Painful Loyalty
Chapter 6 of 19
cearraeOur tale begins immediately following the tragic events on the night of Dumbledore's murder. Where did Severus Snape go? Who helped him? The story is an exploration into the many faces of an undercover spy. Who is this man? What is his true self? Can redemption be found in loving another? Travel a while with the Slytherin spy and see how his life evolves.
ReviewedDisclaimer.
This story is based on characters and situations created and owned by JK Rowling, various publishers including but not limited to Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books and Raincoast Books, and Warner Bros., Inc. No money is being made and no copyright or trademark infringement is intended.
Thank you to Laurabeth and LadySunflower, my betas. Their suggestions are invaluable.
Painful Loyalty
Using some hair he had garnered on his last trip to the barber's, Severus sprinkled the last required ingredient into the phial of Polyjuice Potion he had brought with him to London. He hid behind the large bins that stood outside the building facing The Leaky Cauldron and downed the vile concoction. He hated the moments of transformation and gritted his teeth as his stomach roiled while his body reshaped itself.
After an agonizing minute, Severus emerged as a middle-aged, balding man with a spreading waistline. He wore non-descript, old-fashioned Muggle clothing; his father's in fact. He enjoyed the irony that his sire's idea of fashion was quite acceptable in Wizarding society for those who were Muggle-born.
Snape checked the briefcase he had secreted behind one of the bins for one last time. Crossing the street in an ambling gait to establish his character, Severus entered the public house and made his way to the back to enter Diagon Alley. Using his wand, he touched the wall in the prescribed sequence and passed through the portal as it opened. The street appeared as it always had: quaint, bustling and unkempt. He walked forward to feel the ambiance, but instead he was almost overwhelmed by feelings of anxiety in the midst of the shoppers on the street.
Maintaining his unnatural gait, Severus made his way to Knockturn Alley for a visit to Borgin and Burkes. He was on the clock and had little time to waste. As he entered the dimly lit shop, he cast his gaze around the myriad of grotesque objects on display. The one item he sought was not in sight.
"May I help you?" The voice of the proprietor pulled Severus from his thoughts.
"Yes, I'm looking for something to add to my collection of ancient heirlooms. Would you have anything like that here?" he asked.
"Perhaps," Borgin replied. "How ancient an object are you considering?"
"Fairly early; prior to the Norman Invasion," he responded.
"I see." The oily looking man scratched his chin and looked at Snape thoughtfully. "Any particular reason you're looking for these things?"
"Personal history, whimsy, does it matter?" Snape asked.
"To some, my friend, to some." He turned and beckoned Snape to follow him. "I've a few items that might interest you. What is your fancy?"
"I particularly enjoy clan symbols. They hold much nostalgia for some who are so inclined."
"And you are not, I take it?" Borgin stopped and opened a glass case.
"I rarely dabble in nostalgia. I do, however, invest in possibilities." Snape listened to the wheezing laugh of the proprietor.
"Well said. We think alike, my friend." Reaching into the case, Borgin pulled out an inlaid goblet. "Behold, the wine cup of a Roman Veneficus or Lamia, one of our early ancestors."
"Indeed, however, I seek objects of indigenous design. I've found they are more eagerly sought by local collectors." Snape watched as the man before him re-thought what he was going to offer.
"I have a feeling you have a specific item in mind, sir." Borgin stood up and looked Snape in the eye. "Perhaps someone has suggested you visit and ask for a very particular piece. I've had some interesting artefacts passed to me for, shall we say, safe keeping. I was told the person who sought to purchase the item would describe it and I was sell it to them alone." He looked expectantly at Snape.
Snape nodded once. "A clan object; perhaps similar to a sceptre, with an avian surmount?" Snape suggested.
"Indeed, I have two or three items similar to what you seek." He walked to a chest of drawers, and opened the bottom to reveal three items lying on a velvet cushion. "Are any of these similar to what you're looking for?"
Snape stepped forward and saw the Clan of the Raven staff along with two others. "Indeed they are, Mr. Borgin." He listened to Borgin describe each item, only taking in every other word or so.
"What are you asking for them?" asked Snape.
"A mere one hundred Galleons... each," Borgin replied.
"You jest, sir. Where is their certificate of authenticity?" Snape retorted.
"If you had wanted authenticated antiques, you would not have visited my shop, sir." Borgin looked up at the taller wizard. "I'm sure you will authenticate it for yourself soon enough.
"Touché, sir. How much for just one?" he asked.
"Fifty Galleons," Borgin replied, lowering his price.
"Thirty five."
"Forty five," countered Borgin
"Thirty eight," said Snape.
"Forty," offered Borgin, "and not a Sickle less. I've guarded these well for several months."
"Agreed." Snape pulled out his money pouch and took out the requisite amount of coinage. "I shall take the one with the eagle on top. Please place it in a box."
Borgin withdrew the Ravenclaw relic from the drawer and took it to his counter to wrap.
"'Tis a fine artefact, sir; you've a keen eye. What did you say your name was?" asked Borgin.
"I didn't. Good day," Snape replied.
Taking up his purchase, Snape made his way out of the shop and back to Diagon Alley. Looking at his watch, he estimated there was a half an hour left before he reverted to his true form. He'd made better time than he'd expected to, and so decided to return to the Leaky Cauldron for a well-deserved Firewhisky. As he sipped, he looked around, taking in who was there. He noticed Moody sitting in the corner with another Auror, and almost flinched as the magical eye Moody wore passed over him. He finished his drink and left.
Returning to his spot behind the bins, Snape retrieved the briefcase and opened it. He pulled out a trench coat he had shrunk to fit and shrugged it on. Just at that moment, he felt his body begin its transformation to its true form. When he'd recovered, he Apparated back to Manchester and returned home with his purchase.
Sssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
Kingsley Shacklebolt arrived at number twelve, Grimmauld Place just after dinner, on a wet October evening. There was a meeting called to discuss recent Death Eater activity. Pulling off his wet outer robes, Kingsley retrieved a Muggle newspaper from an inner pocket before hanging them up on a hook to dry.
"Would you like some pudding, Kingsley? I've got a nice apple dumpling and custard," offered Molly.
"No thanks, Molly, but I'd murder a cup of tea. Foul weather outside," replied the Auror, pulling out a chair and sitting at the table. "So, Harry, how goes your search?"
"I'll know better after you tell me how your meeting went with Dung, in Azkaban."
Harry was finishing his pudding and preparing to clear the table. Shacklebolt had been to the prison to speak to Mundungus Fletcher regarding his penchant for lifting and selling off items not belonging to him.
"Molly, can I steal Harry from you? We need to talk somewhere quiet," asked Kingsley.
"'Course you can. Run along, Harry, the twins can pitch in," said Molly, placing a mug of steaming tea before the Auror. She turned and looked at her sons, who were scowling at their mother. "Can't you, boys; you're always willing to pitch in, right?"
"Right," they chorused in unison. George finished clearing the table and Fred began to sweep the floor.
Grabbing his mug of tea, Kingsley led the way to the library, checking to make sure it was empty. He closed the door and warded it behind Harry.
"I need to show you a couple of things, Harry. I'll share them with everyone later, but I thought you should see them first." Kingsley pulled out the Muggle newspaper and spread it on the table.
Harry looked at a picture appearing on page two. It had been rendered by an artist, but it was very life-like. He read the short sidebar, then stared back at the Auror.
"I recognize her. I saw her at the World Quidditch match fourth year. That's Narcissa Malfoy." Harry pulled out a chair and sat down. "They found her where?" he asked.
"Saltom Bay, just south of Whitehaven; her body was discovered floating in an area popular for dropping lobster pots. It looked like she'd been in the water for a while." He indicated the paper. "Muggle authorities had to call in a forensic artist to recreate what she looked like. The fish and whatnot had gotten to her."
Harry shook his head. "You said you had something else to show me."
Kingsley passed over a Wizarding photograph. "We got this from a sympathizer."
In the picture, Harry saw a group of youths wearing Durmstrang uniforms. In the background he noticed a boy about his age, wearing short-clipped blond hair. He was obviously avoiding attention, only looking at the camera occasionally out of the side of his eye.
"Malfoy," Harry guessed.
Kingsley nodded. "We think so, but there's no Malfoy registered at the school." He shrugged and added, "They don't release names of enrolled students at Durmstrang, at least not without a price."
"What does this mean?" asked Harry.
Kingsley shook his head. "Too many pieces of the puzzle missing, Harry. We'll just keep looking."
Harry nodded, then, taking a deep breath, asked, "What about Dung? Did he tell you anything?"
"Yeah, but you won't like it," Kingsley told him.
"He pawned it, didn't he," concluded Harry.
Kingsley nodded. "When Aberforth wouldn't do a deal, he took it to a pawn shop in Cheapside," he replied as he fumbled around in his pocket. "Here, his redemption ticket." He handed the numbered receipt to Harry.
"How much did he get?" asked Harry.
"Twenty pounds, he said." Kingsley stood and scratched his chin. "Just one small problem though. He can't remember the exact address of the shop."
"There's nothing on the ticket either," stated Harry.
"I know. You up for a challenge, Harry?" asked the Auror.
"I've had my fill of challenges, Kingsley." Harry sighed in resignation. "This is a job for Hermione and her bloody lists."
Sssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
Snape was making his way to see Jenny and her computer. He hadn't spoken to her, but he supposed she would likely be home. Hadn't she said there was no man in her life, that she had few visitors? He turned onto her street and noticed her door was open. Three small figures were holding open their bags to receive Halloween sweets. Just as he reached her path, two boys and a girl ran in front of him. Hallow-bloody-een.
"'Scuse us, mister," called the oldest boy, as he passed.
Severus looked at their costumes. "What are you supposed to be?" he asked the girl, who was staring at him.
"I'm a fairy. Do you like my costume?" she asked, pirouetting before him.
"You don't look anything like a fairy," he told her honestly.
"How would you know?" she asked in petulant anger.
"I've met fairies. They're all rude, nasty little creatures who like to argue with everyone around them, just like you, but they certainly wouldn't wear what you've got on." He was amused by her angry glare.
At that moment, Jenny opened her door. "Sorry, kids, I'm all out." She looked up and saw him standing there. "Hello, Severus. This lot belong to you?" she asked, grinning at the look of disgust he gave her.
"I should hope not!" he spat back.
The girl pushed him and told him, "You're a mean man. I hate you." She turned and walked up the path followed by the boys. Suddenly, one boy turned back, and threw an egg at Jenny's windows.
"Adil Mendhi, you wait; I'll tell your granny what you did, ooof!" Jenny had followed the children after the egg had been thrown, but turned her ankle on an apple core that had been dropped on the path. She'd fallen before Snape could catch her.
"Rotten little buggers," she said as Severus helped her to her feet. She tried to walk, but couldn't put the weight on her injured ankle.
"Let me help you," said Snape, putting his arm around her waist to support her.
Severus got her into the house and seated on the sofa. Sitting beside her, he lifted her leg onto his lap, and removed the shoe and sock from the injured foot. Gently, he examined her ankle and saw it had started to swell.
"Just a sprain, but it's going to hurt. Do you have any ice?" he asked, getting to his feet and resting her leg on a pillow.
"I think there's a bag of frozen peas in the freezer. Teacher in a first aid course I took said they'd do in a pinch." Jenny winced as she tried to circle her ankle.
Severus brought out the bag of peas wrapped in a tea towel and gently placed the make-shift ice pack on her ankle. He looked up to see how she felt.
"Keep this on to stop the ankle swelling too much," he told her as he headed for the door.
"Are you leaving?" Jenny asked.
"I'll be back in a few minutes. Just rest your ankle. Where is your key so I can let myself in?"
Jenny pointed at a small table in the hall. "Beside my handbag."
Severus picked up the keychain and left the house. He quickly looked around, making sure he was alone outside, before Apparating home to retrieve a salve of his own design. He walked back to Jenny's comfortable bungalow and entered to find her on the sofa where he had left her. He took off his jacket and knelt beside the sofa to look at her ankle again.
"That was fast," said Jenny, watching bemusedly as the tall, dark man ministered her ankle.
"It's not far and I walk quickly," he replied, opening the jar of salve, not revealing his mode of travel.
"What's that?" she asked.
"Old family remedy for sprains and strains. This should make your ankle feel better right away." Severus smoothed the salve over her ankle and instep, gently massaging the soothing paste into the skin.
Jenny felt the salve penetrate to where the pain was worst. First it numbed the pain and then, with a tingling, warmed her foot until it felt relaxed and pain-free.
"That stuff is magic," she told him, lying back and enjoying the sensation.
Severus gave a small laugh. "Yes, I've been told that before."
"Thank you, Severus. I'm glad you decided to visit tonight." Jenny smiled at him as he placed her foot back on the pillow. "Was there a special reason you stopped by?" she asked.
"Well, I had hoped to use your computer once again." He stood and put the salve on her side table.
"Help yourself," she told him. "What are you looking for now?"
"I'm looking for a dentist in Surrey. I know the name, but not where they're located," he replied.
"That's a long way to go for a check-up." Jenny stood up carefully and went to sit beside him at the computer.
"You should stay off your foot tonight. It still needs more time to heal." He looked over at her, feeling the warmth from her arm on his shoulder where she was leaning on the chair.
"It feels all right, thanks to you." She smiled at him, and watched as he shifted his gaze away from her.
"How would you suggest I begin?" he asked to change the subject.
"Let's try to find a directory," she suggested.
They spent the evening together, either searching the Internet or talking about their time in primary school. They'd both been outsiders at school, made to feel contemptible for their appearance and intelligence. They'd each been bullied and, as a result, had chosen paths that had left them unhappy.
Severus looked at the clock. "I didn't realize the time. You work on Saturday." He stood and started to pull on his jacket.
"It's alright; I don't start until noon. I only work a half day," she told him, rising to see him out. "Listen, why don't you take my phone number and call me when you want to come over to use the computer or just visit." She wrote her phone number on a slip of paper and passed it to him.
Severus looked at the paper. "I don't have a phone." He regarded her face that had fallen at his confession. "I am thinking about getting one of those mobile phones."
Jenny smiled once more. "Yeah, great, so take my number, if you want." She looked at him with uncertainty.
Severus took the paper and placed it in his pocket before he turned to leave. Jenny put her hand on his arm and stretched up to kiss his cheek to thank him for his kindness. Just as her lips were about to touch his cheek, Severus turned, letting his lips meet hers. They parted for a hairsbreadth. Then, cupping her cheek gently in his palm, Severus kissed her lips fully, just once.
"Severus," she whispered, "thank you."
"For the salve?" he asked softly.
"That, too." Jenny smiled at him as she gazed into eyes that were, to her, warm, dark and inviting.
He shook his head. "Thank you, Jenny, for... for being you and trusting me. Good night, Jenny." He opened the door and stepped out.
"Good night, Severus. Don't forget to call," she called to him, softly.
"I promise." With a wave, he walked away feeling something he'd not felt for a long time. He was happy and someone actually liked to be with him. He was not alone anymore.
Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
"I wish we had access to a telephone here," complained Hermione as she flipped through the London Yellow Pages. "This search would go so much faster."
Harry shook his head. "Do you really think the type of pawnshop Dung would have visited would advertise?"
Hermione shrugged. "Probably not, but we could at least rule out some shops."
The threesome struggled on and compiled a list. The Order took the list and split it up by location. By pairs, they went on a hunt for the purloined jewellery. Three agonizing days later, Tonks and Lupin arrived back at the house with the locket.
Harry stared at the Horcrux with a look of loathing. Its very existence was an abomination.
"How do we know that it still contains the soul fragment?" asked Hermione.
Lupin stepped towards the table where he had placed the locket.
"Watch this." He passed his wand over the Horcrux, chanting, "Revelo Fragmen Anima." The locket was suddenly enveloped in a sickly, bile green corona. "There, proof positive of the content and the character of the Horcrux," said Lupin.
"It looks sick," Ron said, with a look on his face to match his comment.
"How do we destroy it?" asked Harry, thinking of Dumbledore's hand.
"Hermione and I are still researching that aspect. You just worry about finding them all," Lupin told him.
"Yeah, right; easy job." Harry watched as Remus placed the locket in a cabinet and warded it.
"You'll manage," said Lupin confidently before leaving the threesome alone.
"I wish I could be so sure," Harry said to himself more than to anyone else.
Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Severus looked at the modern office building that housed the dental practise of Hermione Granger's parents. He took a deep breath to steel himself for what he was about to do. His memory of visiting the dentist as a child was coloured by a less than gentle experience in a National Health clinic, getting a filling.
"Just a check-up, Snape," he muttered to himself as he entered the lift to the fourth floor. Their office was directly across from the lift as he stepped off. The waiting room was cheery and bright. Their receptionist was young, pretty and bubbly. He hated everything on sight.
"Good morning, sir," welcomed the girl, whose name tag identified her as Phoebe.
"Good morning, Phoebe. I have a 10:30 appointment for a check-up." Snape shared a smile which he hoped looked sincere. He was a bit out of practise at turning on charm.
"Mr Tobias Prince?" she asked.
"Yes," he replied, "I'm not late, am I?"
"No, sir. Could you please fill out this form while you're waiting? Our hygienist will be with you shortly." She passed him a clipboard and pen.
"I had wanted to see Dr Granger at least, one of them." He was worried his message would not get delivered.
"Of course, but the hygienist will see you first. Please take a seat." She smiled at him reassuringly.
He filled out the form and suffered through a cleaning that was excruciating enough to pass as torture. Now, he was waiting to meet one of Miss Know-it-all's parents. Finally, the door opened to admit her mother.
"Mr Prince," Mrs Granger announced as she entered. "Good news, I've looked at your x-rays and I can't find any new caries." She sat on the stool beside the reclined chair and smiled at him. "Tara, my hygienist, said she found a lot of plaque. You might want to be more diligent in brushing and flossing."
"Indeed, I shall try to be more diligent," he told her, while inwardly he was blessing the existence of Wizarding dentistry. "I'm very happy that you were able to accommodate me on short notice."
"Well, when a client is referred to us, we try to be obliging. Where did you say you heard about our practise?" she asked.
"I'm related to a student that attends school with your daughter. Your name was suggested when I told them I was relocating to this part of the country." He smiled to reinforce his statement.
"Really, well, I shall certainly let Hermione know you visited and thank her for thinking of her parents when she's at school." Mrs Granger returned the smile. "I think we're all done, Mr Prince."
She lowered the chair to let Snape rise. He followed her out to the waiting room, and watched as she signed the treatment forms before passing them to the receptionist.
"Phoebe will let you know the damage, Mr Prince. I hope you will continue to favour us with your patronage." She offered her hand to him as a farewell.
"Oh, I almost forgot." Snape reached into his inside pocket and pulled out an envelope. "Please pass this along to your daughter. Just a thank-you card to let her know I was here."
"That's very thoughtful, Mr Prince. I'll be sure to give it to her." She shook his hand and left him to attend to her next patient.
"Here you are, Mr Prince." Phoebe handed him his bill. Snape blanched when he saw the total. He'd not known the type of fees applied in private dentistry. Fighting the good fight was becoming expensive.
"Do you take credit cards?" he asked hopefully.
Phoebe shared another ubiquitous smile. "Visa, MasterCard and American Express."
Ssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
Hermione, Ron and Harry were invited to the Grangers' for Sunday dinner at the end of November. The teens happily spent time playing games on the newly purchased computer and listening to music on Hermione's CD player, while her parents cooked up a feast of roast beef with all the trimmings. While they sat around the table after the meal, Hermione's mother told her about their new patient.
"He said he'd heard about the practise from someone who went to school with you," her mother told her. "If I'd known you were going to refer people, I would have sent along business cards."
Hermione frowned. "I don't recall ever suggesting you as a dentist." She saw her mother's smile falter. "That's not to say I don't think you're the best, Mum. It just never came up."
"Then, how did he know about us?" her mother asked.
"What was his name?" Hermione asked.
"Oh, let me think... Prince, that was it, Tobias Prince," replied her mother, "and he sent you this." She retrieved and passed over the thank-you card.
"Prince?" Harry looked at Hermione and Ron. "Wasn't that...?"
"Yeah," added Ron, "and didn't you say his father's name was..."
"Tobias." Hermione looked at the envelope and placed it on the table. She pulled out her wand and cast a Revealing Charm on the innocuous correspondence.
"Nothing he didn't curse it as far as I can tell." She looked at her friends. "Let's take it outside."
"Hermione, what's going on?" asked her father.
"We think this was given to you by a wizard. Mum, do you remember what he looked like?" she asked.
"He looked normal. By that I mean he wasn't dressed unconventionally." Mrs Granger added the latter for Ron's benefit.
"That's not surprising, since his father was a Muggle," said Ron.
"He paid by credit card, Hermione," her mother told her. Seeing the expressions on the youth's faces, she decided to give a description of Mr Prince. "He was tall and had dark hair."
"Shoulder length?" asked Harry.
"No, quite short," she replied.
"Was he clean shaven with a very pale complexion?" asked Hermione.
"He had a moustache and beard, so it was hard to tell," her mother responded once more.
Harry looked at his friends. "What do you think?"
"I think we need to open this." Hermione pointed to the envelope.
They all went out to the garden behind the Grangers' house, where Hermione placed the card on a concrete bench.
"Aperio Litteratia." Hermione cast a stronger Revealing Charm on the card. Nothing happened. She glanced back at her friends and parents before picking up the envelope and opening it to read the card within.
"What does it say?" asked Ron.
"Victoria Station, locker 171," replied Hermione, before passing the card to Harry. "He's still on our side."
Harry shook his head. "I don't know Hermione. It could be a trap."
Ron thought about it and added, "I don't think so Harry. If he'd wanted to lure you into a trap, there are a lot of other things he could have done. This is very specific. He wants you to make a move to recover something. Just ask yourself why Hermione's parents, and why a locker in a Muggle location?"
Harry nodded in agreement. "Okay, but I want the Order to back us up. That bastard killed Dumbledore. I doubt he'd give a second thought to AK'ing us."
Ssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
Story Actions
To follow, favorite, like, and more either log in or create an account.
Leave a Review
Log in to leave a review.
Latest 25 Reviews for The Old Walls Crumble
33 Reviews | 8.7/10 Average
HI. wow what can I say? you made Severus falling in love with a muggle believable.
great job.
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thank you! It's nice to know the story is still being read.
Hello: This was one of my favorite stories! I read all of this on Fan Fiction and also the continuing stories of this wonderful couple. I can no longer read the stuff on FF so if you please could you include all the other stories here? I'm sure they would be well received.
I think this story is better than DH; for the Severus factor alone (and more people live). There shouldn't be to many chapters left right (and thank you for Jenny)!
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
You're right - we're winding down.DH was a bit of a let down, I agree. Not sure I'd let a child read the story. There was far to much death and it mostly seemed pointless. (Poor Dobbie)
Words do not describe how well written this story is. I'm looking so forward to Deathly Hallows but I think this story is giving it a run for it's money. When a story takes you so into it that you become part of it (hard to explain) than that's damn good writing. Looking (so farward) to the next installment.
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Well, there's still a little more adventure ahead. Coming soon.
Oh, I like the thought of using the Dementors as the way of disposing of Voldemort's soul. Very Good!! It is so obvious a solution. I'm enjoying your fic, btw. Snape is perhaps a little too soft and sentimental but "love" does have its own magic. Looking forward to your updates.
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thank you. I figured if Snape ever met someone special, he would mellow towards her first and she might colour his approach to others. I think I kept him snarky enough.
This is the best story...please don't keep us in suspense. Also, thanks for using Petunia instead of Jenny; *not Jenny, not Jenny*...
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thsnk you. znext chapter is with the beta - excitement yet to come!
The plot thickens and Moody needs to get that stick out of his ***... *cough* Mean ol' Auror!Great chapter, full of intrigue and surprises. The return of Krum was fun to see. Herrr-myyo-ninny! lol
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thank you. Yep, Moody's a mean one in this story.
Wow this is so wonderful!!!! And Moody...fuck you!!!!
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Oh, he's a mean one. He's not finished yet, wait and see!Thankscearrae
Response from sregner (Reviewer)
Now I look at that comment...sorry! But I was so angry! I will try and watch my typing from now on! But Moody still SUCKS!!!!
Oh I like this very much! It amuses me greatly to see how comfortable Severus is with Muggles technology and with living among and falling in love with a Muggle. Very well written OFC, as well. I normally do not read stories where Severus falls for an original character, but I'm quite glad I read this one, for the writing is superb and the plot is very well developed. I do wish to point out, though, that when you started the story, you set the date in 1997, however after the New Year's chapter, you jumped the date to 1999, whereas I belive it was meant to be 1998. Anyway, I do hope you update soon, for I am enjoying this story very much!
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Yes I realized my error. When I get a chance, I'll go back and edit. The timeline in years is necessary for plot later on. Thank you.
Oh my, what a wild ride. I clicked on chapter one as a whim and have spent my afternoon reading. I want more...now!
I love Snape's determination to carry on in spite of the odds. I love Jenny. However, as a librarian, I must protest her description. We are not frumpy. Not at all.
I do hope things will turn out well for Jen and Severus. I hope Lucius will not sacrifice himself, but I can see that he might.
More! I just want more.
Please, kind author, please could I have some more?
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Now, now, patience is a virtue - the story is finished actually and it will come as fast as my beta can, uhm, beta!Thanks
Oh this is so wonderful...what a story. But I'm so scared that Jenny is going to be hurt. Please, please don't do that! Thank you
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thank you. More adventures to come - wait and see.
Another great chapter. I'm excited to see Jenny's reaction to all that Severus may explain to her. I love this story.
I like this story! I'm sad Narcissa died, but I'm glad that Lucius is on the light side. And I hope things work out with Snape and Jenny.
Ooooo! What an exciting story you have brewed for us. Bravo! Interesting thing to have SS have a muggle love interest, but will it work out in the end? Can't wait to see what happens next... soon? Cheers!
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Well, it is a love story, so what do you think? The path to love is never easy, however, and that always makes a good story.Thanks for the review.
I'm still really enjoying your story. I especially like Jenny, probably because I can identify with her so well. She's a great original character; very real.I also think your take on Voldemort is very accurate. He's nuts; he's removed too much of what makes us human not to be.
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thank you - glad you're enjoying. I've had comments like yours about Jenny from others. When I envisioned her, I saw a very plain woman who you would look right through when you pass her on the street. She's an everywoman, if you will, and if we're honest about it, she's the majority of women in our society. BUT - never underestimate the everyday woman!
Response from jessajohns (Reviewer)
Definitely! The everyday woman can amaze you!
Very good chapter. I like Jenny. Interesting idea to have Snape contact the Trio through Hermione's parents.
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thank you! I like Jenny too. She's just plain, straight forward, but smart, Jenny!
Intriguing.
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thank you. I hope you continue to read and review
I glad to see you've posted this story here, they have far too much SS/HG and need more SS/OC and SS/any adult canon female except Hermione to balance it out. This is one of my all time favorite stories and I think it should have a lot more readers. Jenny is probably my favorite OC of all, she's a normal human female and she's very lovable. I've recommended it to all my friends. Marilynn
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thanks Marilyn,It's not easy to post at the admin'd sites. Every site has different requirements, but I think Jenny deserves the exposure - she's worked hard for it!Linda
that was one of the best fics i've read in a long while! well done
Response from cearrae (Author of The Old Walls Crumble)
Thank you!
ola cearrae, PLEASE have an epilogue! :) this thing still has so MUCH steam! :)) and legs to run on!
did harry potter eat voldemort's soul fragment? i don't really understand? so isn't that dangerous?
"I'll take that as a complement from the mistress who
defines the word." He sat up and made to withdraw.
- compliment
and in this chapter, it's a dental 'practice', not 'practise'
your writing is much different from others but still very palatable!
Yes, Aunt Bella. Ive not had much practise though,
he replied cautiously.
_____
should be 'practice' in this case. trust me. i'm singaporean!
interesting angle! bella caring about her sister and nephew? :)
i always read the epilogue first before reading the story... what a wonderful epilogue! more people should read it. i had only known of this existence because of 'random story'; then i checked whether it was completed and it was!