Wrath
Chapter 1 of 3
rosewoodThis is a series of drabbles based on the Seven Deadly Sins that was originally written for the LJ "Snape Last Drabble Writer Standing" competition. Each chapter is meant to be a stand-alone snapshot.
ReviewedThe Seven Deadly Sins: Wrath
Rage
The man stumbled fearfully through the underbrush surrounding the vacant industrial warehouse, clutching his fractured arm close to his body. Out of breath, he dropped to his knees.
He cringed as a long, dark shadow loomed menacingly above him.
“The Dark Lord shall hear of this,” Pettigrew whimpered.
“Oh, I don’t think so.”
In a desperate bid, he turned to flee only to be shoved hard in the shoulder and slammed face first into the ground. The dark man delivered a swift kick to Pettigrew’s crotch, and he cried out in pain. As he fell, he was pummeled with several deft blows to his ribcage. Now half curled on his stomach, he made a feeble attempt to crawl away. A crimson stream of blood flowed from his broken nose down to his chin and pooled under his face into the ground.
This wasn’t the stylized, surreal violence that surrounded most dark revels. There wasn’t anything remotely dreamlike about it. It had the gritty, unmistakable feel of cold, harsh reality. The glint of a steel blade shone briefly in the moonlight before it was plunged deep within the side of the prostrate man. This was death.
As his anger slowly dissipated, he whispered a single word into the silent night.
“Lily.”
A/N: Originally written for the LJ "Snape Last Drabble Writer Standing" challenge.
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You've captured Snape's "voice" perfectly - both in his internal dialogue and that deliciously acerbic summation of Ron. Nicely done !!
Response from rosewood (Author of The Wages of Sin)
That is a mighty high compliment! Thank you! :)
I like Snape's assessment of Ron.
Response from rosewood (Author of The Wages of Sin)
In all honesty, inspiration for that last line was from watching my son repeatedly sharpening a rather worn pencil. Hahaha!Thanks for taking the time to review!
Now that is exactly how I expect him to react. Not enough has been dealt with in terms of the utter bile Snape would feel towards Lily's betrayer. I think he would probably feel almost as much anger towards himself too. Good job.
Response from rosewood (Author of The Wages of Sin)
There are so many different avenues Snape could have taken to exact his revenge against Pettigrew, and every one of them would have been cold and calculating. I thought it fitting that a hands-on non-magical form of death would be the perfect way to go.Thanks for the great review!
That is quite a show of cold rage. not that I expect Severus to shout and cast things to the ground. Very well done.
Response from rosewood (Author of The Wages of Sin)
Severus has had years to dwell upon this single act of revenge. That's a hell of a lot of pent up rage.Thanks for the review!
Brutal retaliation.
Response from rosewood (Author of The Wages of Sin)
I have often wondered what Severus would do if he ever had a chance to exact revenge on Pettigrew.Thanks for the review!
That's nice to know someone cared, that he was not totally alone.
Response from rosewood (Author of The Wages of Sin)
Young Sev needs someone in his corner. I'm glad you enjoyed this little drabble. :)Thank you for your kind review.
Snape's perception of Ron is so true. As for Hermione a "decent head" is probably the best she'll ever get from him.
Response from rosewood (Author of The Wages of Sin)
This was an enjoyable writting exercise. It's fun to smack around the Golden Trio on occasion. :)