New Chapter for Black Roses Red
Black Roses Red
severina13 Reviews | 7.46/10 (13 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )
Harry loses control of Kreacher and the Ambulans Stereotypicus settles over 12 Grimmauld Place. Ominous Dark signs, indeed, but nothing Snape and Hermione can't solve with a little help from Moody and Polyxena, the vigilant couple who make their second appearance.
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Member Since 2005 | 7 Stories | Favorited by 12 | 123 Reviews Written | 63 Review Responses
Started writing HP fics in 2005, did it for a looong time, got busy and stopped. I'm back to it again to blow off steam between writing my "real" books and applying for grants to continue doing thus.In my free time, I like to cook and write fiction (HP fan and otherwise). My favorite HP pairings are SS/HG, HP/DM, but I also lilke Hermione with Lupin, and I also enjoy Moody and Dung is hilarious. Not a fan of Ron, HG/Dumbledore, vampires, or Snupin. Nothing against fans of those, just personal taste.
Reviews for Black Roses Red
So glad to see this being updated again.
Loved all the 'saluting' but now I'm wondering just what he was going to say about it.
oh bugger, a cliffie. This is quite good comedy. Keeps me on my toes as there are a few characters to get head around-- I'm not sure if there is a main protagonist.Poly is good at getting to snape, I like that. But NM/SS-ewww. Sorry, just not my thing.
Response from ProustNotPotter (Reviewer)
I didn't mention that I really like your writing style, which I meant to. Otherwise it was sounding negative, really, it's not. I like it and am looking forward to the next bit.
Ack! How dare you stop there! Now I will be waiting impatiently for your next update. Ack!
I hate you. Update soon.
Inspired by your tale and prose, I had an idea: If you’re going to break outside the story by mentioning the movies and your other stories, you may as well take an internal break and have Severus connect with a fangirl who makes the necessary sacrifice for the sake of fanfic. He can look smug for some unknown reason, and he can reminisce. “Dang! That was great. I thought Narcissa was hot, but those fangirls really get it on.” [That should go over well.] He can think about telling the frustrated Remus or Harry about the fangirl connection, but decide their frames are too delicate. Fangirls are like mead, not for everyone. Besides, if the story leaked, he might hurt Hermione’s feelings, not to mention Narcissa’s. The very soul of sensitivity, is our Severus. Instead of ‘Dang!’ you might want to use ‘Blimey!’ (a contraction of ‘God blind me!’) or ‘By Merlin’s left nut!’ (that will eventually be contracted to the innocuous ‘Merlut!’ by the wizard community where time moves slowly).
Still laughing. More, please. I sincerely hope you have several chapters of this resting serenely on your hard-drive and that you're slaving over the rest, cackling all the way. ~
Response from severina (Author of Black Roses Red)
Response from severina (Author of Black Roses Red)
i'm glad you're enjoying this! hopefully i'll be able to post more chapters soon. thanks for reviewing!
Ha! This is a riot, particularly Ambulans Stereotypicus. Pardon me while I rush to read more. ~
My impression is that the story improves in the second chapter. Good observation about Hermione and the difference between memorization and understanding. Good handling of the breakfast conversation. I was in correspondence with a writer once who said she never tried multiple person dialogue—thought she couldn’t handle it. Not certain about Severus-Narcissa, seems shallow. Are the two protagonists going to be the only ones with feelings? Is Hermione trapped by canon--lack of intelligent male companions?
Response from severina (Author of Black Roses Red)
narcissa/snape is definitely shallow. he doesn't have any feelings for her, but hermione is the jealous type (at least, that's the impression of her that canon gives) so she'll be going on about it for a few more chapters. The other characters, esp Moody and Polyxena, will show more depth as the story goes on, but with all those people in Grimmauld Pl. it's hard to focus on more than two at a time. i'm glad you liked this chapter better. thanks for reviewing!
I thought I was in the wrong story for a moment when Hermione started going on about Narcissa and Snape :D Glad you cleared that up. Will there be any more heated snogging between Severus and Hermione, and if so, will he allow someone else to shag him afterwards? Men *sigh*
Response from severina (Author of Black Roses Red)
ah, yes, narcissa and snape. sorry about any confusion. their little affair was very short-lived anyway. heated snogging is on the way...and he might allow someone else to shag him (maybe even everyone on the waiting list!) :)
Response from DawnEB (Reviewer)
There's a waiting list? Can anyone put their name down? I'll get a pen.
O, I like this :) So who's the mystery Black?
Response from severina (Author of Black Roses Red)
glad you like it! the mystery Black's identity will unfold... thanks for the feedback!
I wouldn't exactly call this a cliff hanger but it's sure an awful tease. lol I wonder just how much Snape overheard. After his earlier response to her eff you remark I have to wonder what he intends to say to her now. Oh, hurry up and post some more. Please..... ~
Very sweet.
Hope she gets him to see sense soon!
Response from severina (Author of Black Roses Red)
yes, but he'll have to suffer first.... heh heh. thanks for reviewing!
Polyxena sounds like an interesting person., and a perfect match for Moody. Hmm, so Severus snogged Hermione eh? I'm looking forward to seeing how this turns out.
Response from severina (Author of Black Roses Red)
i'm glad you like polyxena--i really enjoy writing her with moody. severus and hermione did snog...and will snog again. thanks for the review!