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Heartbeat
Electryone60 Reviews | 6.02/10 (60 Ratings, 0 Likes, 52 Favorites )
Severus Snape is dead and not happy about it. Unfortunately, his only link to the living world is a bushy-haired Gryffindor know-it-all.
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Electryone
Member Since 2008 | 2 Stories | Favorited by 6 | 89 Reviews Written | 76 Review Responses
High school math teacher in Southern CA, who also loves to read and write!
Reviews for Heartbeat
A lovely ending, thank you.
Only one more chapter, can't wait to read it but sad that it will soon be over.
What a terrible fate, to face eternity alone. Severus deserves better than that, and Hermione will see that he gets it.
It sounds as if Hermione is just as lonely as Severus .
Oh my! has Hermione died, or found a way to visit the dead?
Is this the end? Really if si I wish it coud go one and see what really happens. It was a great idea and you did a wonderful job of writing it.
Ch 3-4 are awesome, I'm really enjoing this and look forward to more.
Ch 3-4 are awesome, I'm really enjoing this and look forward to more.
Very good, really like thats hes fonally willing to see her. Having company is what he needs :)
It would seem that Hermione is starting to develop feelings for Severus, even if she's not aware of them yet. It would also seem the same is happening to Severus, if he's able to feel emotions; which I'm sure he can. I have no doubt they will be successful in creating the potion. At least I would like to see them successful.
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
Me too! And I do think that they're beginning to feel something for each other.
"It does not do to dwell on dreams, and forget to live."Oh, dear.Not good....not good at all.Yet---it 'could' be reality, instead of a dream--if only their efforts work! But I still think you have some huge surprise up your sleeve for us! Biting fingernails, and hoping for the best....
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
You'll see very soon! =)
This is one heck of a fascinating story...I look forward to each chapter, yet I always want more. Kind of like Hermione and her conversations with Severus in his afterlife. Oh, I do hope their efforts are successful!But it sounds like Neville may have taken an interest in Hermione beyond friendship...I wonder what Severus will think about that.
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
Thank you!!! I think Neville is interested in her, but he can't really compete with Severus...
Happy, yet sad. Hermione is neglecting her living friends, but Severus is so happy when she visits. Oh, their experiment just has to work. *Hope, hope, hope* Wonderful chapter, can't wait to read more.
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
It'll be up soon! Thanks for reviewing!
Ohhh, very interesting. Poor Severus will be waiting a long time for Hermione to show up in the afterlife if they can't bring him back to life. And will she indeed be driving herself mad if she talks to him all the time? I don't know where you are taking this, which makes it all the better! five stars for originality, wit, and spot-on characters!
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
There were many debates in my mind about where to take this. You'll find out soon enough--the next two chapters (the end of the story) are in the queue.I'm happy that you like this!
I am really enjoying this tale. This chapter wasn't as screamingly funny as the first, but Hermione's point of view is not as amusing as Snape's. What an original story you have for us! thanks so much!
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
I love writing from Snape's point of view more than Hermione's for just that reason! Thanks for the reviews!
This is so original and clever! your sense of humor is marvelous! I am happily off to the next chapter to find out if Hermione died or has invented some new death-defying potion that enables her to visit this heaven-or-hell-is-what-you-make-it afterlife.Thank you for sharing this.
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
Thanks! I was originally going to make this more of a drama (because it's about death, after all), but the humor forced itself out and the story ended up being a lot lighter than I intended.
Bit of a bugger when the best conversation you have is with a dead guy! :)
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
I agree! The living just can't compete with Severus Snape. =)
I think he missed her. Anyway, this is a bit odd. And kind of like the Mirror of Erised. But I'm fascinated.
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
I was actually going for it being a bit odd. =P I agree with you; the Resurrection Stone is similar to the Mirror of Erised in that it shows you something you want to see rather than what's real. It's kind of unhealthy in that way. Thanks for the review!
Wow! This gets better and better. Professor Snape appears more inclined to spend time with her now that Hermione has learned a few things about the Resurrection Stone and was able to tell him that in order for someone who had died to appear to the user of the Stone, "it only works if the dead person wants to see the user."I think his irascible behavior to her the first couple of times, while in line with the personality he presented in life, is not how he really views her now. He doesn't want to get all touchy-feely now, but he is enjoying talking to her. They are really very much alike – both are lonely and bored with all the things that their acquaintances find interesting. I found it very interesting that when something in the back of Hermione's mind told her that spending a lot of time with a dead person wasn't good, she immediately pushed those thoughts away. She likes being with him, and he enjoys being with her. With Snape working on a potion to return himself to life, and Hermione in possession of the Resurrection Stone, I expect we'll see some intense collaborations in the future.I noticed in a reply to a review in Chapter 1 you said that this story is "complete with the next two chapters in the queue, so it will probably be all up in the next few days." Does this mean that the story is three chapters long? I was just wondering.I really like this story. It is original and completely captivating. Good work!Beth
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
It's actually five chapters but I've been adding a new chapter into the queue as soon as one gets posted (3 and 4 are in the queue now). Maybe it'll be all up within the next week or so. Thank you again for the reviews, I'm really happy that you like it!
"The idea of making a potion to cheat death was not uniquely his. Many others had tried and failed before him. It was impossible. But if there was one thing that Severus Snape was capable of doing, it was the impossible." When I read this I thought, "Ah ha! If anyone could pull this off it's Severus Snape.Then when I read that Hermione Granger had appeared in his potions lab, I thought, "OMG! She's going to help him!"I don't know how all this will turn out, but it is a very intriguing premise. Very entertaining and ripe with possibilities.Beth
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
Thank you! I really liked reading your two reviews. =)
"Something in the back of her mind told her that it was not good for her to be spending so much time with a dead person. She needed to focus on what was real, what was alive. She pushed those thoughts aside almost as soon as they came into her mind."Hmmmmmm-----getting deeper and deeper in, aren't we?You still have me fascinated--but I'm beginning to wonder if this story won't completely surprise me, and perhaps 'not' have the "happily ever after" ending I always love so much. (especially with the report of what happened to the creator of the stone). But, regardless, it's intriguing and I'm looking forward to more!
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
Thanks for the review! I'm glad that you're fascinated by it!
Intriguing start. I wonder if Hermione is dead too, or if she has found a way to communicate with those in the afterlife... I look forward to they next chapter!
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
You'll find out in the next chapter (which is currently at number 2 in the queue). Thanks for the review!
Well, that was surprising! :)
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
Surprising was what I was aiming for. =) Thanks for reading!
Oh, please continue! You can't leave us here! I very much want to see what happens next!
Response from Electryone (Author of Heartbeat)
The story is complete with the next two chapters in the queue, so it will probably be all up in the next few days. Thanks for reviewing!