Chapter 5
Chapter 5 of 5
phoenix***Winner - Multifaceted Rd 6 for Devotion*** An accident with a potion upends the comfortable relationship Remus and Severus have had in the three years following the end of the war. How well do two middle-aged men react to change? This is meant as a humorous look at the Male Pregnancy cliche.
ReviewedChapter 5
"Are you ready to go to the hospital?" Remus asked.
"I have been ready for several weeks, but those infernal Healers have insisted that I have to wait. I'm bloody well ready to have this thing out." The fact that Remus was now grinning like a fool infuriated him even more. "And wipe that ridiculous smile off your face."
"Sorry. It's just an exciting day." He helped Severus to his feet. "How do you want to do this: Floo or Apparition?"
Severus weighed his options. They were both equally disorienting, but at least through Apparition, he wouldn't have to worry about climbing into or out of a fireplace. "Apparition." He did not care for Side-Along Apparition, but he was not willing to risk Splinching himself and being discovered. When they arrived in the private room at the hospital, he lost his balance and nearly dragged Remus down with him.
A junior Healer soon arrived in their room. "Welcome, Mr. Snape. If you could change into the hospital gown, the senior Healer will be here shortly."
Remus helped him out of his clothes as he muttered about how glad he would be when it was all finally over. "And quit smiling!" he snapped. Once he was in the hospital gown, he somewhat clumsily maneuvered himself onto the bed.
"The happy day is here," said the senior Healer as she entered the room. "How are you feeling?"
"I will feel much better once you cut this leech out of me," he replied as the Healer examined him.
She scowled at him. "Hopefully you'll feel differently afterwards."
"Don't mind him. He's been exceptionally cranky these last few weeks."
"Because you infernal people insisted I carry this child to full term. I know for a fact that this child could have been safely removed three weeks ago, at least. How much longer is this going to take?"
Remus squeezed Severus's hand. "Just relax. Getting upset won't do you any good. It will all be over soon."
"No, it won't. If your blood pressure is too high, I can't operate. Take a few minutes to calm down. I'll be back in a little while."
"Back in a little while," Severus muttered. "Infernal woman just likes to see me suffer."
Remus rubbed Severus's shoulders. "If you don't relax, this will only take longer. Just think, very soon we are going to be parents. We'll be able to hold the life that we created, our son or daughter."
"It's your responsibility. I don't want anything to do with a smelly, crying baby."
Remus leaned over and brushed Severus's cheek with his lips. "So you've said."
"And I mean it."
"I believe you," Remus replied in a voice that meant he didn't believe his lover's words at all. "Just relax and it'll be over soon."
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Severus felt more like himself than he had in months. The pressure and the kicking were finally gone from his abdomen. It was still distended and he had put on some weight overall, but his body was once again his.
Remus was grinning like an idiot, sitting in the rocking chair holding their daughter. Let him deal with her. At least she had finally calmed down. He had not thought that something so small could make that much noise.
Remus rose from the chair, crossed the room and sat on the edge of the bed. "I think you should hold her."
"Not particularly."
"Now, darling, you know the Healer said that breast milk is best for her."
"I am not breast feeding her," he replied coldly.
Remus gently pulled back the blanket that was covering her, revealing fine, dark hair. He then set her against Severus's chest. "Well, you can at least hold her for a little while. I need to use the loo."
"Remus! Don't leave her with me." He was irritated that Remus walked away without looking back. She started squirming, and he cradled her to keep her from rolling off his chest. Looking down into her face, he examined her features. This was the first good look he had had of her. She had his dark hair. For now, she had a dainty nose, and he hoped that she had not also inherited that from him. Gently, he brushed the dark hair, surprised at how soft it was. As he traced his finger down past her tiny ear, she reached up and grabbed his finger and tried to suckle it.
When she didn't get anything from his finger, she started to fuss.
"Don't do that," he said softly, but she didn't listen to him. Her fussing became more urgent, and he was alone in the room. He thought that she was hungry, but there was no way he was going to breast-feed her. It had been bad enough that he had been forced to carry her.
Realizing the only way he was going to get peace was to feed her, he lowered the gown and offered her his breast as the Healer had showed him earlier. "Come on. Take it," he urged. She was obviously hungry, and he couldn't understand why she wouldn't suckle. Finally, she latched on.
Remus peered into the room and grinned broadly at the sight of Severus taking care of their daughter.
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When Remus thought enough time had passed, he returned to the room and leaned against the doorway watching Severus and their daughter. He smiled softly at the two of them. He had suspected this was all it would take for Severus to fall in love with her. He knew that when he held her for the first time it had been one of the most glorious feelings of his life. "What do you think we should name her?" he asked as he finally entered the room.
"That's entirely up to you."
Remus could tell that Severus was trying to maintain his gruff exterior. "I was thinking about Persephone."
"Persephone?" Snape arched an eyebrow.
Remus gently brushed her hair. "I thought it would be a good name for her. The goddess of Spring and of the Underworld. I think it's very fitting, don't you?"
"Are you implying something?"
"That you are dark and moody, but then, I wouldn't want you any other way." He leaned down and kissed Severus.
"Persephone what?"
"I hadn't thought about it too much. I thought you might like to have some input, too."
"You're much better at names than I am."
"How about Persephone Aurora Snape?"
"After the dawn. Very touching."
Remus smiled brightly that there was no sarcasm in Severus's voice. "I thought so. I saw how she makes your face light up."
"You're imagining things."
"Of course. Let me get a cloth to burp her."
"You were right. Persephone is a good name for her."
Remus handed Severus the cloth. "I'm glad you approve." He wrapped his arm around Severus. "And I'm glad that you had that potions accident. I love you."
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Remus was pleasantly surprised that Severus took time off from work after Persephone's birth. While he had said it was to fully recover, Remus thought it was because Severus was becoming quite attached to their daughter, even though his partner steadfastly denied it.
Remus had known that once their child was born, Severus would feel differently. And he had been correct. Some nights when he was working late on his new novel, he would find Severus reading to Persephone. Granted, he was reading her articles out of his Potions journal, but his tone of voice was very soothing. And when Severus didn't think he was watching, he would sometimes catch sight of a very warm smile, a smile that even he didn't get. But he didn't mind. He knew the love for a child was completely different from any other sort of love.
Of course, Severus could not completely stay away from his potions, not that Remus minded. He enjoyed the time he had with Persephone. Even now, he could tell that she was going to take after Severus. And in more than just appearance. Her hair was filling in quickly, but she was also a fussy baby, at least for him. She definitely seemed to prefer Severus. There seemed to be this bond...
A couple of weeks after Persephone's birth, they received word that Hermione and Harry's baby had also been born. The two of them had a boy, who they named James Allen. When Remus suggested that this was a good thing, that Persephone would have a playmate growing up, Severus gave him a rather dirty look. He knew it would take time for Severus to get used to the idea, but he had faith Severus would warm to the idea in his own good time. After all, Severus has spent years hating him, but had finally come to realize how idiotic that grudge had been.
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After six weeks, Severus finally returned to work, though he took every Wednesday off. For the remaining days of the week, Remus and Hermione would switch off babysitting duties. Severus had not been pleased when broached with the subject, but recalling his own lonely childhood, he relented, realizing the importance of Persephone socializing. Even if it was with a Potter. Especially one named James. Later, he would ensure that she socialized with the proper sort of children.
He did have to admit that it wasn't all bad being a parent. Here was a child that he could mold from the beginning, teach to be a proper witch, one accepted in society, one who would be Slytherin through and through. Oh, he was positive that Remus would instill in her all those idealistic Gryffindor principles, but he knew how to ensure that she would be properly sorted.
From watching her, he could tell the she was a bright child, but then, it was only to be expected. He had been the brightest student in his year, even if that overbearing James Potter had been the teacher's pet and had been given Head Boy because he a was both a good student and star Quidditch player. Not to mention that Remus had been no academic slouch. There was no doubt in his mind that Persephone was destined for greatness. He just had to ensure that she associated with the right wizards. He was sure this would be a sticking point with Remus, but he had no doubt that he could convince his lover of the wisdom of this course of action.
Everything was looking up. He was well-respected in his field, finally appreciated after years of toiling in forced obscurity. Most of the wizarding world turned a blind eye to his past, focusing instead on the beneficial work he had done the last few years. Remus was finally accepted in society, though few knew the true nature of his profession, which was probably for the best. And now, they had a daughter. She was a true joy in his life, though he would admit that to very few. After all, he did still have a reputation to maintain.
As he walked to his office, he realized this was the life he had always wanted, but never thought he would attain. He truly was a lucky man
~The End~
A/N: Okay, folks, that ends this installment. I have had ideas for a future set fiction. I had thought of making it part of this one, but I didn't want to skip way ahead in time. I think it will be better set as a new fic. I hope that you have enjoyed this story and will be patient for me to write the follow-on to this. I have several other projects ahead of this one.
As always, thanks to nota for all her wonderful suggestions. She helps put the finishing touches on all my chapters. Also, thanks to JenKM1216 for spawning this idea. The fic turned out better than I thought it would.
Additionally, shameless self-promotion coming up: this fiction is nominated in the Multifaceted Awards for Devotion and Laughter. Voting opens 5 July and I hope that you will consider this story. Also, Beholden to No Man is nominated in Aphrodisia and Identity. http://multifaceted.creative-musings.com/main.htm
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Latest 25 Reviews for When Good Potions Go Bad
19 Reviews | 6.53/10 Average
goodness gracious! In SS's position, I would be horrified. Very hilarious and entertaining reading.
Great stroy thanks for sharing.
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
I'm really glad you enjoyed it. It's not my normal forte and I know a lot of folks aren't into mpreg, so having folks find it enjoyable despite that means a lot to me. :D
Brilliant story. You captured a hormonal pregnant Snape perfectly.
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Thank you. That was what really made me write the story. I can just imagine a hormonal Snape and found that idea so hilarious as to be irresistable. LOL
I'M NOT MUCH INTO THE WHOLE SLASH GENRE, EITHER. THAT SAID, I REALLY ENJOYED THE STORY. THE IDEA OF A CRANKY, HORMANAL SNAPE WITH SWOLLEN ANKLES APPEALS TO THE WICKED WITCH IN ME. NEXT TIME, COULD HE HAVE TRIPLETS?!? MAYBE SET HIM UP WITH SOME NICE MATERNITY ROBES?!?
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
LOL Thanks Samantha. I still have no idea what possessed me to write this one, but I had a blast doing so. The idea of Snape with triplets is just too rich. LOL
You know, now that I have had to suffer through the whole finding maternity wear thing (what is it with horizontal stripes?), I think that definitely could have been something fun to play with, though since robes are by nature loose fitting, it doesn't seem as plausible. But hey, MPREG isn't plausible either, so that would have been great fun. LOL
Oh, an epilogue! That would be amusing as well! Great job with this! I think I'm glad I spurred you on and fed your muses chocolate. Hehe! I throughly enjoyed this. It is hilarious! Fantastic job! :)
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Thank you very much yet again for the wonderful idea. I never thought I could make a go of it, but I really loved this. And I have started on another chapter. I'm not sure if you can call it an epilogue or not. It might be too long for that. I need to see how it works. This story still cracks me up when I read back through it. LOL I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I've read some parodies that are absolutely painful, but this one is really funny. You've done a great job!
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Thanks. Sorry it took so long for me to respond to the review. I had some doubts about doing this one because I have heard folks complain about how horribly implausible and out of character the characters tend to get in this sort of story. I think keeping them in character is what made this so much fun. :D
What a sweet little chapter. A daughter. I knew it! Ha.Severus has to breast feed. LOL!I can't wait to read the sequel. And I wouldn't be surprised if Persephone marries James one day.Poor Severus! That was really a great story, and you have my vote!
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Yup, I figured that a daughter would be the perfect thing to foist on two fathers. LOL And I really couldn't pass up an opportunity to torment Severus one last time. LOL Though, I was mercifully non-descriptive.
The sequel will be coming at some point. Plans are in the works, I just need to find the time. And yeah, having her marry James would torque poor Dadddy S off to no end.
Loved it! I'd love to read more about their little family, but I agree that this story ended at the right place. I love LOVE love that Severus finally realized that he was happy. That's so important for a person to appreciate! Well done.
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Thanks. I feel much better about this ending point than I was starting to feel about where it had previously left off. I definitely plan to revisit this, I'm already planning out how to address the intervening years. :D And it was really nice to see Severus realize it wasn't as bad as he thought it would be. LOL
Oh, yes, you cannot stop here! What do they name the baby? It is a boy or girl? More! More!
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Don't worry, there will be at least one more chapter. The masses have spoken. :)
ROTFLMAO!!! That was hilarious!! LOL! I was laughing so hard that my sides hurt and I had tears in my eyes. I'm sooo curious about the baby. Boy or girl? What name? How will Severus manage his mother role? Hey, and what will the child call him when he/she is older? Mum? LOL!
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
I'm so glad that you really enjoyed this one. I tried to make it funny, but still have some seriousness to it as well. I'm glad that I succeeded....As for the baby, I know the sex, need to research a name. Hadn't thought about what the child will call Severus. Oh, how I can see Remus teasing him when the baby says 'ma-ma' There will be at least one more chapter for this one. So, standby, it'll be a few days though. I have to finish a "Beholden" chapter first.
You cant end it here! We must hear about the c-section. We must know if the baby is a boy or a girl. We must know the funky wizarding name! Dont tease! Finish the story!
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
The masses have spoken and there will be at least one more chapter. I might end up doing one more and then a future set epilogue, I haven't decided. I think I have decided on the sex for the baby, but I need a name. A really good one that will require much research.
Response from MollysSister (Reviewer)
You go girl! research! Impress me with a fantastic baby wizard name. Please fire me an email when your much wanted epilogue is up. I dont want to miss it!
Not being a big slash reader, I have always wondered: who gets PG? I mean why wasnt RL the preggers one? Why arent they both preggers? Is there a rule book for this anywhere? tee hee
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
You know, I'm not a big slash person, either. I don't know that there are any rules for this sort of thing. In this instance, SS was the one exposed to the potion, so he was the 'lucky one' to get pregnant - mostly because I thought it would be more fun to have him pregnant. LOL The comedic potentional of an already emotionally volatile Severus having those emotions amplified was too good to pass up.
what your ending this already...omfg...thats so unfair...please you are writing the first r/s story i have read that i actually enjoy as you are making them so real...going through actual emotions and just not bubble gumming pregnancy...as far as crying, yes i will if you leave it here...please continue...take care
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
june, I am so glad that you have enjoyed this and find it realistic. Part of the fun has been showing how difficult a time Severus is having and Remus's reactions to that. I have to give that man credit for waiting so long to lash out at Severus. I probably would have done it much earlier, but we know Remus is patient. I will at least have an epilogue where we meet the baby. :) We'll see where it goes from there.
Poor Sevvie! I think I've read this somewhere before and I'm pretty sure I reviewed it, but I had to do it here because I love this story!!! Hope Remus can make it through 2 more months of hormones!!
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
While Severus is my favorite character, I really feel more sorry for poor Remus in this story. LOL I'm so glad you are enjoying this story. I know it's one of those subjects that tends to be avoided.
As for having read it elsewhere, you left reviews on Eros & Sapphos, but Ch 3 is still awaiting validation there. :)
Response from HogwartsHoney (Reviewer)
RIGHT!! The brain, the BRAIN!!!!!
Wow! That was a really quick update. Great!Oh, my poor Remus! At least Severus has accepted the fact that he's pregnant now.And Remus asking Arthur for advice; great! LOL! This story is so funny. I can't stop laughing.Please, update soon!
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Thanks. I'm so glad you find this story funny. That's exactly what I was going for. As for the quickness of the updates, the story is done, so that helps immensely. I normally don't finish a fic before I begin posting it. :D
I figured Arthur was about the only person poor Remus could turn to. But will he regret that decision.
LMAO! Poor Remus has to deal with a pregnant Severus! LOL! I hope Severus doesn't faint, but I think even after the baby is born he'll deny the fact that he is/will be a "mother". Now that sounds really funny! LOL!I'm really curious how you'll explain his pregnancy. Please, update soon; I'm extremely curious.
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Isn't that a hoot? I really do feel sorry for Remus, who had obviosly learned to live with Severus's normal moodiness, but this is a really rough ride. LOL And I definitely have to agree that I don't see Severus being the nurturing type.
I should have the update out in the next day or so. :) I'm really glad that you are enjoying this story. It was a lot of fun for me to write.
Hehe! LMAO! I love how against the idea of pregnancy that Severus is, even after it has been confirmed. Poor baby, suffering from such hormonal ups and downs. This is the part where I am supposed to feel bad for him, but I really don't. LOL! Oh, this story makes me laugh so hard. I can't wait for the rest! Great job! :)
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
I'm really glad that you find this story so funny, especially since you were the prime instigator for this one. But it's all good, this one has had me as I have tried to find new ways to abuse poor Severus. LOL I don't feel sorry for him either, even though he's my favorite character. I really feel sorry for Remus and he's the reason I sometimes thought of toning Severus down, but I always decided against it. LOL
ROTFLMAO!!!!! Oh, my! This strikes my funny every time. What a conversation to end up with this! LOL! You are truly one of a kind! Ah, Severus. And poor Remus. LMAO! I am laughing so hard, I'm crying. I look forward to the second part. :) BTW, I shall do my best to stop feeding your muses chocolate. LOL ;)
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Thanks, Jen. This was such a fun fic to write that I really couldn't resist. I actually feel worse for Remus than I do for Severus, and Sev's my favorite character. LOL What does that say about my writing? I have to post the next chapter soon as that one cracks me up. I'm not sure which one is my favorite as I find the whole story funny.
As for feeding my muses, there's nothing wrong with that. :D I enjoy the creativity and you are getting me outside of my normal genres. I should try to get the next one up so that I can post to Lumos before SH combines to one archive. :) Just so I can say I posted in all the HP archives. LOL
I'm not really a fan of slash, but I realised several weeks ago that I like Snupin. Yes, I can't believe it myself. LOL!But I avoid MPREG. When reading about that I always start thinking: How can a man have contractions without having an uterus? How will the baby get out? What happens when the baby has YY chromosomes? That is possible because two men are involved. And how will two men manage to conceive when having anal sex?Maybe I have all these questions because I study biology. *shrugs*This first chapter is really interesting, and funny. So I give it a chance and this story will be my very first MPREG experience.Oh, and eww... Ice-cream and crisps? I can't wait to read what you'll do with this story.
Response from phoenix (Author of When Good Potions Go Bad)
Thank you so much for taking a chance on this fic. I know that many of the concerns you have about MPREG are ones that I share. I think I address all but one of the questions directly. The other, well, it is mentioned, but I wave my wand over the direct answer. LOL
As for the baby having YY, that might technically be possible, but women are XX and men are XY, so there are X chromosomes available. That's about all the explanation that comes up. I'm a physicist by training, so I sort of glossed over the biology (which it's been 18 years since I last had that course anyway), figuring it's not all that interesting to the plot, which focuses more on the relationship between the two and how they deal with this change, than how the pregnancy happened.
For the ice cream and crisps, I'm glad you found that eeeww worthy. LOL I put the call out for strange food cravings and that's one that got back to me.