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Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse
WriterMerrin137 Reviews | 5.82/10 (137 Ratings, 0 Likes, 50 Favorites )
Seventeen years ago, the Head Girl took Snape's rejection of her personally and exacted a long-lasting revenge--one that Dumbledore was not above using for his own end.
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Very nice twist. I like how it was someone he scorned who has caused him this misery. And the twisting back on itself was the icing on the cake. Very well done on the curse. Now to see if he can use this to his advantage as he hopes.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
I have to admit, I was somewhat inspired by all of the stories of 7th years from last year's challenge. It was fun to come up with a creative curse.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
I have to admit, I was somewhat inspired by all of the stories of 7th years from last year's challenge. It was fun to come up with a creative curse.
Oh, he might be loosing her to Weasley... He should tell her, be more open, but I suppose he can't. I mean he's as secretive as Dumbledore was. secrets and lies = shield and protection, right.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks :) Well, I think he's being really open considering who he is and what his position in the world is. I hope you keep enjoying the story as he reveals more.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks :) Well, I think he's being really open considering who he is and what his position in the world is. I hope you keep enjoying the story as he reveals more.
His look softened slightly as he moved to touch her face. “It will be very easy from now on to think of you as an adult.”This is a very interesting chapter. I can't help but wonder what will happen between Severus and Hermione now that he finds it easy to think of her as an adult. This will be fun to follow as their relationship evolves.Good chapter!Beth
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I do think that he's exaggerating a little about how easy it is, but he's making an effort ;)
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I do think that he's exaggerating a little about how easy it is, but he's making an effort ;)
lovely update. you really show the surreal quality of the dreams. thanks so much
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. I try to never forget that they are dreams, and no matter how much control someone tries to have, they will be capricious.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. I try to never forget that they are dreams, and no matter how much control someone tries to have, they will be capricious.
I liked that the make-up case was heavy. That was a nice touch.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. The fun part about writing dreams is the blending of reality and unreality.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. The fun part about writing dreams is the blending of reality and unreality.
I loved the dancing scene in this chapter, and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks! It was a fun chapter to write.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks! It was a fun chapter to write.
I like the wistfulness of his thoughts, believing that she'll be Ron's soon enough anyway. Looking forward to more!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Yes, I don't like for him to dwell overmuch on thoughts of his expected end, but I hoped it was in character. Thanks!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Yes, I don't like for him to dwell overmuch on thoughts of his expected end, but I hoped it was in character. Thanks!
your ooc Snape is one of the best I've come across - internal monologue promotes believability - really nice handling of the structure and set up of the piece - nice job - looking forward to continued updates and developments
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Wow! Thanks. I'm glad the internal monologue works; I always think that Severus does nothing with only one motive.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Wow! Thanks. I'm glad the internal monologue works; I always think that Severus does nothing with only one motive.
I can't wait to see what you do with the rest of this story. It is a fabulous work.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. I hope it stays interesting for you.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. I hope it stays interesting for you.
Nicely written, I like how you don't rehash DH in great detail but focus on the interaction between the two of them. Look forward to the next chapter.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. It has been my goal that each chapter contain as little as possible of strictly canon information, the dreams providing the reader with the real story. Thanks for the stars!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. It has been my goal that each chapter contain as little as possible of strictly canon information, the dreams providing the reader with the real story. Thanks for the stars!
What a beautiful chapter, I love it.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks for the review with stars! This was a lovely chapter to write.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks for the review with stars! This was a lovely chapter to write.
And they are very good ducks too!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
LOL! Thanks.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
LOL! Thanks.
Thinking of her as an adult, ha! But apart from the obvious, I am also looking forward to your version of the events in DH...
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
I don't know how to take that 'ha', but I appreciate the comment and stars. I'm having a great deal of fun writing between the lines of DH.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
I don't know how to take that 'ha', but I appreciate the comment and stars. I'm having a great deal of fun writing between the lines of DH.
What a devious curse! Truly worthy of a Slytherin. Poor Snape, and I can't imagine Hermione being very pleased, either. Intriguing start!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks!
Another great chapter. :) Looking forward to more.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks! You picked an interesting snippet for chapter five :)
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks! You picked an interesting snippet for chapter five :)
Another good chapter. At least he was able to sort of warn her!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks! He's walking a fine line ;)
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks! He's walking a fine line ;)
This is really a fascinating take on the whole DH thing.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. It's quite a challenge to do a retelling and keep it interesting!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. It's quite a challenge to do a retelling and keep it interesting!
interesting use of the prompt. Good original ideas. Thanks for writing and sharing this.!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thank you for the review and stars! It's always good to know that the ideas are original.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thank you for the review and stars! It's always good to know that the ideas are original.
I wonder if that curse will be harder to break later, since neither of them are trying to break it, now.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Well, I hope you stay interested and keep reading. We're quite far away from any conclusion to the curse ;)
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Well, I hope you stay interested and keep reading. We're quite far away from any conclusion to the curse ;)
I am so enthralled with this story. It is great. I hope he can convince her to keep the spell going.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. I hope you let me know if his convincing remains reasonably in-character.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks. I hope you let me know if his convincing remains reasonably in-character.
Very interesting. That would really be a mean curse. I hope Hermione can break it!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Well, they'll certainly have some ups and downs along the way, of course ;) thanks!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Well, they'll certainly have some ups and downs along the way, of course ;) thanks!
I keep saying "no more WIPs", but then one catches my eye and I get sucked in. Now I need to see how this develops. Damn. Still, there's worse things than getting draw into an interesting fic. I'm quite looking forward to the next update.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
I have a pretty good outline, though I doubt I'll be done by the time voting starts. But thanks so much for taking a chance on it. The next chapter is in the queue.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
I have a pretty good outline, though I doubt I'll be done by the time voting starts. But thanks so much for taking a chance on it. The next chapter is in the queue.
I love the premise of this story! Head Girl Curse! Hahaha. Anyways this is awesome and it made my day while passing time at work! I can't wait for chapter 3! Cheers! ~Brena
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks! Chapter three is in the queue.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks! Chapter three is in the queue.
Arrrrguh! She and Severus were having such a nice shared dream together.... and then Ginny had to wake her up.Well, at least things are looking up for our dreamers. In her first dream, Hermione pulled her wand on him. But in this second dream, she was loath to leave him.This is going to be very interesting. They can't meet because it might mean the their deaths. "....your current feelings would most likely persist if you met me. But we cannot. To arrange a meeting would mean my life and possibly yours." I guess this means their dreams will be very... err....passionate? I certainly hope so!!!I'm enjoying your story sooooo much!Beth
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks for the insightful review. They will have many more nice dreams together, but maybe not as passionate as you'd like right away ;)I hope I wasn't too melodramatic about it meaning their deaths, but one or both of them are going to be in hiding for the whole story.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Thanks for the insightful review. They will have many more nice dreams together, but maybe not as passionate as you'd like right away ;)I hope I wasn't too melodramatic about it meaning their deaths, but one or both of them are going to be in hiding for the whole story.
He's quite straightforward, isn't he? Well, he is dealing with a Gryffindor, I guess... and not having time to waste, so I can't exactly blame him!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Yeah. If he weren't afraid that Ron was going to get serious about Hermione, he might have been a bit more circumspect.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Severus Snape and the Head Girl Curse)
Yeah. If he weren't afraid that Ron was going to get serious about Hermione, he might have been a bit more circumspect.