Creation
Chapter 5 of 7
RedOrchid***This story has been abandoned. (See A/N of last posted chapter for details)*** Hermione enters a world of twisted relationships and ever-thickening plots. Independent sequel to "Love Potion no.9."
ReviewedChapter 5 Creation
Mist was rising from the water in the moments just before dawn. An eerie stillness filled the air, void of the smallest twitter or the slightest croak. A shadow moved over the surface of the loch, settled in the very middle and slowly lifted, bringing the water with it to create a smooth altar. A second shadow parted from the trees nearby--a hooded figure, carrying the dangling form of a naked, young woman. Gliding across the water, he came to a stop and placed the unmoving form on the altar.
The eerie silence seemed to intensify as the man drew his wand and, in two swift strokes, cut both wrists of his subject, watching her blood colour the altar a glistening red.
The water began moving, circling the scarlet fountain, creating a vortex which slowly drew the woman down towards the bottom of the lake. Flames erupted around it, burning high towards the night sky as the wind fueled them. In the middle, the hooded man withdrew four phials, raising them to the sky.
"With this sacrifice, let the waters part at my hand."
A phial was opened, and blue liquid joined the water below, spreading out like poured ink and turning it a swirling black.
"With this sacrifice, let the wind blow in the direction of my will."
Another cork dislodged, and white mist soared towards the sky, turning the mist black and enveloping the scene in darkness only broken by the furious flames.
"With this sacrifice, make mountains move."
A third phial was poured into the vortex, joining the amassing pool of blood on the muddy bed, the girl's white face standing out in sharp contrast.
"With this sacrifice, I walk through fire with the will of the flames in my fist."
With a thundering roar, the flames rose to three times the man's height, as a fourth phial of deep gold was thrown into them. The waters swirled at a furious speed, the wind reaching the force of a hurricane and the bed of the loch itself seeming to convulse around the lifeless, still bleeding woman.
"Blood of the innocent I give you!" the man roared into the raging elements. "Power, I shall have in return! Through death, a greater one will arise, and you shall be the maker!" Reaching wide, the man threw both hands into the flames, gasping in pain as the energy soared through him, as the wind filled his lungs and as water and muddy earth climbed his legs.
"Sectumsempra!"
The man's chest was suddenly sliced open by invisible knives. Dark blood streamed down his body and splashed on the lifeless form below. Crying out in pain, he felt his life leave him, even as the dark power he'd conjured surged through his body. Letting out a searing, agonised cry, he tore his right hand from the fire's clutches and raised his wand.
"What was not, shall become.
With my blood I create thee.
Blood of my blood, life of my life,
For all time to come--family."
Red sparks shot out of the wand and hit the bleeding girl, drowning her in shimmering mist and lifting her up from the watery vortex. The body rose to meet him, hanging in the air before him as though suspended with invisible ropes. Shaking, Severus Snape took Hermione's bleeding wrists and slammed them to the pulsating welts on his chest. Fire surged through both bodies, bringing convulsions, cries and gasps as the blackness swirled and the red mist knitted their forms together.
Then, with a great crack of energy and a swooshing, sucking sound, the spell culminated, throwing the couple into the black vortex, lips coming together in a desperate kiss as the water closed around them.
And then there was again eerie stillness, as the first rays of dawn stroked the calm surface of the loch.
Hermione rose slowly to consciousness. Her face was wet. She opened her eyes and blinked as water flooded them. She felt nailed down, unable to move, as though another Basilisk had come by and turned her back into stone. Slowly, she reopened her eyes and saw darkness surrounding her. A shimmering light taunted somewhere far above, too far for her to ever reach. It was cold where she was--cold, dark and wet--and yet, she felt oddly comfortable. Something was moving inside her, filling her, creeping through every vessel and seeping into every cell in her body. She felt it, and she smiled. Strength--dark, intoxicating strength. She could not lift even a finger, but inside, she felt stronger than ever before. She caught a glimpse of her wrists, no longer bleeding but still displaying gaping wounds. Chanting an incantation in her mind, her eyes widened as the wounds began to close, seemingly of their own accord. The shock was short-lived, and her smile grew wider. Concentrating, she focused all her energy on lifting her right arm towards the light above her and felt immense pleasure when it twitched and obeyed. Not knowing how to, only that she had it in her, she raised her hand through the water and felt it part at her touch. Revelling in her new power and the fact that she was deep under water but still didn't seem to need to breathe, she rose slowly towards the light, parting the waters as she went.
Severus watched her as she broke the surface and proceeded to glide effortlessly towards the brink where he was sitting. Power seemed to emanate from her, and he got a brief flash of the first time he himself had felt immersed by the same force. The heady rush of feeling invincible. Exhilaration which, he knew, would soon give way to other impulses. He rose and walked towards her, extending a hand and letting his eyes wander appreciatively over her naked form.
"Welcome to the world, Hermione Snape." His voice was low and caressing. Her face split in a wide smile.
"Thank you, Severus. It seems a very promising one, so far."
Taking his hand, she rose from the water and followed him to a small tent nearby. The sun was setting over the trees as she stepped into a spacious suite, letting the plush carpet caress the underside of her feet. Without a word, she turned towards her hooded companion and pulled him down with her.
"You lied to me."
The remark cut through the shallow pants which filled the semi-darkness.
"I'm afraid you will have to be a bit more precise than that, Hermione," came the crisp reply. "I tell lies for a living, after all."
She turned towards him, propping her head up on one hand, and looked at him intently.
"You said that it would take me over a month to recover from this spell, but I've never felt better--or stronger. I'm ready to start working with you as a spy." She grinned and started drawing patterns on his chest with her free hand. Under her fingertips, tiny blue flames erupted, which caused him to hiss as they travelled across his newly healed skin.
"You will need the time to recover mentally," he said evenly, looking up at the ceiling. "Going back to your life to begin the operation now would get you killed in an instant."
"But..."
"I trust that you are familiar with the concept of hubris?" he asked, cutting her protest short.
"Of course I am, but--" she started again, breaking off as he rolled them over so that he was now looking down at her.
"I know what you feel, Hermione," Snape said in an almost hissing tone. "You feel invincible, elated and extremely powerful--like you have cheated Death itself and escaped unscathed. You believe that if the Dark Lord came through that door this very instant, you could take him on."
She tried to protest, and he could see anger beginning to kindle in her eyes. Without warning, he snapped his fingers, and ropes suddenly had her hands and feet fettered.
"You...!" With a simple gesture from the man, she found herself mute. A hatred stronger than she'd ever felt rose inside her, taking over her mind, making her yearn to claw at him, to hurt him, to kill him slowly and torturously for humiliating her. She felt fire start to form in her bound hands, burning away at the ropes which held her. Soon, soon, she would have her revenge....
"Any epiphanies yet?" The short comment dripped with sarcasm, and she suddenly felt like she had been doused with cold water. The beast inside roared and fought for control, forcing her hands apart to snap her restraints, while her rational mind did its best to hold them together. Hurt! Control! Impulses warred inside her, and she looked at Snape in panic, even as the ropes broke and she lifted her hands towards him.
"Clear your mind, Hermione," came his voice, almost hypnotic. "Keep your emotions in check."
She breathed deeply and forced her hands down to her sides, striving for indifference as she looked up at him. Slowly, the beast receded, and she felt revulsion in its wake. She felt used, dirty, as though something had just invaded her against her will. Swallowing hard, she fought back the tears.
"You are not ready for this fight," Snape whispered coldly. "Finite Incantatem." He touched her lips briefly and stood, grabbed a robe from a nearby armoire and walked over to a chair by a magical window overlooking a vast ocean. She shakingly came to her feet and followed him, feeling deeply ashamed and humiliated--by her own body and mind this time. They sat in silence, side by side, following the imagined sun's descent over the charmed sky.
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Hey..i see here that you have abandoned this fic..i wonder though of your proposal as to mailing your future outline of the story...and btw...why the sudden change of heart? i mean, we readers would've appreciated it more if you had atleast finished it..but heck, i s'pose its for a lost cause to still persuade you to doing it for our sake..*shrugs*...anyways, i'd just like to let you know that this is a WICKED story..and a great one really...a bit saddening though that it will not be finished..but hey, i want to get to see the outline of this one..hopefully its still available...
I am completely fascinated with the theories you have presented in this story!"It's not what the Dark Lord will do to you, which will destroy you--it's what you will do for him.”I love this.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! That sentence you just quoted is actually my main idea behind this story. Slightly scary that you picked that one out of the whole bunch. Anyway, glad you're liking the story. More soon, I hope.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! That sentence you just quoted is actually my main idea behind this story. Slightly scary that you picked that one out of the whole bunch. Anyway, glad you're liking the story. More soon, I hope.
well i am glad you are enjoying writting it cause i am enjoying reading it hugs and chocolate
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Hugs and chocolate? Aw, that's the very best kind of review. Thank you for reading!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Hugs and chocolate? Aw, that's the very best kind of review. Thank you for reading!
Hmmm. Interesting plot twist! I'm rather turned on by it. I can see why this would be titled shades of grey. I think the moral dilemma is one that isn't as important as what it will allow Hermione to do in the war. Sacrifices have to be made. I also don't think that they really are brother and sister...I mean, transfusions take place all the time. It doesn't mean you're really related to someone else just because some of their blood is in you. I think your idea is really quite creative and I'm interested to see how this all plays out.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you. I'm very much enjoying walking the borderline with this one. And yes, the moral dilemma will only worsen as the war escalates. More to come...
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you. I'm very much enjoying walking the borderline with this one. And yes, the moral dilemma will only worsen as the war escalates. More to come...
The ritual was very creepy yet the imagery was beautiful and very powerful! Great writing!I am liking this story very much.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! I was actually wondering if I should put a warning on that chapter, but then I didn't find one that I thought was suitable so I decided it was probably fine. Yes, it's a pretty creepy ritual. I'm a big Buffy-fan, and it still disturbs me a bit. :-)
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! I was actually wondering if I should put a warning on that chapter, but then I didn't find one that I thought was suitable so I decided it was probably fine. Yes, it's a pretty creepy ritual. I'm a big Buffy-fan, and it still disturbs me a bit. :-)
Very intriguing and clever plot!This is hilarious... "Suddenly, pictures of some of the Slytherins floated before her eyes. Could their deficits in looks and intelligence have something to do with situations such as this one? Was marriage to close relatives common in the pureblood community?"Re: your poll
I don't think it would be considered incest since the 'blood transfusion' does not affect the DNA per se. Still creepy, though!! :)
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you!Well, I think JKR pretty much gave us that one. Slytherin House does give the impression of being quite inbred. :-)Creepy, but ok. Perfect! Exactly the reaction I was hoping for. Thanks!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you!Well, I think JKR pretty much gave us that one. Slytherin House does give the impression of being quite inbred. :-)Creepy, but ok. Perfect! Exactly the reaction I was hoping for. Thanks!
This chapter was both hot and witty...I love that combination!I thought your explanation for the term "mudblood" was brilliant!A very clever and well written story.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! I always wondered how the Basilisk knew who to attack, so I was happy to invent something. Glad you liked.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! I always wondered how the Basilisk knew who to attack, so I was happy to invent something. Glad you liked.
A gripping chapter.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you!
Awesome. I love the slow descent into the murky waters of moral ambiguity. I'm glad you're enjoying writing this, because I'm enjoying reading it. Keep the posts coming. :D
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you. Oh, I definitely will. Lots more exploring to do before this one is finished.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you. Oh, I definitely will. Lots more exploring to do before this one is finished.
I second your author's note! I'm falling in love with this story too!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you so much! Words can't express how happy I am to hear that!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you so much! Words can't express how happy I am to hear that!
Intersting theory. I like the spin you've put on dark magic. I am firmly in the camp that says intent is 9/10 of the law, so I'm right on board with you here. Sorry for not reviewing the earlier chapters, but I was kinda stuck in must-read-more mode. Take it as a compliment. Very thought provoking fic, this one. I can't wait for more.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you very much. I'm glad you like it. The definition (or lack thereof) of Dark Magic in canon always bothered me. More soon!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you very much. I'm glad you like it. The definition (or lack thereof) of Dark Magic in canon always bothered me. More soon!
well its been awhile but it was worth the wait thnak you for another great chapter my dear and if harry believs it was a dream all the better for our dynamic couple
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
It has, I'm sorry about that. There are a few chapters backed up now though, so I'll be posting the next four or five pretty quickly. Thank you for reviewing
Your plot is fascinating!I can't wait to see what happens next.I'm enjoying the way you have depicted the relationship between Snape and Dumbledore.I liked how Severus used his Slytherin tactics to get what he wanted out of Albus.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! Glad you liked. More soon (six chapters are posted at Ashwinder already and I'm re-posting here.)
This is very well written!Your portrayal of Snape has me on edge...I'm not sure if he can be trusted.I loved this exchange between HG and SS:“You’re still here,” he said, his voice raspy from sleep. The tone wasn’t really annoyed, nor was it pleased, or even questioning. She couldn’t place it at all.“I was just leaving,” she answered, finding her other shoe and putting it on.“Good,” she heard him mumble as she crossed the floor to the fireplace. Without looking back, she threw a pinch of glittering powder into the flames and left his bedroom.He watched her leave and continued to stare into the flames long after the emerald colour had turned back into its usual golden red.
Great chapter, I'm looking forward to reading more!
I also love the title of your story...very clever!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you so much! I'm all giddy here from all the praise. :-)
ok this is an intresting twist om things i loved the first 2 chapters i cant wait to see what comes next thank you
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
Since I have read both stories today, I do love this story and I am so glad that there will be more to come soon. The training Hermione is undergoing with Severus is intense. I can't wait to see what else he does to get her ready to become a Death Eater. Another great chapter!!!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Intense is the word. And it'll get a lot worse before it gets better, I can promise you that. Thanks for reviewing!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Intense is the word. And it'll get a lot worse before it gets better, I can promise you that. Thanks for reviewing!
The plot keeps thickening...and quite well I might add. What is so amazing to me, is how this whole story started as a cute little love potion story and has ended up being a huge story with a fascinating plot! I hope that there is much more to come than 7 chapters total...yes, I am being greedy!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you. Yes, I'm quite amazed myself. And slightly frustrated. It's rather tricky to tweak the premises for the cute love potion story into where I want to go with SoG. But I'll hopefully manage. Yes, lots more to come than these 7 chapters. The outline is done, now I just need to find time to write.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you. Yes, I'm quite amazed myself. And slightly frustrated. It's rather tricky to tweak the premises for the cute love potion story into where I want to go with SoG. But I'll hopefully manage. Yes, lots more to come than these 7 chapters. The outline is done, now I just need to find time to write.
wow what an intense chapter but beautifully written as usual my dear hugs to you
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you very much! I'm really glad you liked it.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you very much! I'm really glad you liked it.
I really liked Snape's explanations here, and I agree about Voldemort. I do believe he punishes for failure, but I don't get into the whole Dark Revels and torturing followers thing. He's too "clever" for that, smooth bloke that he is. And Hermione's reactions here (indignant that knowledge was withheld... hahaha) were spot on. Good chapter.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! Yes, I always found the whole "Snape getting back to Hogwarts crucioed to bits every single time while still being the most trusted servent"-bit rather unplausible. If that's what Voldemort would do to his top guy, how dead wouldn't then the others be? And why would powerful wizards like Malfoy put up with such treatment. No, carrot and stick I firmly believe it is.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! Yes, I always found the whole "Snape getting back to Hogwarts crucioed to bits every single time while still being the most trusted servent"-bit rather unplausible. If that's what Voldemort would do to his top guy, how dead wouldn't then the others be? And why would powerful wizards like Malfoy put up with such treatment. No, carrot and stick I firmly believe it is.
well i hope its not incest that would totally ruin it for me so id have to say it doesnt count cause it was manufactured any way brilliant as always my dear
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
It's a matter of definition, is it not? Whether you go with genetics of social norms. I personally don't consider it to be incest--this is more like a magical blood-transfusion to me--but I thought it would be interesting to introduce the concept and see what kind of reactions it got. So far, I'd say 100% are all for them staying together. :-)
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
It's a matter of definition, is it not? Whether you go with genetics of social norms. I personally don't consider it to be incest--this is more like a magical blood-transfusion to me--but I thought it would be interesting to introduce the concept and see what kind of reactions it got. So far, I'd say 100% are all for them staying together. :-)
wow cool i was owndering how they were going to do the blood thing thank you for another ownderful chapter
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! I'm glad you found it believable.
I loved the ritual in here, and then after, when she felt as though she could take on the world, only to find out she was wrong, I loved the way you described her changing feelings--anger, hate, vengefulness to realization, shock, shame.Good work.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. And thanks for such a substantial review. Very appreciated, especially for this story. I'm struggling with it quite badly righ now and so it's extra nice to get something concrete to go with. Thanks!
I know I must have read this before, because everything seems so familiar...but not enough so that I remember what happens next or if I even finished it.Hope you get the rest up soon! This is going to drive me crazy until I either reach the end or hit some new material!Am enjoying thouroughly.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Glad you like it. It's been posted at Ashwinder since 2005 so there's a good chance you've seen it there. Back then, there were five chapters. I posted another two earlier this year. Now I'm reposting here, and once both archives are up to date and in sync, I'll start posting more new ones. Thanks for reading!
Intriguing stuff, and I particularly like Snape being slightly deceitful towards the end. I look forward to reading more.With regards to your poll... I don't think it would count as incestuous if they carried on sleeping together. They are not brother and sister. It's that simple. Whatever spells they cast, they do not have the same parents.
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
Thank you very much!It's interesting how differently people view the subject of incest. For some, it's all genetics, for others only upbringing. Thanks for your comments!
Response from Red_Sky_At_Night (Reviewer)
Although really, in Snape and Hermione's case, it's neither, since they have neither the same parents nor the shared upbringing. It's just magic. And surely that doesn't count. Wouldn't be enough to warn me off him, anyway...;-)
I wish I could have Occlumency lessons like that!
Response from RedOrchid (Author of Shades of Grey)
LOL! Don't we all? :-)