Unseen
Chapter 3 of 17
TheDeepEndAfter the library, I headed to my next class, hoping I wouldn’t be late for that one. I had Psychology and I was excited for it. I had always been interested in that subject, even when I was younger.
My mom had taken me to Borders one day when I was twelve, and I had managed to get lost on the second level. While I was wandering past the bookshelves, I was reading the signs of the sections.
I stopped at the Psychology section and walked down the aisle, looking at the books. I wasn’t really sure what the subject entailed until I saw the spine of one of the covers: the science of the mind or of mental states and processes.
When my mom found me, clearly furious that I left her side, I showed her the book and she stared at me.
“You won’t need to know that crap,” she told me. I opened my mouth to protest but she glared at me. “It’s all nonsense, let’s go.” Her voice commanded that I follow.
Now, as I stepped into the classroom, my mother’s words ran loud in my ears. I wonder if her mother ever told her anything she was interested in was crap or pretty much useless. I didn’t think so.
I frowned as my eyes locked with the boy I had hit with my locker; he sat in the back with his head tilted to the side as he spotted me. He smiled slightly, wincing as the action sent a sharp pain through his semi-healed nose.
As I slid into the only other empty seat next to him, he put his hands behind his head and nodded briefly at me.
“How are you feeling?” I asked as I took out my notebook.
“Well, it’s not every day I get my nose broken by a female.” He laughed, seeming to find the situation funny. When I didn’t make a noise, he looked at me.
“I feel bad,” I murmured.
“Do you feel bad enough to take me out as an apology?” He grinned and brushed a hand through his choppy brown hair.
I considered this for a moment and nodded. “Not that bad.” I watched his face fall and I frowned. “I’m just not—”
“Hey, it’s cool.” He smiled thinly, his eyes no longer on me. “I have someone else in mind to go out with anyway.”
Ouch.
“That’s nice.” I couldn’t help the not-so-nice tone that crept into my voice. I turned my head away from him and focused on what the teacher was saying.
“She’s really nice,” he muttered beside me. “She showed me her car – a red Mustang.”
I nearly dropped my pen when he said the last part. I stared at him, my eyes wide, and then I smiled.
“You’re going to go out with Jade?”
“How do you know her?” He seemed annoyed that I had said what I was thinking.
“She’s my best friend,” I murmured.
“Well then,” he mumbled, glancing at me. “Are you telling me that I can’t take her out if she wants to go?”
“She wouldn’t want to go,” I said automatically.
Yes, now he looked annoyed. His green eyes narrowed as he said, “What makes you think she’ll say no to me?”
“For one,” I bit out, “you’re horribly conceited. Two, Jade isn’t dating anyone at the moment. Three, she’ll probably laugh in your face when you get the courage to ask.”
Evan looked like he was going to throw his notebook at me, or worse, he would start crying like a baby. I didn’t say anything as I heard Mr. Avery clear his throat agitatedly.
I felt a pang of guilt tug at me halfway through the class. I had lost what was being talked about because all my mind could focus on was that stupid, rejected boy next to me.
I rolled my eyes, ripped a piece of paper out of my notebook, and scribbled something on it. I breathed out a long sigh as I passed it to him.
Are you okay? You look like you’re going to cry.
He stared at me, his lip curling slightly.
You shouldn’t tell me lies about your friend, you know.
I blinked.
What lie?
He smirked at me.
If you wanted to ask me out, you could have. You didn’t have to invent that story to keep me from being interested in someone else.
“What?” I hissed, as I read the answer. “What the hell are you talking about?” I said to him, my voice a little louder than I intended.
Everyone turned in their seats to look at me.
“Miss Sullivan—”
Fuck.
“Yes sir?” I mumbled, looking into Mr. Avery’s angry face.
“If you and Mr. Fynn have something to sort out, then by all means talk outside. We’ll wait.” He was unpleasant. “Otherwise I suggest you sit down.”
I hadn’t realized I was standing. I sat down and picked up my pen; it trembled in my fingers. I was even more surprised when that sudden creepy feeling emerged again.
Every single head in the class was facing the front of the room, so why did I still feel as though I were being stared at by unseen eyes?
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Anonymous
Nice. This is really getting interesting...
WRITE FASTER! Tiny snippets do not satify me!
Throw us a couple-a-thousand words!!
Author's Response: I have a lot more chapters done, it's just waiting for them to be submitted here that makes the wait longer.
Give me your email and I'll send the rest to you.
Anonymous
Interesting...
Casey is really handling this pretty good, which is surprising. But there is that hint that she has been 'prepared' for her coming-out party.
If only I could have played with my Mom's mind whenever I came home late, or brought a female friend home!
I sense some training coming on also!
Good work!
Author's Response: She does overreact a lot though. I would if this situation was presented. I don't think I would believe anything I was being told.
I hope you like the next few chapters. I'm introducing a new character soon :)
Anonymous
Beautiful.
This is going very well, and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
Great work!
Author's Response: Thanks very much.
I'm trying to not make this story too obvious, but it's already unraveling that way.
Anonymous
Nice.
Not cheap, uninteresting drabble, but a very emotionally deep, and realistic meeting of the minds by Nixon and Casey.
I like where this is going, and I'm glad it isn't obvious.
Good work!
Anonymous
Another good chapter!
One of my favorite lines:
“Don’t worry, I won’t ask for any weird sexual favors in return.”
Wasn't expecting that from Nixon. Actually, this story is starting to feel familiar...
Have you ever read a manga called 'Tag'?
Really intersted in what a 'Sweeper' is. Are you preparing to go down a supernatural sort of road?
Author's Response: I am going to go down that road :) Like it wasn't obvious.
No, I haven't. I've actually never heard of it. What is it about?
EdgeOfDark's response: Tag is about a girl who becomes best friends with mysterious girl, who makes her a target for humiliation, rape, and possible death. All of this revolves around cell phones, and the victims doing whatever the text tells them to do... otherwise they get killed.
One of the best I've ever read!
Author's Response: That sounds cool, aside from the rape part. Kind of reminds me of One Missed Call, only they get voicemails, they heard their voice, then they died.
It's weird. It's an Asian movie so yeah, lol
EdgeOfDark's response: Hey, how many more chapters do you have to go?
Author's Response: I don't know. I'm still hoping to not get Writer's Block like I have with other stories. Why do you ask? :D
EdgeOfDark's response: Very curious!
My stories are all outlined, and I know how many chapters there are, and how long they usually going to be. Yours feels 1/3 of the way done!
Author's Response: I just have to figure out things. I mean, I have the main plot, but I need more of a character development for some.
EdgeOfDark's response: Ah! So most of your work is tied up in character development! You do that very well by the way.
Have you peeked at one of mine?
Author's Response: Not yet. I'm sorry.
The next chapter will be up soon, and then you'll be all caught up :)
EdgeOfDark's response: *waits impatiently!* 
Anonymous
Okay, this is getting good, and you know, I'm hooked. I have a bad feeling Casey is in for trouble with this Nixon kid.
What are snake-bites?
Author's Response: Nixon's the good guy :)
Snake-bites: Two piercings just under the bottom lip: one on the left side and one on the right. They can be studs or rings, or even a combination of both.
Anonymous
Uh oh. This is not looking good.
At least she knows what kind of person Jade really is. Sucks how she found out however.
Great chapter! Where's the rest? ^_^
Author's Response: I should just get your email and send you the rest, considering you're the only one whose reading this story, haha.
EdgeOfDark's response:
Boy do I know THAT feeling!!
My jaw really hit the floor when one of my fics turned up as a 'Featured Fic' on TPP.
Originals hardly get the time they deserve anywhere, especially good ones like this. You're a pretty competent writer too, and I hope you keep at it.
I think Original Authors should really support each other. That being said, I'd really like to know what you think about some of my work too!
Author's Response: Oh, I've never had the thrill of knowing my stories were featured for anything.
There's only a few sites I'm apart of, like Mibba, which is a relatively good site as far as reviews and things go. You should try it out.
Anonymous
Wow. Very well done. I could see this so clearly in my mind's eye. You built the scene masterfully, and I found myself wanting more of this tale!
Excellent work!
Author's Response: :DD Thank you so much.
Anonymous
Oh no! Not another Mindwar: Marooned on Earth type of story!
Awww, gee. I was really hoping for something new and different.
That said, it was still writen well, and easy to read... and I liked it.
Author's Response: Casey's not an alien, if that's what you're getting at, lol. That would be too predictable.
EdgeOfDark's response: So what we've got here is a special sub-strain of Humans who play puppeteer with the Normals?
Author's Response: Somewhat. I don't want to give things away.
Finish it! I really like this and want to know where you go with it.
I like how the ticking clock upset her. That has come up in a lot of my stories and it was the basis of my first song. Very good writing!
“What?” I hissed, as I read the answer. “What the hell are you talking about?” I said to him, my voice a little louder than I intended.
Everyone turned in their seats to look at me.
“Miss Sullivan—”
Fuck.
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That was hilarious. Makes me think of things I have written!
Anonymous
Wow.
One wants to get close to these characters but...
Poor Casey really doesn't give much thought to her future or much else it seems. Is Nixon going to be just as irreverent and aimless?
Author's Response: Nixon's probably the most important character, other than Casey, in this story.
EdgeOfDark's response: LOL!
No! Not irrelevant! irreverent!
Is Nixon going to be just as irreverent and aimless as Casey?
Author's Response: Oh, wow, lol, sorry.
He might be. I don't really have much of him thought of yet.
Anonymous
Very good: I like how Casey is tentatively sharing her thoughts and feelings with the reader. That’s something you do very well with your characters.
It’s a shame that she and her mother don’t have a better relationship. What heartache. They could really help one another if they both weren’t so emotionally selfish.
Nice chapter!
Author's Response: Things are just going to go downhill from here anyway, and Casey knows her mom wouldn't believe anything that's going to happen, so she kind of has no one to depend on.
Thank you for the review. The next chapter should be up soon.
Anonymous
Nice!
I like where you're going with this, and it feels totally authentic. Very good job of describing the environment and characters. It's getting interesting!
Author's Response: Thanks very much :)
Anonymous
Hmmm...
That is one crude, intolerant ("Who likes to sit in a small ass seat with some fat kid?"), smelly, lazy slob of a kid.
He seems like one of those people with two definitive sides; not Good or Evil, just Evil and Indifferent.
Needs a serious foot in the ass.
I can hardly wait to see him get torn to bits... He is going to get torn to bits, right?
Author's Response: Well, since the main character is a girl (I guess I should have specified and the name throws people off), I'd hope she's not tore to bits. But someone else gets torn, and they deserve it.
EdgeOfDark's response: Ah... So someone is responsible for the tourturous birth of Evil Casey and Indifferent Casey. Going to be interested in seeing what kind of Monster that is.
Author's Response: Oh, she's not really that bad. Just dislikes most people and is a bitch in the morning. There's far worse than her in this story :)