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Perfectus

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Perfectus

Electryone

34 Reviews   |   34 Ratings, 0 Likes, 1 Favorite )

Angst Romance SSHG_Exchange 12,267 Words 4 Chapters Complete
Dennis Creevey Hermione Granger Severus Snape Draco Malfoy

Hermione creates a potion with unfortunate consequences.

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Chapters (4)

Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Chapter 4: Chapter 4


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Electryone

Member Since 2008  |  2 Stories  |  Favorited by 6  |  89 Reviews Written  |  76 Review Responses

High school math teacher in Southern CA, who also loves to read and write!

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10/10

mick42

Oh Severus, shot yourself in the foot again.

10/10

esmelle

I think they are both perfect the way they are and am glad they realized they don't need the potion. I enjoyed this story. Thanks.

10/10

HBAR

It is as good a time as any for them to start over in their relationship, and I am glad the opportunity presented itself for them to work together.  Yay for happy endings!

10/10

HBAR

Uh oh.  I wonder if Severus took the potion and then sort of lost himself to his alterego the way Hermione does, or if he had full control of his actions and just got carried away with the idea of getting Hermione in his bed.  I sense some fireworks coming.  The jury is stil out on whether it is the good kind or not :)

10/10

HBAR

How eerie the way she floats back and forth between Hermione and Miranda.  Hermione doesn't seem the type to like to lose control, but it also seems that it is not within her power to stop using the potion.  I hope Severus can and will help her.

10/10

HBAR

This is quite intriguing.  The impossible to brew perfectus potion, the "cousin", the awful way Hermione was treated which is now being thrown back in Severus' face.  I'm most interested to see where we go from here.

10/10

sunny33

Even better, indeed! :)

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

=) Thanks for reading!

10/10

sunny33

Wonder if that was what he intended , or if he just got carried away. :)

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

I think perhaps he did subconsciously but it's open to interpretation--there's still a debate going on in my mind about Severus's motivations.

10/10

Sampdoria

Thank you so much for the last chapter, it was a lovely story.

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

Thanks for reading--I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

0/10

HermioneJeanSnape

A quicker wrap-up than I expected, but very nice.

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

I agree that it was quick! Even though I wrote this over a year ago, I still think of things that I can add. The last two chapters were written in a hurry (during my extension from the Exchange). Thanks for reading! =)

10/10

esmelle

What a cliffhanger! Must be quite a potion to tempt Severus into taking it rather than analyzing the ingredients. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

It definitely is a very strong potion!

10/10

cenicienta

Interesting subject and very stupid Severus. I hope he comes back to his senses.

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

I can't take credit for the subject--sabrebabe gave me the prompt of Jekyll/Hyde. As for Severus... well I'm not going to give anything away. Thanks for your review!

10/10

Sampdoria

I loved this first chapter. I especially loved that Hermoine walked away from him, I tend to be annoyed when she stays and just let him verbally abuse her, no matter what his reasons are for doing so. While I love that he actually has feelings for her, and I can understand his fear for getting hurt, I do prefer a Severus who at the end grows a spine and does his best to get the girl without breaking her in the process. I am very much looking forward for more.

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

I get annoyed at the same things. I hope that you like the rest of the story!

0/10

Severus49

Methinks Hermione is herself and Miranda, and was testing Snape to see if he'd find her attractive as this new person. But, we don't know enough about the potion to tell if the ingester can switch back and forth at will, or if they're stuck in one form. As it stands right now, if it was mutable like that, then it's almost a Jekyll and Hyde type elixir. And that leads me to the question of - was Creevy deliberately sent by Hermione to get Snape, or did he just go on his own? Can't wait to read more!

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

Jekyll and Hyde was actually the prompt for this story but I didn't mention that at the beginning because I didn't want to spoil anything. Thanks for reviewing! =)

10/10

sunny33

Cousin? Yeah, right!  That sort of perfection is not what he wants.  Wonder how long it will take her to work that out? :)

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

It might be awhile unfortunately! (well, as much as can happen in a four chapter story) I hope you like the rest of this!

10/10

magicalpresence

Lovely!  I'm glad they were able to help each other!

0/10

snapify52

Evil Cliffie of Dooooom...

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

Mwahaha! Next chapter's in the queue so it won't be too long!

Response from snapify52 (Reviewer)

Yay!

10/10

magicalpresence

This is an interesting story!  I'm sure this conversation isn't going to be easy!

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

No it certainly won't! Thanks for your review!

10/10

Sampdoria

The plot thickens, I cant wait to read what happens next,

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

It's coming soon! (complete somewhere in the exchange archives but now in the queue)

0/10

Severus49

Oh, this is awkward....

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

Isn't is though? =P Thanks for reading!

10/10

Owlbait

Well now, this is going to be an interesting conversation :o)

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

I know--it's an extremely awkward situation!

0/10

HermioneJeanSnape

Oh, for pete's sake. You pair of idiots...

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

LOL, I totally agree!

10/10

Owlbait

Sort of a Jekyl and Hermione riff going on there. I'm worried about Herms getting out of her own control. A little jealousy won't hurt Sev any though :o)

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

Severus and Dennis are worried too! And the original prompt was Jekyll/Hyde so it's intended to be that way. Thanks for your reviews! =)

10/10

Owlbait

Such lovely angst, and Hermione's potion is intriguing. :o)

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

Thanks! I usually write fluffier things but this ended up angstier than it was originally meant to be.

10/10

Sampdoria

Loved the update. But, to be honest, Hermione has nothing to be ashamed over how she behaves towards Severus.  He treated her like crap 8 years ago, there is no reason why she should treat  him like a long lost hero or for him not having to prove himself of worth a seccond chance even if he is Severus Snape. "Miranda" on the other hand should be more careful, the potion is obviously not only changing the look, but also the mind of the one who takes it, not only making "Miranda" a risk for herself, but also influence Hermiones brigth mine. So, while I obviously wants my happy ending and for the two of them to work together, I do not want a situation where Severus is "superior" "saves the day" or belittle her in any way. If he cant treat her with the respect he didn't have in the past, not to mention as a grown woman, there is no basis for a equal relationship between them.

Response from Electryone (Author of Perfectus)

I don't want to give anything away so I'll just say that I hope you like the rest of this (two more chapters)! Thanks so much for your reviews-I've enjoyed reading your thoughts!

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