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The Frustrated WitchOne night, the storm came and ended my pain.
ReviewedThe cry of excruciating pain
Sheltered by a perilous storm
The agonizing sound tickles my ears
I stumble down on the frigid floor
Sheltered by a perilous storm
The wind blows my ebony hair
I stumble down on the frigid floor
Your eyes piercing with abhorrence
The wind blows my ebony hair
I seize it gently, holding tight
Your eyes piercing with abhorrence
My breath shallow, raspy and uneven
I seize it gently, holding tight
Your icy, trembling hands clutched mine
My breath shallow, raspy and uneven
Eyes closed, I let the tears fall
Your icy, trembling hands clutched mine
We soared high together with bruised wings
Eyes closed, I let the tears fall
I stand naked, cold and shivering
We soared together with bruised wings
You let go and watched me fall
I stand naked, cold and shivering
Alone, bleeding and no longer there
You let go and watched me fall
The agonizing sound tickles my ears
Alone, bleeding and no longer there
The cry of excruciating pain
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Latest 25 Reviews for Storm
3 Reviews | 6.67/10 Average
This is terrific. I am still learning a lot about poetry. When I saw what you had done by creating a scheme with the lines themselves instead of the meter and rhyme, I was quite impressed. Every time I look I find something else I missed the first time. Excellent.
Response from The Frustrated Witch (Author of Storm)
Thank you very much madame.
This style of poetry is called a "pantoum." Incidentally, this is my favorite style when it comes to writing poems. I find it fascinating and more creative than the usual styles.
I am also still learning a lot about poetries. I am just a sixteen year old amateur with an abnormal imagination.
I'm really glad you liked it! ^_^
Wow that was intense. Bravo. Tamara
That was a very different style of writing than I've seen before. Using the 2nd and 4th lines of the prior lyric for the 1st and 3rd of the next. Intriguing. Also, a very emotional piece.
Elura