I don't know what you were worried about.  This was realistic and steamy.

Well I'd say you did an amazing job.  This was very visual and hot.  I look forward to more.

Wow! That's really great for a first attempt. You should do some more of the genre.

THis is wonderful yummy smut!!! Great Job can't wait for the next round!

Oh my!  Maybe I'm just unduly fond of corsets, but you have absolutely no reason to worry about your smut-writing ability.  That was scorching.

MERCY THAT WAS HOT! Well done...I cannot wait to read what happens next, this is so saved to my favorites..I love it!

Very nice!

You should feel very confident in the next bit! Can't wait to see more.

That was your first smut Madam?  You could have fooled me!  What an awesome job

I just fund this on a lazy Sunday morning and am delighted. As you asked for pointers I can offer a few: at the beginning it was unclear to me whether she wears robes over the corset or not. If the corset is tight enough to make breathing difficult (as you have written twice) and goes below the waist H cannot bend backwards like this and moving her lower body sinuously might also be difficult. Hope it helps. Your "Nightshirt" is one of my favourite ff story ever, both in HP and JA. 

I just fund this on a lazy Sunday morning and am delighted. As you asked for pointers I can offer a few: at the beginning it was unclear to me whether she wears robes over the corset or not. If the corset is tight enough to make breathing difficult (as you have written twice) and goes below the waist H cannot bend backwards like this and moving her lower body sinuously might also be difficult. Hope it helps. Your "Nightshirt" is one of my favourite ff story ever, both in HP and JA. 

I was skimming around tonight trying to find something good to read and came across this gem.  I've already glanced at half a dozen other fics and had to roll my eyes and close the windows.  Not this one.  Your writing is fabulous.  Very well done!