Three
Chapter 3 of 14
Agnus CastusAlbus Dumbledore had a plan to protect Severus Snape after the fateful night on the Astronomy Tower. During his final year as Headmaster, Snape has a chance to come to terms with his past and find peace, before his life draws to its inevitable close. Canon-compliant. TPP Featured Story May/June 2010.
ReviewedThe Portrait
Snape studied the features of his former student as she sat down on the armchair, her eyes narrowing in reply. Her brown hair was longer now, her face older and, perhaps, wiser.
Wisdom seemed to give her an air of sadness somehow; the old fire was gone from her eyes. But her dislike of him still rippled like waves across the room.
As her mouth opened to speak, her eyes travelled away from him, focusing on a spot on the wall behind him. Snape turned around and found himself face to face with Albus Dumbledore.
Within moments, Contessa Marchbanks was at his side, agog at the portrait snoring softly in its frame.
"Another surprise?" Snape asked.
Marchbanks nodded shakily, staring at the framed portrait as if she had seen it for the very first time.
"I have had the portrait for almost a year, but it was a still-life picture, until now. This must mean..." Her voice faded as she assessed the repercussions.
"Dumbledore is dead," Snape finished for her, his voice soft and low.
They stood together for a few moments watching the slumbering Headmaster's chest rise and fall in its frame. Snape noticed tears forming in Marchbanks' eyes as she absorbed the news.
Behind them, Snape heard the flutter of wings as Fawkes lost his balance on the telescope and glided safely to the floor. They turned around to see an agitated-looking phoenix glaring up at them in exasperation, clicking its beak irritably.
Marchbanks sighed as she crossed the room, removed a plant from its wooden stand and placed it on the window sill. Taking her cue, Snape drew his wand and Transfigured the plant stand into a makeshift perch for the phoenix, complete with a basin underneath for the ashes.
On seeing the Transfigured stand, Marchbanks assessed him suspiciously. Little did she know of the amount of time Snape had spent with Dumbledore and Fawkes in the Headmaster's Office at Hogwarts. Or the conversations to which the phoenix had borne witness.
Fawkes watched them weighing each other up for a moment before warbling an impatient message of thanks and flying onto the new perch. The bird scrutinised them from this new vantage point with a look of bemusement.
The phoenix's stare shook Snape and Marchbanks out of their wariness, and they turned to face Dumbledore's portrait.
The Headmaster was surreptitiously peeking at the two members of the Order of the Phoenix, as if curious to see what was unfolding. His momentary surprise was quickly concealed as he straightened in his frame; his blue eyes twinkled and a knowing smile played out under his long white beard.
"Ah, Severus," said Dumbledore cordially, "I see you've found your way to your safe house. Excellent."
Snape nodded jerkily as the confirmation sank in; a couple of days with the Marchbanks woman was not ideal but would suffice until alternative accommodation could be found.
"Professor Dumbledore, I..." Marchbanks stammered.
Dumbledore smiled kindly at the woman and said, "Tess, please do call me Albus. It is many years since I was your Professor."
She seemed to accept this with the ease of someone who had been told it many times before. However, Marchbanks seemed to be struggling on the verge of speech. Snape felt some pity for the revelation she was processing, as well as some amusement at watching the woman wrestle with her words.
"Albus," she began, "I'm so sorry. When did it happen?"
"Over an hour ago." He replied lightly, as if commenting upon the weather.
Marchbanks dropped her head. "He Who Must Not Be Named found his way into Hogwarts?"
Dumbledore hesitated and considered Snape before he replied. "No. But some of his Death Eaters did."
She raised her head inquiringly and Snape held his breath, his fingers twitching on his wand.
"Who then?" Marchbanks asked.
Snape shifted uneasily as Dumbledore considered his response. She was going to find out sooner or later. On balance, it would be better if the news came from him.
"I killed him," Snape said slowly.
Marchbanks rounded on him in a heartbeat, her wand pressed against his chest, her eyes alight with hatred and fear. "You!" she growled at him. "You! He trusted you!"
Snape took a step backwards but found himself up against a wall, his wand hand hanging uselessly at his side. Sparks were erupting from her wand with barely-controlled aggression. She had him cornered.
Fawkes screeched a warning at them, but neither listened.
Dumbledore spoke patiently to Marchbanks. "I trust him still."
She faltered at these words, and confusion spread across her distraught features. Snape took advantage of her indecision and raised his wand in defence.
Marchbanks, however, backed away. When she spoke her eyes did not leave his, but her voice addressed Dumbledore.
"Trust?" she asked sceptically. "What do you mean?"
"Severus was acting upon my command. I asked him to kill me."
She lowered her wand and turned to face Dumbledore, her face awash with conflicting emotions. "You asked him... but why?"
"I was already dying," Dumbledore said simply.
Marchbanks paused as the new information sank in. Snape stepped forwards and addressed Dumbledore, not wishing to go into more detail.
"I'm sure the accommodation in Miss Marchbanks' home will be satisfactory," Snape began. "However, I will begin the search for new quarters in the morning."
"No, Severus. That will not be necessary," Dumbledore said tolerantly.
"Where am I to stay?" Snape asked.
"You will stay here, at Squirrel's Leap with Tess. She has made extensive preparations for your stay. The cottage is protected by a Disillusionment Charm so that it appears empty and derelict. There is a first-rate Doorbell Charm and defences against intruder Apparition. You will be safe here," Dumbledore said in an uncompromising tone. "The Order and the Ministry will not search for you in the home of one of their own."
In synchrony, Snape and Marchbanks' jaws dropped as they regarded each other with contempt.
"Most amusing, Dumbledore." Snape smirked when he had recovered himself.
"I am perfectly serious, Severus," Dumbledore replied.
"Albus, no! I can't! Not him..." Marchbanks pleaded, her voice trailing off hopelessly.
"Remember the vow you took, Tess," Dumbledore reminded her, firmness edging his voice.
Marchbanks looked like she had swallowed Polyjuice Potion as her features contorted with distaste. She looked up at Dumbledore, appealing to him silently, but Dumbledore gazed steadfastly at her until her head dropped in defeat.
"Now, I suspect your hot chocolate is still awaiting your attention. Perhaps Severus would care for a cup?" Dumbledore inclined his head in unspoken command. Marchbanks nodded in subjugation and left the room.
Snape rounded on Dumbledore instantly. "You made her take an Unbreakable Vow?" he asked disbelievingly.
Dumbledore deliberated carefully before answering. "The vow she took will ensure your safety, so that you may return to Hogwarts and protect the students."
Snape was dumbfounded. How could Dumbledore do that to the woman?
Dumbledore seized the moment of silence and distracted Snape from his thoughts. "Thank you, Severus. What you did for me on the Astronomy Tower required a lot of courage. I am eternally grateful to you."
Snape's head twitched slightly. He'd done what had needed to be done. "You are most welcome," Snape replied, his voice heavy with irony.
The sound of a spoon clinking in a cup drifted in from the kitchen. Fawkes seemed to decide the show was over and tucked his head under his wing.
"Why her?" Snape asked Dumbledore after the moment's pause.
"Tess has certain abilities and skills, and connections at the Ministry and in the Order. She will act as an informant and spy, so that you may retain your influence with Voldemort," Dumbledore replied. "She will need to perform the Tongue-Tying Curse on you before you next meet with him, to protect the location of Headquarters."
Snape swallowed this with some resentment then asked, "How long am I to stay here?"
"Until the Ministry falls and you are a free man again," Dumbledore answered simply.
Snape heard nervous laughter and turned to see Marchbanks standing at the doorway, two mugs of hot chocolate in her hands.
"You cannot be serious," she said to Dumbledore.
The Headmaster nodded. The phoenix looked up from underneath its wing, waiting for an encore.
"But that could take all summer!" she exclaimed incredulously.
"Indeed," Snape agreed.
Marchbanks looked stunned, frozen in the doorway, her mouth gaping slightly. Dumbledore rolled his eyes with amusement.
"What do you expect us to do?" she asked, looking at Snape's tall, dark frame, dislike etched on every inch of her face.
"You will find a way to help each other," Dumbledore replied.
"How?" Snape asked.
"You are both intelligent enough; I'm sure you will figure it out for yourselves."
Dumbledore smiled at them both before standing and striding purposefully from the frame.
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61 Reviews | 4.23/10 Average
Wow. What an amazing journey. I laughed, cried, raged with anger, smiled with joy and love and in the end cried some more. Your story was truly one of the best I have ever read. You are a talented author and I loved this. Great job!!!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thank you so much for leaving a final review; it's been lovely to get feedback from a reader eight years since the story was completed. Emotional responses were exactly what I'd hoped for, so I'm glad you experienced a full range of feelings and enjoyed the journey too. Thanks for reading and reviewing
Beautiful, moving story. You created an amazing original character in Tess. Nice, very nice, job.Thanks for a great read
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
And thank you for leaving a review; it's nice to know that people are still discovering this story and enjoying my work
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
And thank you for leaving a review; it's nice to know that people are still discovering this story and enjoying my work
beautiful! Now to read the sequel! YAY!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thanks for reading again! Hope you enjoy the sequel
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thanks for reading again! Hope you enjoy the sequel
so excellent. I remember why I decided to read this one now. It's because there's a sequel. I swear I have the worst memory ever. I'll be reading the sequel after this but didn't want to start reading it until I was pretty sure I knew what happened in this story.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thanks,
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
, and I look forward to hearing what you think about the sequel!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thanks,
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
, and I look forward to hearing what you think about the sequel!
Oh dear, Poor things. Severus jumping to wrong conclusions and Tess not knowing what is bothering him. I hope they get it worked out soon! I love this story!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Back again for a second read? So glad you're enjoying the story all over again
Response from mimmom (Reviewer)
I think I'm catching up. There are some chapters I haven't read and it looked like maybe I skipped one somewhere along the way. Either that or I forgot to mark it as read. Great stories require second readings, too! It's really nice to read one that doesn't involve Hermione. There seem to be so many of those! I probably wrote nearly the same review as last time. DOH. I've done that before without remembering I'd done it. Not the best memory ever but it means I get to read a story I've read before almost like it's the first time. LOL!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
I'm just happy that you wanted to read this story again!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Back again for a second read? So glad you're enjoying the story all over again
Response from mimmom (Reviewer)
I think I'm catching up. There are some chapters I haven't read and it looked like maybe I skipped one somewhere along the way. Either that or I forgot to mark it as read. Great stories require second readings, too! It's really nice to read one that doesn't involve Hermione. There seem to be so many of those! I probably wrote nearly the same review as last time. DOH. I've done that before without remembering I'd done it. Not the best memory ever but it means I get to read a story I've read before almost like it's the first time. LOL!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
I'm just happy that you wanted to read this story again!
I apologize for not reviewing each chapter, but I was so engrossed in the story, I didn't want to take the time to stop and review. I just wanted to keep reading. I was quite put out when I had to stop so I could make dinner . First let me congratulate you for writing an excellent Snape/OC story. Not too many of those around and not too many worth reading. I've read a lot of SS/HG and it's okay, I enjoy a lot of them, but I have to say, I think they're an odd pairing. So SS/OC is definitely my favorite romantic pairing for him, provided the female complements him well. You did an excellent job of keeping Snape in character. For him to build a new relationship (of any kind) would be no easy task for him. Thus, one of friendship and eventually romance would be especially difficult and practically impossible. Keeping all that in mind, I thought you wrote a convincing tale of how it could have been possible for him to build a genuine, reciprocal friendship with another person and how that relationship could have turned romantic. I thought you did a wonderful job depicting how he worked through his feelings for Lily and how he was able to finally let her go and make room in his heart for Tess.I really enjoyed Tess' feisty character. Snape is very domineering but she did not capitulate easily to him. She resisted at every turn until she began to realize she could trust him. She didn't let him scare her into submission. Any woman in a relationship with him would have to be able to stand her ground. One of my favorite aspects of the story was the angst. Both characters believing the other could never love them and yet they do but they're both too afraid to say anything. It's a typical scenario, but I love it. In fiction (perhaps not so much in RL), angst is a wonderful device for stoking the fires of passion. You used it well in this story.The ending was good even if it was ambivalent. I enjoy happy endings as much as sad ones. Yours was in the middle and I think it worked well for this story. The only thing I would've like to have seen more of was romantic moments between them. It wouldn't have fit in with the story, I know, but I could have gone for more kissing .Overall, an excellent story that I have happily added to my favorites.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
I apologise for not replying sooner; I've been away on holiday. How lovely to return to your kind and generous review! You seem to have noticed and appreciated many of the things which I set out to achieve, and that is immensely gratifying for me as a writer, so thank you for taking time to leave a detailed review. I'm glad that you experienced the story as authentic, keeping Snape in-character yet working through some of his feelings in a canon-compliant way. One of the things I enjoyed most about writing The Unconditional Vow (which was completed some two years ago) was the gradual thawing and the building of trust between the two characters. I found the unhurried development of their relationship a joy to write, and you're quite right: angst is a wonderful device which I revelled in, much to some readers' chagrin.You'd have liked more kissing, eh? Can't blame you for that! But I know you know that the kiss was reserved for just the right moment so it would have just the right effect at just the right time. I agonised over that scene, wanting to make the moment worth the wait.I'm chuffed that you've enjoyed an SS/OC story enough to add it to your favourites. Thank you.
Beautiful story... 'to have his soul released into the ether', to give up his state of nirvana, or not... Thank you for leaving us with him forgiving himself and experiencing some eternal peace. And, unconditional, hope, for us all.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thank you for your commitment and for always leaving a review, it's very much appreciated
Really love the exploration/observation of their relationship - the varied levels of enhanced meaning and trust; yeah... she is his, and he is hers: not much escapes Voldy, which can't be a good thing... the calm before the storm - reading on!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thank you,
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
, it's wonderful to know that these layers come across to the reader. I'm honoured that you've made it this far into their journey, and I hope the ending gives you something to hold on to.
What an intense journey of emotions, perceptions and expectations Severus and Contessa have taken... unconditional love: that is the dilemma - I feel Contessa knows and understands what this truly is, but Severus... and the ability to receive and give... acceptance of this condition. Reading on!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
I would agree; Contessa knows and understands unconditional love, but when Severus glimpses the possibility, he's scared by the terror of losing something so precious.
Again, powerful contrasting dynamics from scene to scene; the Memory/Imperio scene both fundamentally painful and liberating... and the scene 'for appearance's sake' - such an opening of honest yearning being acknowledged; again, contrasting the hectic atmosphere of the goings-on in the school. Poor Contessa, feeling abandoned and left to fend for herself?
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Lots happens emotionally for the characters in this section; Severus starts to loosen and acknowledge his feelings, and then retreats at the first sign of pain. Contessa only has so much insight into his process and becomes a sitting duck. Thanks for your review!
That was powerful, purging... so painfully intimate. Enjoyed so much in the previous material leading up to this moment, as the chapters are long, full of detailed information/diversely action packed, it's all contrasted so keenly leading up to this brutally honest final scene
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thank you!
The graveyard scene is so poignantly lovely; enjoy the building physical 'false' intimacy and tension growing between Contessa and Severus due to the Carrows skulking around stronger than ever, and the forgivable Unforgivable by the ingenious Ravenclaw rebel; everything is escalating, poor Luna's abduction adding on to the foreboding elements.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
The graveyard scene was a cathartic scene to write; I'm glad you felt its poignancy. The tension is indeed growing; you have to wonder how much longer Severus's self-denial can last. "The forgivable Unforgivable" Love it!
Response from nagandsev (Reviewer)
Well... he,he! After all, it is Contessa doing a 'for-the-greater-good' type of thing for a worthy cause... and Severus seems to have actually 'enjoyed' or been impressed by her, even more so, having done it... if he's pardon her actions, then...
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
I think you might be attributing more nobility to Contessa than is truly her due; she cast the Unforgivable to prove a point, rather than for any altrusitic purpose. But at least she had the decency to rein herself in and not embarrass Severus too much. You'll have wait and see if he pardons her actions, or if he chooses to enact his revenge...Thanks again for leaving your thoughts on this journey - it is lovely to know that readers are still enjoying my story, long after its completion.
Enjoy the slow but smooth rapport that's being established between them, coinciding with the events/Dumbledore's funeral, and the jolting reminder of Sev's other master calling (had gotten lured into Contessa's and Sev's moments, and forgotten about the outside world).
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
If only we didn't have the pesky Dark Lord to deal with! I enjoyed writing the building rapport between Tess and Severus, little by little, slowly but surely. Thanks for your comments
The power of those portraits! The power/manipulation lingering on, strong as ever - it's scarey to think of Dumbledore's reach and efect on others if he'd wish to do them real harm, if he ever would have ever been Minister, with his uncanny ability for selecting individuals who'll take/honour their vows to the death & beyond; Contessa was perfect for him being a Ministry personnel and a member of the Order? Reading on to find out:)
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Yes, I agree about Dumbledore, and I think he scared himself in canon, which is why he didn't go for Minister of Magic. He certainly has an uncanny ability to read people and understand what makes them tick, which allows him to manipulate for the "greater good".
A very profound, lovely chapter, capturing the immediate, tense interim and actions of Severus after Dumbledore's death and that painfully lonely search at Grimmauld Place... good old Fawkes, so sad.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thanks very much,
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
. I remember writing this chapter, and it was like therapy for me after Deathly Hallows.
Beautiful descriptions/details of the celetstial heavens and surroundings. Completely intrigued with Contessa and her memories of her Potions professor - and a Ravenclaw Revolutionary - watch out Professor Snape!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Yeah, I don't think either of them were too chuffed to be reunited! Thanks for reading and reviewing.
At least Severus got a DIGNIFIED and HAPPY ending!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
I'm glad you found his ending to be dignified and happy.
Brilliant ending. Just enough hope they will have a happy ending. :)
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
I'm delighted that you liked the ending! Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
omg, will there be an epilogue?! Excellent story. Leaves me wishing for more, though!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Actually, I did write an epilogue, but it never made it past my beta-readers. It was deemed to be surplus. I'm chuffed that you are left wishing for more - I do see that as a good thing :) Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Response from mimmom (Reviewer)
Yes, I see it as a positive, too. It's impossible to end a story in a way that suits everyone. Left wishing for more, is probably the best one can hope for because if you take it one more step and one more step, eventually it goes on too long and loses sight of the initial goal of the story.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Absolutely. This story ended here because it had achieved its goal and completed its arc. If there were to be more from these two, it would have to be in a separate story. I'm so pleased you've enjoyed reading :)
OMG! Can't wait for the next chapter. Things are getting exciting now. Stupid moldywart! Vile creature.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
The next chapter is the last one, and is working its way through the queue. Thanks for reviewing!
Nate has appalling timing! :)
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
As does Dumbledore ;)
Such an intense chapter. Excellent. Amazing.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thank you so much! Expect more intensity in the next chapter...
Excellent!
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it!
HA! Dumbledore is still manipulating from the grave. So she made an unbreakable vow? I'm wondering why she agreed to such an undertaking, it seems a very rash thing to do for a reasoned Ravenclaw. Perhaps Dumbledore gave her more information than we are privvy to yet? Intriguing.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Yes, Dumbledore is most certainly up to his old tricks. I encourage you to hold onto that thought about the Unbreakable Vow... There's more to come, in time. Thanks for your review!
Love the set up - things are going to get very interesting, I think.
Response from Agnus Castus (Author of The Unconditional Vow)
Hehe, well, interesting is one word for it. Thanks for leaving another review!