Chapter 2
Chapter 2 of 7
kellychamblissThe Query family makes Severus an offer he doesn't want to refuse. Steampunk AU. Rating is for later chapters.
ReviewedChapter 2
All was eventually made clear. The dark-haired woman, it turned out, was Minerva Riddle wife of the Great Query, real name Thomas M. Riddle.
Mrs Riddle didn't openly dispute Severus's story about how he had come to appear in her drawing room, but neither did she release him from the immobility spell. Still, she unbent enough to explain that she usually accompanied "the act" to the music hall to serve as dresser and props mistress but had remained behind this evening because of a headache.
"I hope you are recovered now," Severus said, as politely as he could from his prone position on the floor. He had the feeling that it might not be a bad idea to enjoy Mrs Riddle's approval.
But she seemed to find the comment a bit too forward. There was a stiff pause before she replied, "Tolerably."
He tried again. "You are Narcissa's mother?" he asked, with an obscure sense that women always enjoyed talking about their children.
Something flared in Mrs Riddle's eyes, and her pointed face was momentarily lit by an odd expression. "Hardly," she said. For some reason, she reminded Severus of a cat faced with a particularly juicy canary.
He decided to forego further conversation until Query...er, Riddle arrived. There were too many possible pitfalls here; best simply to resign himself to lying in uncomfortable silence.
But rather to his surprise, Mrs Riddle spoke again. "You are magical?" she asked.
What Severus wanted to say was, "Do non-magical people normally materialise out of thin air in your sitting room?" What he did say was, "Yes. Self-trained."
She eyed him narrowly. "Then you did not attend Hogwarts School?"
"I did not," he replied, though what business it was of hers, he wasn't sure. But he fancied that her ramrod-straight back relaxed a fraction at his words.
Interesting.
She fell silent then, and Severus took the opportunity of studying her. Not young, but decidedly handsome in a prim, sharp-featured way; he preferred her type to the more languidly-pretty Narcissa. With her strong jaw, patrician nose, and considerable quantity of mostly-black hair, Mrs Riddle looked elegantly respectable and just the slightest bit frightening. Not someone to run afoul of, Severus decided.
But then, neither was he. He thought he might very much enjoy testing her limits.
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There was an odd sense of inevitability about how it all ended. The Great Query and his assistant did eventually return, and Severus released from the "body-bind" spell and plied with tea found himself explaining his history in more elaborate detail than he had ever vouchsafed to anyone.
He wasn't yet certain if it made sense to trust these people, but still, aside from his mother, they were the only other magical beings he'd ever encountered. He'd seen enough of his own world "Muggle," his mam had always called it to know its limitations, and he firmly believed that the magical one could only be better. He wanted to belong to it, and the Querys could be his way in.
"So now you know why I am not part of the magical world," he concluded at last. "But I am curious as to why you are not."
Tom Riddle smiled but did not answer immediately. Instead, he said, "We'll get to that, but first, I wonder if I could ask you a favour, sir?" Before Severus could say yea or nay, Riddle went on, "Do you have a wand, and, if I were to ask you, could you do some magic for me?
What was this, an audition of some sort? Severus wondered. But he had nothing to lose, so he inclined his head in acquiescence.
"Yes, I have a wand," he said, removing it slowly from his coat. It was not without some trepidation that he allowed the Riddles to take it from him; he was coming to understand that for a wizard, a wand was like an extension of his heart. He felt anxious without it, in the brief moments during which Mr and Mrs Riddle inspected it, but they soon returned it.
"Your mother seems to have cared for it well, and you after her," Mrs Riddle said, approval clear in her voice. Severus felt that she warmed to him a bit.
And then the audition for such it clearly was began.
Riddle asked Severus to perform a variety of spells and charms; he even invited him to prepare a potion, though Severus was forced to confess that he didn't know how. For although he did own his mother's potions book, he'd never had the ingredients or tools.
"Ah, well, no matter," Riddle said. "You have shown me enough to make clear that you have a great deal of magical ability." He sat quiet for a moment and then suddenly turned to look at his wife. "My dear?" he asked.
Mrs Riddle gave Severus a glance that he could only think of as appraising, and pursed her thin lips. "Yes," she said. "I believe he will suit."
"Will suit what?" Severus demanded. He was willing to be agreeable up to a point, if it would help him gain his ends, but he refused to be discussed as if he were not in the room.
Riddle answered smoothly, as Severus would come to understand that he always did. "I will be frank," he said, a phrase that usually made Severus assume the speaker was anything but. "In the wizarding world, our abilities are not surprising; they are shared by all. Oh, some people are magically more skilled or powerful than others, of course I may say without boasting that I am one of those more-powerful people but we all compete on more or less the same level. We most of us survive, but not many of us prevail.
"Here in the Muggle world, however, our abilities are exceptional, unusual. Our superiority is clear. And since I am not a man who is prepared simply to survive, I have chosen to come to a place where I am likely to prevail. My dear wife " and here he extended a hand and a smile to Mrs Riddle, who sat straight and silent opposite him "is also a witch of great ability, and Narcissa is quite gifted as well. We have done very well for ourselves as Muggle magicians, and I believe we can do even better. Eventually we plan to earn enough to able to give up the stage entirely."
"And do what?" Severus asked.
"Ah, who is to say, my boy? The world will be our oyster, so to speak. I might go into politics, perhaps, or land speculation. The possibilities are endless. But those days have yet to arrive. First, we have the rest of our fortunes to earn."
With a wave of his wand, Riddle freshened the drawing-room fire and motioned the tea pot to pour more tea. Severus was not surprised to find that it was still nicely warm.
"We are making a name for ourselves," Riddle continued, "but we need to do even more. Our success depends on more and grander tricks and effects. We can become international stars. But it will require a great deal of magical energy and effort. In short, we need to expand the act. We have been looking for an additional member of our troupe, and when I felt your power in the audience tonight, I thought perhaps we had found our man."
"You want me to stand on stage in a red cape?" Severus asked, incredulous.
Riddle laughed. "Oh, not immediately, of course. You have a great deal to learn. I am proposing an apprenticeship, Mr Snape. We Minerva and Narcissa and I will help you complete your magical education, teaching you what you need to know to work with us, and you, in return, will remain in our employ for at least a year, contributing to the act as we deem appropriate. If, at the end of a year, we find our association to be mutually beneficial, we may all elect to continue. If not, we will part ways with no hard feelings."
After a moment, he added, "You will want to think over the proposal, of course, or perhaps you have questions to ask. Shall we meet tomorrow and "
"No," Severus interrupted. He'd made up his mind. "I accept your offer."
Riddle beamed. "Excellent." He clapped his hands, and to Severus's astonishment, a little being with huge ears and eyes, its tiny body wrapped in what looked like a tea towel, appeared with a pop.
"Master called?" it he? squeaked.
"Champagne, Beckley," Riddle ordered. "We have something to celebrate."
The creature popped away again, and before Severus could even ask who or what Beckley was, he was back, with four shimmering glasses on a tray.
Mrs Riddle floated one glass to each of them, and Mr Riddle raised his in a toast.
"To Severus Snape," he said. "The newest Query. And what a deep one he appears to be."
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Oh, I really loved this! I do wish I knew more about what jettisoned Minerva and Tom from respectable wizarding society, but the final image of Severus striding onstage and taking up a new life of adventures was very satisfying. You had so many great snapshots of the characters -- like Minerva pinning her hat on and sailing out to a business call after a round of kinky sports! It was an unexpected combination of characters and circumstance, but int worked beautifully. Thanks for sharing!
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much for these kind and detailed reviews; I do appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. It was really a fun one to write.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much for these kind and detailed reviews; I do appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. It was really a fun one to write.~~Kelly
I really liked the description of the empty music hall, waiting for the patrons to arrive and the magic to begin. As for Minerva -- she pounces! She knows what she wants, it is clear. I worry a bit for Severus moving in to the House of Query.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Pounces -- exactly! I'm so glad the "cat" came through. Severus is going to have to be on constant alert, that's for sure. Thanks for reading.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Pounces -- exactly! I'm so glad the "cat" came through. Severus is going to have to be on constant alert, that's for sure. Thanks for reading.~~Kelly
"The sovereign entity that was Severus Snape": Haha, perfect! The way he is here is just as I'd have pictured canon Snape to be in his teens and twenties: cool and calculating but with all those rough edges popping up at the most inconvenient times. The writing is really elegant :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much! I love knowing which lines readers like. I think SS is someone who by this time has learned that if he doesn't look out for himself, no one else will.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much! I love knowing which lines readers like. I think SS is someone who by this time has learned that if he doesn't look out for himself, no one else will.~~Kelly
yay. Nagini got some fun too. Seems only fair. :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I have to admit that the whole Nagini business rather spooks me -- but it was a fun challenge to write. Thank you for reading and reviewing.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I have to admit that the whole Nagini business rather spooks me -- but it was a fun challenge to write. Thank you for reading and reviewing.~~Kelly
Be careful what you wish for, Severus. :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'll bet that's something he often said to himself over the years. Thanks for reading!~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'll bet that's something he often said to himself over the years. Thanks for reading!~~Kelly
Sounds like Severus will be getting an invitation into the Riddle's bedroom before long. But will he want to accept? :)
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I suspect he will! He's a daring lad.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I suspect he will! He's a daring lad.
Oops, sprung! ;)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I always knew Severus had a bit of the daredevil in him /g/.
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I always knew Severus had a bit of the daredevil in him /g/.
Severus should watch that wandering eye of his. It could get him into trouble! :)
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And he's usually so cautious!
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
And he's usually so cautious!
This is interesting. Love the way you've mixed the characters together. :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks! They're an odd group, but they fit together better than I expected.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks! They're an odd group, but they fit together better than I expected.~~Kelly
I am a little torn. I really wanted this to go on forever (really, forever). And I didn't expect it to end here. On the other hand, I sort of loved the irony. I kept waiting for things to go pear-shaped, and I thought for sure that they would since we were dealing with such powerful wizards, one who we know to have a dark past. So, the fact that we had a recipe for disaster, and it ended in a happily ever after (as far as we know) was pretty cool.I have to commend you on working out the kinks (no pun intended) of five people together (and I use the word people loosly,lol). I've read a lot of stuff, but I think that is the most numerous sextacular I have read. So, good job, you.This was different from your usual fare, and while I love what I have read in the past, this was a nice change of pace, too. It still had that certain charm that every one of your stories has, though. Very nicely done!
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you for reading and for all your kind and detailed reviews. This is the first (and probably will be the only) five-some I've written, and imagining the logistics was something of a challenge. So I'm glad you think it makes sense. (My first-and-only snake sex fic, too -- what an interesting challenge *that* was /g/). I agree that the ending is a little unexpected -- probably too many loose ends left dangling, to be honest -- so maybe someday I'll have to do a sequel.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you for reading and for all your kind and detailed reviews. This is the first (and probably will be the only) five-some I've written, and imagining the logistics was something of a challenge. So I'm glad you think it makes sense. (My first-and-only snake sex fic, too -- what an interesting challenge *that* was /g/). I agree that the ending is a little unexpected -- probably too many loose ends left dangling, to be honest -- so maybe someday I'll have to do a sequel.~~Kelly
Now I seeeeee..... it was Severus thinking with his little head that got him on the road to all that future trouble to begin with.This was a very fun story, and I never knew from one chapter to the next what might happen. I have to admit that when it came to Nagini making it a foursome, I got the willies.I'd love to have seen him on stage for the dawn of his new age.Well done, you!Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for reading, even to the snakey end /g/. I confess, I was a little squicked by the whole Nagini thing myself. But it was part of the prompt, and it turned out to be a fun writing challenge. And thanks, too, for your various plot thoughts. I do think you'd have managed a more complex take on this fic than I did; it does leave a lot of loose ends. Ah, well, maybe some day I'll undertake a sequel. Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for reading, even to the snakey end /g/. I confess, I was a little squicked by the whole Nagini thing myself. But it was part of the prompt, and it turned out to be a fun writing challenge. And thanks, too, for your various plot thoughts. I do think you'd have managed a more complex take on this fic than I did; it does leave a lot of loose ends. Ah, well, maybe some day I'll undertake a sequel. Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments.~~Kelly
Magic is in the eye of the beholder, and at this date no one had seen anything like "The Queries". I'm getting the feeling that Severus is being drawn into a trap.
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We'll see! /g/ Thanks so much for reading and commenting.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
We'll see! /g/ Thanks so much for reading and commenting.~~Kelly
Where oh where will this lead? Is Severus getting himself into something that he'll regret? What is the motive behind Minerva's seduction? Is it just her own interest in their "newest addition," or does Tom have a more nefarious reason for drawing his young protégé into this ritual?Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I hope you'll enjoy some of the answers to these questions, Beth. Thanks for commenting!~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I hope you'll enjoy some of the answers to these questions, Beth. Thanks for commenting!~~Kelly
It really would be easy to wow Muggles with magic, wouldn't it? Especially in this era."I saw you," he blurted to her back.At this, I was equal parts "No, Severus, stop talking!" and, "Oh yeah, lets get things moving!"Kelly, if you're hoping I'll die from want of more story, just keep it up. :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm not deliberately trying to kill you /g/ -- but I'm glad you're enjoying it. For a normally cautious man, Severus is taking some interesting chances.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm not deliberately trying to kill you /g/ -- but I'm glad you're enjoying it. For a normally cautious man, Severus is taking some interesting chances.~~Kelly
They must have wanted to be seen, or they wouldn't have left the door open. Narcissa being there is an interesting twist, But Nagini? that's the stuff of nightmares.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
"The stuff of nightmares" indeed -- from my pov. From the characters' view? Well, not so much /g/. And you're right about the open door, of course. Thanks for reading!Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
"The stuff of nightmares" indeed -- from my pov. From the characters' view? Well, not so much /g/. And you're right about the open door, of course. Thanks for reading!Kelly
Narcissa's story was very telling. And yet, there is so much mystery about the entire Query family. Narcissa doesn't seem at all uptight about any of it, but perhaps that is because of where she came from. This is a much better place to be.Severus is very cautious (as he should be) especially after finding out that Riddle was ejected from the wizarding world for mystery reasons. But in the end, he is resigned to going along with it. You can't blame him really, since they are what keeps him connected with magic and there is the possibility of exploring sex with Minerva. And on that front, he is likely going to be in for an extreme education based on what we've seen and heard so far. His past experience will be nothing like what he will experience with the Querys, I suspect. And I look forward to finding out, I am a little horrified to admit.This continues to be fabulous, Kelly. As soon as I finish a chapter, I am already dying for more.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much for this detailed comment; I really appreciate it. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I had a lot of fun playng around in Victorian times. It all gets pretty kinky, as per the prompt.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much for this detailed comment; I really appreciate it. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I had a lot of fun playng around in Victorian times. It all gets pretty kinky, as per the prompt.~~Kelly
This alternate universe has turned Potterverse completely on its head! Every time I try to put the clues together and prognosticate a bit, I come up empty handed... and empty headed. I am so throughly impressed with the story you are weaving. There are so many twists and turns, and every clue leads back around to every other clue- not a single clear direction for my feeble brain.I feel certain that there will be a ton of trouble in the future, and for the life of me, I can't even figure out how Minerva would have found herself so attracted to Tom. Will she ever want to break her bond to him? Would he ever agree to it? I worry about Severus. He seems to see things that trouble him, and the next thing I know he is rationalizing it so he can remain a member of this "family." His need to "belong" appears to be his greatest motivator, and I can't help but think that both he and Narcissa (and Minerva) will pay a big price for having come so thoroughly under Tom Riddle's control.Could they all be under an Imperius Curse? Hummmmmmmmmm... Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm really enjoying your thoughts about how the plot may unfold -- it's like getting to read the story myself. As for Minerva, I think she is a very intense, strongly-emotional person who admires intelligence and power -- and even danger; look are her commitment to Albus. So, in different circumstances from canon, I can see her being attracted someone like Tom (at least when he's just dodgy and ruthless, not necessarily evil.)~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm really enjoying your thoughts about how the plot may unfold -- it's like getting to read the story myself. As for Minerva, I think she is a very intense, strongly-emotional person who admires intelligence and power -- and even danger; look are her commitment to Albus. So, in different circumstances from canon, I can see her being attracted someone like Tom (at least when he's just dodgy and ruthless, not necessarily evil.)~~Kelly
I neglected to review your last chapter, even though it was formidable. Allow me to make up for it now:I still really like how the story unfolds, and how the Potterverse is made to fit with your version. And I'm somewhat scared by the Minerva/Riddle-pairing - it does actually fit, doesn't it?And Snape is so very much himself. Especially his comment about politics.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm so glad you think Snape is "very much himself." That's always the challenge of AUs, for me -- to make everyone seem like "themeslves" even outside their usual world. As for Minerva, she's pretty strong-minded in canon; I think that it probably wouldn't take much change in circumstance for her to devote that sort of fierce commitment to a diferent, even if less worthy, cause. Thanks for reading and commenting!~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm so glad you think Snape is "very much himself." That's always the challenge of AUs, for me -- to make everyone seem like "themeslves" even outside their usual world. As for Minerva, she's pretty strong-minded in canon; I think that it probably wouldn't take much change in circumstance for her to devote that sort of fierce commitment to a diferent, even if less worthy, cause. Thanks for reading and commenting!~~Kelly
Oh, squick! Nagnin? *shudder.... besides that, bloody good!
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for reading! And sorry for the squck. But I can't promise that it won't get even worse /g/.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for reading! And sorry for the squck. But I can't promise that it won't get even worse /g/.~~Kelly
WTF?!?!? Severus is going to be either very happy or very sad. What's going to happen when Tom realizes that the apprentice is watching...? Or could that be part of his plan?Where's the next chapter?
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Next chapter in a day or two. First, I've got to leave everyone dangling on the cliff for a while /g/. Severus is getting much more than he bargained for. Thanks for commenting; I really appreciate it.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Next chapter in a day or two. First, I've got to leave everyone dangling on the cliff for a while /g/. Severus is getting much more than he bargained for. Thanks for commenting; I really appreciate it.~~Kelly
Dear, Gussie! Severus is walking on thin ice here. I'm not sure how smart it was for him to show that bit of bravery about whether or not Mr Riddle had anything to hide, but he (Tom) must think enough of his apprentice to show him patience... but that display with Nagini was enough to underscore the danger that is always lurking beneath the surface with Riddle.Knowing that Narcissa is not their real daughter, now I'm wondering if Minerva and Tom are really married to each other? There is so much you haven't told us yet, isn't there?Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Severus is one of those people who always finds himself on the knife edge, I think -- and probably not by accident (although perhaps subconsciously). And I've always thought that Riddle had to have a lot of charisma along with his viciousness -- but very unstable, definitely. Thanks for reading!~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Severus is one of those people who always finds himself on the knife edge, I think -- and probably not by accident (although perhaps subconsciously). And I've always thought that Riddle had to have a lot of charisma along with his viciousness -- but very unstable, definitely. Thanks for reading!~~Kelly
I wondered how the name Query fit into this tale. The dynamics of this family are certainly interesting, and I'm still trying to figure out how they came to be together. Let's see, Minerva McGonagoll is to married Thomas M. Riddle, and since Minerva said she wasn't Narcissa's mother, I am assuming that Narcissa Black was recruited by Tom to be a member of their company just as Severus has been.This is one of those "WOW!" moments when I'm met with a totally unexpected plot, and I can't wait to find out what you have in mind.Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much! I'm so pleased that you're enjoying the plot; I usually think of myself as a plot-challenged writer /g/. ~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much! I'm so pleased that you're enjoying the plot; I usually think of myself as a plot-challenged writer /g/. ~~Kelly
I cannot wait to see what you do with this story! I'm already hooked with the AU and Victorian London. Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks, Beth! I hope you'll enjoy the rest.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks, Beth! I hope you'll enjoy the rest.~~Kelly
Wow. Severus could be in for either a very bad time or a very good time, or possibly both at once. I really love watching these characters charm their way through the sooty, gritty late-Victorian world, and I look forward to finding out the story behind the stories the Querys are giving Severus.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you! I think the HP characters fit really well into the Victorian world; it's been fun to write them there. I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the chapters. Thanks for reading.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you! I think the HP characters fit really well into the Victorian world; it's been fun to write them there. I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the chapters. Thanks for reading.~~Kelly
But ... but ... where's the next chapter?!? *wails*I am not a big fan of AU, and yet, I can't seem to put this one down. I think I keep waiting for the other shoe to drop, and instead, the shoes just keep getting prettier and more enticing.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for the lovely comment! I'm always so pleased if I can get people to enjoy genres or characters they usually don't care for. My plan is to do a chapter every two days.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for the lovely comment! I'm always so pleased if I can get people to enjoy genres or characters they usually don't care for. My plan is to do a chapter every two days.~~Kelly