Chapter 2
Chapter 2 of 3
luvsevAlbus Severus Potter goes back in time to save two lives and ultimately bring them together.
Reviewed‘My Lord,’ Severus called as he entered the cluttered, dirty bedroom of the Shrieking Shack. Dropping to his knees, he kissed the filthy, black hem of his master’s robe.
‘Severus, how good of you to join us.’ Voldemort grasped
Severus’s shoulder, his sharp, yellowed fingernails piercing the black cotton fabric of Severus’s robes. ‘Rise and join your fellows.’
‘Tonight, we will celebrate victory over the brat. Potter will either bow to me or he will die,’ Voldemort hissed.
A raucous chant of “Potter must die!” rang throughout the shack.
‘In due time, my followers. But first, there’s a small matter to discuss. My esteemed Death Eaters, we have a traitor in our midst. Can anyone guess who it is?’ The gigantic snake, which was draped across his shoulders like a travesty of a wrap, flicked its forked tongue out, tasting the scent of human flesh.
‘Would anyone care to venture a guess?’ he addressed the room full of cloaked, masked people. ‘Lucius, my slippery friend, would you like to offer up a name?’
‘I do not know of anyone who would dare defy you, my Lord.’ He bowed.
‘Do you think it wise to lie to me, Lucius?’
‘I speak the truth.’ Lucius fought the fear threatening to rise in his voice.
‘Liar!’ Voldemort spat. ‘You have denied me many times just to save your own skin.’
‘My Lord, your forgiveness I implore,’ Lucius begged.
Voldemort pointed his finger at Lucius, beckoning him closer.
‘You will be dealt with.’ He whispered something unintelligible, extending his milk-white arm. Hand tilting and shaking with power, he flicked all of his fingers at Lucius, and a wave of energy blasted through the room. Lucius was thrown backward off his feet and into an already splintered table, breaking it into a thousand pieces.
‘Whoever fails to answer a direct question will pay for their disobedience. Now, who among you is willing to betray a friend?’
Silence settled over the small, black-clad crowd, no one daring to answer. Voldemort was growing angrier, his eyes flashing an evil, blood-red.
‘It seems all of you are rather tight-lipped. Maybe you are all guilty of betrayal?’ he suggested. ‘Severus, come to me!’
Severus did as the Dark Lord asked but kept his head lowered, avoiding his evil eyes. He breathed evenly, forcing his hammering heart to slow. If the snake-faced slime noticed his frantic heart rate, his time alive would be less and his death infinitely more painful.
Voldemort approached him and ran his finger slowly, lovingly down the side of his mask. ‘My most loyal servant,’ his voice caressed. ‘You are so very much like a son to me; do you know I almost worship you?’ he taunted.
‘My Lord, you honour me with your presence and regard.’ Severus begrudgingly leaned into Voldemort’s touch, a seemingly contented sigh escaping his mouth.
‘Traitor!’ Bellatrix screamed. ‘He’s the traitor, my Lord! He does not deserve your favour!’
‘Silence, wench!’ Voldemort bellowed. ‘It is my decision, and only my decision, on whom to bestow favour.’
‘But, my Lord, he is not who you think he is!’
Voldemort stood silent, his hand still resting on Severus’s shoulder.
Severus appeared calm as he felt the weight of Voldemort’s mind in his, searching for something, anything with which to prove or deny Bella’s accusation. He brought forth memories of the Carrows’ torturous methods of teaching the students and how he had done nothing to stop them, feigning acceptance. He showed his belief of the Pureblood way of life and his approval of Voldemort winning the war, how he thought it would be a better place to live with one supreme ruler—all carefully crafted half-truths. He stifled a sigh of relief when he felt the Dark Lord withdraw from him.
‘He’s as peaceful and set in his values as any of my faithful Death Eaters should be, Bella.’
‘I know what he’s hiding from you, my Lord. He helped the Potter brat destroy a Horcrux of yours.’
‘What proof have you, Bella? If you’re playing me false, you will be put to death!’ he threatened.
She hurried forward and bowed before him. ‘See for yourself.’ She tapped the side of her head with her right forefinger, offering him a look into her mind.
Voldemort placed his brittle, long-fingered hand in her jet-black hair, and his eyes glowed bright red for a moment before he spoke. ‘That’s what you saw, Bella? A Patronus in the forest.’ He watched her nod her head in assent.
‘Nagini, a snack, I think.’ He stroked her scaly skin as she slid from his body and slithered toward Bellatrix on the ground before changing direction, heading for Severus.
‘My Lord! What have I done?’
‘To your knees, servant. You have betrayed me!’ Voldemort spat. ‘I trusted you, treated you as a son, and you turn your back on me for some Mudblood bitch who never loved you!’
Severus fell as he felt the weight of Nagini crush him like a tin can. With deadly accuracy, she lunged for his throat, ripping the pale, delicate skin, and spilling his blood on the dusty floor. He did not cry out, beg for his life, or even make a sound to acknowledge what his former master had done. He knew how Voldemort liked to hear his victims beg, how he liked to see the light disappear from their eyes as tears streaked though their blood. He would give Voldemort no pleasure in his death.
‘What, you’re not even going to deny your actions or beg for your life? How pathetic.’ He kicked Severus in his side with his dragon skin, steel-toed boot. ‘After all I’ve done for you, you’re not even going to allow me the small favour of watching the light disappear from your eyes as you die. Open your damn eyes!’
Refusing, Severus lay still with his eyes resolutely shut. The metallic smell of his own blood, the searing pain in his neck, accompanied by the icy potion running through his veins, threatened to make him sick, but he forbore, trying to die with his dignity in tact.
After a while, Voldemort grew restless and left with his followers in tow. Harry Potter and his friends had since come and gone, leaving him alone in the moonlit, rickety shack with only the shouting and screaming voices outside. After what felt like days, it grew eerily quiet, and the thrumming in his veins slowed and warmed.
Eyes still firmly shut, he heard someone, who was sniffling, shuffle into the too warm room.
‘Please, please, Merlin, let him be alive,’ the weary, ragged voice of a young girl whispered.
He felt the warmth radiate off of her as she knelt at his side. He felt her soft, comforting touch on his chest as her tears fell into the still-bleeding, open wound on his neck. She removed his silver demi-mask and wiped the wetness from his closed eyes. She then felt for a pulse on the other side of his neck. Although it was very weak, one was present.
She heaved a sigh of relief. ‘Ye Gods, there is a heaven. I don’t know how you did it, but you survived.’ And that was the last thing he heard as he passed out into the land of the unknown.
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I want Albus Severus to rewrite book 7 :) Good story, thank you!
Response from raj (Reviewer)
...even if it's been abandoned, it's still good!
I never gave much thought to Harry's children before, and I suddenly feel as though previously undiscovered chapters of Harry Potter have been unearthed for a select few. :D Wonderful first chapter; I can't wait to read more!
nooooo, please continue!
Anonymous
Can't wait for the rest. :D
Author's Response: :) There'll be another installment up soon.
Anonymous
I mean, not that I ever thought Severus died that night. But good story, I really enjoy reading this.
Author's Response: Severus would have had a back up plan for that night. I mean, come on. He's a Potions master for heaven's sake. I still can't believe JKR expected us to believe he died.
I'm pleased that you think this is a good story and that you're enjoying it.
Anonymous
Yay Albus Potter. I like this kid, he's pretty resourceful. Plus he hates Albus, and that's always a plus with me.
Author's Response:
Albus Severus sees Dumbledore for who he was, and he dislikes him for all those he used.
Ahhhhh... all the pieces of Albus Severus' plan are now in place, and I can't wait to see how this story plays out!Having him use a Pensieve to show Hermione what she could look forward to if she married Ron was a brilliant way to gain her trust in what he had told her. It is she who returns to the Shrieking Shack to find Severus alive and get him to the hospital.I'm looking forward to the next chapter.Beth
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
Yes, now he just has to wait for them to listen and for his plans to play out. I thought the way Albus Severus's looks along with the Pensieve would help Hermione to see that he didn't mean any harm and that she could trust him.
Yey! Severus has survived Nagini's attack! I really like the way you turned canon on it ear, and I like this one much better!!!Bella was her usual bitchy self, always jealous of Severus and willing to seize any opportunity to focus the Dark Lord's displeasure on him.We don't yet know who came back to see if Severus had survived, but I'm thinking it has to be Hermione. I'm hoping anyway.Another great chapter!Beth
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
I couldn't not let Severus survive that snake attack - it just wouldn't be right. After all, Arthur survived. Bella couldn't stand that Severus was higher in Voldemort's regard than she, and she had to find a way to bring the attention upon herself.
This is a great first chapter, and I'm enthralled with the concept. I love Time-Turner stories so I can't wait to read more! Well done.Only one question: how old is Albus Severus Potter when he goes back in time to let Severus know that he can help him?Beth
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
Thank you. Albus Severus is right about 16 when he goes back in time.
Another good chapter. I can't wait for the next one! :) Very good story.
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
Aww, thanks! I'll try to have another up soon.
I know Albus did a lot of research before going back in time to correct the wrongs, but how sure is he that he is not making a big mistake. Rose and Hugo will no longer exist (not that Hermione deserves to be tied to an intelectually inferior man), and there is the possibility of what Hermione and Severus' future children could do. It boggles the mind!
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
He's fairly sure that repairing two wrongs won't cause too much damage. Even if he wasn't, he would have still taken the chance to save Severus.If Hermione and Severus ever did have children, they would be powerful and exceptionally intelligent.
~dun dun dun~ :) Yay! Moving on now to the next...
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
:) I'm glad you're enjoying it.
What a great start and quite original. Thanks so much for posting this! :) ~goes to next~
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
Thanks!
A very intriguing story so far.How did it come to pass that Bella was present in the forrest of Dean and recognised Snape's Patronus?So Albus Severus is a potion's progidy. Interesting. And one with a good heart full of courage, to boot.I'm lookinh forward to the next update.
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
In my mind, Bella was out hunting for the trio and just happened to see Severus's Patronus. She could have gone directly to the Dark Lord, but it suited her goal to wait to tell him.
I very much like that Albus Severus feel closer to the man that is his middle name more than the man he was named after. And it makes it interesting that he enjoys Potions. It seems he grew up idolizing the man most other people disliked. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
Thanks. I like to think Albus Severus understood all of what Severus had to do, which explains why he thought so highly of him.
This looks great and I am excited to see what happens next! More please!
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
I'm glad you're enjoying this tale.
Hey there! This is such a great start! I can't wait to see where this is going! I love how bold young Albus was when confronting his namesake, and the idea that he's really into potions is awesome! Please update again soon. Much Love ~Brena
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
Thank you! Albus Severus had sort of a score to settle since viewing the memories from his father's pensieve, and he wasn't the least bit afraid to say what he needed --a trait I loosely base off of one I have. As for Albus's obvious talent and desire to work with potions, I thought it'd be nice to have him take after his other namesake, Severus.
Interesting twist of canon you've given us. I like this reasoning much better actually. Dying over a wand seemed a bit insane to me. Will Albus save Fred now?
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
You're right, dying over a wand was pretty stupid... it can't possibly be a real reason to kill someone, especially since Voldie already had his suspicions about Severus to begin with, at least that's what JKR led us to believe.
Well, finally someone decided to fix that wrong! Interesting start.
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
Thank you. I think it means more for Albus Severus to change things because he's Harry's son, and Harry was too late in his own time to do anything about Sev's death.
This is really fascinating. I love the idea of Albus Severus telling Dumbledore off.
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
Thank you! I loved the idea of having someone from the next gen calling Dumbledore on his manipulative behaviour.
She cared enough to go back and find him! Will he remember this as a kindness, or will he dismiss it as just another Gryffindor trait? Excellent update. :D
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
Thanks! You'll find out in the coming chapters as to what his reaction will be on the the person who took him to the hospital.
So has enough been changed, or will we see Albus Severus again?
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
There's still more that needs to be changed, so Albus Severus will be making another appearance or two in the coming chapters.
So Hermione saved Severus? I wonder where Albus Severus is now. Thanks for the new chapter, but you must realize that we are all eager for the next chapter already!
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
It may have been Hermione, though I'll not say at this point. :) Albus Severus will make another appearance soon, I promise.
Good potion, Albus! :)
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
I'm sure he thinks so, too.
A slightly different spin on how Severus supposedly died in DH... Bellatrix would have been delighted with the opportunity ensure Severus' agonizing demise if she had any proof about her suspicions of his disloyalty to her precious Dark Lord. So Severus is relatively safe now, with Voldemort believing him dead.I'm guessing that the other person Albus means to save is Hermione... but from literal death or death of the soul after accepting a life sentence as a Weasley broodmare and housefrau?Love it, can't wait to see what happens next!
Response from luvsev (Author of Amending Time)
I see Bella as someone who would ultimately do anything for Voldemort, and if that means making someone else suffer for their "betrayal", so be it. As for whether or not Hermione is the other is saved, the coming chapters will reveal if it is indeed she.