The Heir
sarablade17 Reviews | 5.06/10 (17 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )
Hermione needs a father for the child she had with Lucius, just before she killed him.
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I love this story so much and I'd very much like to read more of it but it looks as if you haven't updated it recently which makes me very sad. It's so well written, altough very dark, but it's dark in a very compelling way. I so want to know the backstory and more than that-how this will unravel in future chapters.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
I'm very sorry for the long absence. But Im back, and I hope for good (I waited to be sure). Thanks for the great review!
i like it.. don't know why, the plot is not my usual cup of tea? must be because its thursday and i am watching the tv show, beauty and the beast!
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
WOW!! I've written more than 60000 words in this story (another good 40000 planned), and never stopped to think it did have some high resemblance to the B&B... at least in the premise. Well, she's NOT beautiful, and he's not... whatever. Thanks for your review, and thanks Heaven H was raised not to be so dependent like the Beauty of old.
Response from roni0811 (Reviewer)
I totally agree with your response, on not being dependent on Beauty!!
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
WOW!! I've written more than 60000 words in this story (another good 40000 planned), and never stopped to think it did have some high resemblance to the B&B... at least in the premise. Well, she's NOT beautiful, and he's not... whatever. Thanks for your review, and thanks Heaven H was raised not to be so dependent like the Beauty of old.
Response from roni0811 (Reviewer)
I totally agree with your response, on not being dependent on Beauty!!
I gotta tell you, I really don't care much for darkfic. There is the occasional one that is so well written that I make it through and am glad I did. This has me cringing a lot, but on the other hand, I read all three chapters without stopping to review because I wanted to find out what would happen next. So, you've got good quality writing and intrigue on your side. I do hope this turns out to be one of the fabulous ones.The one thing that has me most perplexed is the when and where we are at here. I don't believe (although I read this at an obscenely late hour, so I could have missed it) that you have let on to when this takes place. Or, more importantly, the state of the world. If Voldemort won, shouldn't Harry be dead, and people who were on the side of the light be gone or locked away? But, if Voldemort lost, why are there Death Eater types out roaming freely with the ability to get what they want from Hermione? Did the good guys win, but the govenment went bad? What the heck is going on?!?! I do hope this updates regularly because I truly want to know more.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thank you very much. The beginning of the story is dark indeed, and H's fight out of the darkness is its backbone, so... no much fluff to be expected in the short term, but more glints and light-and-shadow games...Harry and Ron are dead, as H. is forced to repeat in the first chapter. For the rest - SPOILER ALERT: all in all you're right "the good guys won, but the govenment went bad", more or less, or at least there's a risk it will go bad if our heroes don't succeed.Hint- the story is called "the Heir"...I promise to work hard on updates- I've got many chapters written, and the story is clear in my head. It's only I took other writing assignments, and my RL is quite crowded at this time.Thanks for your interest. I'll be happy to know if the Heir lives up to your expectations...
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thank you very much. The beginning of the story is dark indeed, and H's fight out of the darkness is its backbone, so... no much fluff to be expected in the short term, but more glints and light-and-shadow games...Harry and Ron are dead, as H. is forced to repeat in the first chapter. For the rest - SPOILER ALERT: all in all you're right "the good guys won, but the govenment went bad", more or less, or at least there's a risk it will go bad if our heroes don't succeed.Hint- the story is called "the Heir"...I promise to work hard on updates- I've got many chapters written, and the story is clear in my head. It's only I took other writing assignments, and my RL is quite crowded at this time.Thanks for your interest. I'll be happy to know if the Heir lives up to your expectations...
Geez, is this ever bleak. Not at all what I thought from the summary. I hope some glimmer of something positive occurs for Hermione's sake.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thanks for reviewing. There will definitely be "glimmers", and although the premise is definitely dark, the story, in essence, is one of a hero/in overcoming darkness. Not to promise an HEA, of course :-)
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thanks for reviewing. There will definitely be "glimmers", and although the premise is definitely dark, the story, in essence, is one of a hero/in overcoming darkness. Not to promise an HEA, of course :-)
Wow....this is so creepy and gothic.....I am overwhelmed yet it does say romance in the description....Is that correct ?
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
"Gothic" is exactly the atmosphere I was trying to recreate, more historically than trend-wise, so... thanks. Severus, like the wounded animal he is, lashes out. But that's not all he is. And you saw already in chap.1, once he did want her "that way"... Did he really stop? In next chapter (queued) there will be more about his inner thoughts, about her also.Thanks for reviewing.
Response from pansycat (Reviewer)
Not sure if you want to answer this, because maybe this is meant to unclear still. It says that Hermione defended Snapeso my guess is that despite Hermione's situation, Voldemortdidn't win. Not sure if we were supposed to know this yet or not :). Seriously this is a great beginning !!!
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
You read right. She saved him in the Shrieking shack, and testified for him when all seemed to be going in the right direction after the War... only all the baddies haven't been eradicated, and... well, I'm sorry, but Stroll in the Park (next chap) will answer you better than I can here (sorry if it sounds like a cheap come-on :-) it's exactly that.)Thanks a lot for your interest
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
"Gothic" is exactly the atmosphere I was trying to recreate, more historically than trend-wise, so... thanks. Severus, like the wounded animal he is, lashes out. But that's not all he is. And you saw already in chap.1, once he did want her "that way"... Did he really stop? In next chapter (queued) there will be more about his inner thoughts, about her also.Thanks for reviewing.
Response from pansycat (Reviewer)
Not sure if you want to answer this, because maybe this is meant to unclear still. It says that Hermione defended Snapeso my guess is that despite Hermione's situation, Voldemortdidn't win. Not sure if we were supposed to know this yet or not :). Seriously this is a great beginning !!!
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
You read right. She saved him in the Shrieking shack, and testified for him when all seemed to be going in the right direction after the War... only all the baddies haven't been eradicated, and... well, I'm sorry, but Stroll in the Park (next chap) will answer you better than I can here (sorry if it sounds like a cheap come-on :-) it's exactly that.)Thanks a lot for your interest
What an intriguing backstory you're tantalizing us with!
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thank you... I did choose to begin in the middle, but the background is ever so oresent during the whole story.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thank you... I did choose to begin in the middle, but the background is ever so oresent during the whole story.
I feel as though I've been given some dark potion that leads the mind down strange and twisted paths. You have us all helpless to turn away from whatever torments you choose to show us - I'm in awe. Your Snape is brilliant !!
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Wow. What a brilliant review :-). Snape, as I see him if he survived, would be one of the most tragic characters, nasty, but totally committed to a moral code of his own (as we'll see in next chapter, too), and irremediably bowed under the weight of his own past. Thank you for following in the "strange and twisted paths" of our characters!
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Wow. What a brilliant review :-). Snape, as I see him if he survived, would be one of the most tragic characters, nasty, but totally committed to a moral code of his own (as we'll see in next chapter, too), and irremediably bowed under the weight of his own past. Thank you for following in the "strange and twisted paths" of our characters!
This is very chilling, but compelling, so many questions still to be answered. Looking forward,to the next chapter.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thank you so much. There will be answers, but more questions, too. Not a nice world to live in, all in all. But I took it all from our history books and newspapers.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thank you so much. There will be answers, but more questions, too. Not a nice world to live in, all in all. But I took it all from our history books and newspapers.
EXCELLENT!!!!!!I am looking forward to reading future chapters.....
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thank you, Two chapters are queued, and i'm patiently waiting to see how they'll be received.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thank you, Two chapters are queued, and i'm patiently waiting to see how they'll be received.
Oh my, what a chilling start. How did it come to this? Looking forward to finding out.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
It took a long time to come to this, but I promise everything shall be clear (dark, but clear :-)) in time...Thanks for the R&R, it's very important to me...
Response from mick42 (Reviewer)
My pleasure, I don't mind dark, if it's as well done as this seems to be.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
It took a long time to come to this, but I promise everything shall be clear (dark, but clear :-)) in time...Thanks for the R&R, it's very important to me...
Response from mick42 (Reviewer)
My pleasure, I don't mind dark, if it's as well done as this seems to be.
This looks very promising! I'm anxious to read more.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
New chapters are queued for publication. Thanks a lot. I hope you'll tell me how the next chapters make you feel, too.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
New chapters are queued for publication. Thanks a lot. I hope you'll tell me how the next chapters make you feel, too.
wow what a start! I understand that Snape isn't looking or feeling any better than her--if he allows himself this honesty, which obviously he does not.
Response from Bettina (Reviewer)
just reading the first review: The son for a son is Draco being saved by Snape due to the UV. I think this is quite clear. But where he is and why his heritage is not subject of the dispute/will is open to me, too.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Nice insights. Indeed, he's such a master at deception, it even works on himself. The fate of the Malfoy heritage is going to shape our world. I suggest we mortals give it its due respect :-)Thanks a lot for R&R, I hope you continue to share your impressions for the next chapters.
Response from Bettina (Reviewer)
just reading the first review: The son for a son is Draco being saved by Snape due to the UV. I think this is quite clear. But where he is and why his heritage is not subject of the dispute/will is open to me, too.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Nice insights. Indeed, he's such a master at deception, it even works on himself. The fate of the Malfoy heritage is going to shape our world. I suggest we mortals give it its due respect :-)Thanks a lot for R&R, I hope you continue to share your impressions for the next chapters.
Intriquing - I suspect the backstory on this is going to be most interesting, not to mention the continuation. Where, pray tell, is the first Malfoy heir? A son for a son? What's that about? OK, I'm hooked...
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
The first Malfoy heir... oh it hurts not to be able to give spoilers. But on the other hand I want you hooked so bad. And it's only the beginning of the questions. At least, the "son for a son" was answered by Bettina. Hope you continue to like the story. Next chapters queued.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
The first Malfoy heir... oh it hurts not to be able to give spoilers. But on the other hand I want you hooked so bad. And it's only the beginning of the questions. At least, the "son for a son" was answered by Bettina. Hope you continue to like the story. Next chapters queued.
i saw this on ff its not compleat.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
You're right, it's a WIP. I don't think I'll be posting on FF anymore though, so you're welcome to follow it here. thanks for reading and remembering.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
You're right, it's a WIP. I don't think I'll be posting on FF anymore though, so you're welcome to follow it here. thanks for reading and remembering.
Good update. I have one question... or two...How and why was Hermione involved with Lucius? and why did she kill him?
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thanks for your questions, really, but it would be a major spoiler if I answered them, as the whys of this are part of the story backbone. I promise full answers by the end,though. I always enjoy a game ofQ&As, and any hypothesis from you shall be duly responded to, if without spoilers.Thanks for playing along.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Thanks for your questions, really, but it would be a major spoiler if I answered them, as the whys of this are part of the story backbone. I promise full answers by the end,though. I always enjoy a game ofQ&As, and any hypothesis from you shall be duly responded to, if without spoilers.Thanks for playing along.
You've, oh so skillfully, put us on a knife edge - just like Hermione herself. This is brilliantly nerve wracking !!
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Well, from you it means something extra... I hope I wrack your nerves just enough to get your Muse acting again. I'll really appreciate your thoughts on this story, if you'll be so kind...
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Well, from you it means something extra... I hope I wrack your nerves just enough to get your Muse acting again. I'll really appreciate your thoughts on this story, if you'll be so kind...
Severus seems to be playing, cat and mouse with Hermione. 
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Right, all along Severus will be playing a lot, and enjoying it only a little. Thanks for R&R.
Response from sarablade (Author of The Heir)
Right, all along Severus will be playing a lot, and enjoying it only a little. Thanks for R&R.