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Split Apart
lady_rhian12 Reviews | 4.08/10 (12 Ratings, 0 Likes, 9 Favorites )
How will Hermione deal with Severus' murder? A 10-part drabble series in response to the Dark Hermione challenge at the grangersnape100. Warning: melodrama.
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OMG. That was so sad. The emotion involved so raw as to create an open festering wound in the reader. Well done, lady. Well done.
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
Thank you!
Quite sad, yet understandable.
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
Thank you for reviewing. :) Glad you enjoyed it.
How sad for her. Poor dear. I guess sometimes life doesn't seem worth living.
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
Thank you for reviewing, Southern Witch! I agree that it's sad, and I wouldn't have written it were it not for the challenge over at LJ. Good to hear from you.
When I read this, I'd hoped that Harry could help her out of it. I'm glad she got Lucius though. hehe
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
I agree - Lucius definitely needed to go! :)
Sad, dark, depressing...yet wonderfull fic and love story. Hope they are together now. You can be proud of this one.
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
Thank you so much for the lovely review. This is far more dark than I usually write, but that's what challenges are for I suppose. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for the lovely compliment.
Sad, dark, depressing...yet wonderfull fic and love story. Hope they are together now. You can be proud of this one.
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
-this is a repeated review.
This was sad! But I really do enjoy your drabbles, so I'm going to go read some of your longer work now. I love how you hate Percy! I think he should get a proper comeupance one of these drabbles.
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
Thank you so much for the compliment! I'm so glad you enjoy my work. I feel a bit guilty about hating Percy, really - if one of my drabbles needs a villain, he usually gets the role! Who needs Voldemort when you're got a disloyal bastard on the loose, right? :) Thanks for reviewing.
Well, it was good. If there was a criticism it would be that it was a tad melodromatic, but that is most likely the constraints of the drabble form; getting to that 100 word target means making sacrifices - well, that's my experience of writing them. But I did really like it; and it didn't feel very sad, and I think that's because you wrote HG with such passion. I could go on but then it would be longer than a ruddy drabble! LOL.
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
Thank you so much for the lovely review. I am glad you enjoyed it. You're very right in that writing drabbles really constrains the writer to an extent - you have to make decisions as to what to keep and what to cut. I try to avoid extreme melodrama, but sometimes it still happens...:) Best wishes.
Response from Chartreuse (Reviewer)
Trust me it was a very minor crit - still a 5 star effort. You really did write Hermione very well in this, and the reader felt she had no alternatives - which I would imagine was the aim. Will now wait for more of dark roast!
Oh my! This was a seriously wonderful read. It was so angsty and emotional, and you really had me feeling for Hermione here.
Phenomenal job!
Oh my goodness! So much emotion! You've got me crying during this first part. Gahh, off to quickly read part two!
"I could ever have been prevailed upon to marry"nice pride & prejudice reference. lol. good story. so sad. but really good.
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
Definitely. :)Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm very pleased you enjoyed it, even in its sadness.
beautifully done even if dark. thanks so much
Response from lady_rhian (Author of Split Apart)
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.