She was Beautiful, and He was Naive
Kore33 Reviews | 33 Ratings, 0 Likes, 28 Favorites )
AU. Severus Snape returns to his rooms to find something that even he could have never expected: a Gryffindor lioness in his bed.
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lovely. i think you have his internal voice spot on. i look forward to the next installment. thanks so much
Oh, I like this very much! So funny and sweet and a happy ending!
Only Gryffindor forwardness is useful towards Slytherins who wouldn't know subtle they them self didn't provide even if they were smacked in their head with it:-)) Brilliantly written:-))
Response from Kore (Author of She was Beautiful, and He was Naive)
Exactly. When you're normally as subtle as a charging rhino in a china shop, changing tactics leads nowhere. Always do what a Slytherin expects from you, otherwise they're hopeless.
This is wonderful, I'm very much intrigued! Please update soon.
Have you seen a film called 'Christmas Vacation'? Well, at the end of a rather long rant, the lead actor exclaims, "Hallelujah; Holy Shit; Where's the Tylenol?". I had that very reaction at the end of your little tale. Excellent!
Response from Kore (Author of She was Beautiful, and He was Naive)
You know, I may have to go watch that film now. It sounds like it would be interesting. But yes, that accurately describes the end!
(Well, at least the way I felt, anyway, lol)
You know, I was expecting a Sweeney Todd tie in, because of the title....but thanks for the lovely mental image of Severus freaking out to find Hermione in his bed, teehee!
Is it complete? Its solid!
Response from Kore (Author of She was Beautiful, and He was Naive)
I was originally going to leave it at that, but then Hermione wanted her say...
really cute and funny idea. bravo.oh and is it sad that I recognized the title as sweeney todd lyrics? lol me thinks so but oh well
Response from Kore (Author of She was Beautiful, and He was Naive)
*Blushes* You caught me. I couldn't resist!
"She was like a magnet, and I, cold iron, could not resist her." That line really caught me with its beautiful imagery! I really like this piece. I hope the summary is true and it's not finished because I'd love to read more.
Response from Kore (Author of She was Beautiful, and He was Naive)
Thank you for your review. I love imagery myself, and being able to create a line that connects...well, there's not a better feeling.Happy New Year!
Lol - this was great! You just gotta love Snape and all those internal conflicts fighting with each other in his thick head. I loved the drool - lol. I can only imagine what that would look like. I agree with beaweasley2 - this can stand on it's own but I really can't wait to see what you have for us next!Oh, and Go Hermione!
Response from Kore (Author of She was Beautiful, and He was Naive)
If only we could get close enough to see! Of course he'd hex us into piles of goo... ah well.The last chapter is in queue.Thank you for you're review!
Oh, his internal dialogue was great. Of course she'd scream in his dream. And Hermione giving up on sublte, hah! Smart woman.
A lovely little story that I enjoyed very much!
Oh gods, the self-depreciation, the self-tormenting, the self-beratement, the way he sees himslef as so undeserving of what's right in front of him, so obviously a gift. and he's gonna go sleep on the couch? LOL. Nice beginning - this could have been the whole story! ANd it's the beggining! I look forward to the rest.
wow... go Hermione! Loved it..will there be more?
Response from Kore (Author of She was Beautiful, and He was Naive)
I'm glad you enjoyed it! And as for your question, I'm working on editing Hermione's POV right now...
Heheheee – the sheperd painting was great! And I am looking forward to the next chapter, of course!
Damn...I guess will have to wait for chapter 3 for the "lovin"....
More! More! More! 
~Lotm
Oh gads, the tripping in the street was hilarious as was the batting eyelashes that only got a 'pass the sugar' as a response. Dense? try thick as a bolder!
Loved the painting bit. LOL Oh, man! Looking forward to his responce now!
Very sweet. I would really love an epilogue...to see them laughing about his thick-headedness and her clumsiness sometime down the road, when they are in love.
And he was dense. This is fun.
Lovely. Very lovely! More soon, please. Live long and prosper, Titania
I hadn't expected Hermione's POV but I'm more than happy to have enjoyed the piece. A whole bunch of thanks to you.
I have no wish to seem ungrateful, because I truly love her perspective. I just really wanted to hear his answer!!!
Excellent tactic, giving us both sides. I would give you a round of applause, if I weren't so busy pouting...
Cheers!
LOL, flashing the painting!
And he was surprised?
This was perfect:)
A take-charge, essentially Gryffindor Hermione, and a Severus who is touchingly unaware how desireable he is:)
Warm regards,
Fizzabella