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The soft pit-pat of her footsteps echoed through the dark, ancient dungeon halls. Her approach to the end of the long and desolate hallway could have been classified as introverted if not for the indomitable look in her eye. She had a destination. She had a mission. She was going to fulfill it. Tonight. And so much the better if it was before she could be persuaded otherwise.

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Chapter 1: Shadowed

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0/10

lipa

Here is a review for you:
Yes, it is good, provided that you tell me what comes next. What did he answer, what did they do in the next minute and the next day and the next year. If you think that this is a whole story -- you are gravely mistaken. ;-)

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for your comment.

I apologize that i did not meet your expectations. However, as mentioned, there is a sequel in the making.

I hope to hear from you again.

10/10

jessajohns

Good story, very intense. Glad there will be sequels. Looking forward to them. I'd love to see one from Severus' point of view.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you for reviewing! I'm ecstatic you like it.

The sequel be in Severus' POV. It is his response to what had occured that evening. I hope I do not disapoint.

I hope to hear from you again!

0/10

justme

Wow, very nice segue into a follow up story... when she uttered the "last thing she assumed she would ever say to her lover." I cant wait for more :)

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you for reviewing! I'm happy you liked it.

Yes, that was intentional. I'm in the middle of writing the sequel -- not to worry!

I do hope to hear from you again!

9/10

kriitikko

I'm not one with many words so I will just cut to the point:I like this very much. It shows so mamy emoitons with so few words but it made me also want to read more. Two sequels, you said? Really well done. Can't wait to read more.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thnk you so much for reviewing, most especially since you are 'not one with many words.'

im really glad you liked it. I apologise for it being so short; I have difficulty writing long chapters. I tend to lose interest quickly.

Not to fear -- i am in the middle of writing the sequel.

Once again, thank you for reviewing. I hope to hear from you again!

10/10

inebriator

I really enjoyed this, but I have to admit I was a bit disappointed how short it is.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for reviewing!

I understand your disapointment. However, I find it quite difficult for me to write longer chapters.

Despite that, I hope to hear from you again!

7/10

KMJ

i like it, but you could do more with it... i reckon you could do severus' version of it.

does he love her or is he only using her? and if he dose love her will he go after her or will he let her go... you could do like ten bizillion different versions... ahhh my mind is going in overdrive...lol

was good story- kmj

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for reviewing.

The reason why I stuck with Hermione's POV was so that i could focus more on one point.

However, there is a sequel that i am in the middle of writing. There, it will sort of explain his actions and what he plans to do afterwards.

I hope to hear from you again!

0/10

snapes_faerie

hey wheres the next?

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you for reviewing.

With patience comes great things.

Although i appreciate your enthusiam in reading the next, i hope that next time, you can ask a little more respectfully for i found it quite boorish.

the sequel is in the middle of being written.

Anyway, i hope to hear from you again. Thanks again.

0/10

kass42

Please write more. Don't just leave us hanging like this!

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you for reviewing!

Of course i wont leave you hanging that way. Lol. Actually, i already do have a sequel in the works. It revolves around Severus' response to the situation.

I hope to hear from you again!

10/10

smooth_n_mellow

All I can say is wonderful!!!

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for reviewing! Im overjoyed that you like it.

I hope to hear from you again!

10/10

MistressSnape

And OF COURSE the snarky bastard didn't say anything at all!! lol I would LOOOOVE to see a sequal to this!

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Hahahaha! Your the first one to notice that that was one of the reasons why i did not make him say anything the whole fic. Snape, and his insurmountable pride... tsk tsk tsk.

A sequel is in progress and will soon be sent to Belelaith, my Beta.

I hope to hear from you again!

9/10

wolfen18

Very emotional...of course, it does beg for sequel(s).

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for reviewing! Im glad you found it interesting. I do tend to write emotional fics. Lol.

Yes, a sequel is in progress and will soon (hopefully) be posted.

I hope to hear from you again!

0/10

DayLightDancer

Ouch, harsh. And im already crying! I cant wait to see more chapters of this!

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for reviewing! Im glad you liked it.

Aww! it brought you to tears... im so touched. Again, thank you for your encouraging review. Im in the middle of writing the sequel.

I hope to hear from you again!

0/10

PattyWaffle

. . . If you think you are going to leave this like that you've got another thing comming. Update!Great 'begining' I can't wait for more 'updates'. *Hint Hint*

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Ahh! run for the hills!

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

is going to hex me!

Lol. Just kidding. I'll update as soon as i can.

Thank you so much for reviewing and i hope to hear from you again!

10/10

Selene

*sniffles a little* Poor Hermione...(Very well written! Good job!)

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Yay! Im thrilled to know that you enjoyed what i wrote. Thank you so much!

Yes, poor Hermione... :D

Also, thank you for reviewing and i hope to hear from you again!

9/10

Alborada

Please, tell me there will be more. It's so heartbreaking. Please, I beg you tell us what he is thinking about all this. you're marvelous (but a little perverse if you let it like that).

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for the review.

Yes, yes, there will be more, not to worry.

Maybe i should be a little perverse and feed the Voldemort in me...

For the sequel, it is in Severus' POV and it revolves around his actions is response to the situation written here.

Thank you, once again, for your support and i hope to hear from you again.

0/10

duchess792003

Lovely and angsty. Will we get his side of the story?

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for reviewing. Im happy you liked it.

Yes, we will get his side of the story, not to worry. However, it is still in its writing process.

I hope to hear from you again!

7/10

togspled

no no no! he has to get her back! please??? Excellently done, but my love of SS/HG has me dying for him to say he loves her too!oh well.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for reviewing!

That is for me to know and for you to nev---

Erm... there's a sequel! You'll find out there. Wait and see!

I ho pe to hear from you again!

Response from togspled (Reviewer)

oh please please please???you sure know how to write a cliffie (and this better be a cliffie and not just a one-shot ) ok. Pretty please write a sequel?

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

I classified the story as a one-shot because i wrote it to stand alone. However, as mentioned, i am in the middle of writing a sequel.

0/10

nightqueen

I really enjoyed reading this fic! Hermione's emotions were heart felt and tangible. I would love to see Severus' reaction to all of her revelations. Please tell me you have a sequel coming! I look forward to reading more from you.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for commenting. Im glad you liked it.

I really tried my best to focus on her emotions and stuff.

Yes, there is a sequel in the making. It, as you guessed, is all about his reaction to what had happened.

Keep reading, Keep reviewing!

i hope to hear from you again.

9/10

ancientgirl

Very nice, thank you for sharing it. I'm looking forward to the sequels.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you for your review! Im happy you liked it.

I'll post as soon as i can.

I hope to hear from you again.

9/10

ancientgirl

Very nice, thank you for sharing it. I'm looking forward to the sequels.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for your comment. Im glad you liked it.

I'll update soon.

I hope to hear from you again!

0/10

Sorceress_Sarah

Wow. That's good. I can't think of any words to describe it... I'll be looking forward to those sequels =)~ Sarah

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Awww! Thank you so much! Im glad you liked it.

I can't believe your speechless. :D

Sequels, coming as soon as i can!

Thanks for reviewing and i hope to hear from you again!

0/10

Severessa

Very nice! I hope that there is a happy ending coming, but, even if not, I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for your review!

Yes, there is a happy ending--- im a big fan of those.

I hope to hear from you again!

10/10

ccrawley10

Very open to interruptation on what is going on with this chapter. Like the suspense and drama.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for your review.

I apologize, i do not understand what you mean by saying 'interruptation' but thank you anyway!

I hope to hear from you again!

9/10

loony_old_fan

I hope this isn't the end. Please update.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you for your review!

No this is not the end and i'll update as soon as i can.

I hope to hear from you again!

10/10

dara st john

Oh....there had best be a sequel in the works!!!Well done, indeed.

Response from morethanubargained4 (Author of Shadowed)

Thank you so much for your review.

Yes, there is a sequel in the works.

Im happy you enjoyed it.

I hope to hear from you again!

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