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The Girl's Desire

septentrion

12 Reviews   |   12 Ratings, 0 Likes, 17 Favorites )

Drama Drabble/100-Word post-HBP/HBP compliant Potions Under Duress 1,490 Words 1 Chapter Complete
Bill Weasley Fleur Delacour Harry Potter Hermione Granger Severus Snape

Harry follows Hermione, concealed by his invisibility cloak. Why?

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Chapter 1: The Girl's Desire


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0/10

EverMystique

Nicely written and engaging. Like the twists and turns, as well as the outcome.

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

Thank you.

10/10

LoveFenrir

lol, love it!

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

I'm glad of it.

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

I'm glad of it.

0/10

imhilien

Very dramatic and dark in places...

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

Thanks, I didn't mean indeed to write something fluffy.

7/10

Anonymous

I don't think I can say anything other than 'Wow.'

I liked that!

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: I like "wow". Thanks for letting me know your appreciation. I never thought I'd receive so many reviews for this modest piece.

10/10

janis

Very nice story--I like the open ending.  Since I find it hard to believe that Hermione could really be forced to do something she didn't want to do, I'm going to decide that they've found happiness together.  She's too bright and too independent to worry about "what the others will think."

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

Thank you, Janis. That's what I wanted, an open ending, so that each reader may draw their own conclusion.

0/10

KiraAlexia

Great story

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

Thank you.

0/10

snapemylove

Very good.  I sincerely hope though that in the end Hermione was with him because she wanted to rather than being coerced by circumstance to become the mother of Snape's children.  In mind at least, this is the way it turned out.

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

That's open to interpretation... on purpose. *evil author* Thanks for your comment.

10/10

wartcap

The sections of drabbles are slightly distracting. The story in itself was very good. Personally, I would have enjoyed it more 'fleshed out' and written longhand rather than in this segment form. My favourite one started 'How could she play Ron's girlfriend'. Excellent stuff! Trés bien!Wartus xxx

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

Thanks Wartcap for your constructive criticism. I understand why you'd want different. Perhaps I should use some other thing than the "


" line to show the separation between drabbles? Or just ignore the separation when posting on an archive? And could you, please, elaborate what you mean by "fleshed out"?  My understanding of English reaches its limits there. Merci beaucoup !

Response from wartcap (Reviewer)

Bon soir. Pardon, mon ami, pour mon terrible phrase 'fleshed out'. Maintenant, what I meant was, écrit as a long story instead of in drabbles. Mais, Je suis compris that the whole GrangerSnape 100 thing is about 'les drabbles'. Je deteste les drabbles as a way of writing - not yours - tout les drabbles. J'éspere tu est still aime moi despite this.Cap de wart xxx (Let's parler Franglais!)

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

I understand you fine, Warty. Now you can use the word "fleshed out" as you wish with me, I'll understand it from now on. I agree this could have been a long story, but indeed drabbles are a way to write a story in a few words. That genre is just perfect for me. And they help me to get more confident with my English. Don't worry, I won't stop liking you just because you don't like drabbles **off to leather 2**

9/10

ancientgirl

Nice work.  I like the ending. 

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

Thank you. I must say I like it as well.

0/10

Bentwaters

Great work. I love when stories can be told in entirty in 100 word parts. It leaves room for interpretation, but yet doesn't leave the reader dangling at all. This was wonderful example of how to do it correctly. Thank you for sharing.

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

That was a very nice compliment,

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

. I love writing drabbles, wether in French or in English, it's so much fun to tell a lot without many words. Plus you can use the skill in your every day life. Thanks for your review.

10/10

pickles

excellent.

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

Thanks very much. And yay, my firt review on TPP.

Response from pickles (Reviewer)

Sequel?!?

Please!!!!

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

Sorry, no sequel, I really don't have time for it. Yet I have other drabbles that I'll post here one day.  Stay tuned!

0/10

kimjo2

awesome!  thanks

Response from septentrion (Author of The Girl's Desire)

Thanks to you for reading.

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