Wandless
Chapter 4 of 17
OlethrosHermione receives her new identity… and a surprise. The Final Battle: things burn, explode, and vaporize. And wands fly.
A/N: I had such an unbelievable amount of fun writing the second half of this chapter. I can't imagine what Rowling felt while writing her own Final Battle scene, but it felt exactly like writing one of those shoot-em-up action flicks, except a dozen times more interesting with magic. But I totally think that I thought up a better way to deal with the Dementors than Rowling. The second half of this chapter is somewhat violent, minor amount of blood-letting but with explosions and fire to spare.
Obviously AU now... no Deathly Hallows spoilers in this, though I may work some in for later chapters. However, I'm pretty sure for you Snape-fans that my ending is much more... satisfactory. That means that in the first chapter...erm, that is... my, isn't it a lovely day today?
Chapter 4
Wandless
--6:006:30pm, June 18, 1998--
"Bombarda!"
The pillow exploded in a cloud of white, downy snow, which slowly began to settle over the bed. Hermione waited until the feathers were tickling her nose before cleaning up the mess with a sweep of her wand.
For a moment, she tried to remember what could have upset her so; the adrenaline of her fury had carried over the half hour even when her memories had not.
She raised her wand again before setting it down and grabbing her Muggle alarm clock. Sometimes brute force was much more satisfying than magic. The alarm clock shattered against the opposite wall; bits of metal and plastic flew everywhere.
Hermione reached up to brush a strand of straight, black hair from her face and was surprised to discover the tears pouring from her dark eyes.
She sat on the bed, hugging her knees to her face as she let wave after wave of despair crash over her. She felt herself shuddering under the onslaught and let herself fall apart. Sobs racked her thin frame, and she slowly lost track of time.
Parchment rustled under her hand.
Hermione sniffed and gently wiped her eyes. She removed the quill from behind her ear and looked at the wizarding clock upon the wall.
She had one more minute.
She wrote: 6:006:30pm, June 18, 1998 Mental breakdown (not funny). Replace Mrs. Weasley's pillow. Move on.
Then she removed the Silencio over the room. She didn't remember casting the Silencing Charm, but she knew that if she had not, someone would have already come running at the sounds coming from her room.
There was a knock upon her door, and Harry poked his black-haired, tousled head inside. "Dinnertime, Cami!" he shouted loud enough for the whole house to hear. "I hope you're hungry."
She felt her stomach rumble and smiled. "Check."
--6:307:00pm, June 18, 1998--
Dinnertime was a surprisingly cheerful affair. It was a weekday evening, so only Mrs. Weasley was home.
The Weasley matriarch had been mildly disgruntled to learn that Harry had a new girlfriend. To her it didn't matter that Harry had called it quits with Ginny over a year ago; a part of her still hoped to have Harry as a son-in-law.
However, she had warmed to Camilla Elliot almost immediately, especially after she had been told of the girl's unfortunate condition. At dinnertime, she had taken it upon herself to remind Camilla to write down all of her favorite dishes so that she could cook them again the next time that she came to visit.
Hermione, while overjoyed that her new self would not lack Mrs. Weasley's friendship, wished several times over the course of the dinner that she could simply throw herself into the woman's arms and beg her to make everything go away.
Harry played his part perfectly. He offered to refill her plate every time it was empty and touched her hand from time to time, but no more than necessary to be believable. Sometimes she would catch him glancing at her rather wistfully. She imagined that with her new straight, impeccably layered black hair, slightly slanted eyes, and more angular face, she looked quite a bit like Cho Chang. Sadly, the Ravenclaw had perished in Hogsmeade.
Ron had been more than willing to take Harry's role, but even he realized how impossible such a situation would be. It was no secret to anyone, especially his mother, how fond he still was of Hermione. Once news of Hermione's "death" was spread, the presence of a new girlfriend would have been terribly suspicious and insensitive.
Truthfully, Harry wasn't a much better choice, considering the circumstances under which he had broken it off with Ginny. Hermione had called Harry six different kinds of a fool for weeks after the fact.
She was not looking forward to Ginny's reaction to Camilla Elliot.
Hermione was also having a difficult time being called a new name. It was not something she instinctively knew.
She had no proof of Camilla Elliot's existence other than a scrawled entry on parchment from 10:00-10:30am that morning. It described how Minerva had taken her into her office (after they had ducked around a madly squawking, disgruntled raven that seemed to have gotten lost on its way to the Owlery) and weaved a complex incantation that had changed her appearance to that of the fabricated persona of Camilla Elliot.
After much pleading on Hermione's part, Minerva had shown her how to remove the Glamour. She then gave her the strictest of warnings never to remove the Glamour in public and had watched like a hawk as Hermione wrote down every word.
There had been two objects on Minerva's desk: a scroll and a long, thin box. Minerva turned and picked up the scroll. "Here are your wizarding papers. Camilla Elliot graduated from Beauxbatons in the lower half of her class (Hermione had winced and Minerva had smiled 'well, we must create an entirely different personality,' she'd said). All her known relatives are deceased, and she moved to Cambridge to enjoy some time off before searching for a job."
Then Minerva picked up the box, which was the exact same size and shape as an Ollivander's case. "And this..." She proffered it to Hermione.
Hermione lifted the lid and gazed down at the most beautiful wand she had ever seen.
"200-year-old redwood, burnished to a dark shine. Twelve-and-one-half inches long, dragon heartstring core," Minerva said in a rapid clip, sounding almost exactly like the wandmaker. She smirked. "A popular combination for the intensely stubborn."
Hermione flushed and touched the polished handle of the wand. She drew back nearly immediately from the sparks of energy that had leapt from the wand to her skin. "Whose...?"
"Albus," said Minerva, her eyes slightly misty. "He created several unregistered wands for himself. One of them served him quite well... Grindelwald didn't stand a chance."
Hermione gaped. "Several unregistered wands? And he never told Harry? He knows that Harry can't fight Voldemort with his wand! If Harry had one of these, Voldemort would never expect it!"
"The same argument I made to Albus myself innumerable times," Minerva replied. "Yet he insisted that a wand would matter little in the final confrontation. I can't begin to comprehend what he intended, but neither is it my intention to question his wishes. However, I could not let this fine specimen go to waste, and I can think of no one who deserves it more than you, Hermione... I mean, Camilla."
Hermione took a deep breath and lifted the wand from its box. It was heavier and more rigid than her former wand of vine wood. She felt warm tendrils of power entwine their way up her arm as she lifted the wand to the light.
As her damaged wrist caused her hand to bend outwards, she had to aim just left of the target.
Back in the Burrow, Hermione glanced sideways at Harry sitting beside her. She had not told him about the wand, and she was beginning to wonder now if she had made the right decision.
For the last few years, Harry's behavior had unnerved her. Gone was the liveliness that she had once known to be replaced with a haunted look of unwanted maturity. And then there were those times that she had caught him gazing at her with his eyes full of pleading and desperation... reminding her of nothing more than a small child.
How could it be in the best interests of Fate to place the entire weight of the wizarding world on Harry's shoulders? And then to offer him no help at all? All those who could have guided him, his parents, Sirius, Dumbledore... were gone.
"HermCamilla?" Harry whispered.
She jumped, tensing up breathlessly as she looked around to see if anybody had overheard him almost calling her by that name. But Mrs. Weasley had left to wash up, leaving them alone.
"Are you okay, Cami?" Ron asked. "You spaced out there for a moment."
"Yeah," Hermione said. The she threw herself into Harry's arms.
"Ummm... Cami?" Harry patted her awkwardly, his glasses knocked askew by the force of her embrace.
"We're going to kill that bastard," Hermione whispered fiercely. "We're going to help you every step of the way so that you can kill that bastard for good."
She felt a hand on her shoulder and turned her head to see Ron standing behind them. "Damn right," he growled.
The shocked look in Harry's eyes slowly began to fade as he looked first at one of them and then the other. Then a smile that Hermione hadn't seen for over three years lit up his face.
"Thank you," he murmured and he hugged them fiercely.
--10:30-11:00pm, October 31, 1998--
There was chaos. No order, no reason.
For a brief, terrifying moment, Hermione was lost, clutching her bracelet and dodging hexes left and right. The last thing she had recorded was preparing to Portkey to Godric's Hollow with the rest of the Order. The Death Eaters must have surprised them.
But that made no sense. The only person who knew of the plan other than the Order and the DA was... Severus.
The rush of dread that she felt then was enough to propel her to her feet. Amycus Carrow lay unconscious next to her, and she idly wondered whether she had done it.
She heard pops of Apparition all around her as more and more Death Eaters arrived. Fortunately, so did Order members and the DA. She saw Bellatrix Lestrange creep up on Harry from behind.
"Harry!" she shouted, and she jerked her wand to the side.
Fueled by her panic, the redwood wand overreacted, and she saw Harry lifted as if by a giant hand and flung to one side as Lestrange's spell impacted harmlessly against a tree. Harry scrambled up from the dirt where Hermione's spell had deposited him, glasses smudged and askew and the front of his robes gaping open. As he got to his feet, the chain around his neck shifted, and everyone saw the golden surface of Slytherin's locket gleam in the moonlight.
In a surreal moment, fighting all around them stopped. Then the sudden silence was broken by fierce whispering.
Then... out from the ruins of the Potter house on the top of a hill, stepped two tall, imposing figures swathed in black. Severus Snape and Lord Voldemort looked down at the wizards poised to destroy each other.
Hermione was immediately struck by the similarities between the two men... if Voldemort could still be called a man. Both had regal, imperious expressions on their faces as if they owned the world below them. Both seemed to stand a bit taller than normal human beings.
Voldemort's flat, red eyes clashed with Severus' small, dark ones. Voldemort held his wand loosely in a white, scaly hand, whereas everything about Severus' rigid stance suggested control. Looking at one filled her soul with intense hatred while the other...
No, Hermione realized. They were entirely different beings.
"Potter carries something valuable to our Lord with him." Snape's voice boomed over the crowd. "You will not touch him."
Voldemort cackled harshly, his breath wheezing in and out between thin, cold lips. "Severusssss, keep an eye on young Potter. Kill the ressssst." And Voldemort lifted his hand up and up...
To Hermione's right, there was a sound like bones cracking. She turned and saw a great oak tree by her side being torn out of the ground by its roots.
She looked up and up... and she saw the giant holding the uprooted tree in his hands like a spear. He was a great, shaggy thing that wore a leather kilt that seemed to be plaited with the feathers from an entire Hippogriff. Beside him, popping into existence to loom over the dumbstruck crowd like small hills, appeared at least eight other giants. The muscles in the shaggy giant's arms flexed.
"Ginny, get down!" She grabbed the red-haired girl, who had been staring at the giant in abject terror, and forced them both face-first into the ground.
The tree hit the ground a few feet in front of their heads, the roots spinning into the sky like broken fingers, sending clouds of dust into their faces. Through fits of coughing, Hermione heard Harry shouting.
"HAGRID! Hagrid, now!"
From the woods around Godric's Hollow burst at least half a dozen equally large giants, including one that she recognized as Grawp. And running beside them, looking like a midget in comparison, was Hagrid, who was roaring in laughter.
"Aye, we're 'ere, Harry!"
The two groups of giants met with a sound like mountains crashing together, and suddenly the battle grew a hundred times more frightening.
Hermione scrambled to her feet, hunching slightly as she ran. "Stay low to the ground!" she yelled at Ginny. She ducked under a low-swinging club as hexes once again began to fly thick and fast.
She saw Remus Lupin, moving faster than she had ever seen him move, dodging the swinging claws of a snarling Fenrir Greyback. There was Neville Longbottom, his left arm struck with a vicious Severing Charm and dangling from his shoulder by a sliver of muscle, holding his wand triumphantly over a fallen Bellatrix Lestrange. Minerva, her grey hair freed from its bun and flowing about her neck, hissed as she Transfigured a blond Death Eater into a cream puff. Ginny Weasley, fully recovered from her panic, with her red hair streaming out behind her like a flag, hit Antonin Dolohov with a hex that had him weeping and staggering like a blind man, colliding into trees. Countless other nameless faces merged into a frenetic blur, viciously attacking Order members and teenage DA soldiers alike.
Suddenly Hermione's head was jerked to one side as if she had been struck across the face.
Lucius Malfoy stood barely three feet away, his wand pointing at her and a victorious gleam in his eyes as he said, "Ah, Miss Granger, we meet again. It seems that Severus has no more need for you, so... Crucio!"
She had no time to think about the meaning behind his words or even to run before Malfoy's curse sped towards her, filling her vision with red sparkling light. At the last possible instant, the spell veered to the side and impacted a rock, sending bits of stone flying.
"Reducto!" Hermione screamed.
Although he wasn't blasted into pieces, Malfoy flew backwards, his arm cracking sickeningly against a tree trunk.
Hermione looked around, her eyes wildly searching for the one responsible for deflecting Malfoy's curse. They lit upon Severus, standing mere feet away from Harry. Severus had his wand out, and as their eyes met, he nodded to her slightly. Harry seemed to look at Snape with slightly less hostility.
"Enough!"
Voldemort's hiss filled their heads as the world's most powerful Legilimens blasted out his thoughts for all to hear. Dodging hexes and running between tree-trunk thick legs of giants, Hermione didn't have time to think about what new evil Voldemort was summoning.
But then a great wave of despair washed over her. All around her, she saw Order and DA members falter, their wands trembling in their hands. Some began weeping. Even the Death Eaters turned pale. The giants, apparently not having emotion enough to care, continued raging around them.
Hermione looked up, her jaw going slack as she saw horde after horde of Dementors floating across the sky, forming "V"s in a horrendous parody of migratory birds.
She saw herself, writhing in agony underneath a curse. Bowing her head over a tombstone. Severus' face, bored and complacent, looking at her from across an empty bedroom.
"Expecto Patronum!"
A silver stag as large as a bear galloped past her, the wind from its passing rushing through her like an invigorating shower.
Waving her wand for the first time, feeling power that she'd never known tingling in her skin. Walking with Viktor into the Yule Ball, hearing awed and jealous whispers all around. Ron looking at her bashfully, holding a long-stemmed rose. Severus' hand touching her cheek, his face moving towards hers, her wide eyes and diamond-dusted dress reflected in his pupils...
"Expecto Patronum!" Hermione roared. A magnificent silvery snake erupted from her wand, floating its way up to join the stag, sending Dementors scattering as they attempted to dive down upon them.
Hermione stared at her Patronus, gaping, terrified. But it seemed that everybody was too busy casting their own Patronuses to notice hers.
One by one, silvery creatures floated past them and joined their brethren, uniting as a shield of good thoughts against the Dementors. But even from where she stood, Hermione could see that it was not enough. The Dementors had been breeding for nearly two years, and they were numerous enough to blot out the light from the moon.
Hermione heard a strangled cry, and she turned in time to see half a dozen Dementors pick up Ron, lifting him into the air above the trees.
"No..." she said. She took several stumbling steps toward him before despair overwhelmed her and forced her to her knees.
They can't take him. He has a family. He's getting married.
Hermione struggled to her feet, barely able to see through the dark, swirling mist. She gasped as a giant's foot stomped down inches to her left.
Where was Michele? She and Charlie were supposed to...
A screeching cry filled the sky like the Hogwarts Express at full speed. Through the mist burst two enormous dragons, a Hungarian Horntail and...
"Norbert!" Hagrid shouted joyfully.
Hagrid's baby Norwegian Ridgeback had grown into a 100-foot long behemoth. Both dragons were fitted with saddles, and their underbellies were plated with burnished red armor. Norbert's tail lashed fiercely, sending Dementors scattering and slashing one giant across the face. The great creature ran screaming for the trees.
Atop the Hungarian Horntail, Michele yelled, "Hold on, Ron!"
The beast surged towards the Dementors holding Ron. One of them was lowering its hood, tipping Ron's face up... Michele wasn't going to make it.
The Horntail arched its neck and expelled an enormous column of fire. The faces of the crowd below were lit with an orange glow as Dementors screamed in unearthly agony, robes and bone-dry limbs aflame. Around them, the giants panicked and ran as one into the woods, abandoning the battlefield.
Dementors fell from the sky like scraps of burnt parchment, and Ron was falling with them. The Horntail put on a burst of speed and dived, its great spiked tail swinging towards Ron.
There was an almighty gasp, just as if the crowd below were spectators at a Quidditch match. Ron's hand flashed forward and caught around one of the dragon's many spikes, swinging himself up onto the tail as easily as if he were riding a broom.
An enormous cheer went up from the Order. Ron clambered up the dragon's back until he could settle himself into the seat behind Michele. He wrapped his arms around her, and Hermione allowed herself to admire how beautiful they looked together.
"Finish them!" Voldemort's hissing had taken on an edge of panic. "Kill them all!"
From above, Charlie gave a great laugh as he urged Norbert to dive.
"GET DOWN!"
Severus' voice filled all of their heads, and the Order and the DA all ducked as one. The Death Eaters did not, as Severus had apparently neglected to extend his warning to their minds.
Norbert screeched like a great eagle and spewed forth a column of fire bigger than himself, bigger than the world itself. Hermione coughed as fire scorched the air and ripped through the trees mere feet above their heads. Inhuman screaming began as Death Eaters were set aflame. Trees were burned to ragged stumps, and the last of the Dementors disappeared in an inferno of orange and red.
"Now, Potter!" Severus yelled, with his physical voice this time, loud enough for everyone to hear, including Voldemort. As Death Eaters frantically cast streams of water from their wands to douse their flaming robes, Harry ran through a cloud of ash and smoke and appeared... at last... alone before Voldemort.
"Avada Kedavra!" Harry screamed.
The shock of losing nearly his entire army and discovering that his most-trusted servant was a traitor would have been enough to destroy a lesser general. Voldemort was discomfited just long enough to allow Harry's hex, a sickly green jet of light, to impact his shoulder.
Voldemort stumbled. Hermione and the rest of the Order held their breaths.
Then Voldemort straightened up to his full height and glanced disdainfully at the smoldering hole in the shoulder of his robes. "Harry Potter..." he hissed. "You have trained for seven years to defeat me. Yet you still cannot summon enough hatred to do more than singe my clothing."
Harry's hand tightened around his wand, fury contorting his face.
"Then again," the Dark Lord hissed, "I have learned...in more ways than one...not to expect too much from a child. Dance, little Potter, Crucio!"
Harry jerked his wand to the side, and the curse swerved away. It had taken an enormous effort; Hermione could see Harry panting, and already, another jet of red light was streaking towards him.
Six curses later, Harry was visibly faltering. With a growl of frustration, Severus stepped forward and waved the next curse aside. "Stop wasting time, Potter! We did not all risk our lives tonight to see you play."
Harry's chest rose and fell with his heavy breathing. He seemed torn between dodging Voldemort's next curse and shouting at Snape.
"Do it your way, Potter," Snape said. "Pretend that he's me."
Before anyone had time to shout, Snape hissed something unintelligible and fired a spell at Harry. The curse was a jet of silvery, liquid light, as if Snape had hurled the contents of a Pensieve from his wand. It struck Harry in the back.
Three things happened at once. The Order raised their wands as one and aimed them at Snape. Hermione leapt in front of Severus, placing herself between him and the Order. But all of them faltered as Harry threw back his head and let out a scream like an animal in pain.
"NOOOO!"
Harry's eyes snapped open, and the only thing he could see before him was Voldemort, wand poised to cast another curse. Hermione saw Harry's face in the light of the blazing trees; it was full of unholy rage.
Then, in a sudden movement, Harry hurled his wand at Voldemort.
The dark wizard's eyes widened in surprise, and his wand halted in the middle of his curse; his arm moved to one side, intending to knock Harry's wand aside.
Wandless and defenseless, Harry Potter raised his right hand at Lord Voldemort.
"AVADA KEDAVRA!"
A brilliant jet of light, green as absinthe, shot out of Harry's palm and struck Voldemort squarely in his unprotected chest. Voldemort screamed, a broken sound, as if there were a million tortured souls encased within his body. For a brief instant, there was a brilliant silver haze surrounding his body. Then he fell to the ground, face-first, his wand rolling out of his limp hand.
A sickly greenish cloud rose into the air above the Dark Lord's body. In the next instant, three jets of identical hazy light shot from locations beyond the horizon to join with the original cloud. Harry stumbled forward, clawing at the chain around his neck as Slytherin's locket began vibrating and glowing. The chain broke and the locket hit the ground; another beam of ugly green light emitted from within, sailing through the air to join the growing cloud above Voldemort's fallen body.
Hermione, who was staring at the sight in bafflement, slowly began to understand. The portion of Voldemort's soul still in his body... the four remaining Horcruxes... they must all be together now... His soul was whole once again...
The soul-cloud twisted upon itself like a billowy snake and suddenly shot towards her with a sound like a shriek of rage. Her eyes fixated upon the cloud, imagining a gigantic set of jaws opening within, ready to swallow her whole.
Suddenly, she was shoved violently to one side. She picked herself up and saw Severus staring down at her with unfamiliar, hard eyes. He jeered, "Stand aside, Miss Granger. Your concern is neither welcome nor needed."
Time slowed to a crawl as she opened her mouth to scream, for she could see now that Voldemort's soul had been aimed towards Severus all along; she had merely been in the way. She saw Harry standing to one side, looking at Snape with absolute loathing. He was going to let Severus be consumed by Voldemort's tainted soul...
Then Harry lifted his fallen wand and pointed it at the sickly-green cloud.
"Ayuna nakaq!"
The words rolled off Harry's tongue with the whispered reverence of a prayer. The spell was not one she recognized, and the language sounded South American. Hermione wondered exactly what sort of training Harry had been receiving in Machu Picchu.
The spell emerged from his wand as a net of white light that wrapped around the soul-cloud. The beams of light drew tight, squeezing like long, thin fingers. The remnants of Voldemort began to glow blue, a color that grew brighter and bluer, until Hermione imagined it to be the color of the sky when the Earth had been born.
There was a blinding flash of white...the wizards left standing were knocked off their feet...then the light dissolved, leaving nothing behind, not even ash.
Hermione's breaths sounded loud and harsh in her ears. Silence had fallen upon Godric's Hollow. Every single eye was riveted upon the fallen form of Voldemort. This time, Hermione could see that he was truly gone. The body looked crumpled and empty, a shell of what had once been human.
His flat, red eyes were vacant and black.
Then one by one, Death Eaters dropped their wands to the ground. Lengths of wood hit the dirt like a shower of matchsticks.
Looking around, she saw that Severus was gone.
The air crackled with the sharp reports of a single pair of hands clapping. The clapping was joined by another and then another until full-throated cheers were ringing through the sky.
Lord Voldemort, He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named, Tom Riddle, scourge of the wizarding world for over thirty years, was dead. And it had all taken less than half an hour.
As her bracelet tingled against her wrist, Hermione removed her quill from behind her ear with dream-like slowness.
The first words she wrote were: We did it.
But as she looked around her...Ron and Michele embraced atop the Horntail like a fairytale couple upon a steed. Hagrid comforted a weeping Grawp, whose head was nearly entirely bare, his hair scorched away. Tonks fussed hysterically over Lupin, her hair changing shades every two seconds; Lupin had a bleeding slash over his eye that ran from his forehead to his cheek, and Hermione thought it would look quite fetching once it had healed. Luna laid a comforting hand on Neville's shoulder, waving her wand over his nearly severed arm, knitting the flesh and bone back together. Even Kingsley Shacklebolt swooped down upon a startled Minerva and planted an enthusiastic kiss on her lips.
She looked around her and suddenly felt unbearably empty and alone.
Ayuna nakaq = "aya/nuna" Quechua. soul, devil + "nakaq" Q. killer yes, in Quechua, "soul" and "devil" are the same word
Next chapter: Sunrises from two vastly different times. We finally find out the importance of Hermione's bracelet. Preparations for battle, when some things are said and others left unsaid, and someone discovers Hermione's secret.
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Latest 25 Reviews for Memento Amori
114 Reviews | 3.13/10 Average
I think this ending is most apt and very powerful! I know it's a happy ending and I feel the continuation of their story is a cure.
I can't thank you enough for putting the time and effort into creating such a complicated masterpiece. I enjoyed every minute of every read through I've attempted to piece it all together. This tale was very satisfying.
You've managed to infuse lovely humor and saracasm and believabilty into their relationship and their characterizations. All with a convoluted mystery that needed solving and truly does make sense in the end. Chris Nolan eat your heart out.
Only thing I didn't "get" was the Harry becoming enamored of Cami/Hermione. That was awkward and she avoided that well.
Haha although Cicero "died" this is another great and funny chapter. And thank you for the notes, it's really coming together now.
Love love this chapter! Lots of great one liners and little scenes that I adore.
"... she shivered at the butterfly-wing feeling..."
Oh my that was very sensual.
Omg they really did it. She should be ecstatic! The best in his life, indeed.
A very intense and engaging battle scene you've written here. Loved it!
Wow you really know how to twist things up! I'm ready to settle down for a long drawn out read.
Swoon swoon swoon. Romantic!Snape to the rescue.
My gosh I wish she could remember all these little humorous things that happen between them! I love how she's getting to know him but upset that she won't recall.
Someone really needs to draw a fan art of Snape AK-ing some daisies!!
Wow! I finally finished reading it for the second time. I had to print it out and read it straight forward chronologically the second time. That was a great story. I do wish there could have been an epilogue but I know in my imagination they live happily ever after. My hat is off to you for being able to pull something like that off. Truly amazing. Thank you for a wonderful read.
Response from Olethros (Author of Memento Amori)
I hope that not too many trees had to give their lives for this noble cause Thank you so much for your kind words!
Response from Olethros (Author of Memento Amori)
I hope that not too many trees had to give their lives for this noble cause Thank you so much for your kind words!
“Excellent, we have demonstrated that we know each other’s names,” Hermione said. One of the funniest lines I've ever read. Maybe I shouldn't have done, but I found this chapter was very funny. I was also chuckling at performing the Killing Curse on bunnies.Good meeting between the three of them, nicely written, things are becoming clearer. There has been a few warnings about the dodgy stairs now, could there be a simple explanation for Hermione's injuries? I am intrigued, so I'd better get on with the story.
Response from Olethros (Author of Memento Amori)
Glad you enjoy my dark humor... most of this chapter was definitely intended to be funny.Also, not going to answer about Hermione and the injuries but the stairs... ah yes, the stairs will indeed make a repeat appearance. Good eye!
I haven't reviewed every chapter because this is the first time I have paused. You weave your story beautifully, the non chronological time makes me really sympathetic with Hermione's position. I am pleased that you haven't spent the majority of these early chapters wading through too much of Hermione's emotional state. It would have been very easy to get bogged down in the sadness and loss of most of her memory. Still, you have clearly shown her reation, and I particularly admired the way you had Ron and Harry react. You have done a good job of keeping everyone in character, Hermione's practicality, Harry's moving forward to do what he must, and Ron's affection. It's nice to see a Ron in an HG/SS fic that isn't belittled and killed off at the first opportunity.You certainly have a flair for dramatic writing. Your scenes are well constructed to give the reader a lot of information in relatively few words. This really adds to the fast pacing, giving us a lot of action as well as explanations, meaning that readers like me are thoroughly swept along with Hermione.I look forward to reading the rest.
Response from Olethros (Author of Memento Amori)
Possibly one of the most flattering reviews I've ever gotten, thank you so so much!! I am glad that you are enjoying my work; it's the best reward that a writer can get. I'm especially glad that you thought my writing to be in character - that is always what I strive for first and foremost.Hope that the rest of the story lives up to your expectations!
*is stunned*
After reading chapter sixteen, my intention was to go back and read the whole thing backwards, but that last chapter was so exhausting, I think I need to step away for a while. Maybe some day I'll leave you a real review, but all I can say for now is that you have written an amazing story; I'm just not sure how I feel about it.
Oh this chapter is dark. Exquist imiagry of torture and pain. Very conflicting too, given the crying Snape before he chucks her down the stairs. Never ever read anything like this. It must have been challenging for you, I could never see me writing something like this.
Did they meet at McDonald's?
I am enjoying this fic, but I'm having trouble keeping the time lines straight.
I've just discovered it is possible (for me, at least) to squee in delight, cry, laugh, sniff and moan at the same time. You are absolutely right, no epilogue is needed. Let us imagine, each one, what life will be like to Severus and Hermione. What an amazing way to complete the story! Bravo!
I don't know if you'd intended it to be tricky, but I was thinking it was a sunset until I read this chapter; maybe I just wasn't paying close enough attention to the dates and confused myself. Goodness, the dates are getting closer together now...
I had really hoped it was something like that. Wow!
The next chapter sounds exciting. And I don't have to wait. Very compelling story so far.
*applauds with a yawn* If I could keep my eyes open, I would. I haven't mentioned before, but I like the way you write everyone. Ron and Harry are often shortchanged in SSHG fics, but you've done a good job with them.
I like how there is something that ties the halves of the chapter together, like the wand in the previous chapter. I am so intrigued by the bracelet thing; I already want to go back and reread the first four chapters, but then I know I'd never get any sleep.
Oh, I told myself that I wasn't going to leave a review for every single chapter, but so far, I've had something to say.
I'm really interested in Hermione's research; I've already got a few ideas. Your recaps-as-forshadowing are brilliant!
Hmm, she remembered to call him "Severus." That has possibilities. Writing this story backwards and forwards must have been hard; it's amazing.
Okay, I know I said at one point that I wasn't going to read this because I was working on something similar, but I've pretty much given up on '50 First Kisses' and I can't ignore the siren call of a completed fic. I only hope I don't stay up too late reading this tonight, because right now I want to read the whole thing. You really gave us somehting to mull over.