Wish I knew what was going on! Um, I think the saving grace for her marriage would be for her to kick the bum out and begin anew... with someone else.Gotta be Ron.
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
If I've written this well, both the reader and Hermione will gradually discover what is gong on, and the ending will be both unexpected and a logical consequence of personalities and decisions. It is an important clue that she refuses to admit her marriage is a failure.
Hmmm, interesting beginning. I wonder who the angry husband might be, anyone we know?
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Thanks for reviewing. Hope the story holds your interest.
Beautiful, touching story--thank you! Love the narrative, the captured depiction of him at the end numb in his world of indifference, yet within that the final stroke of him placing a flower on her grave, an act of deep caring and remembrance. Lovely, poignant, dynamic tale!
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Thanks for reading and reviewing this tale of the doomed. The love of his life pushed herself beyond any hope of survival. In a cold and uncaring world, he remembers.
Love the snippets of dialogue chronologically revealing their evolving journey and intense relationship between each other; there is a wonderful pace and dynamic set therein, building, building, building as they near their target--love the insightful commentary on human nature throughout and the elongated, foreboding and poetically descriptive ending lines--great chapter!
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
This chapter was an experiment in telling a story by means of short suggestive vignettes. It lets the reader imagine their growing attraction to each other set against the terrible things they are planning and doing. Thanks for the review.
Loved Padma's rant--hahaha! And loved the escape--will they be able to manage throwing the baddies off their trail? Even in his snark, Severus seems to be having a levelling affect on Hermione--but there seems to be something further ominous with the final lines, as if they could be the inner thoughts of a vampire... Is this the fate that is awaiting them in the infamous Balkanian land of the Undead?
Great chapter!
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Thanks. The Padma rant was fun to write although it is more American than Brit. Severus and Hermione engage in a battle of snark. Nevertheless, there are still signs of Hermine's flaw of over achieving, and there is a small recognition-reversal when she realizes she can't return home.
There is a strong undercurrent of sadness and poignancy revealed, such lines as 'The situation at home had progressed to the point where she hated to tell him anything about her job. Working with Hannah and Padma had become a refuge that she didn’t want sullied with her married life.' and her praying the husband is not at home in order to avoid further abuse from him brought tears to my eyes--in stark contrast to the seemingly loving and caring and mutually joyful relationships her peers are enjoying with their partners, etc. She is struggling and clinging to a thin hope of still making things work, being fully responsible for a healthy relationship with him. In denial of what he truly is and what their existence together truly is. Loved also her inner thoughts and the reflection on the Balkans. Love the chapter ending, an unexpected violent attack--this story has a very particular Hermione's voice and tone and style that I can't quite put my finger on--must read on as soon as possible--great chapter, as always!
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
As you observed, there is something particular about Hermione: the tragic flaw of being overly dutiful. She should leave both her marriage and the administrative assignment instead of becoming involved with people who care nothing for her. She does not admit her marriage and the Balkans are a mess about which she can do nothing. Thank you very much for wanting to see how this turns out for her.
A very poignant tale, very well-written!
Response from Amita (Author of Tanz der Verfluchten)
Thanks! It was a portrait of Hermione as a tragic character beset by all the elements - character flaw, conflicting loyalties, and overwhelming forces.