Immobility
persefone7 Reviews | 7 Ratings, 0 Likes, 7 Favorites )
Companion piece of 'Impulse', although it could be read alone.
Severus' POV.
Chapters (1)
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persefone
Member Since 2008 | 2 Stories | Favorited by 4 | 30 Reviews Written | 13 Review Responses
I'm a university student who have a passion for JKR's world. English isn't my first language so I'm mostly an avid reader, although I enjoy writting too. I'd love to be a beta, but since I obviously can't, I would be equally glad to help anyone who'd like to try writting in Spanish. I also enjoy translating, so don't doubt to contact me if you want one of your fics translated! 
Reviews for Immobility
I am so sorry you never continued this (series? trilogy?). I have been checking back every now and then, hoping, but, alas there has been naught. Regardless, this POV pair struck a deep chord within me. Had I not "lept with the aid of the grape" one night myself, twelve years ago, I would've missed out on the love of my life. Thank you for these pieces. Well done!
Response from persefone (Author of Immobility)
I'm incredibly flattered by your review - specially after all this time - but I'm afraid these two stories ('Immobility' and 'Impulse') were just a scene that popped up in my mind, but I never really meant to continue afterwards. I tried a couple of times to write a longer fic but correcting english text written by a non-native english speaker is really too exhausting for any beta reader. Thank you very much for your kind review!
I would'nt have imagined his thoughts so complicated. He may even surpass her in this area... *smile*
Response from persefone (Author of Immobility)
Oh, yes, in that instance his thoughts were more elaborated... but you have to take into account that Hermione was more than a little 'affected' by firewhiskey at that moment!!I'd like to see them on even ground! *smirk*Thanks for R&R!!
Oh, how very heartbreaking! Hermione's version tore at my heart with disappointment, but this... Severus' thoughts on this scene just make me want to cry.Oh, please let her try this again when they are both sober, so he will know beyond doubt that it is not the alcohol that spurs her on, but genuine fondness and sober desire.Oh please please please!Your conveyance of their thoughts is exquisitly in character, BTW. Great job.
Response from persefone (Author of Immobility)
I'm glad you like them!It's going to stay as it is for a couple of months, but I do plan to eventually gives them a happy ending!Thank you very much for your lovely review!
That is too sad...you can't let it end like that (or yeah you can, it's your story). *sniff*
Response from persefone (Author of Immobility)
I'd like to go on with the story, eventually -- I'm having a busy summer. I'll try continuing it in September/October.Thanks very much for R&R!
How painfully ironic for Severus... surviving the war only to go from being openly reviled to an object of pity. Hermione's different, tantalizingly close, and yet, so far. How frustrating! Where's an interfering old coot when you need one?!
Response from persefone (Author of Immobility)
Where is the interfering old coot, indeed. ^^Thanks very much for R&R!!
A great snapshot of a moment. Both this and Impulse makes me want to scream at them both to just get over it and give in to the attraction. If that is the response you sought you have greatly succeeded. Good Job!
Response from persefone (Author of Immobility)
That was more or less the effect I wanted it to have, so you just made me a very, very happy girl with your review!Thank you!!
Oh, hell, he's an idiot. Move on from Lily and get with the Granger. Wonderful writing, as usual.
Response from persefone (Author of Immobility)
Yes, I'm afraid Severus can be quite stupid at times. He really should listen to you! ^^Thanks very much for R&R!!