Chapter 1
Chapter 1 of 7
kellychamblissIt's 1894, the dawn of a new age, and Severus Snape, shipping clerk, wants a bit more magic in his world. But few know better than he that life is always a big question mark. Steampunk AU.
ReviewedAuthor's Note: This story was written a couple of years ago for a fest; the prompt asked for steampunk, corsets, and "the dawn of a new age." The prompter offered a choice of characters Severus, Minerva, Tom Riddle, Narcissa, Nagini -- and I decided to include them all.
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London, 1894
The magnificent engine took up nearly the entire music-hall stage, its burnished metal gleaming in the flickering footlights. Taller than the frock-coated magician who stood beside it, the machine was breath-taking, exciting, sinister.
Its central core was a cylinder of brass with a cut-glass door set into it. Other shimmering panels of different-coloured glass circled the core, and through them the audience could see the entire interior, an empty crimson-lined space bathed in brilliant light.
From his position in the two-shilling stalls, Severus Snape growled in annoyance as he craned his neck to see around the babbling families and beer-swilling layabouts and courting couples who obscured his vision. He'd paid the extra money for the lower stalls, foregoing the usual upper-gallery seat that better suited his minor-clerk's wages, specifically to get a better view of this mysterious contraption that seemed about to take the music-hall world by storm.
He thought it was probably only a matter of time until this popular magic act "The Query Family!" shouted the posters outside, accompanied by large, ornate question-marks moved to the swankier venues in Leicester Square, for which he had neither the funds nor the proper clothing. And before that happened, Severus had a few queries of his own, a few things that he needed to learn about this machine and this family.
For they were magical. He knew it, he could feel it the same fizzy tickle in his limbs, the same pulsing heat in his chest, the same sense of being almost (but not quite) able to see beyond the surface of the world to something deeper and clearer. They were same sensations he'd had as a young boy in Spinner's End, before his mam died of the diphtheria, and his da took to drink.
He didn't remember much of his mam's looks his mind would only bring up a blurry flash of a pale face surrounded by dark hair, and a pair of welcoming arms that held him close against a soft, lavender-scented bosom.
But he remembered clearly the sparkling, tingly feel of her magic, how he would watch in awe as she waved her thin ebony wand to make all manner of wonderful things happen. He would sit at her side for hours, listening to tales of the magical school he would one day attend, the marvelous spells he'd be able to do.
"You'll make our fortune, boy!" his da would laugh, back in those sunny days before misfortune chewed up the Snapes of Spinner's End and spit them out, his mother to the mass grave of the epidemic, his father to drink and the loss of his mill job and his home, Severus to the charity of Mr Howard the mill owner, who had liked him and sent him away to be educated at Primrose Academy, a school for boys of the trading and lower middle classes. Most of them, like Severus, were there on the largesse of some do-gooder who saw promise in them, or some rich man who needed a place to park an inconvenient offspring from the wrong side of the blanket.
Primrose (and a more incongruous name could not be imagined) had not been as bad as Mr Dickens' Dotheboys Hall, but it had been grim enough. Still, Severus bright and quiet and bookish, though fast enough with his fists when he needed to be had managed to scrape up enough learning and polish to secure a position as a clerk in the carting firm of Haltern and Mills. He spent his days preparing bills of lading and his nights at the music halls or with his mother's books.
They were all he had of her now six books and her ebony wand, wrapped carefully in flannel and kept in a locked box under his lodging-house bed. He'd never attended his mother's magical school, of course, and he would have written off the story long ago as simply a tale invented to amuse a child if it hadn't been for the spell books, with their densely-printed, tissue-thin pages that never wrinkled or tore or stained. Slowly, laboriously, night after night, he raised his mother's wand and taught himself charms and runes and transfigurations (potions intrigued him, but he had no idea where to find the ingredients). He learnt, and he waited for the day when somehow, somewhere, he would find others of his kind.
And then, last week, he'd gone with his mate Fellowes to the South London Palace, for Fellowes was sweet on one of the dancers there, and they'd arrived just as the magic act had begun the Query Family.
Severus had been watching them with only half an eye what was the point of cheap theatrical "magic" when he could do the real thing? when suddenly the stage had gone completely dark. Every light was extinguished, only to flare to life again to reveal the great brass cylinder, its glass sparkling, coloured smoke pouring from a dozen copper tubes, its bright red interior almost too blinding to look at.
Severus had felt it then the tell-tale surge of heat that crackled across his skin.
Magic.
His day had come. At last.
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What with the crowd and the annoying presence of Fellowes, Severus had not been able to make his way to the stage door in time to confront the Querys in person, but on reflection, he thought the delay was for the best. He'd had time to collect himself, to plan, and Severus rarely did anything without a plan. Life had taught him that survival went not to the fittest but to the canniest, and self-preservation had long been his main goal.
But the goal of self-advancement was not far behind. His magic, he knew, could be his ticket to wealth and comfort and leisure; he yearned to shed the inky skin of the clerk for the butterfly-freedom of a man of letters. First, though, he needed to learn how to put his powers to best use. He needed to learn the ways of the magical world.
He needed the Querys.
So he'd placed his precious wand securely in the inner pocket of his coat and come once again to the Palace, to sit this time in the two-shilling stalls and watch as, once more, the gaslights and footlights suddenly died and then were reborn amid the screams and gasps of the audience. Again, the cylinder appeared, and the Great Query stepped on stage beside it.
He was a tall man, dark-haired and dashing in impeccable evening clothes, with a cape of flame-coloured satin slung carelessly over his shoulder. From this distance at least, he looked handsome, and Severus could hear the shopgirls giggle and swoon.
"Ladies and gentlemen," boomed Query in a faultlessly posh accent, "be not alarmed. Nay, be comforted, for this evening you will learn the answers to some of your deepest questions, and you will observe wonders such as you have never imagined. Behold!"
With a flourish, he raised his arm to extend a golden wand. It was no stage prop, Severus knew; he could feel the power of it rippling through the smoky air. "Accio the Tome of Answers!" Query cried, and from behind him a great ornate book appeared, its gilt pages opening as it floated to hover at Query's side.
"It's electickity, that is," declared a gaudily-dressed swain nearby, his arm draped over the shoulder of a girl in a large beribboned bonnet. "'E's moved that book by some sort 'o current, you bet."
"Ooooh, Charlie," simpered the girl, "the things wot you know. Nobody smarter."
Severus tried to quell them with a glare, and suddenly he could feel his own power surge forth as, to his annoyance, he unwittingly cast a silencing spell on the hapless young man. Though he had made great strides with his magic, he didn't yet have it under complete control; sometimes, like now, it burst out when he least expected it.
"'Ere, Charlie!" the girl screeched in alarm, as the lad's mouth opened and closed soundlessly. "Wot've you gone and done to yer voice, then?"
Before Severus could cast a counter-charm, a wave of magic seemed to wash over him, and he turned to see the Great Query's dark eyes fastened directly on him. In the brief moment before the magician looked away, Severus felt stripped bare, and he shivered in spite of himself.
He pulled himself together enough to release the silencing charm, but the encounter left him shaken. He barely attended to Query's next words, and by the next time he focused on the stage, Query was circling the hanging book, moving his wand over and behind it to demonstrate to the audience that no strings or wires held it.
"Such is the power of this magical book," Query was intoning, "that it contains within it all the knowledge of our fair universe. To those who are pure of heart, it will answer any question put to it." Sheathing his golden wand, he clapped his hands.
From the wings appeared a lovely young woman, about Severus's age or a bit older. Soft, pale-blonde curls escaped from her elaborately-arranged hair to trail across her neck and bare shoulders. Compared to those of most of the dancing girls and singers at the music hall, her dress was fairly demure: black, with high, gathered sleeves, a neckline that shewed only a hint of snowy cleavage, a black skirt that fell floorward in a long sweep.
But it was the accessories that had the men of the hall whistling: the tight, boned bodice of black-and-red stripes that set off the girl's high, firm breasts, the ruffle of scarlet satin that lifted her skirt in the front to expose black-stockinged ankles, the exquisite high-heeled red kid boots.
And of course, there was the girl's lovely face: fair and cool, she was porcelain perfection, and Severus fully understood the audience's randy response. He himself wasn't attracted by her sort of unapproachable iciness, but he knew that for others, she represented any number of unexpressed hopes and dreams.
Mr Query knew it, too. Beaming, he escorted the girl to the edge of the footlights. "My daughter, Miss Narcissa Query," he said. "She will be assisting me in unlocking the glorious powers you will see here tonight. Oh, but fear not, my friends it is not dark magic you will be feeling; no evil forces here. There is only the blessed power of Truth and Light and Purity."
A wave of his wand brought a flurry of doves out of the upper galleries; the audiences' cries of surprise turned to gasps admiration as the beautiful birds circled the hall and then disappeared into the wings of the stage.
"And now, my dear," said Query to Narcissa, "may I have the sacred quill?"
Narcissa gave a little curtsey and held out a pillow of dark red velvet decorated with gold braid and tassels. On it lay a large feather of gleaming white. Query's wand flashed again, and the feather levitated slowly into the air as from above, a shaft of bright light shone down to illuminate quill and book together.
Silent now, the entire house watched as the quill floated, seemingly of its own accord, to hang poised over the book. The Great Query raised his wand high and shook his shoulders so that his red cloak framed him. His other hand he reached towards his daughter, and she reached back to clasp it with her own. The velvet pillow was left to hover in the air, and after a moment, it zoomed into the center of the great smoking cylinder and disappeared.
The crowd gave a collective gasp and burst into applause, though Severus thought he felt a slight undercurrent of discomfort, as if they could sense that here was an exhibition of the unknown beyond any cheap stage trickery.
The scent of magic was cloyingly thick in the air now; Severus felt almost light-headed with it and more determined than ever to connect himself to these Querys. There were questions to asked, Query was right about that, and Severus intended to make certain that his own were answered.
Query and Narcissa had been standing with their arms still raised, their heads bowed, and now Query looked up to declaim, "The Book of All Answers is ready! Which of you will come forward with a question?"
There were murmurs and shuffles from the audience, and finally a buxom, red-faced woman with frizzy hair and an oversized hat pushed her way towards the front of the house. A cook or washerwoman on her monthly half-day, Severus thought, though he had no doubt that the Great Query would treat her like the grandest lady in the land.
And so he did. "Come forward, dear, brave madam," he said, gallantly assisting her up to the stage and bending (with a flourish of cloak) to kiss her hand. "What is your name, please?"
"Prbtdr," she said, and then, when a smiling Query cupped a hand behind his ear to encourage her to speak up, she shouted, "MRS PETERS!" so loudly that the beautiful Narcissa gave a startled little jump. The audience roared with laughter, causing poor Mrs Peters to flush an even deeper red. Then the attention began to please her, and she flashed a cheeky grin.
"Delighted, my dear Mrs Peters," said Query, bowing. "And what question would you like to ask the Book of Answers?"
"Me lad," the woman said. "Me lad Walter. 'E's at a crossroads, like, and don't know what way to go. So I thought mebbe, you know, the book..."
She gestured vaguely, and Query nodded as he reached a gloved hand towards Mrs Peters' frizzy head.
"May I?" he asked, and at her vigourous nod, he placed his fingers on her cheek. Then he threw back his own head, his face contorted in an expression of intense concentration. Finally he opened his eyes and stepped back.
"So you want to know," he said to Mrs Peters and to the audience at large, "whether young Walter should join her majesty's navy or should try to make his fortune in Australia?"
"Blimey!" cried Mrs Peters. "It's like you was inside me very 'ead. That's it to a jot. That's the exact question."
A murmur swelled from the audience, of interest, admiration, some scepticism. Again, Severus felt that light current of unease, until the moment was broken (near him, at least), by the formerly charmed-silent Charlie, who said, "Aw, she's a plant, inn't she?" The louts around him guffawed, and the tension dissipated, though Charlie was so happy with the response that he repeated his comment five or six more times. Severus wished he'd let the imbecile remain a permanent mute.
But if Charlie was no longer paying attention to the magic act, others were. The usual constant movement and talk that marked the music-hall experience had stilled, and most people were watching raptly.
Up on stage, Query turned smartly, the red cloak billowing behind him, and pointed his wand at the floating quill and book.
"Book of Answers," he shouted. "Respond!"
"Respond!" called Narcissa.
Mrs Peters, not to be outdone, also shouted, "Respond!" and gave a salute as the crowd laughed.
Query scowled and for just a moment looked quite sinister; Severus could tell that he didn't like having his dramatic moment upstaged. But almost immediately, his face smoothed into an expression of benign, even fatherly concern.
"Join hands!" he cried, reaching for Narcissa, who promptly reached for Mrs Peters. "Concentrate!"
The quill dipped toward the blank page of the book, and slowly, slowly, began to write.
The crowd watched, enthralled, as the pen moved of its own volition, forming letter after letter. When finally it stopped, there was a hush and then applause. Query waited until he heard the sound peak and start to fade; then he turned toward Mrs Peters and motioned toward the book.
Severus caught the look of embarrassed confusion that briefly crossed her face and realised all at once what it meant: Mrs Peters could not read.
Query had apparently drawn the same conclusion, for he quickly extended his gesture to his assistant, as if he had intended to call upon her from the start.
"Narcissa, my dear," he said. "Would you tell us what the Book has said?"
With another curtsy, Narcissa stepped downstage of Mrs Peters and her father (the better to show off her boots and legs, Severus surmised) and angled herself in front of the book so that her face was to the audience and her pale-blonde hair shone in the light.
"'Mr Walter Peters,'" she read, "'should do as his name tells him.'"
"Wot's that mean, then?" Mrs Peters asked.
"Your lad's full name," said Query. "What is it?"
"Walter Matthew Sidney Peters."
Query turned towards the audience. "What does his name tell Mr Walter Matthew SIDNEY Peters?" he demanded. "Whither should he direct his steps? To the navy, or to...?"
"To Sydney!" shouted the crowd, Charlie included. Mrs Peters clamped her hands to her mouth in astonishment and allowed Narcissa to help her off; Severus could see her mouthing "thank you, thank you" as she walked.
The audience cheered, but Mrs Peters had barely left the stage before there was a flash of blue light from the great cylinder, and a thin trail of bright green smoke began to lengthen itself from one of the gently-puffing copper tubes.
The quill, too, suddenly began darting about the stage on its own, its colour changing from white to the same vivid green as the smoke. Dashing to the book, it waited until a new page turned and then began to scribble furiously.
The rope of smoke, meanwhile, curled out into the audience. Some screamed; others laughed; all kept their eyes glued to it.
"Magic is on the move, my friends!" Query boomed and strode over to read the page on which the green quill had finally finished writing. "It is written: 'the right man must be found.'"
Wheeling, he came directly down to the footlights and addressed the crowd. "Where is he? Who is the right man? Is it you, sir? You?" As he pointed at various men in the audience, the line of green smoke headed toward each one, hovering briefly before snaking off again.
Remembering how intensely Query had stared at him when he'd inadvertently hexed the loud-mouthed Charlie, Severus began to suspect that he knew exactly where the smoke would fetch up, and he was not disappointed.
"Is it you, sir?" Query shouted one more time, and the smoke came directly to Severus's stall, where it formed itself above his head into a sparkling green question mark.
The audience gasped anew, and all those near Severus drew back from him in awe and interest, Charlie's girl clinging to his arm and giggling.
"Come, my son, and see what the magic asks of you," Query called, and Severus was nothing loath. He'd come to the South London Palace intent on finding the Querys. Now, it seemed, the Querys were finding him. As far as Severus was concerned, it came to the same thing.
He headed towards the stage.
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Once there, he was surprised by how difficult it was to see beyond the footlights. But after the first moment, he almost forgot that the audience was present, so strongly did he feel the pulse of magic from the two people who stood in front of him. They knew he felt it, too, he was sure of it. Narcissa, he fancied, smiled at him too knowingly, and shaking hands with Query had given him exactly the sort of tingling jolt that he imagined electricity must give.
"What is your name, my friend?" Query asked, and Severus responded honestly. He had nothing to hide. Well, not his name, at any rate.
"And are you willing to go wherever the magic takes you, Mr Snape?" Query asked next, cocking his head and smiling. Both he and his daughter very were attractive people, and they knew it. And it was more than just appearance; there was something charismatic about both of them, Query especially. The man was hypnotic, no question, and...dangerous with it. Severus wasn't sure why that word suddenly came to his mind, but it was the right one, he could feel it.
The sensation was both worrying and exhilarating.
"Yes, Mr Query," he said. "I will go wherever the magic takes me."
The Great Query turned to the audience. "Shall we send him?" he shouted.
In the roar of approval that followed, the magical cylinder suddenly began to emit even larger clouds of coloured smoke, and the bright light inside the ruby-red core began to flicker, first white, then green, then white again.
This time when Query looked at Severus, the challenge in his eyes was unmistakable.
"Step into my machine," he invited, gesturing toward the shimmering glass door.
"Cor, don't do it, love!" shouted a woman's voice from the audience, and the crowd laughed.
"Go on, hero, get in!" yelled a man Charlie, Severus was sure of it and soon the entire house was roaring, stamping, howling, "In! In! In! In!"
Severus stepped in.
The ruby-red lining looked deep and sparkling, just as he imagined a real ruby might look. Through the curved glass slits in the sides he could see the stage, as if he were looking out from inside a bottle. There was no exit save the door by which he'd entered, no trick floor or hinged roof that Severus could see. All the coloured, pulsing gimcracks notwithstanding, the thing appeared to be no more than ordinary industrial piping, not magical at all.
He was both disappointed and not a little relieved. Then he realised that the crowd had quieted and that Query had been speaking to him.
"I beg your pardon?" Severus said, annoyed with himself. He didn't want to let the other man gain too much of an upper hand.
"I said, are you ready?"
"For what?"
The audience laughed as if he'd said something funny, and Severus unconsciously balled his fists. The boys at Primrose Academy would have recognised his scowl and beat a respectful retreat; even the masters had come to understand that Severus Snape was not to be mocked.
But if the Great Query noticed the anger, he ignored it.
"For the great unknown! The great adventure!" he shouted. "Seize it, lad! Seize the chance, seize the day! Seize the quill!"
The quill?
At that very moment, the feather quill dazzling white once more floated into the light-drenched cylinder. Severus caught it in one hand.
Immediately, he felt as if a hook caught him directly behind his navel, and he jerked forward; it took all of his not-inconsiderable self-control not to cry out. He was pulled onward as if by a tow-rope, wind whistling in his ears, when suddenly he slammed to a halt, his knees nearly buckling.
His hair had come loose from its tie, and he had to shake it from his eyes before he could see where he was.
It looked to be a drawing room, moderately-sized and almost too warm from the fire crackling in the grate. He had a confused impression of overstuffed chairs and antimacassars, beaded door curtains, peacock feathers in an urn, a large aspidistra on a stand, a hearthrug flanked by an ornate horsehair sofa, and was that a cauldron over the fire...?
Any investigation he might have made was forestalled by a figure that rose from the sofa. It was a woman, tall, thin, and dark-haired, swathed in a tartan shawl, small wire-framed spectacles perched on her nose. She spoke in a sharp Scottish voice.
"Stop where you are."
Before Severus could move, he couldn't because the dark-haired woman, with a very steady hand, had pointed a wand at him and said something that sounded suspiciously spell-like.
And Severus realised that he was immobile.
"You will explain yourself," the woman demanded as he felt himself begin to tumble over. She waited until he hit the ground before adding, "At once."
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Oh, I really loved this! I do wish I knew more about what jettisoned Minerva and Tom from respectable wizarding society, but the final image of Severus striding onstage and taking up a new life of adventures was very satisfying. You had so many great snapshots of the characters -- like Minerva pinning her hat on and sailing out to a business call after a round of kinky sports! It was an unexpected combination of characters and circumstance, but int worked beautifully. Thanks for sharing!
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much for these kind and detailed reviews; I do appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. It was really a fun one to write.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much for these kind and detailed reviews; I do appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. It was really a fun one to write.~~Kelly
I really liked the description of the empty music hall, waiting for the patrons to arrive and the magic to begin. As for Minerva -- she pounces! She knows what she wants, it is clear. I worry a bit for Severus moving in to the House of Query.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Pounces -- exactly! I'm so glad the "cat" came through. Severus is going to have to be on constant alert, that's for sure. Thanks for reading.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Pounces -- exactly! I'm so glad the "cat" came through. Severus is going to have to be on constant alert, that's for sure. Thanks for reading.~~Kelly
"The sovereign entity that was Severus Snape": Haha, perfect! The way he is here is just as I'd have pictured canon Snape to be in his teens and twenties: cool and calculating but with all those rough edges popping up at the most inconvenient times. The writing is really elegant :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much! I love knowing which lines readers like. I think SS is someone who by this time has learned that if he doesn't look out for himself, no one else will.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much! I love knowing which lines readers like. I think SS is someone who by this time has learned that if he doesn't look out for himself, no one else will.~~Kelly
yay. Nagini got some fun too. Seems only fair. :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I have to admit that the whole Nagini business rather spooks me -- but it was a fun challenge to write. Thank you for reading and reviewing.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I have to admit that the whole Nagini business rather spooks me -- but it was a fun challenge to write. Thank you for reading and reviewing.~~Kelly
Be careful what you wish for, Severus. :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'll bet that's something he often said to himself over the years. Thanks for reading!~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'll bet that's something he often said to himself over the years. Thanks for reading!~~Kelly
Sounds like Severus will be getting an invitation into the Riddle's bedroom before long. But will he want to accept? :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I suspect he will! He's a daring lad.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I suspect he will! He's a daring lad.
Oops, sprung! ;)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I always knew Severus had a bit of the daredevil in him /g/.
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I always knew Severus had a bit of the daredevil in him /g/.
Severus should watch that wandering eye of his. It could get him into trouble! :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
And he's usually so cautious!
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
And he's usually so cautious!
This is interesting. Love the way you've mixed the characters together. :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks! They're an odd group, but they fit together better than I expected.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks! They're an odd group, but they fit together better than I expected.~~Kelly
I am a little torn. I really wanted this to go on forever (really, forever). And I didn't expect it to end here. On the other hand, I sort of loved the irony. I kept waiting for things to go pear-shaped, and I thought for sure that they would since we were dealing with such powerful wizards, one who we know to have a dark past. So, the fact that we had a recipe for disaster, and it ended in a happily ever after (as far as we know) was pretty cool.I have to commend you on working out the kinks (no pun intended) of five people together (and I use the word people loosly,lol). I've read a lot of stuff, but I think that is the most numerous sextacular I have read. So, good job, you.This was different from your usual fare, and while I love what I have read in the past, this was a nice change of pace, too. It still had that certain charm that every one of your stories has, though. Very nicely done!
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you for reading and for all your kind and detailed reviews. This is the first (and probably will be the only) five-some I've written, and imagining the logistics was something of a challenge. So I'm glad you think it makes sense. (My first-and-only snake sex fic, too -- what an interesting challenge *that* was /g/). I agree that the ending is a little unexpected -- probably too many loose ends left dangling, to be honest -- so maybe someday I'll have to do a sequel.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you for reading and for all your kind and detailed reviews. This is the first (and probably will be the only) five-some I've written, and imagining the logistics was something of a challenge. So I'm glad you think it makes sense. (My first-and-only snake sex fic, too -- what an interesting challenge *that* was /g/). I agree that the ending is a little unexpected -- probably too many loose ends left dangling, to be honest -- so maybe someday I'll have to do a sequel.~~Kelly
Now I seeeeee..... it was Severus thinking with his little head that got him on the road to all that future trouble to begin with.This was a very fun story, and I never knew from one chapter to the next what might happen. I have to admit that when it came to Nagini making it a foursome, I got the willies.I'd love to have seen him on stage for the dawn of his new age.Well done, you!Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for reading, even to the snakey end /g/. I confess, I was a little squicked by the whole Nagini thing myself. But it was part of the prompt, and it turned out to be a fun writing challenge. And thanks, too, for your various plot thoughts. I do think you'd have managed a more complex take on this fic than I did; it does leave a lot of loose ends. Ah, well, maybe some day I'll undertake a sequel. Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for reading, even to the snakey end /g/. I confess, I was a little squicked by the whole Nagini thing myself. But it was part of the prompt, and it turned out to be a fun writing challenge. And thanks, too, for your various plot thoughts. I do think you'd have managed a more complex take on this fic than I did; it does leave a lot of loose ends. Ah, well, maybe some day I'll undertake a sequel. Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments.~~Kelly
Magic is in the eye of the beholder, and at this date no one had seen anything like "The Queries". I'm getting the feeling that Severus is being drawn into a trap.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
We'll see! /g/ Thanks so much for reading and commenting.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
We'll see! /g/ Thanks so much for reading and commenting.~~Kelly
Where oh where will this lead? Is Severus getting himself into something that he'll regret? What is the motive behind Minerva's seduction? Is it just her own interest in their "newest addition," or does Tom have a more nefarious reason for drawing his young protégé into this ritual?Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I hope you'll enjoy some of the answers to these questions, Beth. Thanks for commenting!~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I hope you'll enjoy some of the answers to these questions, Beth. Thanks for commenting!~~Kelly
It really would be easy to wow Muggles with magic, wouldn't it? Especially in this era."I saw you," he blurted to her back.At this, I was equal parts "No, Severus, stop talking!" and, "Oh yeah, lets get things moving!"Kelly, if you're hoping I'll die from want of more story, just keep it up. :)
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm not deliberately trying to kill you /g/ -- but I'm glad you're enjoying it. For a normally cautious man, Severus is taking some interesting chances.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm not deliberately trying to kill you /g/ -- but I'm glad you're enjoying it. For a normally cautious man, Severus is taking some interesting chances.~~Kelly
They must have wanted to be seen, or they wouldn't have left the door open. Narcissa being there is an interesting twist, But Nagini? that's the stuff of nightmares.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
"The stuff of nightmares" indeed -- from my pov. From the characters' view? Well, not so much /g/. And you're right about the open door, of course. Thanks for reading!Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
"The stuff of nightmares" indeed -- from my pov. From the characters' view? Well, not so much /g/. And you're right about the open door, of course. Thanks for reading!Kelly
Narcissa's story was very telling. And yet, there is so much mystery about the entire Query family. Narcissa doesn't seem at all uptight about any of it, but perhaps that is because of where she came from. This is a much better place to be.Severus is very cautious (as he should be) especially after finding out that Riddle was ejected from the wizarding world for mystery reasons. But in the end, he is resigned to going along with it. You can't blame him really, since they are what keeps him connected with magic and there is the possibility of exploring sex with Minerva. And on that front, he is likely going to be in for an extreme education based on what we've seen and heard so far. His past experience will be nothing like what he will experience with the Querys, I suspect. And I look forward to finding out, I am a little horrified to admit.This continues to be fabulous, Kelly. As soon as I finish a chapter, I am already dying for more.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much for this detailed comment; I really appreciate it. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I had a lot of fun playng around in Victorian times. It all gets pretty kinky, as per the prompt.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much for this detailed comment; I really appreciate it. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I had a lot of fun playng around in Victorian times. It all gets pretty kinky, as per the prompt.~~Kelly
This alternate universe has turned Potterverse completely on its head! Every time I try to put the clues together and prognosticate a bit, I come up empty handed... and empty headed. I am so throughly impressed with the story you are weaving. There are so many twists and turns, and every clue leads back around to every other clue- not a single clear direction for my feeble brain.I feel certain that there will be a ton of trouble in the future, and for the life of me, I can't even figure out how Minerva would have found herself so attracted to Tom. Will she ever want to break her bond to him? Would he ever agree to it? I worry about Severus. He seems to see things that trouble him, and the next thing I know he is rationalizing it so he can remain a member of this "family." His need to "belong" appears to be his greatest motivator, and I can't help but think that both he and Narcissa (and Minerva) will pay a big price for having come so thoroughly under Tom Riddle's control.Could they all be under an Imperius Curse? Hummmmmmmmmm... Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm really enjoying your thoughts about how the plot may unfold -- it's like getting to read the story myself. As for Minerva, I think she is a very intense, strongly-emotional person who admires intelligence and power -- and even danger; look are her commitment to Albus. So, in different circumstances from canon, I can see her being attracted someone like Tom (at least when he's just dodgy and ruthless, not necessarily evil.)~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm really enjoying your thoughts about how the plot may unfold -- it's like getting to read the story myself. As for Minerva, I think she is a very intense, strongly-emotional person who admires intelligence and power -- and even danger; look are her commitment to Albus. So, in different circumstances from canon, I can see her being attracted someone like Tom (at least when he's just dodgy and ruthless, not necessarily evil.)~~Kelly
I neglected to review your last chapter, even though it was formidable. Allow me to make up for it now:I still really like how the story unfolds, and how the Potterverse is made to fit with your version. And I'm somewhat scared by the Minerva/Riddle-pairing - it does actually fit, doesn't it?And Snape is so very much himself. Especially his comment about politics.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm so glad you think Snape is "very much himself." That's always the challenge of AUs, for me -- to make everyone seem like "themeslves" even outside their usual world. As for Minerva, she's pretty strong-minded in canon; I think that it probably wouldn't take much change in circumstance for her to devote that sort of fierce commitment to a diferent, even if less worthy, cause. Thanks for reading and commenting!~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
I'm so glad you think Snape is "very much himself." That's always the challenge of AUs, for me -- to make everyone seem like "themeslves" even outside their usual world. As for Minerva, she's pretty strong-minded in canon; I think that it probably wouldn't take much change in circumstance for her to devote that sort of fierce commitment to a diferent, even if less worthy, cause. Thanks for reading and commenting!~~Kelly
Oh, squick! Nagnin? *shudder.... besides that, bloody good!
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for reading! And sorry for the squck. But I can't promise that it won't get even worse /g/.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for reading! And sorry for the squck. But I can't promise that it won't get even worse /g/.~~Kelly
WTF?!?!? Severus is going to be either very happy or very sad. What's going to happen when Tom realizes that the apprentice is watching...? Or could that be part of his plan?Where's the next chapter?
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Next chapter in a day or two. First, I've got to leave everyone dangling on the cliff for a while /g/. Severus is getting much more than he bargained for. Thanks for commenting; I really appreciate it.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Next chapter in a day or two. First, I've got to leave everyone dangling on the cliff for a while /g/. Severus is getting much more than he bargained for. Thanks for commenting; I really appreciate it.~~Kelly
Dear, Gussie! Severus is walking on thin ice here. I'm not sure how smart it was for him to show that bit of bravery about whether or not Mr Riddle had anything to hide, but he (Tom) must think enough of his apprentice to show him patience... but that display with Nagini was enough to underscore the danger that is always lurking beneath the surface with Riddle.Knowing that Narcissa is not their real daughter, now I'm wondering if Minerva and Tom are really married to each other? There is so much you haven't told us yet, isn't there?Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Severus is one of those people who always finds himself on the knife edge, I think -- and probably not by accident (although perhaps subconsciously). And I've always thought that Riddle had to have a lot of charisma along with his viciousness -- but very unstable, definitely. Thanks for reading!~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Severus is one of those people who always finds himself on the knife edge, I think -- and probably not by accident (although perhaps subconsciously). And I've always thought that Riddle had to have a lot of charisma along with his viciousness -- but very unstable, definitely. Thanks for reading!~~Kelly
I wondered how the name Query fit into this tale. The dynamics of this family are certainly interesting, and I'm still trying to figure out how they came to be together. Let's see, Minerva McGonagoll is to married Thomas M. Riddle, and since Minerva said she wasn't Narcissa's mother, I am assuming that Narcissa Black was recruited by Tom to be a member of their company just as Severus has been.This is one of those "WOW!" moments when I'm met with a totally unexpected plot, and I can't wait to find out what you have in mind.Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much! I'm so pleased that you're enjoying the plot; I usually think of myself as a plot-challenged writer /g/. ~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you so much! I'm so pleased that you're enjoying the plot; I usually think of myself as a plot-challenged writer /g/. ~~Kelly
I cannot wait to see what you do with this story! I'm already hooked with the AU and Victorian London. Beth
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks, Beth! I hope you'll enjoy the rest.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks, Beth! I hope you'll enjoy the rest.~~Kelly
Wow. Severus could be in for either a very bad time or a very good time, or possibly both at once. I really love watching these characters charm their way through the sooty, gritty late-Victorian world, and I look forward to finding out the story behind the stories the Querys are giving Severus.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you! I think the HP characters fit really well into the Victorian world; it's been fun to write them there. I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the chapters. Thanks for reading.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thank you! I think the HP characters fit really well into the Victorian world; it's been fun to write them there. I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the chapters. Thanks for reading.~~Kelly
But ... but ... where's the next chapter?!? *wails*I am not a big fan of AU, and yet, I can't seem to put this one down. I think I keep waiting for the other shoe to drop, and instead, the shoes just keep getting prettier and more enticing.
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for the lovely comment! I'm always so pleased if I can get people to enjoy genres or characters they usually don't care for. My plan is to do a chapter every two days.~~Kelly
Response from kellychambliss (Author of ?????)
Thanks for the lovely comment! I'm always so pleased if I can get people to enjoy genres or characters they usually don't care for. My plan is to do a chapter every two days.~~Kelly