I liked this story--the reactions and emotions felt right.

Oh man! Now... I wish there was more to come. This story has potential to become a very deep, painful, but passionate romance! Please consider writing more... No rush...

There is a very nice touch of realism to their coupling. It's rare to find that in fan fiction, but welcome none the less. Please forgive the hint of concrit, but I thought your lead-in was a bit staccato, however evocative. You quickly fell into a more rhythmic flow and I liked that Snape had an undefined emotion at the end. For one so careful, it would be a surprise. Then again, as he said, he is a man.

This was amazing.  You could have made this into a multichaptered story.  Tamara

Well written and clever little plot! I enjoyed it :)

Interesting read. I could actually see this turning into a novella or novel length tale... which means you did well, leaving the reader wanting more, but not requiring it.

nice!