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chelseamacybff912 Reviews | 9.0/10 (2 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )
I am not innocent, foolish, and shy.
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shyness is such a hinderance at times
Response from chelseamacybff91 (Author of Real)
Thank you very much for reviewing.
Interesting work. I like the way that you've pointed out the difference between appearances and reality, particularly the line "You think you know me, but you have barely scratched the surface." However, I'm a little uneasy about the fifth line in the first stanza, as it seems a little too long; perhaps you might split it somewhere? Otherwise, though, this is very good.
On a personal note, this poem very much reminds me of the way that I and my closest male friend act towards each other. We even have a pair of somewhat contradictory running jokes that this poem reminded me of: "you don't know me at all" and "you know me way too well". Because of this, your poem hit me square in the gut. Congratulations; there are few poems besides the work of John Donne that affect me this way. Again, good work.
Response from chelseamacybff91 (Author of Real)
Thank you very much for the review. I'm glad you related to it.