Making a Move
ayerf35 Reviews | 6.29/10 (35 Ratings, 0 Likes, 32 Favorites )
Hermione keeps visiting Spinner's End. Severus thinks it's just because she enjoys his books. He's wrong...
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ayerf
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Jumped on the Harry Potter bandwagon in 2000 (when Goblet of Fire was out in hardback). Prisoner of Azkaban is my favourite in the series, followed by Order of the Phoenix. I read and write in the SS/HG corner of the Potterverse.
Reviews for Making a Move
Haha, I love that the smoke alarm going off interrupts them.
Aw this was sweet. I liked the difference between their perpectives. Well done!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I did my best to make sure that there would be differences between the perspectives, glad you liked them.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I did my best to make sure that there would be differences between the perspectives, glad you liked them.
Great story!!!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you!
That was enjoyable.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! Glad to hear it.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! Glad to hear it.
I like the way you showed both sides.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thanks! It was an interesting experience.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thanks! It was an interesting experience.
Naked and in the shower or breakfast... naked and in the shower or breakfast. She's always been such a smart girl, hasn't she? Thanks for another great read!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Certainly an easy choice for Severus... Thanks for reviewing!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Certainly an easy choice for Severus... Thanks for reviewing!
Oh, definitely let that smoke alarm go off, and the toast burn, and the books bite.... What a wonderful treat to see it all again from her perspective! Thank you!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Heh! Definitely! Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it from Hermione's perspective.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Heh! Definitely! Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it from Hermione's perspective.
It is up to her to make the move, isn't it? Fortunately, his reflexes kicked in. Eventually.ANd let the toast burn. There are far more important things to be done!Very nicely done, m'dear!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
At least once she made the move, he did respond in time. Just.Definitely more important things...Thank you!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
At least once she made the move, he did respond in time. Just.Definitely more important things...Thank you!
Good story! (The best line was, "Not many men would risk losing a hand to her hair.")Loved it, now go write more.~Lotm
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you very much! (I hoped that line would work. It did!)More of this?! What, the POV of Spinner's End or the biting book next?Or just more in general? Next on my to-do list is the SSHG gift exchange fic. And the plot bunny is not behaving its furry self. Grr.
Response from ladyofthemasque (Reviewer)
*gently tickles the plotbunny in question*More of anything ss/hg, since you do such a lovely job of it...~Lotm
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Hopefully that'll wake it up a bit...Thank you! That's quite a compliment. I've no intention of changing pairing, even if my WIP (on hold until exchange fic is done) is SS/HG/LM.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you very much! (I hoped that line would work. It did!)More of this?! What, the POV of Spinner's End or the biting book next?Or just more in general? Next on my to-do list is the SSHG gift exchange fic. And the plot bunny is not behaving its furry self. Grr.
Response from ladyofthemasque (Reviewer)
*gently tickles the plotbunny in question*More of anything ss/hg, since you do such a lovely job of it...~Lotm
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Hopefully that'll wake it up a bit...Thank you! That's quite a compliment. I've no intention of changing pairing, even if my WIP (on hold until exchange fic is done) is SS/HG/LM.
Typical! If you want something done, do it yourself.I like someone who knows what they want and is willing to go after it! Good for Hermione. And good for Severus who knows a good thing when he sees it!Just loverly!Beth
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Just took Severus a while to get past his surprise...Thank you for reviewing!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Just took Severus a while to get past his surprise...Thank you for reviewing!
How sweet it is! Severus certainly knew just what to do when he finally understood why Hermione had been spending so much of the summer at Spinner's End.Books are good. The Potions Master is much better! I love it!Beth
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Took him long enough to realise... at least he was just in time.Thank you!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Took him long enough to realise... at least he was just in time.Thank you!
Just lovely. Love the last line. *smile*
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! Glad to hear it!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! Glad to hear it!
Very interesting to get Hermione's POV. I'm wondering what comes next...
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thanks! I hoped it would be interesting.As for what comes next, that is up to you! Unless the plot bunny turns crackish and bites once more for Spinner's End or the dropped book's perspective.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thanks! I hoped it would be interesting.As for what comes next, that is up to you! Unless the plot bunny turns crackish and bites once more for Spinner's End or the dropped book's perspective.
Always knew books were just a cover fo Hermione's hot nature....
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Hee! There's certainly more to her than just books...
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Hee! There's certainly more to her than just books...
Ah, it was lovely to hear Hermione's side of the seduction. I particularly loved the line, "Not many men would risk losing a hand to her hair."
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I hoped her side of the story would be interesting. Glad you liked that line!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I hoped her side of the story would be interesting. Glad you liked that line!
I would have liked to see Severus' face if Hermione really had shown up naked under her cloak. He might just have died of shock.This was a very sweet story, and I enjoyed it a lot. Cheers. /M
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
His expression would have been priceless... if he survived!Thank you!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
His expression would have been priceless... if he survived!Thank you!
I am a great believer in going after what you want, and like to see Hermione doing the same.This is charming! Both chapters. The first one can stand alone, but this is a pleasant addition. Very cute humourous touches like the biting book and the smoke alarm. Funny but sweet, too. Thank you for sharing this. a perfect break from my own writing!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
I think Hermione would agree with you... Severus wasn't about to make a move by himself.Thank you! I'm glad you liked both versions, and the humorous touches.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
I think Hermione would agree with you... Severus wasn't about to make a move by himself.Thank you! I'm glad you liked both versions, and the humorous touches.
I just bet he was in shock. She just threw herself at him, whats a man to think. Well maybe not think and once it comes to him she got what she wanted didn't she. hehe That is what she gets for being so mean to that poor defenseless book. lol You are a brilliant writer.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Poor man didn't expect that... at least he responded before it was too late! She definitely got what she wanted.Thank you! That's quite a compliment.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Poor man didn't expect that... at least he responded before it was too late! She definitely got what she wanted.Thank you! That's quite a compliment.
Excellent!! A good laugh too!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I hoped it would be amusing.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I hoped it would be amusing.
I really don't know which part I like most - there are so many beautifully funny sentences in this one!Thanks a lot for sharing this one!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I'm very glad to hear it. Quite the compliment!
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I'm very glad to hear it. Quite the compliment!
Sure I just read it on LJ, but that wont stop me! Its just as good the second time around.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Glad it stood up to a second read! Thanks for reviewing.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Glad it stood up to a second read! Thanks for reviewing.
Cute, humorous piece. I love the way you show us what Hermione is doing and what Severus thinks about it. I imagine Hermione's been trying to work up the courage all summer! The ending is perfect for the tone of the piece.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I'm glad to hear it! Hermione's perspective of this should be up soon.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I'm glad to hear it! Hermione's perspective of this should be up soon.
That was really quite adorable.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I hoped it would be.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I hoped it would be.
Mmmm. That was lovely. I loved Severus' internal dialogue.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! His internal dialogue was fun to write, too.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! His internal dialogue was fun to write, too.
Love the last line: " As if to prove that this wasn’t a dream..." 
Very nice! 
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I'm glad to hear it, I liked that line too.
Response from ayerf (Author of Making a Move)
Thank you! I'm glad to hear it, I liked that line too.