The Promise
Chapter 4 of 13
shellsnapeluverA series of drabbles telling about the grief of a Death Eater.
ReviewedShe confessed that she'd had feelings for me for some time. My response: I kissed her. Her lips were delectable, full, soft and tasted of cinnamon. When she wrapped her arms around my neck, I pulled her into a tight embrace, never wanting to let her go.
Unfortunately, we had to breathe. Her cheeks were flushed, and her long lashes fluttered open. I knew, at that moment, that I would never want anyone else. She was going to be mine and only mine. When she exhaled so softly, I asked for her hand in marriage. Foolish man. She said yes.
Thanks to Lariope my beta.
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...do not want! That's horribly sad. Well written, but... gah. Damn you, Narcissa!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
lol thanks for reading
Wow, this is so tragic, yet it is refreshing to see Snape as the surviving half of the pair because it happens so rarely. I can't imagine how difficult it was to not only write her death but to write it so succinctly. Well done! And, if you hadn't figured it out already, I'm just making my way through your stories ;)
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Yes, it is a rare thing that he lives and she doesn't. And it really hurt to write that. *cries* Thank you so much for reading through my stuff! *smooch*
There are tears in my eyes!!! ))))))) runs off to find happy fluffy stories!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
I'm sorry. Yeah, I cried too writing it. I haven't read this story since I posted it for that very reason. :( But thank you so much for reading it and reviewing on every chapter... I really thought this story got lost in all the other hundreds of fics on this site and I am glad you found it and brought it back to life for me... This one was important to me because I have never written about the death of one of them, So many hugs and many thank yous...Shell~
Response from MollysSister (Reviewer)
I just found your current WIP and I like it. So I was searching for other things you wrote. Bless the archives for keeping everything in one spot. Well done to you too, I enjoy your stories.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Your too sweet, thank you.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
I'm sorry. Yeah, I cried too writing it. I haven't read this story since I posted it for that very reason. :( But thank you so much for reading it and reviewing on every chapter... I really thought this story got lost in all the other hundreds of fics on this site and I am glad you found it and brought it back to life for me... This one was important to me because I have never written about the death of one of them, So many hugs and many thank yous...Shell~
Response from MollysSister (Reviewer)
I just found your current WIP and I like it. So I was searching for other things you wrote. Bless the archives for keeping everything in one spot. Well done to you too, I enjoy your stories.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Your too sweet, thank you.
I so didnt see that one coming. I am a moron.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Oh, good... Not that you are a moron or anything... good that you didn't see it coming, glad I could surprise a reader! hahahahah.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Oh, good... Not that you are a moron or anything... good that you didn't see it coming, glad I could surprise a reader! hahahahah.
I sense a non-happy ending coming up quick.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
You sense correctly.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
You sense correctly.
I wonder if things would have been different if Snape told her what Voldy wanted him to do?
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
If he COULD tell her... I dunno tho... Maybe. Yes, I say so because Hermione, knowing her, would find some other way to get the info they needed and not have her husband bed another woman. Well, I'd like to think that...
Response from MollysSister (Reviewer)
And that is another story for you to write! Mawhahahah!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
If he COULD tell her... I dunno tho... Maybe. Yes, I say so because Hermione, knowing her, would find some other way to get the info they needed and not have her husband bed another woman. Well, I'd like to think that...
Response from MollysSister (Reviewer)
And that is another story for you to write! Mawhahahah!
The shit is about to hit the fan~
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
You said it, baby doll!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
You said it, baby doll!
Seduce Narcissa? Icky. Betcha Hermione is going to be pissed.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Pissed, is an understatement.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Pissed, is an understatement.
Did the spy know about the wedding then? meep!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
I dunno!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
I dunno!
Birthcontrol anyone? Rut row
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
You said "rut row"!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Scooby dooby doo!!!!!!!!! heheheh...
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
You said "rut row"!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Scooby dooby doo!!!!!!!!! heheheh...
So no wedding announcement in the Daily Phrophet then? Ha!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Nope! heheheheh
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Nope! heheheheh
He proposed on their first date? Such a romantic!!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Yes, of course he is. heheheh...
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Yes, of course he is. heheheh...
Well of course she asked him out. HG is a modern woman.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Very much so. lol...
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Very much so. lol...
A shower in the potions lab? For accidential spills and porny moments?
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
bwhahahahah... sure, why not!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
bwhahahahah... sure, why not!
Severus is always the one who thinks he will be the one to die in the war. I cant imagine how awful he must feel having his love taken away from him by the same man for a second time.This is a wonderful set of drabbles. Very poignant and moving in so few words. Brilliant.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Thank you
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
, I'm glad you enjoyed them. Yes, that feeling of having to go through that loss all over again must be horrible. It would almost make me never want to love again just out of pure fear.
Poor Severus. To sacrifice his marriage only to find Narcissa was on Voldy's side after all...I only hope Hermione finally realises what happened.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Such heartache :(
Dumbledore was the villain in this one, I believe. I'm sorry Hermione is gone, but it was a lovely set of drabbles.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Yes, you are right--Dumbledore is just as bad, if not worse than Voldy. I'm sorry I had to write her death because I am such a supporter of SS/HG, but in this case... I had to do it. Thank you for reading through the end.
You did very well with these drabbles. I can only imagine how hard it was to condense the story you want to tell into these precise parts.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
THANKS! Yes, it was VERY difficult to pick and chose words. But, I think it worked out all right. Thank you for reviewing each time.
NO. You leave me with no hope. I'm actually reading Second Life from Lariope and I don't want anyone to die (especially my favourite couple). What you said in the note desperates me completely. As for your story you're right to say she has to die. That's one of the reason I haven't read DH yet (despite my waiting for two hours in the middle in the night last july). This is too nice. Honestly how three teenagers could survive in a war and get out of it unharmed? I find this book too dispointing to be read. And thanks to fanfiction site I know the major story.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Ahh
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
...thank you for reviewing. I'm sorry I freaked you out about Second Life. Yes, Lariope is the master like I said, but it's not Second Life you have to worry about. It's another story of hers...that's all I say but if you want to read it, go to restrictedsection.org and it's under If Memory Serves. 
Bad me haven't reviewed each chapter, but I've read. A very sad tale, which tends to fill me with anger at Dumbledore and Voldemort as well.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Thank you for reading. Yes, both DD and V are to blame, sometimes it shouldn't be about "the greater good" Poor Sev has suffered so much...he just wanted that one thing in his life, and yet again, he couldn't have it.
A very sad ending indeed, Severus shouldn't blame himself though; everyone has 20/20 hindsight.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Ooo I like how you put that; you're right "20/20 hindsight" so true... Thanks for sticking with me.
Harsh and poignant. Brilliant. Bloody stupid Griffindor, rushing in without pause for thought, leaving poor Sev alone (again) to mourn another love taken from him by Voldemort. I rather think he'll have some deep seated emotional problems to deal with. Bravo. You can never have too much suffering, it's good for the soul.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Thank you so much! Yes, poor Sev--it's tough to be him. lol. Thanks for reading to the end!
Oups. Fortunately Herms is more intelligent than that, isn't she?
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Well...she did start S.P.E.W...sometimes she doesn't listen... muwhahahah
Oh, tricky! I wasn't expecting that...
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
Ah...good!
Men are stupid. And Dumbledore deserves to get killed just about now.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Story)
LOL...yes they are.