Like a Bat Out of Hell
Chapter 5 of 6
AmitaTom is a bad boy.
Chapter 5: Like a Bat Out of Hell
“Come, Narcissa, time for lunch.”
She watched the final fluttering of a bird. The cat had finally caught one.
“Narcissa!”
“Coming, Mum.”
She had to withstand the glare of her parents and two older sisters. One was not late to lunch or anything else unless it was something to which one was fashionably late. Would she ever get them straight? The oldest sister fell into the routines naturally. The middle sister had a nonchalance that somehow saved her. Narcissa had her problems. And there were more important things such as watching a bird die. It would sustain her for weeks. This afternoon at the dance lesson she would imagine performing a dying swan. Tonight the evening shadows would remind her of the twitching animal and its slow subsidence. She knew she had to hold the images close and make them last. It had been a harsh lesson that she was not to help the animals on the estate die.
By the time she was off to school, she had learned acute observation. Proper young ladies did not initiate painful and humiliating experiences, but they could watch. The trick was knowing where and when to watch. It was an acquired skill, and when she noticed a boy running along a high ledge, she could tell he was not a natural athlete. He was showing off for the girls, and one day the show-off fell.
“How sad,” said one young girl as they carried him off for repairs.
“Yes,” said Narcissa.
Boys, on the other hand, could inflict pain if they were powerful enough and sneaky enough. Narcissa decided early that sneakiness was the better quality since it let one inflict pain longer without suffering consequences. It was her fourth year, and the lateness no particular credit to her considering her upbringing, when she discovered arrogance was nearly as effective as sneaky, and she discovered this by observing one boy in particular. Even though they were in the same House, it was not easy to meet him because of his predilection for buxom older girls.
“Hello, Mr. Malfoy,” she said on the train at the beginning of her fifth year.
“Hello, Miss … Black, I believe. We met at a dance this summer, did we not?”
“I’m gratified you haven’t forgotten me.”
“Never,” he said. “I do recall your family remarking on your outstanding performance on your exams.”
“You are too kind,” she said. “I recall hearing you did very well.”
“Well, a gentleman can’t be a swot,” he replied. “You must excuse me, but I’m due at the Prefects’ meeting. Ah, I see that you are one, too.”
“I’ll be there in a minute after I’ve stowed my luggage,” she said.
He nodded and headed toward the Prefect car. She had already stowed her luggage, but her honed instincts told her that following Lucius Malfoy at a discreet distance would be rewarding, and indeed it was as several scruffy first-years were put in their place. They were still nursing their subtle injuries when she passed them.
The connection of others’ pain with more intimate feelings came slowly. It wasn’t one of the standard items in a nice girl’s repertoire. After the first several experiences, she concluded that if she were better endowed, she might have learned more quickly. She had been accompanying Lucius on his Prefect patrols as providing opportunities, and after several incidents, she noticed a tingling in her nipples.
She later thought the tingling must have shut down part of her brain because after one incident, she challenged Lucius by saying, “If you’re that hard on them, you’re going to be reprimanded.”
She was afraid the fun would be over, but he took it differently. “Who’s going to tell?” he asked. “You?” He reached out and twisted her nipples. She gave a cry of surprise and backed against the wall, looking wild and panting. He was looking at her strangely.
The next patrol, they went to a part of the castle she had never visited. When they seemed miles from everything, he turned and faced her. “Are you going to snitch?”
“About what?” she asked.
“This,” he said as he pinched her nipples.
She backed against the wall. The tingling spread. She said, “Don’t hurt me.”
Her eyes opened wider as he stepped closer to her. He reached inside her cloak and put his hands on her waist. She tingled all over. She slowly put her arms around him. They stood, holding each other.
Several years later, Narcissa was standing alone in front of a fireplace in Malfoy Manor. She had been pacing the floor in the study and fuming, but now she was standing and fuming. Lucius had not given up his predilection for buxom women, except they were now buxom younger women. Lucius thought it could be excused because they weren’t witches and hence didn’t mean anything.
He occasionally said, “But I tortured her, dear.”
“I’m certain you made her squeal,” she would reply.
For the last six months she had refused to let him touch her, but she was thinking the plan had miscarried since he had become indifferent to her in every way. That afternoon, however, her oldest sister had visited with some delicious gossip.
“The Dark Lord is displeased with your husband. He plans to correct him tonight at the ceremony.”
After much begging and cajoling, her oldest sister agreed to lend Narcissa a costume and sneak her into the meeting.
Now, Narcissa was watching Tom address the crowd with Lucius kneeling at his feet. Tom seemed to look at her directly in the eye as if he were doing this for her. She realized her hands, under her robe, had moved to touch herself.
Punish him for me, she found herself thinking. She thought Tom looked straight at her and read her mind. She felt his gaze. She felt the moist warmth.
Tom was reciting her husband’s transgressions and flicking his wand. At every lash, Lucius drew into a tighter ball and bit back a moan. At every lash, the ball of lust inside Narcissa grew tighter as she bit back a moan.
The final admonition arrived with the final lash. “You consort with unclean women.”
Lucius squealed.
Inside the room, the group trembled and released its tension.
Inside her knickers, Narcissa trembled and released her tension.
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Latest 25 Reviews for Riddle in Black
19 Reviews | 3.16/10 Average
Thoroughly enjoyed Tom being in each Black, in one way or another; each has been his and is his, and contrary to social mores, all seem to have benefited from it--each witch has a stronger sense of self and has been empowered, as well as Riddle attaining full power and dominance over each one and, either directly or vicariously, theirs. Enticing and insightful tale, as always!
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
This is almost 'The Secret History of Tom Riddle,' telling the story suppressed by the official account. The Black sisters are part of the pure-blood clan, and they deserve special attention - even one disowned by her famiily. He does do right by them, even though it goes beyond social mores and even though it is at a cost to them. But perhaps his excessive clannishness and deire to do right by his own caused him to transgress enough that it brought about his downfall.As you observed, he both empowered them and dominated them.
I love how each Black sister and her predicament is given special attention and consideration by the Dark Lord--at first, I had almost thought he was being a cruel tease to Bellatrix, similarly to Andromeda, but he was generous enough to carry through with her, and there seemed to be a mutual caring and need shared between them, and now with Narcissa, there is a perverse delight and satisfaction with his considerateness of Narcissa and his punishment of Lucius for his misguided philandering ways with witches not deemed 'clean'. Riddle shows himself as a true Master to those witches he has chosen worthy enough of his attention and in a certain way, his protection, regardless of any other ulterior motives. Enjoyed the background history of Narcissa and Lucius!
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Your review is encouraging since the objective was to present each sister as unique with Tom giving each what she needed. Thanks for the generous commentary.
Arousing erotica, and Andromeda has sought out that which she apparently needs, a sensual, sensitive side of the Dark Lord is depicted--intensifying her need of initimacy stronger than the social mores, beyond wife and mother, bringing and narrowing the exchange of intimacy between an appreciative and knowing Riddle with an appreciaive and needy Andromeda, both seem to find the interaction agreeable. Her child and husband suffer not from her actions but seem to be benefiting from her having had some release. Poignant ending, but Andromeda seems to have grown stronger to handle and categorize and detach her husband's infidelity and embracing and at peace with hers. Great chapter!
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Your review manages to transcend standard morality and find the positive aspects of an ambiguous situation.
Poor Andromeda, damned if she does, damned if she doesn't--her husband projecting and speculating and believing his accusations are real, perhaps to justify his own wayward and selfish goings-on; a brilliant, concise depiction of a marriage/relationship gone bad, to the core: it seems Ted has committed himself from detaching and indulging himself elsewhere, the hypocrite. Glad Andromeda has progressed and honed in her skills, and saved some money on the side, as she'll be needing it and not completely left in dire straits... but as she is working under the umbrella of Riddle, what will be the true price or will he allow her to be left alone and as is? Great chapter, sad but true to life depiction for some witches in the world.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Yes, it was intended to depict financial problems causing a downward spiral with the solution to the finances causing even more problems since the best monetary option is working for a group that considers her husband a lesser form. (The destructive effect of poverty.) Thanks for reviewing a painful chapter.
Breathless from the build of the depiction of the erotica described and going on between Tom and Bellatrix, both within the proposed narration by Tom for Bella to visually and feel and experience, as well as the real time haptic and descriptive, erotically emotional content. Brilliant, arousing technique along with the developing relationship and intimacy between Riddle and Bellatrix. Great chapter!
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
A verbal seduction with Tom pressing Bellatrix's buttons (and Bellatrix): her pride, her passion, her desire to be recognized as superior. A difficult chapter to write. Thanks.
The impenetrable Bellatrix and mysterious, dubious Riddle--yum! Intrigued and thoroughly enjoyed their initial meeting and interaction in the moonlight--his directness and innate sureness about her--this wonderfully captures an exquisite chemistry between the two. Will Riddle be quixotic or malicious, or both in this tale? Must read on as fast as I can! Enticing chapter!
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
I have been hoping you would discover this story. I worked hard at giving the sisters their own personality and having Tom respond appropriately. Thanks.
Oh my. So very well done. Will there be any more? I know it's been a while...
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Jumping out of sequence for your welcome reviews, 'In the Valley of the Lily' is almost a sequel.
Oh, goodness! I love how sneaky Narcissa is, and find it intriguing how Tom has his claws in all the Black sisters. I doubt they'd be pleased to know he has them all, though. Bad Lucius, tend to your wife.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Thanks for all the reviews of a story that violates canon (except possibly for Bellatrix). No, none of them would be pleased if they knew all that Tom was up to.
Oooh, chilling. Despite my thought that in canon the Tonkses were very happy, this is so, so well written.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
An encouraging review since I may have invested more in these psychological portraits than in any other work.
Oh, goodness. I've always liked the Tonkses. Not so fond of this chapter, I'm afraid- poor Andromeda!
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
This is a rough chapter for anyone fond of the Tonks family, but did Andromeda make a poor choice of employment?
Ooh, Bellatrix is a mean one. Poor Narcissa, I've always rather liked her. Not surprising to see her hating Lucius, though.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Bellatrix is quite the character, and Tom plays to her traits.
Oh, my, he is a riddle, isn't he. I approve. Very well written, excellent back-and-forth dialogue.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Thanks. Glad you like the dialogue.
Interesting comparison that Narcissa makes between herself and Lucius. I gather this is before the Tedious One's first fall? It's too bad he didn't approach Lily the same way he did the Black sisters. He might not have fallen at all.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Narcissa and Lucius are similar. The tale takes place in the mid 70's. I hope this Tom was not tedious.Your comment on Lily summarizes the subversive nature of this story. If it were to continue, Tom would wait until James reverted to type and Lily was vulnerable.
Response from Rose of the West (Reviewer)
Oh, sorry, your Tom isn't tedious. The Tedious One, or TO, is the short hand between my beta and myself for him. We find the hyphenated euphemisms that are all through the canon to be tedious.Part of my interest in your story is due to the fact that I recently wrote one about Ted & Andromeda. It's a bit more heroic, but I come to the same conclusion you did, which is that the TO draws the people to whom he can offer something. Not so much the people who are just fine without him. You're right about Lily. While James is a faithful husband, Tom has no chance with her.
This Narcissa and what Tom gives her are just right. Interesting that what Andromeda wanted was recognition of her own accomplishments but what Narcissa wanted was recognition of her husband's misdeeds.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
There is another chapter, and Tom is not finished with Narcissa. I tried to write Tom connecting with each of them differently and on several levels. Your insights are good and rewarding to the author.
Appreciation. That's what she wasn't getting from Ted and that's what got her. Poor thing. He's going to toss her aside like a used hanky at some point while he moves on to his next conquest.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Good call on the lack of appreciation which Tom has guessed extends to her childhood, making her extremely vulnerable.
For tossing her aside, the story is silent on the matter, but there is no reason to think that he will since he has not tossed Bellatrix aside, and this may be a deeper Tom than canon. It would be kinder to toss her aside since the alternative is that she loses her sister, husband, daughter, and son-in-law in the conflict with Tom, and if he has not tossed her aside, she loses her lover, the primary cause of the conflict, as well.
Response from Rose of the West (Reviewer)
I don't see the Tedious One making that long-term a committment to anything other than his own quest to live forever, myself, but it's an interesting question. We see in both the end of OotP and DH that Bellatrix wasn't one of the normal DEs in his mind. You're writing a a story that's on the AU side of things, but in a way that highlights good questions about the canon.
He was suave back then! :)
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
I keep thinking this is much deadlier than threats.
Wow, that's a different Ted Tonks than I ever pictured. I think I see how Tom will go from merely employing Andromeda to bringing her within his web. Creepy. By any chance, is he manipulating both sides of that marriage?
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Would almost any husband behave as Ted is reacting if placed under similar stress? It is all mind games on Tom's part. What do you think his hook will be for Andy? The story relates everything that Tom is doing.
Response from Rose of the West (Reviewer)
These characters are outside my experience to some extent. I'm used to married people working together when things get difficult.Given the way you've painted things, I think your Andy wants recognition that she's doing all of this working and juggling and managing pretty well. She's also almost as big into family loyalty as her baby sister, so someone who promises to fix either her family or marriage would rate pretty high with her, too.
He's pretty bold in describing what he intends to do with her. I wonder though... will he actually do it or just make the promise?
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
The question is 'What will seduce Bellatrix?' Money? Not likely. An offer of eternal love? Not likely.
Response from Rose of the West (Reviewer)
And he has to offer her something, as well as everyone else who comes to him. He's good looking and all, but he's poor and doesn't have pure blood. So he has to offer that one thing that they each crave. I'm interested in seeing what that thing is for Bellatrix in this story.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
Since Narcissa has been married a while, this chapter takes place in 75 or 76, and Tom has become a powerful figure. What did seduce Bellatrix?
This is an interesting start to a story. I always pictured Tom Riddle as belonging to their father's generation. He seems younger, here.
Response from Amita (Author of Riddle in Black)
The story attempts a series of somber psychological portraits. Yes, Tom is in their father's generation, early forties, which can be regarded as young for a wizard.