I like both versions. :)

It is interesting how men are so fascinated with breasts, isn't it?  My husband and I have been married for over 17 years now, and mine are still like an all-new phenomenon to him!  I suspect Severus will still feel just as enthralled after 17 years with Hermione.  Great story, and I too prefer the expanded version!

Mmm.... very well done, but I guess I'm going to say I enjoyed this one more. It's like poetry, very subtle and evocative.

That's sad to see how insecure he still is despite her being in his bed. I hope he'll be more confident around her in the future. Lovely story.