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Breaking the Girl
Brizywitch23 Reviews | 7.04/10 (23 Ratings, 0 Likes, 44 Favorites )
A dark Snape/Hermione story. Snape has an obsession and its name is Hermione.
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Is there going to be an update any time soon? I must admit I expected something different but now that your story intrigued me I surely want to know how it ends. :)
Please let me know if you plan on continuing or abandoning this fic. Thanks!
This is a kick ass story. I was enthralled. Way to go. I want to know when you write more!!!
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Am on holidays and all euphoric from getting my results back, so soon on the posting...Stay tuned. Thanks heaps for reviewing.
Good work on the first chapter. It pulls the reader in, asking the question, "Why would she do this instead of work with him??" :) Great characterization and back story. Cheers.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Spanks honey! See you soon with chapter two.
. . . So Hermione thought it better to strip than to work potions? Better to leave the Magical world? There's obviously something else going on here. Is she disguised?
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Now, if I answered all your questions, where would the fun be in that? You have to read chapter two to find out. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Response from cmwinters (Reviewer)
Well I *would* read it but it's not posted yet! :P Hee
Wow! This is intriguing! You’ve presented strong characters, a little twisted from the norm. Sometimes twisted is good. Naturally I’m wondering how it will all play out. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Twisted is always better in my book. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the great review!
Wow authors like you are what make fanfic reading so great. I can not wait for the next installment, I will preform the hurry up please and post more dance now to incourage fast uploads to this fic.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Aw, shucks, I'm speechless. But as I like dancing so much I shall endevour to get on my bike and post soon.
Ooh, promising. You have some lovely imagery going on, and this is an extremely interesting take on the characters. I look forward to the next chapter!
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Thanks for the review! This is my first ever posted story and I'm nervous as all hell. Thanks for the encouraging words.
Well written, but i'm very confused.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
So am I most of the time. Give it another chapter or two and all will be revealed. Thanks for reviewing!
Powerful stuff. I can see Hermione doing that to herself, she's certainly been proved ruthless in canon.Her manipulations implied of Ron and the ones seen of Severus make her seem a mankiller, if that's a word at all...I'm interested to see where you take this.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Thanks for your review! Your right, I set out to make Hermione somewhat of a mankiller as I think it is the only way to truely challenge Snape - by making her his female mirror image.
hmmm can't wait to see what happens next
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Thanks for reviewing! Sometimes 'hmmm' just sums it up, doesn't it?
Response from LuthienCelebrindal (Reviewer)
that's the only thing I could come up with. haha
Your Hermione gives me the chills. You've created in me the want to know how she went from Hogwarts alumnus status to dancer in a strip-tease club.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Then my evil plan has succeded...excellent. Thanks for reviewing! Will have the next chapter up soon.
Oh my..... i just read this story and it's absolutely captivating. Really wonderful. Well done. Keep up the genius and you'll make myself and a lot of other ss/hg fans profoundly happy :D.
Utterly fascinating. I do hope you'll update soon. There are so few really good dark ss/hg stories, so I hope you'll continue with this one.
Oh. My. Goodness. His days with her are numbered. He is quite the desperate fellow. I don't understand why Hermione is doing what she's doing. But I suppose you are going to tell us. Thanks for the chapter. This is quite intriguing in a sick and twisted sort of way.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
I was shooting for the dark, angsty side of Hermione in these chapters. She is not in a good place at the moment. Glad to see such a visceral reaction... It's not pretty, but if it gets a response, then my work here is done. Thanks heaps for reviewing!
Wow. She's the coldest Hermione I've ever read. A little scary, too, if you ask me... Great job! I'm ready to read the next chapter. Here I go.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Yeah, she is a bit on the frosty side isn't she, and a tad scary. But, I was going for dark, so dark it was. Thanks heaps for reviewing!
nice begining hoping to see more soon
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Thanks bunches!
Wow. Not only do I have no clue what is up with Hermione, but then Severus pulls something like that. Amazing writing! I am so glad that you updated. I really love what you have so far.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Aw, thanks! Good to know people are enjoying my take on a totally wierded out Hermione.
I'm very curious as to why HG turned so nasty against SS while still in school. It's so out of character for her to be flippant and disrespectful of any of her teachers. To toss away her education, apparently the magical world [accept for Draco], and to take up exotic dancing and popping pills... but it's her attitude that isn't making sense and is that fear of Snape, the man, rather than the wizard? There are getting to be more WHYS in this story than there are answers. Need Answers!!!
Thanks for the new chapter .
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Without spoiling the story, I can say that Hermione (in the little universe in my head) is slightly screwed up. Who wouldn't be with a megalomaniac trying to wipe out your entire demographic? The disrespect is more a teenage angst thing, and the pills thing was just for fun (how else was I going to get her to pass out?). Hell, the head girl at my school now runs her own bar and sports a mohawke, so you can never tell what a person is going to do with their lives after school. I travelled, Hermione strips. Answer enough for you? Thanks heaps for reviewing!
This is some wicked fic!
It keeps people at the edge of their seat. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Sincerely:
A. M. B.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Thanks man! A big thumbs up to you for reviewing!
Well, it took awhile to update, but it was certainly worth the wait! You certainly didn't pull any punches, I hope we will find out why Hermione acted this way that has to be a tale in and of its self. Good luck in your studies and I will wait for the next chapter.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Thanks honey. Sorry about the wait. Real life can be a bitch sometimes. Thanks for reviewing. Will try not to take so long with the next one.
pretty pretty please update.
this seems like it will be a good story.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
There ya go. Hope you like.
Well done, looking forward to the next chapter.
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Thanks man! Intensely busy at the moment (damn that real life) but this is an addiction, so stay tuned.
Wow, that was intensely great! I'm rather speechless. I can't wait for more!
Response from Brizywitch (Author of Breaking the Girl)
Thanks, man! I am speechless myself at the moment - but that is mostly from climbing up the buzillion steps to my apartment. Thanks for reviewing!