Their awkwardness is so endearing, I love it. More?

LOL !! I love thier small talk. It's always great fun.

you caught the akwardness perfectly!  thanks so much

You've written both of them spot on!  I know this is a one-shot, but there is a lot of potential for more if you were of a mind...

I like it very much!
Beth

I feel bad for the server.  Maybe Hermione will convince Severus to leave the poor man with a few limbs (or at least a tip).  Nicely done.  :D

Always the one's to bottle up their feelings. I think this could be carried on? Will you? Because you write really well.

I liked this.  You seem to have both Severus and Hermione very much 'in character' in my opinion.  However, it does feels more like the beginning of a fic rather than a 'one off'. 

Any chance of some more on this?  You write really well.  Thanks for sharing! :-)

Ha, delightfully awkward. I agree with the other reviewers, you should expand this.