You definitely need to continue with this story. I'm hooked.

This has real potential. I would love to know what happens next. How will Snape avoid Fenrir? And the Malfoys? Will they be good loosers? (I doubt that). Complicated situation for Snape. And Hermione? She will be a bad slave, I guess. Never being one who takes orders easily. And does have Snape a secret agenda?Please, continue this story. Can I bribe you with some virtual cookies? Don't worry, they have almost no calories. ;-)

I can honestly say that I was surprised with the ending. I thought it was a prologue instead of a single one shot. I don't see why Hermione would simply turn herself in like this without a fight. Seems like she would be running to hide and fight later with the others. She admits she doesn't trust Snape at all. Just seems a bit odd to me. Also, the part about Fenrir, I realize at the end why he wants to "get" Snape, but if Snape's such a favorite of the Dark Lord, wouldn't he be afraid to go after him? I guess I would just like to know a little more about that and maybe a little more about why Snape chose to "warn" them and how he'll explain her "capture" to Voldemort. I do like the premise and would like to see more of it. I guess I'm a greedy reader and simply like longer stories or more background info. Teehee.

Please continue.  An great start and I would love to know what would come next

This is great!  Please tell me there is to be more.

I have to agree with Maegwen's review (although my demands are somewhat scaled back).  This could use some fleshing out.  There needs to be some backstory so we can understand the significance of events within the story.  And the finish is too open ended.  How can we know or even guess if Hermione's decision is right or a huge mistake.  What is different about her (situation, feelings) that makes her choose differently from the other order members.  And Snape--always an intriguing character--is a little flat here.  I would love to see you expand on this very brief, but enjoyable, story. 

I would love to read more about this situation.?

Will you ever be adding to this fic? My intrest is peaked and I want more...please have mercy on a poor reader.

What?!? This is done? I loved it! But I need more please! what happens after she becomes severus' "slave"?

Well. Here are my two cents. As a piece for the SS/HG exchange, it works well for the most part. The ending is slightly more abrupt than vague, so we are left more with a "what the hell happens next" feeling than a "either this or this" sensation. Still, it's well written and a good read.

If you were to continue, what I'd really like to see, rather than just *adding* to it, is EXPANDING it. Put your skills toward fleshing out the story

We don't need to see the entire battle in which Harry runs off half-cocked, but we could have more than a few graphs setting the scene. 

"Severus Snape was a dangerous man. He'd proved as much by killing Albus Dumbledore, and then again at the recent battle." Tell us about that battle. Tell us more about why in your story Fenrir is out to get Snape. Give us some insight (preferably fresh insight!) into why your Voldemort has decided to enslave muggleborns. What's behind her "inner turmoil?" Show us some of that frantic Order meeting. Give us some Snape POV.

Demanding, aren't I? ;) I think what I'm trying to say is, I really liked this, but it makes me want more in lots of spots.

BUT, finish 'Deception of the Night' first. :)

That's it? It seems more like a first chapter or a prologue instead of a compleated piece. I see a whole story waiting to unfold from this!

I think you should add to it!!! that is not enough!!!
i need to know if her decision was the right one!
-karlamarie

I'm going to take the time right now and beg you for a sequel! OMG I want to know what happens. This is a very intriguing plot bunny.

Oh, please write more! I'd love to see this story develope, it has certainly gotten my attention.