Memories
Chapter 3 of 5
MemoryThe war is over, and now Severus Snape has to face his worst enemy: himself. Alternate Universe, HBP compliant.
Disclaimer: I obviously don't own any of the characters in this story. This story was created many months before the release of DH.
Infinite grateful thanks to Jynx67 for her patience, to Pennfana for her useful considerations, and to Ladyinthecloak and Notsosaintly for their final revision. But also thanks to all those reading and reviewing.
Chapter 3 Memories
Severus is alone again in the darkness. Is it day? Is it night? What does it matter? It makes no difference to him any longer. His head is aching terribly, and his mind is wandering, relentlessly following the path of desperation.
What is going to happen now? How is he going to manage his life without sight? Proud as he has always been, how can he spend the rest of his days surrounded by pity and commiseration? A man whose eyes could read even the deepest layers of a soul!
As minutes slowly elapse in the shadows, he keeps asking himself, "Why?" Why him? Why now? Why is he so cruelly being punished, just at the end of his long and painful journey? Will there never be repentance for the faults he has committed? Has an entire adulthood of sacrifices and solitude been completely worthless?
The thought of his other unfortunate companions crosses his mind in a flash, and he shivers, realising how cruelly they have been punished too... even if, unlike him, they hadn't committed any crime for which they needed to make amends!
He retreats in rage. He doesn't care! He doesn't care, because nobody has ever cared for him. At least they can... they could... they might... His mind explores furiously every option, searching for a difference, and finally finds it. The others are not alone! This knowledge hurts him so utterly. Every one of them has somebody who cares! But what about him? The only one who promised him salvation, the great Albus Dumbledore, is definitely and forever gone, murdered by the hand of the man he had endevoured to save, leaving that same man burdened with the weight of this action for the rest of his life. It doesn't matter that Albus' death was a highly unpleasant but necessary occurrence that had been carefully planned and painfully executed. On his hands, Severus has the blood of his only benefactor. The mistakes he made in his youth will never disappear. So much time and effort he has dedicated to his redemption, only to discover that evidently, Fate never accepted his offer. His role was to be a sacrificial victim, right from the beginning. He never had rights, chances or hopes, and he will never have. His life has reached its peak and has stopped there... forever.
He curls on the bed that he is beginning to consider as his personal cell, and closes his mind to everything. Pain is still haunting him, forceful, continuous, distressing... He sometimes thinks that it must be something connected with his wounds, because it is located around his eyes and seems to dig inside. But he is going to keep it at bay; it's simple when you know how to do it. It is a matter of will, as all his life has been.
However, tomorrow... today? Well, as soon as somebody comes in, he is going to ask to remove those damned bandages and have his eyes checked again.
Slowly, very slowly and wearily, his head falls down, his eyelids close on his useless pupils, and he enters again into the merciless world of memories.
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The passage lights up sinisterly when three different spells collide with an explosion of glittering sparks. Silence falls abruptly, an incredibly astonished silence, as the Dark Lord angrily discovers he's been betrayed once more; meanwhile, Harry Potter incredulously realises he is still alive.
Then Harry's eyes widen in sudden understanding as he turns to stare at the panting Severus, who has collapsed again in the mud after that terrible effort. But there is no time to thank his saviour as he would like. The Dark Lord is already advancing, a frightening expression on his hideous features. He is raising his hand again when Harry, with an impulsive decision, points his wand at the ground, uttering a sharp command. Instantaneously, many great blocks rise from the floor and begin to clash against one another with loud thundering sounds. The Dark Lord is taken by surprise. Another harsh order and the big stones wrap around the infuriated Voldemort, closing him solidly in a suffocating hold. Immediately, Harry runs near his exhausted professor and crouches by his side, grabbing him by his shoulders. Severus looks at him in weariness.
"You saved my life!" the boy exclaims, incredulous, his voice coloured by a mixture of amazement and respect.
"I did, Potter, but I can't promise I'll do it again." Snape is sharp as usual while he shakes Harry's hands from his shoulders in irritation. "Give me back... my wand!" he murmurs as he sways and struggles to rise, paling in the effort.
"Here, let me help you!" Harry seizes the older man's arms to lift him. Suddenly, the rocky wall breaks, throwing stones and dust so violently around that the boy barely has the time to protect himself and his companion.
The Dark Lord emerges from the crumbled walls of his prison, awesome in his fury, and again advances implacably towards the boy, who has risen and is now fiercely standing in front of him. The red, feral eyes of the old wizard are glowing with rage, but this time Harry is feeling oddly at peace. Fear has totally abandoned him. His gaze slowly contemplates the abandoned bodies of his friends lying motionless in oblivion, unaware that the final sacrifice is about to happen. Then his eyes rest, still incredulous, on his only surviving companion, really the last one he would have thought to have at his side.
Kneeling on the ground, Severus, unable to rise, lowers his head in bitter resignation. He is too exhausted to fight and, in any case, there is no hope. There never has been. Discouraged, in a fit of impotent anger, he raises his eyes to look at the boy who should have been their rescuer. Severus has saved Harry, yet he still detests the boy so much! How many lives have been sacrificed for him? Was he ever worth all these losses?
Harry seems to read all the anguished doubts in the orbs of the man he once believed to be an enemy and who is now staring so anxiously at him. Again, his gaze lovingly embraces his friends, and a deep emotion strengthens his heart, the firm conviction that he will never abandon them as they have never abandoned him. He can feel all the love he has received during these last years gathering around him and enfolding him like armour. Unexpectedly, he smiles, and it makes him feel invincible. His eyes are serene while he raises his wand, inviting his dark adversary to strike.
But, strangely, Voldemort is standing still now, nostrils flaring and eyes narrowing at the perception of a strange, subtle change in the atmosphere. There is something happening that he doesn't understand. A new, indefinite but immense power has joined them, and he is alarmed. The words of the prophecy that he has never been able to hear completely are haunting his soul. He stops, hesitating for a moment, and that little, almost imperceptible indecision fills Harry with a supernatural hope.
Then the new powerful presence enters forcefully and reveals itself in its glory. Harry's wand slowly begins to vibrate gently, then more and more intensely, uncontrollable in its strength, until it appears to be gradually lifting the boy's hand in a gesture of command.
Voldemort watches in astonishment, and his eyes widen with uncharacteristic anxiety when, unpredictably, his wand also begins to shake violently. He looks surprised, then worried, while he desperately tries to keep it still, tightening his grip. But the power is too strong to be stopped even for him, and incredibly, the more he struggles the more the wand pushes him back until he is forced to kneel.
Sparkles of pure, incandescent, intolerably brilliant light begin to dance in the darkness. Soon they form a luminous stream, whirling more and more powerfully until they gather in a forceful flow that, with a blinding flash, surrounds Harry in a glittering aura.
The boy shivers in blissful ecstasy. Then his mouth opens to pronounce words of spell so arcane he can't absolutely know, and that must have been clearly suggested by the mysterious, nameless power. The light reacts with a joyful twinkle, and slowly, the boy's body seems to multiply itself in several glowing, ghostly forms.
While the Dark Lord and Severus Snape stare in terrified wonder, every spectral shape gently bows its head in a greeting then rises firmly, positioning itself at Harry's side. Watching in awe, Severus recognises the smiling faces of Lily Evans and James Potter, then, totally unexpected, Sirius Black, and finally, with a terrible pang of joy and pain, Albus Dumbledore.
Harry seems to suddenly awaken, and with an overwhelming cry of happiness, he turns to look at his parents and friends, eyes luminous with tears. The pearly figures surround the boy, shining in diaphanous beauty. Their movements are slow and solemn, but the pure joy and love they radiate are so intense that Severus is forced to lower his eyes, his body aching with exclusion.
Completely unmindful of his dreadful antagonist, Harry now bathes in his parents' smiles, timidly trying to touch their incorporeal bodies. The tremulous look he gives Sirius, eyes wet in commotion, is returned by such a vivid grin that the boy can't help but laugh. Finally, the figures turn expectantly to Albus Dumbledore, who has been patiently waiting, a kind smile under the merrily twinkling eyes that Harry remembers so well. And surprisingly, Albus speaks, a remote voice coming from unknown, unfathomable depths lost in time and in space.
"Harry, my dear, dear boy! How happy I am to see you! We were all looking forward to this meeting. I hope we haven't made you wait too long!"
"Professor!" Harry is crying now, so great is the joy he feels. He doesn't care anymore if he is going to die, as he is surrounded by his most loved ones. And surely also his best friends, whose bodies lay motionless at his feet, will join him soon in that new perfect world, thus making it even more perfect, if possible... But understanding his thoughts, the ancient wizard shakes his head in denial, his smile becoming sad and determined.
"No, Harry, it is not time for you to leave yet. We are here only to assist you in your task, because the force of your love called us. Do you remember what I told you, Harry? The power you have been filled with, the inestimable gift your mother left you with her sacrifice?"
Harry is looking at his mother now, tears streaming on his cheeks. "Yes, Professor," he whispers softly, and a new determination pervades his soul. Fiercely he raises his head and his wand, nodding. As if they had expected that signal, all the ghosts turn to stare at the Dark Lord, who has been witnessing in mute alarm, unsuccessfully trying to rise from his kneeling posture.
Dumbledore walks solemnly towards his old student, magnificence and authority radiating forcefully from his person. "So, we meet again, Tom!" His voice sounds incredibly kind, even if is tinged with an immense sadness.
Still struggling with the effort of controlling his wand, Voldemort answers in a strangled tone. "Dumbledore! I thought you were dead! You must be dead! My followers... They were on the tower when Severus killed you..." He realises his mistake suddenly. "Oh, but now I understand! It was a ruse! He never really struck you!" He is frantically searching for an explanation for this prodigy surpassing his understanding.
"No, Tom." Such painful intensity was in the old man's expression! "Severus had to kill me that night... as I ordered him. My life for Draco's. A fair exchange."
He slowly turns his head to glance at Severus, a gentle, acknowledging nod. It's the first time he seems to recognise his presence, and Severus again feels an acute pang of jealousy, bitterness suddenly invading his soul. Not a word for him, not even a greeting? Does he deserve only such little consideration from his old protector? Anger and hostility against the Boy-Who-Lived raise their heads once more in his chest. But the moment has already passed, and Dumbledore turns again and listens to the Dark Lord.
Voldemort is attentively considering his adversary. Now that the first frightening sensations are over, he seems to have regained his confidence. "Why are you here, then, if you are dead, Dumbledore? To take the boy? To... fight with me?"
"Again, no, Tom. I'm not allowed to interfere. I am here only to talk, to speak with you and possibly make your mind, if not your heart, finally open in understanding."
"Your efforts are useless then." The Dark Lord is reassured and cruelly pleased. This smiling ghost of the once tremendous wizard he remembered the only one he had effectively feared can't be a real menace anymore. "We have had plenty of time to talk... in your previous life. Now you are only a powerless shadow. Your nonsense isn't going to convince me today, in the hour of my most glorious victory."
"It may not convince you, I admit. But you see, I didn't come here only for you." Dumbledore points his wand to the ground and a glittering ray gently illuminates Wormtail's motionless body. "Can you hear me, Peter?" the old man asks compassionately.
A sudden tremble and, with a painful moan, Peter Pettigrew stretches a hand forward, then tries to lift his shaking body on his hands and knees, but he falls miserably in the mud again. Everybody pauses to look at him in silence. Only the Dark Lord cannot prevent an uncontrollable flinch as he sees his victim slowly come back to life.
Peter makes another pitiful attempt to move. Then, unable to support the weight of his failing body any longer, he raises a devastated face. A violent emotion twists his lips, curling them in a painful smile. Breathing with difficulty, he focuses his cloudy eyes on the group protectively gathered around Harry, and he whispers in tears, "James... Lily... Sirius... My friends... My dear old friends... I'm sorry... so sorry..."
Lily has a gentle, compassionate smile. She glances encouragingly at her son and husband, then walks towards the fallen, crying man. Peter is exhausted, his forces are quickly fading, but he makes a last effort to look at the radiant woman bending close to listen to his words.
"Please, forgive me... Please..." he stammers with difficulty, his jaws already hardening in the imminent end.
Once more, Lily has a luminous smile and replies tenderly, "You saved my son today, Peter. You paid for your faults, and I forgive you. May you rest in peace forever."
James and Sirius frown hesitantly, then they advance to join Lily. Their voices are remote, but when they speak, they sound surprisingly clear.
"You were my friend once, Peter. I forgive you. May you rest in peace," says James quietly.
Sirius shakes his head with an uncharacteristically embarrassed barking laugh. "For Merlin's sake, Peter! It would have been better if I hadn't entrusted you with that secret so many years ago! But I imagine I should also blame myself for that..." His voice softens while he adds, "Rest in peace, old friend. You are forgiven."
Peter manages a last, incredible, infinitely peaceful smile. Then his eyes flicker, and his body falls heavily in the mud, lying lifeless.
The ghostly figures bow reverently. Severus is trembling in awe and weariness while Harry smiles in renewed joy, cheeks dampened by tears. Only Voldemort dares to break the silence with his high-pitched, derisive laugh.
"He finally died, as every traitor ought to," he says scornfully. "And he'll never return to life again, whatever you may say. What did you want to demonstrate by that, you old fool? I am the only one who has successfully come back from death. I cannot be defeated by any living being!"
Dumbledore looks at the dark wizard with a helpless sigh. "Once I told you that there are things worse than death, Tom, do you remember? But you still don't understand. I believe you will never understand, and this makes me feel definitely hopeless."
Then patiently, as if he were speaking with a child, he said, "Your Horcruxes have been destroyed. All, completely and totally, except the last one. You cannot count on them anymore. Perhaps you thought to have a hope, even without your serpent. Well, forget it now. You cannot rely on them any longer."
"You are lying, Dumbledore! This cannot be true!" For the very first time, Harry can see fear more than fear, terror in the Dark Lord's eyes, while he struggles desperately against the power controlling his wand.
Dumbledore seems to take a deep breath. "For the last, the supreme time, Tom, I'm telling you the truth. This is your final chance to recognize your faults. You cannot be granted mercy if you refuse to accept!"
"I will never bow to your requests!" It's the firm, ferocious answer, followed by a cry of wild joy, as the wand begins to slow down its convulsive movements.
"Then you have made your choice and decided your fate! Our time is ending. We'll never meet again in this world, Tom," the ancient wizard says with a sigh.
"Then we'll never meet again, Dumbledore, because I will win and rule over death once more!" The Dark Lord is triumphant now. "Go back to your shadowy realm, you and your ghostly allies! Your moment is over!"
Dumbledore looks at Voldemort impassively. Then, turning his shoulders to him, he approaches Harry and says quietly, "Be thou of good hope, Harry. We will always be with you, even if you can't see us. May your arm be steady, and may love and courage guide you in this last battle."
Dumbledore seems ready to join the other spirits respectfully waiting for him when he suddenly meets Severus' gaze. Shaking his head in disbelief, the ancient wizard turns again to look down with a smile at the shattered man, who has fought so bravely to follow his orders, although so many times he has vehemently protested against them. "Ah, Severus, my dear boy!" he exclaims softly, bending as to embrace him. "It's so beautiful to see you again! Please excuse an old, absent-minded man. I didn't forget you and your commitment, even if, alas, somebody else will have to properly repay you for all the times I didn't. At present, I can only offer you my most grateful thanks along with a very important piece of advice, which I hope you will accept in the name of our old friendship. A hard time is coming for you, Severus, a very hard time, and you'll have to muster all your forces to overcome it. So, be prepared and don't forget my words! When those obscure days arrive, and this will happen soon, listen to your heart as you did so many years ago... and you will finally find the happiness you deserve so much."
Then, lowering his head in a goodbye, he adds tenderly, "I bless you both, my beloved children. Remember, don't ever give up hope, ever!"
One by one, the pearly figures extend their right hands to wrap Harry's wrist in an incorporeal grip. Dumbledore is the last one to add his hand when, unexpectedly, the Dark Lord regains control and immediately lifts his wand to cast a spell. The hex passes through the old wizard's ethereal body and bounces against the rocky wall. With a wild laugh, Voldemort rises violently from the ground and shouts exultantly, eyes glowing in folly, "I may not be able to hurt you anymore, old man, but if you can't be harmed, perhaps the boy will!"
Another blast of light travels at mad speed through the air and hits Harry brutally, tracing a red gash on his cheek. The boy widens his eyes and gives a painful gasp, immediately followed by Voldemort's triumphant laughter. "You are mine, Potter! Finally, you are mine!"
With a shiver, the pale figures abruptly disappear in a flash of light. The dark wizard and the boy now proudly face each other while time seems suspended in eternity. Suddenly, they raise their wands and fiercely aim them. Rays of lights explode and intersect in the darkness, sending sparkles everywhere. Both adversaries fight ferociously, and incredibly, the boy matches the old man in might and ability. Severus stares in amazement at this unexpected spectacle, his body trembling more and more with exhaustion.
("Professor, are you all right? Professor Snape? ... Please wake up. Is there anything you need? ... Professor, please answer me!")
The battle of spells fights furiously when with a cruel, determined smile, Voldemort summons all his powers to cast an ultimate Hex. The boy is quick to raise his wand and stop the mortal ray in mid air, but the evil forces generated by his wicked antagonist seem too strong to be resisted, even by his new supernatural powers, and the flux of energy inexorably pushes him back against the rocky wall.
As soon as Harry touches the stones with his shoulders and the Dark Lord gives an exultant, vicious laugh, Severus comes to a decision. Gritting his teeth and trying to resist the pain torturing his worn-out body, he struggles to stand up and help his most hated student. If they have to die, at least let it be fighting.
("Professor, Professor, please! What's happening? Madam Pomfrey! Madam Pomfrey!!!")
But, before Snape can make a move, Harry grabs his own wand with both hands, holding it firmly with obstinate desperation. Then, a terrible sound of anguish and pain begins to well in his throat while he writhes under the wicked forces trying to break his resistance. Gradually, his lament grows in intensity until it transforms itself into a powerful cry, a mighty enchanted call asking for help. His wand reacts, vibrating forcefully, and the malignant ray begins to pulse less and less vigorously until it finally explodes in a myriad of little sparks.
("I am here, Becky, let me see! Severus! It's a nightmare! Severus, please, wake up! Merlin! He is having an attack!")
A deep, loud, prolonged musical sound follows Harry's call, and soon the darkness is echoing with thundering noises, as if a great storm were approaching. The Dark Lord is forced back with a last, powerful effort, and there he stops, panting in apprehension, wand lifted in anxious wait. Then abruptly, with a profound vibration that shakes the castle in a violent spasm, ghostly hands begin to surge from the ground while an icy, freezing breath fills the air. In a few moments, the spectral essences seem to multiply, encircling Voldemort and grasping his robes with their pale, skeletal fingers.
The Dark Lord's black outline begins to blur and fade at their touch, and the old wizard screams in pain and terror as his body begins to sink slowly into the ground. His terrified cries make Severus shiver in horror, while he watches his previous Master vainly struggle against the inexorable power of the shadowy presences. Harry stands in silence, looking at the Dark Lord's hopeless ordeal with eyes full of tears, arms crossed, head proudly raised in determination. His gaze quickly turns to meet Severus', reassuring him with a nod. For a moment, Severus can perceive the immense power concealed in the boy and lowers his head in respect, ashamed of his own frailty.
("He is not reacting! His pulse has become erratic! Quick, help me!")
Voldemort is rapidly weakening, and his body is becoming more and more vague and indistinct. Helpless and desperate, the Dark Lord raises his wand and frantically but uselessly tries to strike the spirits surrounding him. Then in a last spark of hatred, feeling his life fading away, he furiously aims his wand at Harry in vengeance. The boy smiles and simply lifts his hand to stop the deadly rays. So mighty is the power acting inside him that he doesn't even need a wand to protect himself! As the last quivers shake Voldemort's body, his red, furious eyes feverishly search for another victim... and find it. The Dark Lord and Severus Snape exchange a final, supreme glance. Then, with his vanishing forces, the older wizard casts his last, revengeful, terrible hex.
"Obscuro!"
Instantly, a red blast of energy explodes and sharply penetrates into Severus's eyes. An atrocious, intolerable pain travels through his head, piercing his skull like a burning blade. He screams in terror, then a sudden, blessed oblivion welcomes him into its dark embrace.
On the other side of the universe, Severus abruptly opens his useless eyes with a cry of panic, searching for light, unaware of where he is, confused, terrified. His nightmare was so terribly vivid! Frightening images are still dancing in his mind, and he convulses in violent spasms as he relives those last dreadful moments: the daunting spectral hands, Voldemort laughing in folly and Harry Potter, suddenly alarmed, lifting his wand in a defensive but vain gesture.
He struggles desperately against the arms that are holding him until he recognizes Poppy's soft, worried voice calling his name. Then, feeling protected, he allows himself to calm down, searching for comfort in her warm, tender touch. His eyes are hurting so much! For a moment that seems to last eternally, he rests himself in her gentle hold.
Then, pride and anger awaken, and again he is Severus Snape. Angrily, he disentangles from her embrace and tries to sit up on the bed, but he is still too weak to afford this kind of violent reaction. Feeling suddenly dizzy, he leans back with a moan and helplessly disappears into a dreamless void.
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Anonymous
It's very helpful to read where your inspiration and experiences come from, and I understand very well that these experiences are your main inspiratons.
But still, there is so much that, to my eyes, doesn't make true sense.
Severus has been a very, very successful spy and decieved Voldemort for an extremely long period of time. It simply isn't plausible that this feat should have been accomplished by a man realting only on his sight!
Particularly as this man is a very good potions master. You need to use the senses of taste, smell and hearing as well as sight for being able to brew successfully and to prepare ingredients. I know this very well, being married to a "Muggle" potions master and having talked about the subject of potions making with several pharmacits quite often, too.
Your psychologigal observation of his character doesn't fit into canon very well, too, in my opinion. "Arrogant and proud" - even if JKR didn't give us too much clues in the early volumes, but Book 5 and 6 alone seem to be sufficient to get some glimpses into his life and character - enough to understand that he is neither proud nor arrogant, but in the highest measure insecure, unloved and unwanted and continually seeking to keep his walls up, not to let anyone close. Proudness and arrogance derive from selfconfidence, over-selfconfidence, and he has neither.
So in my opinion, he wouldn't react in this way to becoming blind. As long as his senses of touch, smell and taste would not have been incapacitated, it would be just natural to him to use them. As well, being the successfull spy that he was, he must be rather proficient in interpreting nuances in speech or sound.
Of course, I absolutely agree with you that becoming blind would have been a catatrophe for him which he wouldnt' neither adapt to easily nor without fight, depression, self-denial and everything else in the book.
But I'm really convincet that once he had passed the initial shock, he would be able rather easily to use his remaining, welltrained senses to his advantage.
Of course, his treatment by Poppy & Co is completely wrong ;o). They should rather require action from him instead of pampering, show him how he can help himself instead of doing things for him. But again, this can nicely be contributed to the inexperience of the wizarding world with such cases. And to be used in this way in a story is quite a good idea.
All in all, your tale is very well rounded-up in itself and works well, and your descriptions of feelings, situations, tension is really well done - no matter if I agree with certain aspects or not ;o).
And before you ask - yes, I do have experience with blind or partially blind people, among others having a grandmother losing her sight and having a blind friend in my school days.
Author's Response: Dear Alcina,(do you pronounce it Alkeena, the German way, or Alcheena, the Italian way?), I am grateful for the many comments you left to this chapter. This is the very beginning of the story, and normally people leave me reviews about their reactions at discovering the horror of being blind.
Instead, you see, we both have been "blessed". Being exposed to other people's dufferings make persons realise how lucky they are, while hopefully creating empathy and desire of being of help.
BTW, sorry I can't divide my sentences in groups, the browser doesn't allow me. This is going to be tough to read, sorry again.
Now, going to your comments, I will begin by explaining that this story was created at the beginning of 2007. It was my second attempt at writing something long and complex. At the time, we were all waiting for the arrival of book 7, so I tried to imagine something that could possibly happen and to give Snape that possibility of surviving that Rowling denied him...
So, this story has abruptly become AU and "personal" immediately after DH. Real Snape is only Rowling's and she decided to eliminate him and then show us how good he was. (I'll never forgive that woman! ;)).
Now, about your comments: of course, Snape didn't rely only upon his eyes! But my story wants to show the reactions of a man who feels to have been betrayed and used till the end, with no reward waiting for him but something even worse than death. To lose sight unexpectedly, and to know that it will be like this forever can ignite a strong rebellion in somebody's spirit. Add this problem to the many other ones the individual had in his previous life, add the terrible realization that now he will depend on somebody else for the rest of his days, and you understand that my Snape is exasperating his reactions, to punish at least those around him.
Blind people can live by themselves when trained, but however thay can be easily tricked and harmed. This is what happened to my aunt in her last years, for instance. The person who she thought a devoted helper slowly stole her all her pension...
Of course, my Snape uses his other senses. But my story focuses on an internal struggle. Now that he could be free, he is forced to be trapped again. In a way, he is perennially linked to his past world, as he can't see the new one he has contributed to create.
About "proud and arrogant", well, these are the problems of translating from another language. "Proud" in Italian is "orgoglioso" and has many acceptions. One of them is to be extra sensitive, because of the many sufferings, troubles and torments he had to undergo. "Arrogant" was instead referred to his way of reacting. Perhaps "disdainful" would have been better? However, both these adjectives weren't meant to have a negative meaning. I hope you understand my poor explanations. Now I am thinking to change them or perhaps to leave only "proud". So, thank you for your comment.
Instead, I am a bit perplexed about your note on Poppy and Co's treatment. They are doing exactly what you say. After an initial coddling - after all, he has been severely struck - Poppy tries to force him to react and live again by using his other senses. I thought that the final part of the chapter had explained this. And, of course, he tries to make her life difficult. Somebody must suffer with him, as everybody else seems to have forgotten his existence. A bit childish, you may say, but understandable. Aren't so many men like this? However, be assured that in my mind, Severus would react in a totally different way if he were alone. If alone, he would use all his immense resources. It's being entrusted to somebody else's care that allows him to wallow in his misery and, at the same time, to begin a new life by slowly examinating his feelings.
OK, I hope you have arrived here to read these lines ;) Thank you very much for all your notes. I hope to read from you again. Please let me know what you like and what you don't like. Otherwise, how could I improve?
Best regards from Italy.
Alcina vom Steinsberg's response: It's Alcina like in "Bertolucci" or "Gucci", I suppose - I absolutely suck at this. But definitely not what you call the German way, though I'd like to doupt it would be the German way, though I can't really *g*.
For the rest of your answer, permit me to answer you privately, as this is going to be a bit too private for my taste for a public review.
Anonymous
Again, very intense, and with plausible reactions on all parts. Though I sincerely doubt that Poppy's handling of Severus and the news-telling is realisitc; I believe this is usually done in a completely differnet manner.
But then, wizards have their own ways and may not be up to date on modern psychology ;o) - and overall it works well in its own right.
This dark cuse is quite fascinating, by the way - eyes turned to stone? *shudder* It will be truly hard for Severus, accepting that he has to depend on help from now on. Let's hope he will find a way to cope, I simply can't imagine him giving up even now.
Author's Response: Thank you again for leaving me a message.
Of course, in real life and in a real hospital, things would be handled differently. But this is an invented story, so I could make things happen according to me. This is the magical pleasure of writing. In a hospital they would probably keep you waiting, hide your real condition... in my story, time is forcedly reduced, as my intention was to put Severus in a desperate situation and then explore his reactions.
More explanations in the answer of your next review ;)
Alcina vom Steinsberg's response: On the contrary, in a modern hospital and situation, if there is no chance for recovery, there is no waiting at all, you are told right on the spot and have to deal with it. With counseling, of course, and the respective treatment by the staff. It's rather hard and you're being thrown in cold water, of course, but I have been told that this is much easier to deal with than a long waiting for the final verdict.
I absolutely agree - in a story the author is free as a bird to invent things to his own liking. I personally prefer sticking as much to reality as possible, though, because it limits your opportunities as a writer, and in the same time shows your skill and fantasy so much better.
Author's Response: Ops! Then I'm sorry, I misunderstood your initial words. I thought you were telling me that Poppy was too hurried in communicating Severus what happened...
Thanks again for answering my answer.
Alcina vom Steinsberg's response: No problem. I suppose as we're both not writing in our mother language, there's much more chance for misunderstandings ;o)-
Anonymous
Very intense, very dense, and well written. You really got me hooked into the story, I can't wait to read on.
I didn't discover any "strange" english, too, but then, I'm not a native speaker as well.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your kind words.
You expressed the dream of every author: to hook his/her readers to the story.
And about"strange" English, well... my chapters are revised, of course, and very thoroughly. Read my answers to your comments and you will find the Italian coming out ;)
Thanks again and off to your next review.
With his monthly pension, Severus can now live independently, but he is still troubled at the loss of Poppyand Miss Ingram.Instead, surprisingly, he feels incredibly outraged. He had begun to consider Poppy and Miss Ingham as two annoying but useful appendices in his life. Now he realises that he will have to start everything again, teaching some unknown house-elf how to manage his needs and facing every occurrence by himself. This unpleasant perspective makes him feel oddly disappointed, and as a result, his mood begins to oscillate from a deep joy to a resentful nastiness while his mind swings unsteadily in emotion. Hermione's visit earlier in the day had upset him, and now he will be loosing Poppy, while Hermione will still have her since she will be returning to Hogwarts, too, for several months anyway.Severus' life has changed so much that I am certain that his mind is still filled with such fears of the future that he can't muster a calm moment to truly consider all his options in a rational way. Add Harry's visit on top of everything else, and what we are left with is a surly and frightened man.......Surely with time, his perspective will improve once he is actually living his new life in his own home and finds that at least he doesn't have to do without because his pension will allow him to live comfortably.The future is fraught with unknowns, but only by immersing himself in this new life will he regain his emotional footing and feel more sure of himself.
This is a wonderful story, full of possiblities for all the characters, and I want to find out what happens, so I'll be keeping my eyes open for your next update. Well done!
Beth
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you, Beth. This review so long and full of hypothesis is very nice of you.
But there are more surprises in store for Severus, of course.
Please let me know your considerations. I am always glad to hear from you :)
Best regards from sunny Italy.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you, Beth. This review so long and full of hypothesis is very nice of you.
But there are more surprises in store for Severus, of course.
Please let me know your considerations. I am always glad to hear from you :)
Best regards from sunny Italy.
You have give us an understanding of the struggles of someone who has lost his sight, and then finds that even recalling faces from memory becomes more difficult with the passage of time.This is a convincingly written chapter, full of pathos, and fear, and some small bits of progress of our Professor.Please update soon. I truly enjoy this story.Beth
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
End of your reviews' marathon... but only for the moment, I hope! Actually, there are 16 chapters written, so I hope to "feed" my kind readers at least for a certain while.I will post chapter 5 today and keep my fingers crossed for your reactions. Thanks again for your nice messages. Oh, I forgot: sorry for my English. As I always say, my answers aren't revised.
Response from braye27 (Reviewer)
Your use of English is very good and very clear!!!Never fear, you are doing a great job.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
End of your reviews' marathon... but only for the moment, I hope! Actually, there are 16 chapters written, so I hope to "feed" my kind readers at least for a certain while.I will post chapter 5 today and keep my fingers crossed for your reactions. Thanks again for your nice messages. Oh, I forgot: sorry for my English. As I always say, my answers aren't revised.
Response from braye27 (Reviewer)
Your use of English is very good and very clear!!!Never fear, you are doing a great job.
This is an intense and powerful chapter!!! Well written and engaging all the emotions, I found myself with tears in my eyes as I relived that final battle — saw through Severus' memory that horrific final battle. The losing of his sight was a terrible waste, and it was typical of the Dark Lord to strike any one he could, to do harm to any one he could, while he still could... cause misery and mayhem.Very good chapter!!!Beth
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Gee, I'm blushing!Thank you so very much. You felt exactly the emotions I hoped to raise. This is a great satisfaction for a humble writer who enjoys telling stories but who is not a native speaker. ;)Thanks again.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Gee, I'm blushing!Thank you so very much. You felt exactly the emotions I hoped to raise. This is a great satisfaction for a humble writer who enjoys telling stories but who is not a native speaker. ;)Thanks again.
The scene of Severus' utter anguish when he learned of his blindness was splendidly written. How terrible that he cannot shed tears!When Poppy told him of the injuries suffered by Ron and Hermione, I felt so sad. But in the very next moment, I thought of Severus and Hermione becoming friends because she will be reluctant for anyone to see her with her disfigured face, and Severus cannot see it.I hope, too, that something can be done to help Remus Lupin walk again, or at least gain some kind of mobility.I hope something can be done for Ron to help him be able to move his limbs again without his having to bear the pain of opening new wounds in his skin.I wonder what kinds of injuries Harry suffered. I'm sure you will tell us more as the story progresses.Good job!Beth
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Well, I'm embarrassed. First of all, thank you for your kind comments.Second, clever girl, you have already guessed a part of what will happen. What did you guess? I'll leave the joy to discover it to you. ;)And, about Severus discovering his blindness, I think that it's one of the most terrifying perspectives for everyone of us. Don't you think?Just one little note: Having read your profile (ah, how curious these authors are!) I wanted to let you know that this is not a love story between Hermione and Severus. I have many friends who have been disappointed by this decision. However, our beloved characters share many moments that could be defined also "sweet".Hope this won't stop you from reading and sending your comments. Thanks again and best regards from Italy.
Response from braye27 (Reviewer)
Of course I will continue to read! Now I must try to guess which part I guessed correctly! Beth 8^)
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Well, I'm embarrassed. First of all, thank you for your kind comments.Second, clever girl, you have already guessed a part of what will happen. What did you guess? I'll leave the joy to discover it to you. ;)And, about Severus discovering his blindness, I think that it's one of the most terrifying perspectives for everyone of us. Don't you think?Just one little note: Having read your profile (ah, how curious these authors are!) I wanted to let you know that this is not a love story between Hermione and Severus. I have many friends who have been disappointed by this decision. However, our beloved characters share many moments that could be defined also "sweet".Hope this won't stop you from reading and sending your comments. Thanks again and best regards from Italy.
Response from braye27 (Reviewer)
Of course I will continue to read! Now I must try to guess which part I guessed correctly! Beth 8^)
This is a wonderful beginning to your story, and I am eager to find out more. Off to read the next chapter.Well done.Beth
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Hi Beth!It has been a joy to discover your messages today. So, thank you for your kind words. Now, off to your next review.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Hi Beth!It has been a joy to discover your messages today. So, thank you for your kind words. Now, off to your next review.
A very intense chapter. I imagine that it must be much harder to become blind after having lived a "seeing" life for so long than to be blind right from the start. I once read an article about someone visiting a dark restaurant with a blind friend (dark restaurant = no light inside, all the personnel are blind people). Everybody got along just fine - except him...
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you for your kind words. I just discovered that we are "neighbours", so I hope you won't be disconcerted by the many mistakes in my answer. Unfortunately, no beta revises them ;)Then: blindness is something that has always terrorised and pained me. To have a little hint of it - though I suppose that everyone of us has experienced this kind of games - just close your eyes and try to move. But, to add pure horror to the situation, now imagine that, from this moment, it will be like this forever.If you have a good imagination, you feel a sense of panic and you have to open your eyes and breathe, immediately.As you have probably imagined, this story is about blindness, but in all senses. I hope you will follow me and let me know your thoughts. I like to tell stories, and it's beautiful to know that there is somebody who listens to me. ;)Best regards from Rome.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you for your kind words. I just discovered that we are "neighbours", so I hope you won't be disconcerted by the many mistakes in my answer. Unfortunately, no beta revises them ;)Then: blindness is something that has always terrorised and pained me. To have a little hint of it - though I suppose that everyone of us has experienced this kind of games - just close your eyes and try to move. But, to add pure horror to the situation, now imagine that, from this moment, it will be like this forever.If you have a good imagination, you feel a sense of panic and you have to open your eyes and breathe, immediately.As you have probably imagined, this story is about blindness, but in all senses. I hope you will follow me and let me know your thoughts. I like to tell stories, and it's beautiful to know that there is somebody who listens to me. ;)Best regards from Rome.
A very powerful chapter - I am looking forward to the next!
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you very much for leaving me a message. I think that you will find next chapter completely different from this one...but I hope you will like it. Best regards from Italy.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you very much for leaving me a message. I think that you will find next chapter completely different from this one...but I hope you will like it. Best regards from Italy.
I love it
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you very much.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you very much.
Oh my god! Sure, you have to hit rock bottom to start climbing, but I hope that the latter will start very soon...
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Well, this story is a long travel in Severus' psyche. I hope you will travel with me and let me know your thoughts. Thanks a lot for your message. Best regards from Italy.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Well, this story is a long travel in Severus' psyche. I hope you will travel with me and let me know your thoughts. Thanks a lot for your message. Best regards from Italy.
This chapter was so full of feeling. Just all the injuries, but especially Snape's. And his breakdown was so heartbreaking. You did a wonderful job communicating that.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
I'm glad you liked this chapter. Thank you very much for leaving me a comment :)
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
I'm glad you liked this chapter. Thank you very much for leaving me a comment :)
I'm so glad to see this finally posted here! Keep going, good job!
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you very much for your kind words! You know how insicure I was about this story...
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
Thank you very much for your kind words! You know how insicure I was about this story...
Ts ts ts, what did we say about you talking bad about your use of English, eh? ;-)I liked this chapter very much. I always wanted Severus to be there for Harry when the Dark Lord finally moves in for the kill. And little Peter, who knew that he had soem kind of backbone.Nicely done!Thanks for sharing. /Morgaine
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
As I always say, my English is a translation from Italian, therefore sort of a new, mixed language ;)
In this chapter, everything starts from one of my ideas of how events could have developed for Harry, Severus and Voldemort in their final meeting. But the real story isn't of course about this. You will see in the next chapter.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Response from Memory (Author of A Matter of Will)
As I always say, my English is a translation from Italian, therefore sort of a new, mixed language ;)
In this chapter, everything starts from one of my ideas of how events could have developed for Harry, Severus and Voldemort in their final meeting. But the real story isn't of course about this. You will see in the next chapter.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.