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Betrayal
jmlane5717 Reviews | 7.0/10 (17 Ratings, 0 Likes, 7 Favorites )
Harry returns home to Ginny after the Second Wizarding War carrying a unpleasant secret which will affect not only them but all those around them for a long time to come.
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I have been a Potter fan from day one but just recently started writing fic for it. I presently have roughly thirty stories completed, at least four of them novel-length, and about eleven (yes, eleven) WIPs. I'm most into the canon pairings of Harry/Ginny and Ron/Hermione, but if a story is written well enough, I'll check out Harry/Draco, Draco/Hermione and even a threesome with Harry, Draco and Ginny.
Reviews for Betrayal
Nice ending.
I think Harry's feelings for Ginny show through the way they are treated. Nothing for them but the best!I wonder how Hermione feels in comparision.....
Well, things are staring to come together. I'm glad Harry is doing the right thing, if there is such a thing in this kind of case. I wonder what Ginny and Hermione's thoughts are.
I think Ginny's brothers have a point.
I guess the question is what happens between Hermione and Harry? We have an extra baby in the mix, how will it be resolved?
Very interesting, I'm wondering what they will do myself.
I just love the AU world, there are so many avenues to explore!
Another painful chapter, I'm hoping for a happy ending.
Very interesting start, I'm having some problems with Harry being a cheater, but it does look promising.
Harry better get off his duff and get them a place to live.
Even within a AU story you are keeping the main characters acting in a way I would expect (Hermione paying attention to detail, Harry being impulsive etc).
Responding to previous reviews: He told Molly he wanted to talk to Ginny. I don't think she realized he wanted to rape her. talk about Out of Character! I really dislike this Harry. Hope Ginny hexes him!This is definitely OOC as well as AU. Not to my taste, so I won't rate it.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Betrayal)
You are entitled to your opinion, but what Harry is doing is NOT rape. He would not do such a thing to Ginny. He's holding her down, yes, but not roughly...nor is he tearing her clothes off, as is likely to happen in a true rape situation. He knows she's upset and just wants a chance to explain things, show her how he truly feels. If you read the passages in question carefully, I believe you would have realised that.
Response from pookah (Reviewer)
Didn't mean to offend you. Having spent the last week on the phone with a friend who was raped last week, I am perhaps over-sensitive. But holding someone down (with or without molesting them) is no way to make your point that you care. No means no.You have the right to write YOUR story your way, but I was creeped out by it.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Betrayal)
You are entitled to your opinion, but what Harry is doing is NOT rape. He would not do such a thing to Ginny. He's holding her down, yes, but not roughly...nor is he tearing her clothes off, as is likely to happen in a true rape situation. He knows she's upset and just wants a chance to explain things, show her how he truly feels. If you read the passages in question carefully, I believe you would have realised that.
Response from pookah (Reviewer)
Didn't mean to offend you. Having spent the last week on the phone with a friend who was raped last week, I am perhaps over-sensitive. But holding someone down (with or without molesting them) is no way to make your point that you care. No means no.You have the right to write YOUR story your way, but I was creeped out by it.
Ok I take it this is meant to be AU, otherwise I couldn't possibly see Molly agreeing to let Harry upstairs to have his way with her daughter. Maybe he confunded her!
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Betrayal)
Yes, it's AU. I specifically made it such. He wrote the note to Molly saying he wanted to "speak privately" with Ginny ... and requested they not be disturbed ... the only way he'd be allowed upstairs. Even at that, he didn't want to take any chances.
Many times a talk such as theirs can lead to makeup sex, and at this point in time it's late summer of 1997 (near the end of August), post-DH--so Harry and Ginny are both of age, even if she is still living at home at this point.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Betrayal)
Yes, it's AU. I specifically made it such. He wrote the note to Molly saying he wanted to "speak privately" with Ginny ... and requested they not be disturbed ... the only way he'd be allowed upstairs. Even at that, he didn't want to take any chances.
Many times a talk such as theirs can lead to makeup sex, and at this point in time it's late summer of 1997 (near the end of August), post-DH--so Harry and Ginny are both of age, even if she is still living at home at this point.
Molly is ok with this? Something is going on here.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Betrayal)
Molly trusts Harry; she knows he would never physically hurt Ginny--and she would understand if he told her they had to have a private talk to straighten things out, considering the way Ginny came in, all upset.
And all too often private talks can lead to just what ultimately happened between the young couple. Besides, Molly was too busy talking to Ron and Hermione to consider there might be more going on upstairs than Harry claimed. There is also more of the story to come; please reserve judgment until you've read more of it.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Betrayal)
Molly trusts Harry; she knows he would never physically hurt Ginny--and she would understand if he told her they had to have a private talk to straighten things out, considering the way Ginny came in, all upset.
And all too often private talks can lead to just what ultimately happened between the young couple. Besides, Molly was too busy talking to Ron and Hermione to consider there might be more going on upstairs than Harry claimed. There is also more of the story to come; please reserve judgment until you've read more of it.
I do understand that Harry loves Ginny and he only married Hermione because she was pregnant with his child - but - I find I don't like your Harry. He is totally OC, as are all the other characters. I can't see Hermione putting up with his behaviour or Ginny come to that, and I'm certain that Molly would never allow him to get away with using her daughter.
Interesting concept and I shall endeavour a little longer to see where this is going.
Hmmmmm I don't think I like your Harry.
Man all the drama. Why didn't Harry let Ron marry Hermione and raise the child and then he could marry Ginny? And they could have not told anyone that the baby was Harry and if it had black hair or his eyes she could say someone in her family has them too. I think the Weasleys are taking this way too cooly. And I hope someone exploads.